Before Taryn's Guilt - 2007 diary challenge humor ( 12/ 14 / 7 up ) - She's back!

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  1. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    Ah Taryn!

    [face_shame_on_you] [face_shame_on_you] [face_shame_on_you][face_shame_on_you]

    I know Zenella would appreciate a new friend. How sad Taryn is still in many ways looking down on her.

    I hope she gets to meet with Yoda and he whacks?uh?ahem?I mean talks some sense into her.

    Loved the stuffed bantha story.

    Great updates

    =D= =D= =D= =D=




  2. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    Guess who was there mopping away? Did I mention it was a stomach virus? Need I say more?

    [face_laugh]


    I think she rocked Bria all night without a break. It's so sweet to see how gentle she is with the youngling.

    Aw. She has something no one else does.


    I wonder what the child sees in her that others don't?

    And the children shall lead them.


    I can't imagine what it would be like to be trapped in such a broken body. Is she lonely and scared?

    Why don't you go talk to her? If she's capable of replying, you may just brighten her day by actually trying to see how she is. I don't suspect many people ask her things, they just tell her where to mop.


    I appreciate everything they did for me but I can't...I just can't go back there.

    Another reason to go to the psyche ward. :p

    I wonder who's reading her diary and brought the stuffed animal back?

    Looking forward to more. Looking forward to her finally growing the spine to talk with Zenella.
  3. Noelie Jedi Master

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    Yes, it will be wonderful when she gets the courage and the understanding to talk with Zanella. What a great idea! And so beautifully written!
  4. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    1/9/7

    Today I was in the South wing. Masters Lange and Trak were discussing their mission in a secluded corner. Zenella past them and they didn't even take note of her as if she didn't exist. I wanted to yell at them to show her the courtesy of pausing until she was out of hearing range but I should have to take a stand and to my shame I couldn't do that.

    I know as they do that she has very little brain functions thus no speech, no personality, no reasoning, and no memory. They say Yoda personally scanned her and said, "The damage is so great that she is functioning barely more than an infant. Actually he said, "Great, the damage is, barely above an infant, does she function." ~ Why do I love imitating him?

    So everyone in the Temple watches out for her, she mops when she wants where she wants. She goes where she wants as long as she doesn't leave the Temple, for her own safety. They said she once mopped the Council Chamber in the middle of an important meeting and the master just moved their feet and let her mop around them. I would have loved to see those great masters bowing to the wishes of a simple mop lady.

    They know as I do that we all could be in her position if something happened slightly differently on many of our missions. Maybe the Force is teaching us humility and patience by the way we treat her or to live in the moment as some teach. I suspect it is teaching us to control our fear and have the faith in our fellow Jedi to look out for us if we fall. How to respect a person despite their limitations and how to respect ourselves despite our own limitations.

    I'll be glad when I learn this lesson, it is the hardest one I have attempted.

    ~`~`~
  5. Layren Force Ghost

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    Sorry I got so behind in this! You're doing much better about regular updating than I am :p

    Really enjoying your OC a lot, especially loved her observations about rocking the youngling to sleep. That was so lovely. Well done!

  6. Noelie Jedi Master

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    This last post is so inspiring, as I thought in terms like that many times with those that are challenged in such a way. The lesson is not for these great souls- they are for us, and we should act accordingly, as if we are in the presence of angels.

    What a great reminder for a post in a diary thread!
  7. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    Why do I love imitating him?

    Because fun, it is, hmm?


    They said she once mopped the Council Chamber in the middle of an important meeting and the master just moved their feet and let her mop around them.

    [face_laugh] I'm sure that would have been a sight to see.


    I suspect it is teaching us to control our fear and have the faith in our fellow Jedi to look out for us if we fall. How to respect a person despite their limitations and how to respect ourselves despite our own limitations.

    It doesn't seem like many are learning that lesson, the way they treat her. Only Yoda seems to understand.
  8. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    An: Thanks for reading.


    1/10/7

    I had lunch at the table with several young knights, there was a lively discussion about which initiate to choose for their first padawan. I loved to see the workings of the young Jedi brain. They are so young energetic and full of promise, their possibilities are endless. Unfortunately two of them wanted the same padawan they tried a debate to see which one was best suited to train him but there was a tie so they decided to spar for the opportunity. I just shook my head at their exuberance.

    Was I that young and naïve once? I tried to remember what lead me to choose my first padawan. Ah! Yes, she kept tripping me in the hall. I swear Tana had two left feet but she later told me she admired the way I carried myself and was trying to imitate me. I finally got it through her head it's better to follow your own path rather than to trip over someone else's.

    Next time she comes back from her mission I think I'll see about having lunch with her.
  9. Noelie Jedi Master

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    What a cute vision of the discussions that must take place about taking padawan's. Tana sounds like my kind of girl... always tripping or tripping something up!
  10. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    I finally got it through her head it's better to follow your own path rather than to trip over someone else's.

    What a wonderful, frank and totally accurate piece of advice. :) Now if only Taryn can get over her fear of Zenella. ;)
  11. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    AN: It appears some wonder how I do a daily diary.

    First you have a job with a lot of down time and a boss who likes your stories.

    Second you do an outline(my first ever) then you write several days in advance.

    Please be patient with Taryn's 'guilt' if I solve all her problems I won't have anything to write about. Rest assured there is a method to my madness.


    1/11/7

    I worked in a different area today and saw Zenella. She seemed to notice I was watching her and looked back at me. I forced myself to smile. I think it made her happy. Then an initiate came with a fresh bucket of water and distracted her. It was an important first step though.

    I sent Bantn a holo-message I know it may take a while for it to get to him but I wanted to let him know I was doing better. I told him of my new assignment and about my finding Bantie. He always said I named that stuffed bantha after him. I always said him Momma named him after a bantha. I miss our play fights. I asked how he managed to get Bantie back to me, can't wait for that answer.
  12. slow_dawn Jedi Grand Master

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    Wow, an update everyday. That's impressive. I enjoyed your character's take on the young Jedi especially.



  13. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    How nice Taryn finally took the first step and smiled at Zanella. She seems to be well on the way to learning the hardest lesson she's had to learn so far.

    It's so sad to see Zanella ignored by the other Jedi though.

    Very nice updates

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  14. Noelie Jedi Master

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    Yeah She smiled!

    Cute memories with the stuffed Bantha
  15. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    I asked how he managed to get Bantie back to me, can't wait for that answer.

    I suspect he didn't give it back. And I suspect I know who did. ;)
  16. leiamoody Force Ghost

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    I'm sorry that I'm just getting to this so late, but I want to say that this is perfectly wonderful. You take a certain amount of calculated risk in showing a side to the Jedi that one might not suspect of being there. They're supposed to be compassionate, aren't they, and yet look at how many of them look down on this cleaning woman...I don't know, it's pathetic, really. Prejudice runs far deeper than one would wish. It's a side I certainly never would have imagined seeing in fiction, that's for certain. You've done a brave thing by approaching your diary from this angle.
  17. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    AN: I know it sounds strange to hear Jedi with personality problems but if there were no quirks there wouldn't be the threat of ones going dark or Sith. Even enlightened people have to work on personal flaws. This is her personal thought of her battle with them. Taryn doesn't disrespect the person she just fears being in her condition.


    1/12/7


    Bria, the little girl from the creche last week broke out and hunted Zenella down. She rapped her arms around Zenella's leg and squealed with delight. They both almost toppled and would have if a couple of knights hadn't come to their rescue. I swear I saw a faint smile on Zenella's face.

    The young knight carried Bria back to the Creche crying, "Want Zee!" He tried to explain Zee couldn't hold her now. How do you explain to someone so young that there is no one in there? I guess she just wants to be held. I wonder if Zenella recognizes the child's devotion to her.

    I heard them discussed having her assist in the creche but this shows she isn't capable of that if the knight hadn't been there Zenella could have fallen in Bria. Maybe they can work something out so she can sit and rock them.

    Knight Jinn took Zenella's hand in the crook of his arm and asked her to honor him by having lunch with him. It was so gallant. He escorted her to the dining-room and told her all about his last mission and how much he appreciated her work. I couldn't resist following them and watching how sweet he was with her.

  18. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    Awww...Qui is such a sweetheart

    [face_love] [face_love] [face_love] [face_love]

    I had to feel bad for poor little Bria - too young to understand...but it was lovely to see Zenella smile, even if it was faint.

    Very nice update

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  19. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    I swear I saw a faint smile on Zenella's face.

    Maybe more going on in there than even master Yoda can sense, hmm? :p

    And Qui-Gon, such the gentleman. Exactly what I would've done. Except I would have gotten tongue tied and probably made a donkey of myself, but that's just me, you go Qui! [face_laugh]
  20. Noelie Jedi Master

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    No kidding. .Qui-Gon is literally a knight for a damsel in distress. Perhaps his kindness will help everyone else see the angel among them.

    Great update!
  21. oqidaun Manager Emeritus

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    I'm late to the party, but this is an engrossing diary. I love the two OCs you've created.
    You've done a brilliant job!

    Excellent work with a very original premise.

    Bravo.

    =D=
  22. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    AN: Do the happy dance new readers! Thank you for reading and reviewing.

    1/13/7

    Today I felt as if I was seeing through her eyes. It scares me to death when it first happened. I was walking through the east corridor and looked up to see myself with the mop. I screamed and dropped my data-pads and she screamed and dropped her mop. We caused quite a stir in the Temple. I couldn't explain what happened and neither could she.

    They made us both go to the healer ward; there were questions and test. I couldn't tell them what was wrong. I'm not sure I knew myself.

    Yoda came to check on us, I think he may be the only one to understand what it feels like to be broken. I doubt he's scared though, he's worked on his faults for over eight hundred years so he should be getting close to perfect. I can hear him fussing if he knew I said that. I have seven hundred and humm almost eight hundred years until I'm as old as Yoda. By then no one will remember the proof-reader or the mop lady.

    I just want to go back to my room and hold my stuffed bantha and sleep.


  23. oqidaun Manager Emeritus

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    Great entry!

    By then no one will remember the proof-reader or the mop lady.


    I loved that line.
  24. Noelie Jedi Master

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    That would be a very strange thing, to be in another's mind.

    It is entirely sweet that she has a stuffed bantha to comfort her. Great set up for that!
  25. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    So she's now getting to see through another's eyes. Should give her some perspective and appreciation. Hopefully she'll be strong enough to make sense of it and come out a better person. :)
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