Before Taryn's Guilt - 2007 diary challenge humor ( 12/ 14 / 7 up ) - She's back!

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  1. ardavenport Force Ghost

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    This is very nice. I really wonder what the whole story is behind both women.
  2. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    1/31/7

    Her friend Moth is back and he has the Sith spawn with him. Maybe if I work quietly they won't notice me and I can hear what he has to say. Yes, I know it's eavesdropping but I really want to know what happened to her. I'm pond scum!

    "So what do you want to know about Master Zenella?" Master Moth asked.

    "Master Yoda said I have to find out what she was like before her? before she was like this and what happened to her? Cause I kinda got caught imitating her? making fun of her." His voice trailed off as he saw the expression on Master Moth's face.

    After a second or two Moth looked up at his old friend and a faint smile curled his lips as he remembered the young girl. "As far back as I can remember she always had long flaming red hair. She kept it pulled back and laced with leather strings until it was tight. She could use it as a weapon in a fight, one swing of that head and you thought you had been hit with a stick of wood.

    She had freckles on her nose and they fascinated me, which she hated. When I was about ten I caught her asleep and played connect the dots. I thought she was going to kill me when she woke up.

    She always wore white as she grew up and never got dirty. I couldn't go anywhere without getting mud on me. I swore she used the force to keep the dirt off her. One day I decided to pour chocolate sauce on her to see if it would actually touch her robe. Needless to say she caught me and before I knew what happened she was sitting on my chest with her hand on my windpipe, glaring at me, fuming through clenched teeth. "What do you think you are doing?"

    "I never picked on her again. I was so smitten with her after that." Moth said basking in the memories.

    "Did she get chocolate sauce on her?" The spawn asked curiously.

    "Not one dropped ? but I had it all over me, in my hair, on my boots. I followed her around like a love-sick puppy for months. My master took me on a mission just to get my away from her but she was even more beautiful when we got back and every day after that." Moth said watching her still seeing her as she was.

    "Sounds like you got attached to her." The spawn said accusingly.

    Moth cleared his throat and said blushing. "Yes, much to attached. I've often wondered if this was the way the Force punished us for that attachment."

    "That's silly the Force doesn't hurt people for loving someone, it couldn't be that!" The spawn exclaimed.

    "You are a wise young man." Moth's voice quivered as he spoke.

    "What happened? How'd she get like??" He could finish his question so he gestured towards Zee.

    Moth paused for a minute then cleared his throat and started. "We were assigned to protect a political leader of a new territory. No one was more surprised than us to get the assignment together but?" He cleared his throat again and said, "We were escorting him home after a meeting when someone threw a thermal detonator at him. She pushed us aside and took most of the blast. The healer said she wouldn't live, then she wouldn't get out of the healer ward but she refuses to give up. It breaks my heart to see her like?" He got up and walked off; the boy sat there for a few minutes then followed.

    "Wow! Who would have thought she would have been so ? fascinating?" He turned to look for her but she was out of sight and someone arrived to collect my work for the day.

    ~ ~ ~

    I don't know what to say after that, I ?

    ~`~`~`~
  3. Noelie Jedi Master

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    That was a very interesting history on Zenella.

    I love the "attached" thing, since of course that shows up in a few places I hold dear to my heart.

    Zenella sounds like she was a woman to be reckoned with :)
  4. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    I thanked him for being so understanding and turned to walk away when I realized he was treating me as if I was as brain dead ~ I always hated that term but it is the only one I know of to describe her condition ~ as Zenella.

    That's not fun, being treated that way.

    Looks like she finally got some insight into Zenella. Maybe now she'll straighten out her own head about her.

    Sorry I missed a day.
  5. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    2/1/7

    I was at a loss for words after hearing about Zenella. Moth's feelings for her were so raw, like a new wound, even after so much time has passed. I can't imagine someone loving her that much and not because of her condition now. I was so speechless I went to my room and cried.

    I'm sitting in the North Lobby watching the traffic I love the lights and would sleep here if they let me. Moth is watching her as she watched the traffic lights too. He looked so sad. I thought about approaching him but what would I say, I eavesdropped on you yesterday and was impressed at how much you love Zenella.

    I realized someone was there beside me when he caught my chin and turned my face towards his. It's Moth why is he here talking to me?

    "Hi! I found something on my last mission and I couldn't resist getting it for you."

    'For ME!

    Why me?

    I don't even know you except as her friend.'


    He pulled out a red hat out of his robe. "It's the same color as you hair was and I wanted you to have it. Here, let me put it on you." He arranged it on my head.

    "There that's better. I'm sorry I don't come by more. Today an initiate convinced me it wasn't my fault what happened to you. I just want you to know I love you no matter what."

    Then he kissed me and walked away.

    'Why would he do that? How could he confuse me with her?'

    "Are you ready for an escort to your room the young healer asked? I noticed you had a visitor tonight. An old beau I hear."

    As we rounded the corner our reflections caught my eye. Zenella was with the healer, wearing the red hat he put on me. Then everything went dark and I heard the healer scream. "I need help out here."

    ~`~`~`~
  6. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    WOW.

    Loved Moth's confession to the little sith spawn and giving Zanella the hat was just so sweet.

    But Taryn - :eek: :eek: :eek:

    Great updates

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  7. Noelie Jedi Master

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    Oh my goodness!I had been wondering but as I am never that good at ferreting out the story I figured I was wrong!

    I really like this Lea.
  8. NerdWOMAN Jedi Knight

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    *GASP* :eek: Well done! I am stunned. How nicely revealed!
  9. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    =D= =D= =D=

    Very well done. You had most of us fooled. That's a really interesting twist.

    Looking forward to more. :)
  10. MsLanna Force Ghost

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    More of that personality cross-over, good!:D
    I was afraid that it would be lost somewhere.

    So Moth is still in love with Zenella, but what does the order say?o_O

    Great update. Can't wait for more switching.[face_batting]
  11. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    An: I was wondering if any figured it out yet. :D Thanks for reading.


    2/2/7

    I woke up in the bed this morning in pitch black, my first thought was Yoda forgot to pay the utility bill, again.

    Why again I don't remember his ever forgetting and being in the dark before.

    Anyway I felt my way to the door and had to force it open. That is force as in physical exertion, not Force as in waving my hand and it opening, that didn't work either. Why I can't access the Force I have no idea.

    Even the hallway was dark I have never seen it this dark in the temple. There is always some light from the stars, moon and traffic light through the windows at night but there was nothing. I made my way to the larger windows in the corridor and still nothing.

    I called out and no one answered. I can hear the background noises so I know I'm still in the temple but where is everyone and why is it dark?

    I know I should be hungry it must be hours I've wandered around looking for the main lobby to find a way out but I don't feel hungry.

    I found my datapad with my diary on it and to my surprise it works. This is the only light or working equipment I've found so far. I don't remember anything happening to cause this and the past entries of the diary are blank. I only know the date because it came up to it when I turned it on.

    I think I'm in the east corridor so the exit should be right in front of me but there is no door there. I know I should feel scared but I don't. If I can't find my way back to my room I will have to find another place to sleep tonight.

    If I don't feel hunger will I feel sleepy. I'll tell you tomorrow.

    It's a good thing I'm not scared of the dark.

    ~`~`~`~
  12. MsLanna Force Ghost

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    Why do i have the feeling that she is not only where she believes she is, but also not who she believes she is?[face_thinking] :D
    That would be SO cool.
  13. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    Ooohhhh very creepy.

    I have my suspicions on whats going on...[face_thinking] [face_thinking]

    Yoda forgetting to pay the utility bill

    [face_laugh] [face_laugh] [face_laugh]

    Very nice update

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  14. NerdWOMAN Jedi Knight

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    So spooky!! [face_worried]

    I can't wait to read what happens next!!!
  15. Noelie Jedi Master

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    First of all the laugh: Yoda paying utility bills? [face_laugh]

    But then she is wandering around in a dark, silent temple. That is very eerie. I am worried about her. Is she making a breakthrough of some kind?
  16. BrentusofGath Jedi Master

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    ok, this gets more twisty all the time. And better too. :)

    Now, as Zenella, how will Taryn deal? I think she'll end up with a much better appreciation, if she doesn't go nuts first, lol.
  17. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    AN: It sounds like some have figured it out and some are still 'in the dark'. More to come.

    2/3/7

    Yes, I did get sleepy and the datapad says it is the next day, still no light. I made my way around the temple to the west wing, no light there either, no way out and no one. I thought I heard something far off, voices maybe or it could have been a machine hissing. I still haven't gotten hungry and I feel thirsty but not dehydrated. That is the most confusing thing of all.

    I still don't remember any disasters or natural phenomena to explain this situation. The lifts don't work so my exploring has been limited but after I get rested I will go on looking.

    ~ ~ ~

    I found the staircase climbing stairs in the dark is exciting, probably not as exciting as going down though. This makes three floors I've searched and no one.

    How many floors are there to go? Why didn't I pay more attention in Temple design class?

    I tried to use the Force to do simple things but nothing works. I feel almost like I'm in a dream but it doesn't hurt when you pinch yourself in a dream. Ouch!

    ~ ~ ~


    I made it to the Council chamber and surprise ? no one was there either. I broke a nail off in the quick trying to pry the door open. I'm standing in front of the windows looking out and there is no light here either. I thought a cloud of dust or something could be blocking the light but up this high ? still no light.

    That doesn't explain the doors not being there anymore. Where they are supposed to be is just walls or more windows, window to nowhere.

    I need to go I'm not sure how much charge is in the batteries in this datapad. I sure hope it has those new pink bantha batteries in it.

    ~`~`~`~

  18. Noelie Jedi Master

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    Okay.. just [face_laugh] that in the middle of all the twilight zone wandering we get a comment on pink bantha batteries. You just can't make a soul laugh like that!
  19. NerdWOMAN Jedi Knight

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    hmmm I wonder where she could be...;) This is so good!
  20. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    2/4/7


    This is my third day alone and in the dark. I hear the sounds more clearly. I think it is someone whispering but I can't make out what they are saying. I keep walking towards the voices but they don't get any clearer.

    I?m so glad I have this datapad it's my only link to the world outside of this prison. Yes! I've come to realize I am not in the temple or at least not the temple, as I have known it all my life.

    I know I am in the hall outside what should be the archive I recognize the smells but when I walked in I couldn't find any datapads or holo-books or even the cheesey holo-dramas. I tried the holo-emitter to record a message but it didn't work.

    The only thing that I have found that works is this data-diary. Why this data-diary?

    For some reason I have the urge to go to the healer ward. I know I hate the healer ward but maybe there is something there to explain this.

    No! I don't feel sick and strangely I feel full as if I've eaten although I haven't eaten since this darkness started.

    It is the only other place I know to look I have been every where else.

    Okay! I'll go! I'll tell you later if I find anything.

    ~`~`~`~
  21. Noelie Jedi Master

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    Hearing whispers huh? And headed to the healers ward where all of this start.
    What will she find?
  22. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    Yes, Taryn, I think heading to the Healer's ward might answer a few questions for you.

    She seems to be handling her "circumstances" quite well, I'm sure I'd be insane at this point. :D

    Very nice updates

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  23. Lea-El Force Ghost

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    2/5/7

    Why did they put the healers ward in such an out of the way place? I walked forever looking for it and in the dark it is fun to find.

    I have to write this quickly because I see a dim light coming from under the door.

    Now I'm scared!

    Why now?

    Oh! Here goes?

    ~ ~ ~

    The whispering is coming from in here but I still can't tell from where or who. The light is here but a dim bluish gray light not enough to see by but I will take any light I can get for now.

    It felt like someone touched my face a few moments ago but I couldn't feel a hand when I put my hand up to it myself.

    I think I recognize the hand though. I think? no I know it is Bantn.

    I'm so tired. I found a bed and am going to take a nap befor...

    ~`~`~`~
  24. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    Sounds like Taryn is about to wake up from her nightmare...or plunge deeper into it.

    How nice she could feel a gentle touch.

    Great update

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  25. Noelie Jedi Master

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    Yes, definately, she is where she needs to be. Now does it get worse or better for the poor soul?
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