Beyond The Age of Heroes (post-NJO AU: Anakin, Jaina, Jacen, L/M, H/L, Tahiri, Kyp,Jag) Sequel 2/2/07!

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  1. Maggy Force Ghost

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    TKL:

    :eek: Awesome pic! Such talent =D=
    Love the cover art [face_love]


    [face_blush] thank you :D I am glad you love it :cool:



    Sil:

    Does the redhead in teh background happen to be TK?

    Nope, it?s Mara

    I sure wish I knew how to use Photoshop so that this kinda stuff doesn't all have to be done by hand.

    try this Good Turtorials



    Yodas-evil-twin:

    Much better.

    no complaining against Jaina this time? :p
    Glad you think it?s better



    thanks to sdhfs, Forceblade and Spike



    Bee:

    long not seen :)
    How are you?

    Nice cover art. :D

    I?m glad you like it :D



    Lady Red:

    Great coverart! It's perfect. [face_love]
    Wonderful job, Maggy. =D=


    [face_blush] thank you :)



    Yobi:

    If I could I would, but I don't even get it :p

    Hah! Good excuse :p

    Yup, you'll have to read TLF to understand that...

    I will have to yes ... darn I need more time

    ` [face_shhh] ยด

    :eek:

    It was after a huge sandwich on a sitcom.

    oh :D
    it?s still a city in Spain :p

    Precisely.

    teehee ... he is in a good position then :p

    Well, if you want hints.

    do I want hints? :confused:



    ~ Mags ~
  2. princess_melissa Jedi Master

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    Nice start to the story. I'm looking foward to more of this.

    and awsome cover art Mags!
  3. FORCEBlLADE Force Ghost

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    Can't wait for that first chapter. You've got the makings of a good writor you know.
  4. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Barefoot_XO: Hmmmm...
    It has Anakin... and Tahiri...


    That's true... [face_thinking]

    And a ridiculously huge assortment of my favourite characters, including such living legends as Gavin Darklighter and Garm Bel Iblis...

    That's true! :eek:

    I am so here. And this is a fact...

    Good to have you :)

    I'll be keeping an eye on this...

    Thanks for reading!



    JediMaster_Jen: I can't lurk on this one. I had to come out and post.

    Yay! :D

    You've got me very interested in what Callista is up to.

    Good [face_mischief] I can't really say if she's up to anything bad, but we'll see eventually [face_whistling]





    Whitey: I was more referring the fact that Mara's life will be ruined.

    [face_laugh]

    Sorry I didn't catch that :p Yes, things are not going to go well for Mrs. Skywalker.



    Jedk: YAY *does-the-YodaKenobi-started-a-new-fic dance* Great start, can't wait for more.

    That's one of my favorite dances :D Thanks for reading :)





    Maggy: it?s still a city in Spain

    Yeah, I know :p




    melissa: Nice start to the story. I'm looking foward to more of this.

    Thanks for reading, hope you enjoy it :)




    FB: Can't wait for that first chapter. You've got the makings of a good writor you know.

    Yup, I'm keeping them in a jar and I'm going to sell them on Ebay?

    Thanks for your enthusiasm :)





    Okay, I want to apologize up front for the length of the first chapter. Most posts will be about half of the size of this one but I just couldn't find a way to cut it down and not lose stuff I wanted in there. It will give you a good idea of what the Jedi have been up to in the 3 years since "The Living Force" though. Hope it's not too long :)

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  5. Yodas-evil-twin Jedi Grand Master

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    *Glances at pic.*

    Hmmm, I wonder.
  6. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Chapter 1: New Jedi Order

    Picture this: The skies above the planet Sullust are on fire. Like the volcanic surface itself, space is filled with shooting jets of plasma and plumes of flak thick enough to make the toxic world look inviting.

    There is a war.

    A flotilla of Galactic Alliance capital ships is clashing with a monstrous industrial army. Hundreds of starfighters are spilling out of warships on both sides like swarms of firebugs moving to devour a summer crop of mehza on Taanab. The streaking blue glow of ion drives, bursts of red fire, and a lattice of green turbo lasers fill the vacuum as staggeringly large masses of durasteel fire on one another, drowning out the glow of the planet they surround.

    At the heart of the industrial fleet is a battle station, massive and intimidating, its batteries spewing particle beams into the ships the Alliance could spare for the fight and vaporizing them. Inside sits a wealthy warlord.

    It is into this madness that two starfighters appear, two streaking bursts of light as they revert to real space.

    Two Jedi Interceptors.

    They are late? but not too late.

    And one of them is unfortunate. One of the warlord's starfighters is in position to see the reversion on his sensors and launches a missile that will meet the Interceptor before any being's eyes could adjust to the streaking white light around the canopy becoming fine glaring points.

    But the pilot inside the Interceptor isn't any being.

    And he's never needed to be fortunate.

    He has the Force.

    He senses the danger before his enemy has even an idea what he's going to do? long before his thumb presses the missile controls.

    The pilot inside the Interceptor is a Jedi.

    His name is Anakin.

    Before the missile can impact, while the stars are still in streams, Anakin Solo has already jettisoned the hyperspace booster ring and calmly tells the astromech in the droid socket on his port side to reverse his repulsors. The projectile hits the ring and the Jedi is already moving backwards, putting the starfighter in a tight spiral so the flames from the explosion won't do any more than lick his radiator wings.

    In that instant the astromech puts the thrusters to a normal output and Anakin engages his ion drives, the Jedi Starfighter blasting through the ring of fire and shrapnel that is the remnants of his external hyperdrive, into the battle beyond.





    "At least now we know I'm going to beat you back to Denon."

    Anakin Solo's lips curled into a wry grin at the voice coming over his comm. Angling his fighter, he took the Jedi Interceptor down in a swooping dive towards the warships below, his partner staying right on his wing. The drives whined and the sublights burned a blue ion glow in their wake.

    "That is the only way you'd ever beat me anywhere, Caster," he replied, still grinning as the twin craft soared through the trench created by two Alliance cruisers.

    The Kuat engineered Eta-7 Jedi Interceptors were a gift from the Galactic Alliance after the Yuuzhan Vong War. In a government that was struggling through its first days of infancy, the galaxy was in need of symbols of heroism, honor, and tradition as much as anything, and to many, that's what Jedi were.

    In previous years after the end of Palpatine's regime, anything reminiscent of the Jedi of the Old Republic would have been met with an angry backlash, as many still saw Jedi Knights as corrupt traitors and evil sorcerers. The only thing that would have faced more protest were symbols from the Empire, like the Jedi Interceptor, which bore an incredible similarity to the Imperial TIE Interceptor, with its circular canopy and V-shaped wings when the Jedi fighter entered battle.

    Thirty years later, the galaxy was hungry for it. The people needed to believe in something, needed to remember a pride they once felt. And what better heroes could they find than the Jedi Knights, who'd valiantly battled the Yuuzhan Vong, the most serious threat the galaxy had ever faced? And actua
  7. princess_melissa Jedi Master

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    *snags first reply* be back after I read this long post

    ~~~

    That actually wasn't too bad.

    Nice action scenes. Loved the starfighter battles.

    Following Anakin Solo was going to get him killed.
    [face_laugh]

    While Wrev and Jaina had worked well together and more-or-less completed their mission, there was no question that they frequently got on each other's nerves.
    [face_laugh] there's an understatement

    "Hey, somebody has to protect Nieus P. Sovel,"
    [face_laugh] oh no not him again

    Who's Anakin's apprentice? Was it said before in one of your other fics or is this the first time? because if it's been said before, either I forgot of never read it. It's bugging me now.

    Looking foward to more
  8. Yodas-evil-twin Jedi Grand Master

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    That's pretty close to how I had imagined the state of the galaxy, including the Jedi Star Fighters. Though I thought they would be back in use because the Alliance was looking for anything that could carry a laser cannon and fly.

    Wait he's using battle droids?! Vyler, those are the last things you want to use in an army.

    I mean sheesh, they couldn't hit the Death Star even if it was a few inches from their face.
  9. Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare

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    YK: what can I say?! :eek: :D

    Brilliant, glorious images, combining the visual impact and chaos of the Prequels with the hard-edged reality and superb characterization of the OT.

    Anakin being Anakin; Wrev being as well-developed as the pro-fic characters; and someone who may or may not be Tahiri, adding another dimension to the New Jedi Order...

    Jedi doing Jedi stuff, with the clarity of thought and lucidy of vision they should have, and the training - technical, and of their Force-skills - to match.

    And a Galaxy that's in a single post already rich and complicated and epic in its sweep, and utterly, engrossingly interesting; full of hope and danger, harsh light and softening darkness, stars and cold hard vacuum...

    [More detail later!! :D :cool:]

    :cool: [face_dancing] :cool: :D

    - The Imperial Ewok
  10. Briman Jedi Master

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    Very nicely done with the starfighter battle, and I really enjoyed the banter between Anakin and R2. Glad to have the first chapter in the books. I especially liked the very beginning, introducing the war on Sullust, and the imagery was very well described.

    Good chapter =D=
  11. Magnuskn Force Ghost

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    Brilliant first chapter. :)

    Anakins apprentice is Tahiri. D'oh. Saw that coming. :p

    Well, I think you can do all the chapters this long, I love long reads. :)

    Magnus
  12. thesporkbewithyou Jedi Master

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    You're just saying that because Kyp got owned

    So...what if I am? He's arguably the most powerful Jedi Master around! He should have beaten her!

    Nope, sorry

    Aw...fiddlesticks!

    On to the post!

    I don't know if it's just me, but this post was very reminiscint of episode 3. Adding to that, the Stover-esque writing style was very effective.

    Picture this: The skies above the planet Sullust are on fire. Like the volcanic surface itself, space is filled with shooting jets of plasma and plumes of flak thick enough to make the toxic world look inviting.

    A flotilla of Galactic Alliance capital ships is clashing with a monstrous industrial army. Hundreds of starfighters are spilling out of warships on both sides like swarms of firebugs moving to devour a summer crop of mehza on Taanab. The streaking blue glow of ion drives, bursts of red fire, and a lattice of green turbo lasers fill the vacuum as staggeringly large masses of durasteel fire on one another, drowning out the glow of the planet they surround.

    At the heart of the industrial fleet is a battle station, massive and intimidating, its batteries spewing particle beams into the ships the Alliance could spare for the fight and vaporizing them. Inside sits a wealthy warlord.


    Oh yeah...definitely reminiscent of RoTS. *the opening scene flashes through her mind*

    Two Jedi Interceptors.

    It's interesting that they chose the term Interceptors for that particular ship. It usually has an Imperialish feel.

    Thirty years later, the galaxy was hungry for it. The people needed to believe in something, needed to remember a pride they once felt. And what better heroes could they find than the Jedi Knights, who'd valiantly battled the Yuuzhan Vong, the most serious threat the galaxy had ever faced? And actually managed to stop the monsters.

    Oooh...more Stover imagery! My 5 senses are going on a ride here. And the whole Anakin/Wrev interaction definitely reminds me of the Anakin/Obi-Wan stuff.

    "All right, Artoo, increase power to the deflector shields and the sublight drives. The faster we can get through this mess, the better."

    The aging astromech turned in his socket twittering a series of beeps and whistles as his photoreceptor blinked blue.

    "I'm aware that the power has to come from somewhere. Take it from the cannons if you have to."

    R2-D2 whistled a response. Anakin glanced at his console readout though he didn't need to. Having grown up around the astromech droid, he understood its tones almost as well as his Uncle Luke did.

    [You do realize there's a battle ahead of you]

    "I don't actually plan on doing much fighting," Anakin replied as he watched a distant X-Wing flash out of existence in a rolling ball of flame and super-heated metal.

    [You never do]

    Anakin only smiled in response to the droid.


    Nice to know Artoo's still in business! And he still has some personality at that.

    "I don't know? we might want to dress it up a bit and say they were threatening children and Ewoks."

    [face_laugh][face_laugh][face_laugh]

    "Anakin's going to kill me."

    Following Anakin Solo was going to get him killed.


    [face_laugh][face_laugh]

    "You're enjoying this aren't you?" Wrev asked.

    Probably is.

    "Hey, somebody has to protect Nieus P. Sovel," Wrev quipped, referring to a controversial Sullustan philosopher and author who he imagined was hiding beneath his desk somewhere on the planet.

    [face_laugh][face_love] Poor Sovel! I can so totally imagine him under that desk. Probably writing one of his books too.


  13. MirandaFair Force Ghost

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    Oh yeah update! [face_dancing]

    The images you create are inspiring and so visual. Again, I'm blown away and this is just the beginning.

    In a government that was struggling through its first days of infancy, the galaxy was in need of symbols of heroism, honor, and tradition as much as anything, and to many, that's what Jedi were.

    Wonderfully written. It's good to see the NR going back to it's roots.

    His hair was slightly longer than normal, beginning to curl at the ends, ruffled locks pinned beneath the golden band of his headset communicator? the only equipment the Jedi wore in the new starfighters. Like the vessels themselves, the lack of a helmet, or proper flame-retardant, military grade, EV-ready flightsuit were as much a symbol as their simple robes.

    Really love the 'nods' to the RotS battle sequences over Coruscant. The Anakin and R2 banter was a great mirror to Anakin's grandfather's past with the droid. The images of the Jedi wearing on their communicators and robes (minus flightsuits/helmets)impacted me when I first saw RotS in the theatres...really spoke volumes about the Jedi and their ways. Loved this touch to the new generation of Jedi Knights.

    I know I personally wouldn't mind if the chapters were this long. Was such a quick read between the action, pacing and characterization...absolutely cannot wait for more. =D=
  14. Maggy Force Ghost

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    [saves a place for later]
  15. flowerbee Jedi Grand Master

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    Wow. I could almost see the battle. :D Very interesting start... you kept it rather ambiguous, giving us a nice prelude.

    You've drawn Anakin Sr./Jr. comparisions. Right down to the hair. Now I'm scared for poor Anakin...
  16. Jek_Windu Jedi Master

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    Great first chapter. I really enjoyed how you managed to put in a lot of backstory and description while still keeping it interesting. Can't wait for more.
  17. Kidan TFN EU Staff

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    "Hey, somebody has to protect Nieus P. Sovel,"
    Uhm...no, they don't have to protect Sovel.


    Of course, I must also lavish the praise, I find these stories more gripping, and truer to the Star Wars feel than the later NJO and DN stuff. In fact, I have found myself often thinking happenings from your storylines where the what was published. This story is definitly taking off in the same way.

    Bueatiful imagery, beautiful explosions. An enemy worthy of being called Warlord, as he is already as well rounded as Zsinj or Krennel ever was....


    I don't think Anakin's apprentice is Tahiri (as she does not carry any of the trademark descriptions used while talking of Tahiri, such as the blonde hair or no shoes, plus Tahiri's listed in the DP as a Knight), but if it is who's listed as an Apprentice in the DP, then why is she able to lift things with TK [face_thinking]...



    Now, when's the next post?






  18. FORCEBlLADE Force Ghost

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    I have a guess at who Anakin's apprentice is but I'm, not going to say anything.
  19. TahiriSoloFan Jedi Master

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    I love the way you've written Anakin here... the perfect blending of the best of Anakin Skywalker & Obi-Wan. =D= :cool:

    Wrev must have a death wish... following around after the Solos! :p

    I can't decide for sure who the apprentice is. [face_thinking]

    Sovel?!?! :oops: We can never escape! :p
  20. TheCrazyRodian Force Ghost

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    ::Drumroll::

    Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaand

    I'm here. Finally. After the sickest marathon read of your 'fics ever attempted. And I'm addicted. Already this story is giving me chills. So I will respond in a manner that befits my hopeless insanity and psychological dependency.

    First of all, your cast list is longer than my... uh... last six months' bank statement? Very intriguing.

    Second, your prologue is evil. But that's okay. Evilness is just goodness with a hint of vanilla. Like the difference between Coke and Vanilla Coke.

    Third... well, let me just get right into the reactions.

    EDIT: Okay, a few other things I should mention that just came up. First, there are only two Jedi Apprentices listed in the Dramatis Personae--Valin and Jysella Horn. I'm guessing Anakin's apprentice is Jysella. Though isn't that dangerous--pairing hot studly Anakin with teenaged hormone-driven hero-worshiping also hot Jysella? On Anakin's part, I'm not suspicious, but on the younger girl's... well, let's just say I forsee great danger in the future. Of course, I could be just inventing problems where there need not be any.

    Also, I have to mention that I am glad we will get to see Nen Yim in this 'fic. Good ol' Nenny.

    Also also, I like how the fleet commander is a woman. It seems funny to me that the Empire would be ahead of the New Republic/Galactic Alliance as far as females in command positions go (Daala, Tavira). There were always a handful of good female commanders in Stackpole's books (Areta Bell, Aril Nunb, plus that one who was on Night Caller and took over after the other captain died), but no admirals. So good for you, Yobi. Or is that just a ploy to increase female readership?

    Also also also, I notice that Uhla is a shaper. I'm kind of fond of her, and it's nice to see that the Yuuzhan Vong are trying to reshape (pun intended) their society after the war. I hope we get to see at least a little bit of her and Anakin interacting.

    And my final also, the also^4, is that I'm interested to see how Jacen has grown up since the end of the war. Or if he's grown up at all. I rather liked where his character was heading at the end of your trilogy, so it'll be nice if we can see some more maturity and confidence in his character. He has a lot of potential, like his brother, as long as he stays humble about it.

    Now, for reals, on to the post.

    Picture this: The skies above the planet Sullust are on fire. Like the volcanic surface itself, space is filled with shooting jets of plasma and plumes of flak thick enough to make the toxic world look inviting.

    Perfect opening. The present tense makes everything more vivid.


    But the pilot inside the Interceptor isn't any being.

    And he's never needed to be fortunate.

    He has the Force.

    He senses the danger before his enemy has even an idea what he's going to do? long before his thumb presses the missile controls.

    The pilot inside the Interceptor is a Jedi.

    His name is Anakin.


    Woohoo!


    The Kuat engineered Eta-7 Jedi Interceptors were a gift from the Galactic Alliance after the Yuuzhan Vong War. In a government that was struggling through its first days of infancy, the galaxy was in need of symbols of heroism, honor, and tradition as much as anything, and to many, that's what Jedi were.

    =D=

    Very well described. And I love the throwback to the PT.


    The Eta-7 came equipped with deflector shields, a cache of proton torpedoes that could be released when the radiator wings were open, as well as a built in JI-14 hyperdrive. While the Jedi preferred to use the external hyperdrive booster ring for traveling between worlds, as it made them some of the fastest in the galaxy, the JI-14 put it somewhere around the speed of an X-Wing in hyperspace, and assured that a Jedi wouldn't be stranded if the booster ring were ever destroyed.

    Can I have one?


    He glanced out of the canopy of his transparisteel viewport to see the other Jedi Interceptor, painted a deep blue,

    Blue? That's hot.
  21. Lola64 Force Ghost

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    Awesome chapter.

    I am not a fan of space battles. Not that many can do them justice. Usually I skip through to the dialogue but here I actually read it through. Great job.

    And I just have to say:

    "Hey, somebody has to protect Nieus P. Sovel," Wrev quipped, referring to a controversial Sullustan philosopher and author who he imagined was hiding beneath his desk somewhere on the planet.

    I hope this is the only reference to this character. I don't know if I can handle another fic listening to his philosophy, I'm just saying.

    Is Jysella the apprentice? Wouldn't that be awkward if Wrev goes on assignments with Anakin, him killing her father an all. Just wondering.

    Well I'll be back next chapter. Hope it's up soon. I'd like to see more Mara and Callista.


  22. oldjedinurse Jedi Master

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    The skies above the planet Sullust are on fire. Like the volcanic surface itself, space is filled with shooting jets of plasma and plumes of flak thick enough to make the toxic world look inviting.

    There is a war.

    A flotilla of Galactic Alliance capital ships is clashing with a monstrous industrial army. Hundreds of starfighters are spilling out of warships on both sides like swarms of firebugs moving to devour a summer crop of mehza on Taanab. The streaking blue glow of ion drives, bursts of red fire, and a lattice of green turbo lasers fill the vacuum as staggeringly large masses of durasteel fire on one another, drowning out the glow of the planet they surround.



    Okay, I just had to say that this is beautiful writing. I've only read the first section, and I'm so impressed, YK! Kudos...Kudos... =D=


    *Goes back to read the entire post*




    *EDIT*

    NOW I've read it!

    This is a superb opening chapter, Yobi.



    But the pilot inside the Interceptor isn't any being.

    And he's never needed to be fortunate.

    He has the Force.


    And the Solo gene for arrogance! (That's acceptable arrogance, of course, because they're Solos.)


    The Eta-7 came equipped with deflector shields, a cache of proton torpedoes that could be released when the radiator wings were open, as well as a built in JI-14 hyperdrive. While the Jedi preferred to use the external hyperdrive booster ring for traveling between worlds, as it made them some of the fastest in the galaxy, the JI-14 put it somewhere around the speed of an X-Wing in hyperspace, and assured that a Jedi wouldn't be stranded if the booster ring were ever destroyed.

    ;) Ooohh. Nice ship. If I'm very, very good, could I get one?? [face_batting]


    "All right, Artoo, increase power to the deflector shields and the sublight drives. The faster we can get through this mess, the better."

    Yay! I'm so happy to see Artoo flying with Anakin! I [face_love] Artoo!!


    "Commander Klorne has given us permission to go in," came the voice over Anakin's comm.

    "Did she say anything else?" He asked, referring to the Alliance officer who was in command of the fleet huddled around Sullust.

    "Only to be quick about it, and that we'd better have a good excuse for being late."


    :D I like Commander Klorne. A lot.


    "I don't know? we might want to dress it up a bit and say they were threatening children and Ewoks."

    Wrev's not Janson's apprentice, is he?? [face_laugh]


    "Follow my lead," Anakin insisted.

    [face_worried] Uh-oh!


    Artoo beeped rudely and Anakin glanced at the console readout.

    [I told you]


    :cool: Artoo is cool.


    "It pays to be Han Solo's son."

    You know it!! :D


    "Anakin's going to kill me."

    [face_thinking] Is that worse that the Warlord finding her? :p


    All kidding aside, the action is terrific - vividly described, like a movie playing out in front of me. Just your usual brilliance, YK!

    I had a super time reading this chapter, and I'm betting that the rest will be just as good ... if not better! (No pressure...)

    :D

    oldj
  23. WynssaStarflare Jedi Master

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    Great posts! Sorry it took me so long to review DRL has been horrible for a bit. I love how this definately has an ROTS feel with the old skool style Jedi fighters and a droid army. I can't wait to see how Callista fits into all this. Great job!
  24. YodaKenobi VIP

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    melissa: *snags first reply* be back after I read this long post
    That actually wasn't too bad.


    I'm glad.

    Nice action scenes. Loved the starfighter battles.

    Thanks, I'm glad those worked :D

    there's an understatement

    It was more him irritating her, so maybe he remembers it differently :p I think he was pretty scared when she ran that Vagaari blockade though...

    oh no not him again

    I promise that's the only time he's mentioned 8-}

    Who's Anakin's apprentice? Was it said before in one of your other fics or is this the first time? because if it's been said before, either I forgot of never read it. It's bugging me now.

    No, it's one of those things I'm keeping secret for no good reason :p Find out for sure in a couple of chapters.

    Looking foward to more

    More in a few days. Thanks so much for reading :D





    evil-twin: That's pretty close to how I had imagined the state of the galaxy, including the Jedi Star Fighters. Though I thought they would be back in use because the Alliance was looking for anything that could carry a laser cannon and fly.

    Yeah, if you read EOTH (which I know you did) the set up for the state of the galaxy is also in the first chapter there. It was more for the benefit of new readers and those who only read TLF.

    Neat idea about the starfighters!

    Wait he's using battle droids?! Vyler, those are the last things you want to use in an army.
    I mean sheesh, they couldn't hit the Death Star even if it was a few inches from their face.


    Battle droids are back ;) Calrissian had great success with the YVH droids and someone like Vyler can build an army without the support of very many people.

    Thanks for reading!




    Thrawn: YK: what can I say?!
    Brilliant, glorious images, combining the visual impact and chaos of the Prequels with the hard-edged reality and superb characterization of the OT.


    Thanks [face_blush]

    Anakin being Anakin; Wrev being as well-developed as the pro-fic characters; and someone who may or may not be Tahiri, adding another dimension to the New Jedi Order...

    Thanks again!

    Jedi doing Jedi stuff, with the clarity of thought and lucidy of vision they should have, and the training - technical, and of their Force-skills - to match.
    And a Galaxy that's in a single post already rich and complicated and epic in its sweep, and utterly, engrossingly interesting; full of hope and danger, harsh light and softening darkness, stars and cold hard vacuum...


    It's very humbling when someone writes a review that's more beautiful than anything I've ever written [face_blush] I will put that on the duskjacket of the second printing when this turns into a novel :p

    [More detail later!! ]

    Okay, thanks so much, Thrawn :D Means a lot coming from you :cool:




    Briman: Very nicely done with the starfighter battle, and I really enjoyed the banter between Anakin and R2.

    Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!

    Glad to have the first chapter in the books. I especially liked the very beginning, introducing the war on Sullust, and the imagery was very well described.
    Good chapter


    Thanks so much :) Glad you liked the descriptions of the war on Sullust. It's not all that important really, just trying to set up a good tone and come in with some nice action.





    Magnuskn: Brilliant first chapter.

    Thanks!

    Anakins apprentice is Tahiri. D'oh. Saw that coming.

    Where did you get that idea? [face_mischief]

    Well, I think you can do all the chapters this long, I love long reads.

    Thanks, good to know :) In general they will be shorter than this one though.





    sporky: So...what if I am? He's arguably the most powerful Jedi Master around! He should have beaten her!

    That's true ;)

    Aw...fiddlesticks!

    Ha!

    On to the post!

    I don't know if it's
  25. thesporkbewithyou Jedi Master

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    That's true

    See? You acknowledge my rightness! :p

    Ha!

    *sighs* Always did enjoy my misery, don't you?

    No, it's not just you. It wasn't something I wanted originally, but it was unavoidable, so I just embraced it.

    I'm glad to know that! So glad you embraced it...it really works.

    Yeah it is, part of the evolution into the TIE interceptor.

    *blinks* So...the Jedi'll be flying something like an Interceptor when the final evolution comes?

    Artoo is just fine, you're thinking of I, JS again, I think

    Oh, no confusion this time!:D Just a happiness that the droid hasn't been pushed aside.

    Thanks for reading, spork

    Always a pleasure!

    Is it too late to ask for more?
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