Beyond The Age of Heroes (post-NJO AU: Anakin, Jaina, Jacen, L/M, H/L, Tahiri, Kyp,Jag) Sequel 2/2/07!

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  1. Jedi_Jaina_Durron Jedi Grand Master

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    *rushes in*

    Here I am! :D

    I really, really need to read the other fics, but the fact that I can enjoy this without really having a clue what's going on is a testament to your skills. ;)

    Anyways, I love the Stover-esque writing, the parallels with the PT, and you just flat out write great action. Oh, and I have a feeling I'm gonnna like this Wrev guy. :D

    Now. The mystery, of course, is who Anakin's apprentice is. I suppose everyone has their theory, and I can't wait to see who it is! :)

    "Hey, somebody has to protect Nieus P. Sovel," Wrev quipped, referring to a controversial Sullustan philosopher and author who he imagined was hiding beneath his desk somewhere on the planet. :D[face_laugh] I just love your stuff so much! [face_dancing]

    Anyways, I wish I had more time to write a more detailed review, but rest assured I am enjoying this very much and waiting with interest for more. :)

    Is it too soon to ask for more?
  2. poku_29 Jedi Grand Master

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    The following is spoken with an extremely fast tempo and it sounds like the voice is out of breath

    WOW, JES! It was awsome. First it was like djsjdg, and then asdljfasdklj. Oh my, and after that aslkfjfsl. So cool. JEEEEE. I cant sleep tonight. Im just waiting for the next post. I , I feel like someone has just hit me with a golf club. After a somewhat long waiting I am again inside SW universe in the GFFA, my heart is beating like hell. Have to calm down, I can do it (spends the next 14 hours clicking the Refresh button of my Explorer amd staring the screen without even the blink of an eye, when is the next post/chapter coming) [face_hypnotized]

    Priceless, yodaK, priceless!!!
  3. TKeira_Lea Jedi Grand Master

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    Dude, I am breathless! Absolutely amazing :eek:

    The opener was worthy of George's ROTS opener. [I_am_not_worthy] And from there it just got better and better. I can really feel your characters, and see the action.

    Good job[/obi voice]

    Looking forward to more :D
  4. TheCrazyRodian Force Ghost

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    Have to wait and see. wink

    That's like the fallback response for everything I say, isn't it? "Wait and see."

    Oh well, I can be patient. Sort of.


    If it is Jysella, Rodian, she would be all of 15 in this fic. A little young for you

    :eek:

    Unless my name is Kyp...

    ::Shudders::

    (I forgot that this wasn't FeeFi's 'fic, so Jysella isn't a legal hottie yet)


    Again, nice catch

    Well, I was a halfway decent running back/receiver in high school...


    Okay, and I have to ask. Did I miss something when I did my readthrough of your trilogy and Empire of the Hand? Because the Nius P. Sovel jokes are going way over my head. And no comments about Rodians being short, either.
  5. SilSolo Jedi Grand Master

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    That was rather interesting, though a little shorter than I expected because your posts in the prequels were alot longer.
  6. _Jedi_of_Destiny_ Jedi Master

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    Picture this: The skies above the planet Sullust are on fire. Like the volcanic surface itself, space is filled with shooting jets of plasma and plumes of flak thick enough to make the toxic world look inviting.

    :cool: Perfect beginning. :cool:

    It is into this madness that two starfighters appear, two streaking bursts of light as they revert to real space.

    Two Jedi Interceptors.

    They are late? but not too late.


    This reminds me of RotS(probably intentional ;) )

    But the pilot inside the Interceptor isn't any being.

    And he's never needed to be fortunate.

    He has the Force.

    He senses the danger before his enemy has even an idea what he's going to do? long before his thumb presses the missile controls.

    The pilot inside the Interceptor is a Jedi.

    His name is Anakin.


    .......[face_dancing] Sweet. :eek:

    The dialogue between Anakin and Wrev and even Artoo was great. And Wrev is just as wonderfully developed as all your Canon characters.

    It pays to be Han Solo's son."

    [face_laugh]

    "She's never let me down before."

    Where have we heard that before. :rolleyes: :p I wonder who his apprentice is. [face_thinking] Another OC, perhaps?

    This is what a Jedi does.

    They avoid fights when possible, especially when it will be detrimental to their cause. When she can't get by a pair of sentinels guarding an exit, she distracts them, flicking her hand and creating a distant noise that they scurry to investigate.

    Her master would be proud.


    This is so Stover-ish. =D=

    "Freeze, Jedi," the lead droid says in a menacing metallic voice.

    She blows out her breath, pushing a few loose strands from her face that came loose from the bun she had her hair tied in.

    "Anakin's going to kill me."


    I absoloutly loved this exchange. :D

    Hey, somebody has to protect Nieus P. Sovel," Wrev quipped, referring to a controversial Sullustan philosopher and author who he imagined was hiding beneath his desk somewhere on the planet.

    I'd wondered if you were gonna slip him in somewhere. He must be happy! He made the first chapter! :p


    ......:D


    Overall, a brilliant beginning! =D= It wasn't too long. Nothing would be too long, Yoda. :) I really like it. Very vivid imagary and your characters are really fun to read. I can't wait until you really mess up with their heads! [face_devil] What fun! It should be interesting to see where you go with this. Well done! :)

  7. YodaKenobi VIP

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    oldj: Okay, I just had to say that this is beautiful writing. I've only read the first section, and I'm so impressed, YK! Kudos...Kudos...

    Aww, thanks! :D

    *Goes back to read the entire post*
    NOW I've read it!
    This is a superb opening chapter, Yobi.


    [face_blush]

    And the Solo gene for arrogance! (That's acceptable arrogance, of course, because they're Solos.)

    That section isn't written from his POV *giggles*

    Ooohh. Nice ship. If I'm very, very good, could I get one??

    If I could hand them out, I'd have one in your driveway by morning :p

    Yay! I'm so happy to see Artoo flying with Anakin! I Artoo!!

    Glad you like.

    I like Commander Klorne. A lot.

    And we haven't even seen her yet ;)

    Wrev's not Janson's apprentice, is he??

    [face_laugh]

    Is that worse that the Warlord finding her?

    Her master is Anakin Solo. She knows he'll rescue her [face_mischief]

    All kidding aside, the action is terrific - vividly described, like a movie playing out in front of me. Just your usual brilliance, YK!

    Thanks so much! I like the action scene to be very visual.

    I had a super time reading this chapter, and I'm betting that the rest will be just as good ... if not better! (No pressure...)

    None at all :p Hopefully the chapters will get better as we go.

    Thanks for reading :)




    Wyn: Great posts! Sorry it took me so long to review DRL has been horrible for a bit.

    No worries, there's no rush.

    I love how this definately has an ROTS feel with the old skool style Jedi fighters and a droid army. I can't wait to see how Callista fits into all this. Great job!

    Glad you like it. The droid army part is just a little tiny piece that has nothing to do with the overall story, really. Just a way of showing the Jedi being Jedi to start with.

    Thanks so much for reading :D




    Spork: See? You acknowledge my rightness!

    I admit nothing!

    *sighs* Always did enjoy my misery, don't you?

    I'm cruel to everyone :p

    I'm glad to know that! So glad you embraced it...it really works.

    I'm glad.

    *blinks* So...the Jedi'll be flying something like an Interceptor when the final evolution comes?

    No, no, I mean it's the same fighter *essentially* that the Jedi in RotS used, which was the foundation for TIE interceptors. The fighters Anakin and Wrev are flying are a "throw-back."

    Oh, no confusion this time! Just a happiness that the droid hasn't been pushed aside.

    Oh, my mistake 8-}

    Always a pleasure!
    Is it too late to ask for more?


    Nope, I'm thinking Saturday!





    JJD: *rushes in*
    Here I am!


    There you are!

    I really, really need to read the other fics, but the fact that I can enjoy this without really having a clue what's going on is a testament to your skills.

    Thanks. I hope it's not too confusing. If you have any questions feel free to ask them.

    Anyways, I love the Stover-esque writing, the parallels with the PT, and you just flat out write great action. Oh, and I have a feeling I'm gonnna like this Wrev guy.

    A lot of people don't but we'll see ;)

    Now. The mystery, of course, is who Anakin's apprentice is. I suppose everyone has their theory, and I can't wait to see who it is!

    Well, don't tell Lola, but it's Nieus P. Sovel [face_shhh]

    I just love your stuff so much!

    Thanks :D

    Anyways, I wish I had more time to write a more detailed review, but rest assured I am enjoying this very much and waiting with interest for more.

    Thanks again :)

    Is it too soon to ask for more?

    Nope. I'm going to have chapter 2 up by Saturday.




    poku: The following is spoken with an extremely fast tempo and it sounds like the voice is out of breath

    So noted.

    WOW, JES!

    Jes?

    It was aws
  8. oldjedinurse Jedi Master

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    YK:

    That section isn't written from his POV *giggles*

    My comment still stands... o_O

    "Ooohh. Nice ship. If I'm very, very good, could I get one??" If I could hand them out, I'd have one in your driveway by morning

    Very generous, my friend! I guess I'll have to pretend that my Jetta is an Eta-7!


    *settles in to wait for next post*

    oldj
  9. Yodas-evil-twin Jedi Grand Master

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    Why is it that every single warlord or despot has to be some over weight coward who feels the need to construct a new super weapon?


    Obi-Wan: "Its an elegant weapon of a more civlised age when people showed some backbone."


  10. Darth_Lex Force Ghost

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    All right, I'll join the chorus. :p Great Stoveresque segments. Definitely added some character to the chapter. :cool:

    Exciting action sequence. :D Poor Wrev - what short straw did he draw to have to fly with two different Solos? [face_laugh]

    Good to see that a half-century later Jedi apprentices haven't gotten any less prone to getting captured. :p

    Looking forward to the next post. ;)
  11. thesporkbewithyou Jedi Master

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    I admit nothing!

    *folds her arms across her chest and leans against a wall* Now you're just being stubbborn.

    I'm cruel to everyone

    :p

    No, no, I mean it's the same fighter *essentially* that the Jedi in RotS used, which was the foundation for TIE interceptors. The fighters Anakin and Wrev are flying are a "throw-back."

    Okay...I see. I think. :confused:

    Nope, I'm thinking Saturday!

    Huzzah![face_cheering]

    *pulls up a chair near oldjedinurse to wait*
  12. Jags_Scoundrel Force Ghost

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    *dashes into thread*

    Whew! Managed to make it in before the next post. :D

    Wow. I'm not sure what I could add that hasn't already been said. Incredible! =D=

    Anakin replied, but Wrev could tell he was flustered as the pair were pulled the rest of the way into the durasteel battlestation, that Wrev began to believe would be their tomb.

    *shakes head*
    You mean after all that Wrev had been through with Jaina, he still doesn't believe in the Solo luck?

    Looking forward to more! :D
  13. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Oldj: My comment still stands...

    And it's one I agree with whole-heartedly!

    Very generous, my friend! I guess I'll have to pretend that my Jetta is an Eta-7!

    I think we all pretended our cars were on the way back from seeing RotS back in May [face_laugh]

    *settles in to wait for next post*

    I'm planning on tomorrow ;)




    evil-twin: Why is it that every single warlord or despot has to be some over weight coward who feels the need to construct a new super weapon?

    Because it makes for the best warlords :p

    Obi-Wan: "Its an elegant weapon of a more civlised age when people showed some backbone."

    Indeed ;)



    Lex: All right, I'll join the chorus. Great Stoveresque segments. Definitely added some character to the chapter.

    Thanks, I certainly won't take "Stoveresque" as an insult :p

    As far as "character," that's one of the things I like about the present tense? seems to add more personality than the past tense stuff.

    Exciting action sequence. Poor Wrev - what short straw did he draw to have to fly with two different Solos?

    Yes, he's had some bad luck :p He's not the nices guy so it's probably just bad karma

    Good to see that a half-century later Jedi apprentices haven't gotten any less prone to getting captured.

    Yeah. Their masters spend a fair amount of time in shackles as well though 8-}

    Looking forward to the next post.

    Thanks for reading, it will be up soon :)




    thesporkster: *folds her arms across her chest and leans against a wall* Now you're just being stubbborn.

    I am not [face_not_talking]

    Okay...I see. I think.

    If not, I'll try and explain it better.

    Huzzah![face_cheering]
    *pulls up a chair near oldjedinurse to wait*


    Do I have to serve you two refreshments or something? :p




    Scoundrel: Whew! Managed to make it in before the next post.

    Yup, you're fine :D

    Wow. I'm not sure what I could add that hasn't already been said. Incredible!

    Thank you [face_blush]

    *shakes head* You mean after all that Wrev had been through with Jaina, he still doesn't believe in the Solo luck?

    I find his lack of faith disturbing :p

    Looking forward to more!

    I'm glad. Thanks for reading :)
  14. oldjedinurse Jedi Master

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    I think we all pretended our cars were on the way back from seeing RotS back in May

    :D With the soundtrack CD blaring away...
  15. Lola64 Force Ghost

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    Well, don't tell Lola, but it's Nieus P. Sovel [face_shhh]

    Hello! I can read. :p
  16. Yodas-evil-twin Jedi Grand Master

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    YodaKenobi: Because it makes for the best warlords :p

    Yeah and the Death Star really was a giant satellite dish.


    Though there is something else. Placing missles on the out side of your ship sounds suicidal. One lucky shot, and you'll be singing sopranos.
  17. jagsredlady Jedi Master

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    *coming in just under the wire* :p

    Picture this: The skies above the planet Sullust are on fire. Like the volcanic surface itself, space is filled with shooting jets of plasma and plumes of flak thick enough to make the toxic world look inviting.

    There is a war.


    Great start! :D

    A flotilla of Galactic Alliance capital ships is clashing with a monstrous industrial army. Hundreds of starfighters are spilling out of warships on both sides like swarms of firebugs moving to devour a summer crop of mehza on Taanab. The streaking blue glow of ion drives, bursts of red fire, and a lattice of green turbo lasers fill the vacuum as staggeringly large masses of durasteel fire on one another, drowning out the glow of the planet they surround.

    At the heart of the industrial fleet is a battle station, massive and intimidating, its batteries spewing particle beams into the ships the Alliance could spare for the fight and vaporizing them. Inside sits a wealthy warlord.

    It is into this madness that two starfighters appear, two streaking bursts of light as they revert to real space.

    Two Jedi Interceptors.


    I, too, like the ROTS-like opening. Very exciting. Your wonderful descriptions made it seem like I was watching a movie. [face_hypnotized]

    "She's never let me down before."

    I have a bad feeling about this. [face_worried]

    She was able to hide only because of some Jedi hibernation and presence suppression techniques, lowering body temp and heart rate.

    :cool:

    "Anakin's going to kill me."

    Well, at least she didn?t have a lightsaber to loose. :p

    Very suspenseful scene with ?the apprentice?, her ongoing inner dialogue making it even more so. I can?t wait to find out who she is. [face_thinking]

    "Hey, somebody has to protect Nieus P. Sovel," Wrev quipped, referring to a controversial Sullustan philosopher and author who he imagined was hiding beneath his desk somewhere on the planet.

    I can actually imagine Neius doing just that. [face_laugh] Seriously, you know I heart the dude. Good to see him mentioned here too. [face_batting]

    "Trust me, we can take them."
    "Anakin, I'm still picking up shields..."
    "Tractor beam!"


    So very? Star Wars-ey :p Sorry, can?t think of a better way to express that. Anakin is so? Anakin. Skywalker that is. [face_love] ;)

    This is so Stover-ish.

    Don't tell Stover, he'll sue me

    If he?s reading this, somewhere inside his van with the tinted windows, [face_devil] I?m sure he?d feel flattered.
    [face_mischief] So, yeah, Stover-ish, although the prologue made me think Denning-esque, I just didn?t want to say so for fear I?d annoy you. :p

    That was an amazing first chapter. =D=

    And I didn?t mind the length of the post at all. :cool:

    I can?t wait for more. Today! ;)
  18. YodaKenobi VIP

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    oldj: With the soundtrack CD blaring away...

    Hehe, yes, I've done that :-B [face_dancing]




    Lola: Hello! I can read.

    :oops:





    evil-twin: Yeah and the Death Star really was a giant satellite dish.

    [face_laugh]


    Though there is something else. Placing missles on the out side of your ship sounds suicidal. One lucky shot, and you'll be singing sopranos.

    Yes, it does sound dangerous. Of course, we have fighter jets with missiles :p I believe they will only detonate when activated though even if shot, but I might be wrong about that.





    Red: *coming in just under the wire*

    You're fine :p

    Great start!

    Thanks :D

    I, too, like the ROTS-like opening. Very exciting. Your wonderful descriptions made it seem like I was watching a movie.

    Thanks, I'm glad you were able to picture it all :)

    I have a bad feeling about this.

    [face_laugh]

    Well, at least she didn?t have a lightsaber to loose.

    Yeah, for some reason I was just ripping off movie lines in this chapter :p

    Very suspenseful scene with ?the apprentice?, her ongoing inner dialogue making it even more so. I can?t wait to find out who she is.

    It's a bounty hunter called J? *gets hit by toxic dart and dies*

    I can actually imagine Neius doing just that. Seriously, you know I heart the dude. Good to see him mentioned here too.

    He's a hack. It's people like you who inflate his ego by praising him [face_not_talking]

    So very? Star Wars-ey Sorry, can?t think of a better way to express that.

    That's okay, that's perfect ;) :D

    Anakin is so? Anakin. Skywalker that is.

    [face_mischief] No comment.

    If he?s reading this, somewhere inside his van with the tinted windows, I?m sure he?d feel flattered.

    [face_laugh] :_| [face_laugh]

    So, yeah, Stover-ish, although the prologue made me think Denning-esque, I just didn?t want to say so for fear I?d annoy you.

    That would have annoyed me, thanks for fighting that urge :p

    ;)

    That was an amazing first chapter.

    Thanks so much :)

    And I didn?t mind the length of the post at all.

    I'm glad :D

    I can?t wait for more. Today!

    I'll post then, just for you ;)

    Thanks again for reading, Red, and I love the Twain quote in your sig [face_love] You have good taste ;)




    New post on the way. It references the last scene with Callista in The Living Force if anyone doesn't remember or hasn't read it and is interested. Now let's see what's happening on Denon ;)
  19. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Chapter 2: Interrogation

    The gleaming white corridors inside the Denon Port Authority offices feel almost lifeless to most who pass through them? but the Jedi Master walking briskly down the cream and gray marbled floor isn't most. He feels all, even the base elements of the metal and the space they retain in the Physical Force. He feels the torrent of life in everyone behind the sliding doors he passes and in the oncoming traffic of the security officers who have taken over the DPA in its moment of crisis.

    The Force is strong in him.

    His name is Luke.

    What he feels in most of these beings bustling about their tasks, everyone outside their own daily routine, is an overwhelming sense of panic. This is common when disaster strikes? he's felt it before.

    He is panicked as well.

    So is his wife.

    Now in his early fifties, Luke Skywalker is the Jedi Order. The two are so intertwined that the thought of one existing without the other would be as unnatural as when they'd first met the Yuuzhan Vong and actually thought there were living beings that did not exist in the Force at all.

    He has built the new order himself, from the ground up against incredible odds, combating countless obstacles along the way. While perhaps not the most powerful, Luke is by far the greatest Jedi in the galaxy, and one of the finest to ever live.

    He is the son of Anakin Skywalker, not Darth Vader.

    He is a husband and a father.

    A teacher and a student.

    He is both kind and wise.

    And on the day the end begins, Luke Skywalker is as unaware of the true danger as his wife is.

    Even in panic, he is serenity. He is the calm center.

    On the surface, the others can't tell that he's just left a meeting with Cal Omas' advisory council quite abruptly when the news came. They can't tell that his head is filled with the HoloNet images that interrupted the politicians, of the alien craft they'd taken down to Denon's surface and the crowd of GFI officers surrounding it with blasters drawn as they helped Callista Ming from the strange vessel.

    They certainly can't tell what Callista had meant to him at one time...

    Luke had also seen his wife on the HoloNet, her stunning red hair as familiar to him as anything. Even when he saw only the back of her head, he knew it was her? and that's all he could see. Mara Jade Skywalker is a wraith, lurking in the shadows, who's skilled in avoiding unwanted attention and managed to keep the holocams from getting a shot of her face and increasing the media frenzy.

    Luke often wishes he were as shrewd as his wife.

    But he isn't. For all his wisdom, Luke Skywalker still retains some of his innocence from boyhood, and enthusiasm that will stay with him to the end.

    It is his part to play. Everyone's actions will bring about the end in one way or another, and Luke's more than most.

    This is where Denon is cast into darkness.





    Under normal circumstances, Luke Skywalker would have smiled when he saw the familiar shape of his wife, arms folded, leaning against a large holotransom, the lines of Mara Jade Skywalker he'd long ago memorized? but even he couldn't smile then.

    When he'd seen Callista on the HoloNet, it had been too much of a shock, as if he'd been struck in the chest and left reeling, desperately sucking in shallow breaths.

    There were many reasons for this, or course, but Luke's life had never been simple. Perhaps the least important, but most uncomfortable, was the fact that Callista was a former lover, their passion having transcended time and even physical form. He'd loved her deeply and it made him feel all the more fortunate to find Mara, and get a second chance.

    Having someone he'd been in love with suddenly reappear, and escorted down to the planet by his wife of all people, was enough to make anyone wish that they didn't install HoloNet projectors in council meetings, or perhaps that he'd just stayed in bed.

    But most troubling to Luke was the situation involving Callista's disappearance three yea
  20. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    *yoink*

    Finally caught up with both of your new updates YK. I must say I'm very impressed with the start you've made to this story. Sounds like this will be a rollercoaster ride. :D

  21. TheCrazyRodian Force Ghost

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    Damn you and your sorceror's ways!

    Er, I mean, I will reply when I have more time.
  22. Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare

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    YK: *awestruck*

    :eek: :eek: :eek:

    *just awestruck*

    [Will try to reply coherently when I can... [face_blush] :D]

    - The Imperial Ewok
  23. oldjedinurse Jedi Master

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    Riveting post, YK!

    It was an army like no other I've ever seen. This empire has conquered thousands of peoples, enslaved and incorporated them into their war machine. That stealth ship is just a pebble in an asteroid field. Their fleet of ships dwarfs what the Alliance has and their firepower is insurmountable.

    Uh-oh.

    Sorry this is short, but my internet connection is giving me trouble tonight.

    More next post!

    oldj
  24. RebelMom Jedi Grand Master

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    Mara the interrogator - great job for her. These unknown enemies don't sound pleasant. Good build up too. I'm looking forward to more.
  25. WynssaStarflare Jedi Master

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    Great job! I love how you are using Callista. She's not good or evil but somewhere in between. Great job describing Luke's emotions when he saw Callista. :)
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