Beyond The Age of Heroes (post-NJO AU: Anakin, Jaina, Jacen, L/M, H/L, Tahiri, Kyp,Jag) Sequel 2/2/07!

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  1. Darth_Lex Force Ghost

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    Whoops, slow on the draw again. :p

    Great intro on Jaina. Although I haven't read your precursor stories leading her to this point, you're definitely writing her in a way I very much like. :cool:

    Interesting how the ship has so many implications... [face_thinking]

    Looking forward to more. :D
  2. MirandaFair Force Ghost

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    YK,

    [face_blush] *blushes with embarrassment* [face_blush]

    I don't know if you caught this, but Anakin is 22. Her feelings will certainly not be reciprocated I'm pretty sure that wouldn't even be allowed on the boards. It will, however, be a source of some tension in the story.

    Math was never my strong suit. And with Anakin surviving, the numbers left me. I don't know why I thought they were closer in age. *head desk* 8-}

    Anywho, can't wait for more.[face_dancing]
  3. TahiriSoloFan Jedi Master

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    =D= Sorry but I'm off to sleep... great post though!
  4. TheCrazyRodian Force Ghost

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    :eek:

    I wish I had time to really, really get into a response to the last few posts, but I'm still drowning in schoolwork. One week until I go back home to the States, though... [face_dancing]

    But I will say this: I adore this story. The action scenes are already some of my favorite action sequences ever. They are perfectly Star Wars. Almost nobody writes as realistically and as vividly as you do. It gives me the chills just to imagine what goes on.
  5. Magnuskn Force Ghost

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    Well, it´s a word much used in Buffy fanfiction fandom, about stories which don´t have much content besides the main characters having a good time and being schmoopy with each other. :-B Just FYI. :)

    Magnus
  6. YodaKenobi VIP

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    TKL: No you're the best
    oke: oke:


    Thanks :p



    Lex: Whoops, slow on the draw again.

    *Coughs*

    Great intro on Jaina. Although I haven't read your precursor stories leading her to this point, you're definitely writing her in a way I very much like.

    Thanks, I hope it still makes sense to you. Let me know if it gets confusing.

    Interesting how the ship has so many implications...

    Yeah, there are lots of things to draw from it [face_mischief]

    Looking forward to more.

    Thanks, more will be up soon :) and thanks for reading :D




    MirandaFair: *blushes with embarrassment*
    Math was never my strong suit. And with Anakin surviving, the numbers left me. I don't know why I thought they were closer in age. *head desk*


    Don't be embarrassed, I figured it was just a misunderstanding ;) :)

    Anywho, can't wait for more.

    Thanks, more will be up early next week :)




    TSF: Sorry but I'm off to sleep... great post though!

    Thanks, sleep well :D




    Rodian: I wish I had time to really, really get into a response to the last few posts, but I'm still drowning in schoolwork. One week until I go back home to the States, though...

    Cool, I didn't know you were outside the US :)

    But I will say this: I adore this story. The action scenes are already some of my favorite action sequences ever. They are perfectly Star Wars. Almost nobody writes as realistically and as vividly as you do. It gives me the chills just to imagine what goes on.

    Wow, thanks a lot [face_blush] I'm glad you're enjoying it. That's about all the action there is for awhile so I hope it ties all the action-junkies over while we get into the heart of the story :D




    Magnuskn: Well, it´s a word much used in Buffy fanfiction fandom, about stories which don´t have much content besides the main characters having a good time and being schmoopy with each other. Just FYI.

    No, I know what "fluff" is, I just meant I'm not sure there's anything in this story that I would consider that. I normally try and have a point to every scene, but their are a few happy moments and some smooching, I guess :p
  7. Whitey Force Ghost

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    And I'm the last reply as always. :(

    I just want to say that I hope Luke takes Mara down a level and there's more to the Jaina/Jag/Wrev love triangle. [face_mischief]

    Oh, and when will my incredibly beautiful and intelligent girlfriend Danni show up? :p
  8. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Whitey: And I'm the last reply as always.

    Nothing wrong with that. It makes you stand out :p

    I just want to say that I hope Luke takes Mara down a level and there's more to the Jaina/Jag/Wrev love triangle.

    No comment on that [face_shhh]

    Oh, and when will my incredibly beautiful and intelligent girlfriend Danni show up?

    We'll see Danni in a few chapter [face_love]

    Thanks for reading, Whitey :) :D




    Okay, new post should be up in a bit. Hope you all enjoy it :)
  9. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Chapter 5: Close Encounters

    "I don't know who you are, but if either of you takes another step, you'll be very well-acquainted with my blaster."

    The two cloaked figures traipsing through the stalks of ripening tulan towards the small domed abode they could see against a sunset of violet and tangerine halted upon the first word. It was a greeting Jedi had come to expect across the galaxy, but not one anyone could ever really get used to. On a planet as remote as Rivisa 6, where news traveled so slowly, it was understandable that many of its residence wouldn't know what to think of Jedi Knights? were they heroes or villains? It seemed to change from week to week. After the defeat of the Yuuzhan Vong, the Jedi were being widely embraced throughout the galaxy, hailed as saviors? on Rivisa 6, however, Tsavong Lah's call for Jedi to be given over to the aliens so the Yuuzhan Vong would stop their invasion seemed as fresh as the treaty at Coruscant, and even Emperor Palpatine's call for the Jedi's extermination didn't seem all that distant.

    So it was understandable that two Jedi Knights on the farming world would be staring down the barrel of an old BlasTech rifle, clutched in the hands of a woman who looked as though she knew how to fire it.

    The tallest one lowered the head of his black cloak revealing shaggy curls of black hair with a growing amount of silver etched in his temples and a pair of piercing green eyes. His apprentice did the same, long dark hair and eyes atop a still maturing frame. One just on the cusp of adulthood and the other moving towards mid-life? they might have been father and son, ? in many ways, they were.

    Over the last three years, they'd fought side by side, learned from one another, and bonded in the way that only Jedi could.

    It was the older man who spoke first, raising his hands to communicate that he meant no harm and feeling relieved that the woman spoke basic. "My name is Kyp Durron? this is my apprentice, Valin Horn. We're Jedi Knights. We only wish to speak with you for a few moments."

    The woman's grip on the weapon didn't slacken, her pale blue eyes keen, running skeptically over both men. Kyp guessed that she was in her late-thirties, with long tangled blonde tresses that rode Rivisa's cool breeze easily, her body tanned and sinewy from a lifetime of hard labor.

    "I know you're Jedi," she replied, her voice thickly accented as she kept her weapon leveled at them. "My friends commed me from the space port when you arrived? we all know you're here... we just don't know why."

    Kyp exchanged a glance with Valin, the younger man as tired as he was of getting these sort of receptions for something that should have been relatively simple, and ideally, cordial.

    "Yeah, we'd already gotten the impression that outsiders weren't welcome here, but the blaster has certainly crystallized it," Valin replied, keeping his hands in the air.

    The woman didn't seem to find Valin's deadpan remarks entirely amusing? in fact, she seemed almost oblivious to the fact that his comments were in jest and didn't flinch, keeping her blaster rifle trained on them as Kyp shot his apprentice a disapproving look this time.

    "We're actually here to speak with you, Baliss," Kyp explained.

    She didn't seem at all surprised that he knew her name, but perhaps living in such a small community bred people who came to expect everyone knew who they were. Still, her suspicion only heightened. "Why would two Jedi want to see me about anything?"

    "About this," Kyp replied, gesturing with his hands to encompass the stalks of tulan. "All of it. It's amazing and?"

    "My crop is already under contract? sold before it's been harvested so you can't but it. If you've come to steal it, you'll have to kill me first."

    "No, no, you misunderstood me," Kyp said, though he couldn't help but think how easy it would have been to wrench the weapon away from her with a swift tug from the Force. "We don't have any interest in acquiring the tulan; we just want to discuss how it's possible that
  10. jagsredlady Jedi Master

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    [reply goes here] ;)

    Aww, Kypster and Mirax [face_love]

    Who is Baliss?

  11. TKeira_Lea Jedi Grand Master

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    How's Red getting words of these so fast? o_O

    Off to read...:-B
  12. WynssaStarflare Jedi Master

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    Wow! Not only did Kyp take Valin as an apprentice, he took Mirax as a love interest. Why do I have the feeling that somewhere Corran Horn is rolling over in his grave?

    Too bad they couldn't recruit the potential Jedi. Being a Jedi certainly has a lot more downsides than upsides, I can understand why no one wants the job.

    Great post!
  13. RebelMom Jedi Grand Master

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    Kyp and Mirax? :eek:
    Did not see that one coming. Not at all.
  14. Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare

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    YK: :eek: :eek: :D :D Amazing. Just... amazing...

    You redeemed Kyp...

    Wow. :)

    - The Imperial Ewok
  15. TheCrazyRodian Force Ghost

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    Sonofa...

    I don't even know how to react. You're brilliant. BRILLIANT. I second what Thrawn said: you've redeemed Kyp. Gah. I can't think clearly. I'm losing my mind.

    Brilliant. Totally brilliant.
  16. Jags_Scoundrel Force Ghost

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    Wow. (picture that jawdrop smilie here!)

    Poor Corran. He must be in, well, wherever Jedi go when they become one with the Force just going ballistic.

    I feel sorry for Kyp, too. Sounds like the poor guy has truly found love...in quite a difficult situation.

    Baliss sounds like an interesting character. I hope that she changes her mind and we get to see her again.

    Great post, as always! :D
  17. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Kyp and Mirax????????? :eek: :eek: :eek:

    Never saw that one coming.
  18. FORCEBlLADE Force Ghost

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    KYP AND MIRAX! Ewww. I didn'expect to get creeped outin this fic. What broutn that idea?
  19. Tahi Jedi Grand Master

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    Woohoo! I've caught up at last. Fantastic story. I'm especially enjoying your new narrative style with the dual "voices" - the all-seeing apocryphal one is a fascinating idea. Good for you. :) I'll be interested to see if the voice is as all knowing as it makes out however. ;)

    The early scenes establishing Anakin and Wrev's places in the current discord are personal favourites, but I also enjoyed your introduction of Jaina immensely.

    Unable to activate the shields after struggling with the tractor beam, Anakin knew the Kuat engineered fighters couldn't take much more of the battle droids' abuse and hope to fly out with any semblance of space-worthiness. When one of the hulking droids attempted to attack the ship from its stern, he kicked his sublight thrusters, letting two meter long cones of blue flame erupt from the drives and engulf the hapless SoroSuub creation.

    Anakin's maroon-painted Eta-7 shot across the hanger deck, clipping a pair of battle droids with the ship's stubby wings and spearing one with the forward mandibles, the impact jolting the young Jedi forward as R2-D2 let out an angry screech from inside the port socket. Fearing serious damage, Anakin cut the drives and broke hard, his fighter skidding across the deck and spinning 180 degrees to avoid the barrage of streaking crimson.

    Just one of the examples in the early chapters of the sense of historical connection to the past - especially to Anakin's special connection to his grandad in those echoes of TPM.

    I'm also enjoying the way you're setting it all up by bringing in the various characters slowly and showing what they've been up to and where they're at now. And all the time that voice of doom prognosticating that the future ain't going to be comfy. ;) :D Although no doubt we'll all enjoy the ride.

    Looking forward to the next post - and also being able to keep up this time. LOL [Turns on DRL with large ion cannon.]
  20. _Jedi_of_Destiny_ Jedi Master

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    Kyp and Mirax's eyes found each other's, now alone in the quiet quarters, a wry grin twisting her pink lips before the two sprung into motion. Their lips met in a deep kiss as Kyp's fingers tangled in her black hair, Mirax's arms going around his neck.

    :eek: 8-} :eek:

    I have to agree with everyone. I never saw it coming! Where the heck did that come from? [face_shame_on_you] Ya know I should have expected....after I put up that fake post in MPtT...but this was real! And....very suprising! :D


    If Corran wasn't already dead.......he'd kill himself. [face_plain] :p Anyways, an interesting move. It will be exciting to find out what the repurcussions of this relationship will have on Valin.

    I also loved how Kyp and Valin's relationship has developed into a father/son best friend-like bond. :cool:

    And can I say again how much I admire your writing style? o_O

    Fantastic post, Wes. I'm very impressed. :D
  21. TahiriSoloFan Jedi Master

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    I would have never thought of it, but I love the idea of your Kyp & Mirax. The way you have matured Kyp in this story is great.... he's grown from his experiences. :eek: That was a beautiful chapter! =D= Valin was cool too.

    Oh by the way... I love the narrative style you're usng with this story. It's really setting up that ominious feeling of The End IS Coming!
  22. SilSolo Jedi Grand Master

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    whoa whoa Kyp/Mirax? I almost forgot that Corran's dead!

    The actions he can never undo.

    Well, to quote one of my favorite characterse from another 'verse, A deed, once done, cannot be undone, but perhaps it may yet be mitigated.
  23. YodaKenobi VIP

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    Red: [reply goes here]

    No rush ;)

    Aww, Kypster and Mirax

    Glad you like it :D

    Who is Baliss?

    Baliss is an OC. You will probably see more of her in the future.

    Thanks for reading :)





    TKL: How's Red getting words of these so fast?

    Mind-meld?

    Off to read...

    Thanks! :D




    Wyn: Wow! Not only did Kyp take Valin as an apprentice, he took Mirax as a love interest. Why do I have the feeling that somewhere Corran Horn is rolling over in his grave?

    Well, they burned him, so at least we know that's not happening *morbid laugh*

    Too bad they couldn't recruit the potential Jedi. Being a Jedi certainly has a lot more downsides than upsides, I can understand why no one wants the job.

    Yeah, we may see her in the future, like the next fic or so ;)

    Thanks for reading :)





    RM: Kyp and Mirax?
    Did not see that one coming. Not at all.


    I don't know if that's good or bad, but thanks for reading! :D




    Thrawn: Amazing. Just... amazing...

    Thanks [face_blush]

    You redeemed Kyp...

    I don't know if I'd go that far, but I wanted to give him some happiness and growth.

    Wow.

    Thanks again! :D





    Rodian: Sonofa...
    I don't even know how to react. You're brilliant. BRILLIANT.


    [face_blush]

    I'm glad I've fooled you into thinking that :p

    I second what Thrawn said: you've redeemed Kyp. Gah. I can't think clearly. I'm losing my mind.
    Brilliant. Totally brilliant.


    Wow, thanks so much :)




    Scoundrel: Wow. (picture that jawdrop smilie here!)

    Yeah, it's getting harder and harder to properly express yourself here :p

    Poor Corran. He must be in, well, wherever Jedi go when they become one with the Force just going ballistic.

    I agree. Poor guy 8-}

    I feel sorry for Kyp, too. Sounds like the poor guy has truly found love...in quite a difficult situation.

    Yeah, it's sure to be a bumpy road [face_whistling]

    Baliss sounds like an interesting character. I hope that she changes her mind and we get to see her again.

    Not in this fic, but we will see her again in the future. She

    Great post, as always!

    Thanks so much :)




    Spike: Kyp and Mirax?????????
    Never saw that one coming.


    It was supposed to be a surprise, so I'm glad that worked :p

    Thanks for reading!





    FB: KYP AND MIRAX! Ewww. I didn'expect to get creeped outin this fic. What broutn that idea?

    I didn't think it was all that creepy :p What brought it on was in the course of writing TLF, some scenes between Kyp and Mirax, and what I saw as a possible progression of their relationship with Kyp as Valin's master.

    Thanks for reading.




    Tahi: Woohoo! I've caught up at last. Fantastic story. I'm especially enjoying your new narrative style with the dual "voices" - the all-seeing apocryphal one is a fascinating idea. Good for you. I'll be interested to see if the voice is as all knowing as it makes out however.

    It is :p I'm glad you like it, I wanted to do something different with the narrative after I, JS, and this is pretty much stolen from Stover's RotS novelization 8-}

    The early scenes establishing Anakin and Wrev's places in the current discord are personal favourites, but I also enjoyed your introduction of Jaina immensely.

    Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed both :)

    Just one of the examples in the early chapters of the sense of historical connection to the past - especially to Anakin's special connection to his grandad in those echoes of TPM.

    Yep. It was probably overdone but I just couldn't resist :p

    I'm also enjoying the way you're setting it all up by bringing in the various characters slowly and showing what they've been up to and where they're at now. And all the time tha
  24. Yodas-evil-twin Jedi Grand Master

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    Apocolypse eh? Might as well start moving preparations.

    In all seriousness, excellent posts, but your "this is so and so" style is starting to wear on me. I wasn't big fan of it in the ROTS novelization, and its not helping here.

    As Kyp/Mirax, I don't know if I should be accepting or furious.
  25. princess_melissa Jedi Master

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    ha, all cought up.

    Kyp and Mirax... :eek: never saw that one coming.

    I have to bring up a quote from a couple of chapters ago:

    Wrev Caster.

    After two weeks with him searching for Alema, Jaina still wasn't sure how she felt about the older Jedi. Whether he was a friend or her enemy. Like many of the Jedi in his generation, Wrev was arrogant, more flash than substance, and simply obnoxious at times, constantly testing those around him and manipulating them when he felt it necessary. And at other times, he could be personable and sincere. There was no doubt that he'd saved Jaina's life almost as many times as she'd saved his during their mission, and that it wouldn't have been completed without the two of them together.

    At times when Wrev was driving her crazy on the Falcon she'd wondered if it might have been something else...

    :D I'm still want to see Wrev/Jaina. I think that'd be awsome.

    Keep up the good writing
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