Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Commander-DWH, Aug 15, 2005.
It ended. Can't wait to find out Aiden's plan of treachery.
Wow. It gets more interesting. I can't believe you didn't tell us what Aidan's plan is. Evil authoress!
To tell the truth, I totally forgot that the Sith were Sith...if that makes any sense? They were so normal. I'm glad Carth's son is open to being proved wrong. It would have been so awful if he just turned irreversibly evil!
wow, I guess even the Sith start out with some misguided innocence.
Great update DWH.
Ah yes, The Treacherous and Sithly Plan. A necessity for every masquerading dark sider. As long as it doesn't get you killed, of course.
Yes, Aiden, I'm looking at you.
Great post, CDWH!
Wow, this is really cool!!!
I just found this today and stayed up til 4AM reading it! You would think that we would get tired of all of the KOTOR walk-thru fic's out there, but I have to say, this one is entirely different... your OC's and different approach to the storytelling is totally awesome. I am loving how you are not limiting yourself to only 3 people per outing...
And while I'm gushing, let me say that you need a 'no drinking while reading' warning for some of those one-liners you've got sprinkled about this story...I'm glad no one else is here, I don't think I could explain to my star wars illiterate associates why some of this stuff is so fraking hilarious, and let me tell you, I am not one to laugh out loud at funny, I usually just grin like a big goof-ball, but you had me LOL for the first time in a very long time...
And I am very glad that the horror of Carth dying was an April's fool joke; me reading it in January, it wasn't so funny, I almost clicked the back button when I read that chapter, but I remembered that you were going to stay semi-cannon, and I am very glad I stuck it out. I have read several of you other ficlets, and I am a huge fan of the epic-ly long stories, just a preference of mine, harking back to the novel reading days of my youth.
I am not usually one to comment on an incomplete fic, but I must say, you have truly hooked me on your unique brand of action and humor.
I am looking forward to many more installments, and the eventual completion of this wonderful story, even though, as I have played both KOTOR games more than a few times, we all know how it ends...you have me invested in wanting to know what happens to you OC, and THAT, I must say is a first.
Keep up the good work, and don't let Darth Real Life get you down.
Add me to the PM list, if you would ;p I absolutely love this!
*blows dust off thread* Oh my goodness everyone, I am so sorry I've fallen this behind. It's been a combination of factors, including the fact that the document containing Blue Side in its entirety somehow got corrupted, so I had to do some computer wizardry to get the data back. Also, I had to pack up for a big move, and once I finished training they put me straight on to overtime... it's been nuts. But the most awesome kind of nuts imaginable!
Anywhoo. I do not have the new chapter done yet, but I'm working on it. Still, I thought I'd at least let you guys know I'm still alive and kicking.
SoA: it's one of my goals to make the Sith less of a caricature, so hooray!
Striker: Hey, Sith are people, too. Misguided and often evil, but people.
princess_of_naboo: There will be finding out! Very soon, I promise.
Rogue_Pilot: Me? Evil? Hey, what can I say? The inimitable oqster was my Master of Evilness. Good to know she taught me something.
Ale: Thanks! Hope to give you more Sithly awesomeness some time soon.
angry_bendu: Heh, Aiden is indeed a troublemaker. Glad you enjoyed!
GraceSolo: Haha, your comments made me go back and put some even more clear markings on the April Fools Day chapter. I'm glad you kept reading anyway, and that you enjoyed it so much. This has really been an interesting exercise in adaptation for me, so it always makes me happy to hear that fans of the game have thoroughly enjoyed the story. And I do still have some surprises up my sleeve. *shifty eyes* DRL can't keep me down for long, either- it can keep me busy, but I'm still plugging away!
East_Coast_Ryder: Consider yourself added! I'll make sure you're updated. Thanks for hopping on board!
All that said... it is time for me to do some writing.
My apologies for this taking so long! But it's here now, and I hope you enjoy it.
?You did what?? Carth looked at Aiden incredulously.
?I told Master Uthar what Yuthura was planning. I?m looking for prestige, remember? He?s the one I have to impress, not Yuthura.?
?Did it occur to you he might try to kill you just for being in on this??
?Yes, it did.? Aiden shrugged. ?I figured it was worth the risk, and is as likely to get me killed as anything else around here. He seemed to respond well, at least for now.? He fished into his pocket and pulled out a small device. ?This contains a contact poison. You attach it to a person?s mattress, and it kills them in their sleep. Apparently it leaves no trace.?
Leiraya looked aghast. ?That?s horrifying.?
?That?s the Sith,? Carth shook his head. ?Let me guess, he wants you to use it on Yuthura??
?Of course. But I?ve got other plans for it,? Aiden grinned. ?A simple double cross would be substandard, after all.?
?Substandard.? Carth sighed wearily. ?I?ve got a bad feeling about this.?
?As crazy as I know it sounds, I have to ask you to just trust me on this one,? Aiden replied. ?Do you have any idea how hard it is to find non-evil ways to fight to the top here??
?That said,? Carth continued, ?it would be comforting to know you have other plans in mind, too.?
?Oh, absolutely.? Aiden nodded vigorously. ?There are artifacts inside the tombs of the ancient Sith, and no one has really been able to find them yet.?
Leiraya eyed him suspiciously. ?Why??
?They... might be death traps.?
Leiraya buried her face in the palm of her hand briefly before looking back up at him. ?Might be death traps??
?Hey now,? Aiden threw up his hands defensively. ?I could go down the list of my competitors and just kill them all. It would be safer and accomplish the same thing.?
Deflated, Leiraya plopped down on the bed. ?Okay, I get it. Death traps it is.?
?Look,? Aiden grew serious. ?I know I?m asking a lot, and I could go grab Canderous to help me out if you?d rather.?
Leiraya let out a small laugh. ?Canderous would silently kill the competition while you weren?t paying attention.?
Aiden grinned. ?Wouldn?t surprise me. But I just want you both to know that I have complete confidence in you.?
?Thanks, I think.? Leiraya stood. ?So, which first? Death by betrayal or ancient Sith Lord??
?Actually,? Aiden pulled out his datapad, ?I have another, slightly less deadly thing we can do first. Master Uthar posted a notice about a group of missing students, and is offering his gratitude to anyone who can either return them or eliminate them.?
Carth raised an eyebrow. ?Students going missing isn?t exactly what passes as news around here- if the Master of the Academy saw fit to make note of it, it must be serious.?
?Probably a bunch of kids who saw what the Sith really were and got cold feet,? Aiden agreed.
Leiraya prodded Carth. ?They might be able to give us the information we need to convince Dustil.?
?Maybe,? Carth agreed. ?Aiden, do you have a solid lead on where they might be??
?There?s one place in particular I have a hunch about,? he nodded. ?A cave system just before you enter the Valley of the Dark Lords. What?s this about information??
?My son wants hard evidence the Sith are evil,? Carth replied. ?I?m not exactly sure what I?m looking for, but there has to be something we can show him.?
Aiden looked at him thoughtfully. ?I?ll see what I can dig up- I have access to some of the records, and might be able to weasel something truly deviant out of someone.?
?I appreciate that,? Carth nodded. ?Now, what about these caves??
?Right. They?re, well... pretty typical caves.?
?And you don?t think people will have thought to check these pretty typical caves yet?? Carth asked skeptically.
?They?re vermin-infested. Large vermin. But certainly no larger or any more dangerous than the kinrath we dealt with on Kashyyyk.?
Carth looked at him dubiously, then shrugged. ?Well, we?ve got nothing to lose.?
?Good,? Aiden stuffed t
I am ashamed I had forgotten about this fic. Sorry, DWH. Nice teamwork there against the beastie. Although ouch! And looks like some of the students have common sense! Go, students!
Yay, Blue Side update! Aiden's getting memories...
Funny story: I was writing on my own fanfic and had the thought "gee, I should go look on tf.n for inspiration..." and as I opened my browser, thought "I could reread blue side..." then I looked and there's a new chapter! Haha, force precognition!
Loved the chapter; just got done with Korriban on KOTOR2, so I remember the stupid shyrack caves in great detail. This did a really good job of dealing with the difficulty of going through Korriban light sided... Can't wait to see what you do with the poison!
Excellent version of the cave scene. I loved it.
I'm glad you're back, I was starting to get worried this fic wouldn't get finished.
I should talk... My own fic has been hanging for ages. i'm currently trying to get it back on the boards... Well, if you did it, I guess I have nothing else to do but follow suit.
Anyway, a very nice update, thanks for the PM.
Great update! Is this going to leave us with a scarred Aiden?
Oooo! Really great to have this back! But no aprectiation from the Sith flunkies? Indeed!
Striker: I have no one but myself to blame for being such an updating slacker. Thanks for jumping back on board.
princess_of_naboo: He is indeed! And that's all you're getting out of me for now. Thanks for reading.
East_Coast_Ryder: Hehe, glad your Force precognition served you well! Glad you're enjoying the conflict- my characters are getting a little worn down by it, but they're troopers.
Entropist: Don't worry, this fic will be finished if it takes me another four years to do it. Which it really shouldn't, seeing as I'm well over halfway through. DRL can only keep me down for so long, though! We shall prevail, or something like that.
SoA: What's a hero without a few well-placed scars?
Ale: Those Sith flunkies wouldn't know a rescue if it were handed to them. Like it kind of was. The nerve!
Well, DRL is still trying its best to keep me down. But there's a light at the end of this tunnel- only one more month at the maximum of the ridiculous schedule I've been keeping, and then... I have no idea. But it will most likely involve a lot more time for writing!
Leiraya insisted on walking from the entrance of the cave back to Aiden?s quarters in the Academy. Which, Carth had to admit, made perfect sense- to play the part of a Sith, she had to stand on her own two feet. However, her relief was evident when she could finally sit down on the bed and prop her foot up.
Carth watched as she removed her boot. The ankle was now turning a deep purple in addition to being twice its normal size. ?That doesn?t look good.?
?It?ll be all right, if I stay off it.? She motioned towards the footlocker. ?I think there?s a cold compress somewhere in there.?
He rummaged through it, quickly finding the compress in a small but serviceable first aid kit. ?You have quite a way with injuries.?
?Hey, fixing injuries was the biggest part of my job, back...? she faltered, shaking her head as she gently placed the compress on her ankle. ?You know.?
?When you worked with Kylan,? Carth finished for her. ?Is that what?s bothering you??
She let out a short laugh. ?Bothering me? Why would it be bothering me that I get to see the people my best friend was working with while I was worried sick about him? These are the people he deemed worthy of defending?? She paused to take a deep breath. ?I don?t know. Sometimes, we run into a student who?s not half bad. That kid we talked to about Dustil. I find myself thinking that the Sith aren?t just a bunch of monsters. But then we find a group of students hiding in a cave, waiting to die, because a slow death from starvation is better than what they?d face coming back here. Why did Kylan join these people? I don?t know, and that kriffing scares me.?
Carth gently took her hand. ?Your lightsaber??
?I couldn?t.? She looked down, her voice tightening. ?I just couldn?t bring a weapon in here, knowing I?d have to face these people.?
??He pulled her close, wishing that he hadn?t set such a vengeful example for so long. ?Trust me, it?s not as satisfying as you might think.?
?I know,? she sniffled. ?I?ve been on the ship with you for how long? I noticed the whole vengeance thing made you an unpleasant person.?
He grinned wryly. ?I see you?re benefiting from my terrible example.?
She looked up at him pointedly. ?Someone had to.?
?Heh. Well, I?m glad you did. Still, you don?t have to go weaponless in here. You are the last person I can imagine going on a murderous rampage.?
?I didn?t imagine Kylan could go dark.?
?And I didn?t imagine Saul would turn on the Republic,? he countered. ?But it?s not the same. When Saul betrayed me, my home... the entire Republic, he took everything I cared about with him. Kylan didn?t destroy anything but himself.?
Leiraya was quiet for several long moments. ?I miss him.?
?Can you go back to the Hawk and get a few things for me??
?Sure. What do you need??
?First of all, my reusable ice pack. Second, my ca
Very nice update! It was a good break from all the suspense and action. ^_^ We all need some angst and introspection now and then. That said, I can't wait to see Aiden pretend to Sith around some more.
Yes, very nice update. Like Leiraya there with Carth and Aiden. Lol, good cover story there. Hmm, their bond silent? *Kicks Malak in the kneecap* Stay away from her!
Good luck with your schedule. We'll be waiting for you.
I'm baaaaacccckkkk! Miss me? If I'm not still on the PM list put me back on...Just finished reading the whole thing over from start to finish!! Am a bit disgruntled at the lack of romance between Aiden and Leiraya...I like love triangles....I also like Mission/Dustil but that might be requesting a bit too much...anyways it's early morning here so update soon!
Edit: I am not usually that hyper...
?I?m disappointed,? he said casually. ?I expected a Jedi of your stature to last much longer.?
?I hardly regard myself as highly as you seem to,? she replied, voice cracking but determined. ?But you always were one to rush to conclusions.?
Bastila & Malak, I was hoping you would spend more time on them.
So... I'm kinda late in replying to the last two chapters. Like really, really late.
But I like the little slice of life moment you had between Aiden and Leiraya, and the fact she confirms that he's not evil.
Poor Aiden, dealing when his identity, but even more poor Bastila for the torture.
SoA: Aiden does seem to be taking a perverse pleasure in masquerading as a Sith. Glad you're enjoying!
Striker: Thanks! I'm glad you're continuing to enjoy the story, and that you're patient.
Handmaiden_Azul: Welcome back! You're definitely still on the PM list, so no worries. As for the love triangle, I admit, I'm mean and did lay the groundwork for one. But it just didn't end up feeling right, so I dropped it. Sorry to disappoint, but the characters weren't cooperating, and you can't fight the characters.
Ale: Add it to the list of things the game totally glosses over. I'm definitely planning on coming back to them more than once.
emerald54: If you're late to reading, then I'm super late to writing. Still, your continued reading is very much appreciated.
Canderous was the only person still awake when Carth got back to the Hawk. Carth found him lying underneath the swoop bike that spent most of their journey gathering dust in a corner of the ship.
?Didn?t think you cared for swoops,? Carth said as he walked into the room.
?Didn?t think you cared to know what I care for,? Canderous replied gruffly, pulling himself out from under the swoop and sitting up. ?I got bored.?
Carth nodded. ?I can understand that.?
?So. What brings you back here??
?Supply run. Unsurprisingly, the Sith Academy doesn?t have a fully stocked first aid cabinet.?
Canderous chuckled. ?Getting into trouble??
?Trying our hardest not to. And I?ll be damned if I have any idea what Aiden?s up to.?
?He?s a man of strange plans.? Canderous shrugged. ?But he?s also a man of plans that work. He?s unorthodox, but it?s that kind of thinking that your Republic valued so much during the Mandalorian Wars.?
Carth frowned. ?The Jedi Council wiped Revan away.?
?Doesn?t make his thought patterns any different. At least, not from what I can tell, now that I know to look for it.?
?That?s what I don?t like,? Carth shook his head. ?Even if Aiden really is a new person, he might make the same choice again. And I don?t think I could stop him.?
?Here?s an idea,? Canderous replied, pointing a hydrospanner at him. ?Why don?t you trust him to make good choices, instead of annoying the hell out of him until he decides being a Sith would give him license to take his lightsaber to your gut??
?Bluntly put,? Carth sighed, ?but not wrong. I really need to stop taking responsibility for his fate, don?t I??
?Damn right,? Canderous agreed.
?In any case, I should get what I need and head back. If tomorrow is anything like today, we?re going to need as much rest as we can get.?
Wordlessly, Canderous nodded and returned his attention to the swoop bike. Carth made quick work of collecting the items he came for. The sooner he got back to the Academy, the sooner he could get some rest- something they could all use a lot more of.
* * *
Yuthura looked the blade over. ?Do you have any idea how many have died trying to get this??
Aiden shrugged. ?I?m guessing they were all either terrible swordsmen or bad at riddles.?
His teacher gave him a mildly reproving look. ?You are either too modest or too arrogant, and I?m having trouble deciding which.?
?I didn?t mean any disrespect,? Aiden folded his hands in front of him.
?No matter,? she shook her head. ?Yes, you must get this to Master Uthar right away. He?ll be most impressed.?
Aiden took the sword back from her. ?I have a question.?
Yuthura arched an eyebrow. ?I may have an answer.?
?I?m just curious, but... did you know Revan??
At this, she chuckled. ?No, not particularly, though I must say at least half the acolytes coming through here ask that same question. We all knew of him, of course, but he kept to himself for the most part. The only person I think he ever trusted was Malak, and we all know how that ended.?
?Yeah.? Aiden suppressed the urge to roll his eyes. ?So, you didn?t know what he looked like under that mask??
?Hardly anyone does.? Yuthura merely shrugged. ?He donned it
A plan, yes. Worrying about Bastila, there. Great writing as always. Joleee? There have been worse mentors out there. Can't wait for more.
And THAT folks is the qoute of the night...
?Hey look, I found you.? Carth held a small statuette of Revan up for Aiden to see. ?Looks like the Sith really did admire Revan.?
Aiden looked at the statuette. ?That?s just bizarre.?
For some reason, I can see Revan standing there, holding a small statue of himself, with a complete WTF face on. It makes me giggle insanely, which isn't good in the middle of class. Bastila's pulled a disappearing act? Poor Aiden, he's got it worse then anyone else. The line about pureed brains also made me look at my breakfast suspiciously. Oatmeal will never have the same luster again.
I do have a question though. Where, exactly, is Leiraya going to hide a lightsaber in a dancing girls outfit?
That Canderous and Carth moment was beautiful. You make me love Canderous more and more with every time he shows up in this story.
I'm starting to worry that Aiden is going to slip up without more rest.