Saga The Broken Boy (PT Challenge, One-Shot, Obi-Wan, TPM era)

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  1. Sara_Kenobi Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Sep 21, 2000
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    Title: The Broken Boy
    Summary: PT Challenge. Obi-Wan thinks of training Anakin and what exactly the loss of Qui-Gon Jinn means to them both.
    Notes: Written for the PT challenge.
    Author: Sara Kenobi




    It seemed like seconds passed before he was cut down. It was from a dream that you cannot wake up from no matter how much you try too.

    No matter how hard Obi-Wan Kenobi tried too he could not erase these scenes from his memory. Between his own guilt, and the undeniable anger which now weighted upon him heavily, Obi-Wan did not know what feeling he was more keenly aware of.

    A Jedi was not supposed to give into those negative feelings. It was said they were of the Dark side. If they were so wrong, he wondered to himself, inside the lonely Chamber hall that served as Queen Amidala's council room, then why did they bring such comfort to him? A sweet comfort that was a kind friend.

    The boy, Skywalker, entered Kenobi's thoughts again as well. He was a child widely out of his element, far away from anything familiar, and far away from his only family.

    It crossed the young Jedi's mind to simply forget Qui-Gon's last request and take the boy home. It was obvious the death of Qui-Gon devestated the child. Anakin would find love and comfort with his mother.

    He would be a slave again. The thought sliced Obi-Wan through his heart, bitterly. Damn these blasted feelings!

    The young Jedi fell to his knee's as a heartroken cry escaped him. The sound shocked him. It had been a very long time since he had wept for anything. The loss of control was frightening as the pain worked it's way past those iron barriers. With Qui-Gon he hadn't lost simply a teacher, he had truly lost everything with the Jedi master's unexpected and sudden death. He was a father, he was a dear friend, he was a protective older brother. He truly had been everything for Obi-Wan.

    Could he himself be all those things for Anakin?

    The child was only ten-years-old. He was much older than the other Jedi younglings when they first began learning, and Anakin had an obvious talent to get himself into trouble. It would be difficult to get Anakin to the point where he was ready to learn what he would offer him to know about the Force.

    It would not be impossible though. A voice argued back inside of his mind.

    Obi-Wan forced himself to finally relax and closed his eyes.

    The Force showed him that Anakin would grow up to be a fine Jedi Knight. He would be a military leader. He would lead great campains and bring great victories for the Republic.

    There would be also an unexplainable sadness, pain, suffering...

    The Force then stopped and showed the new Jedi Knight no more.

    Anakin would be a Jedi Knight like himself no matter who trained him. The Force had told Obi-Wan Kenobi that much, and it was much to consider.

    As much as there would be darkness in Anakin's future there would also be light. That meant it was worth the risk in training him.

    "Master, I will train the boy. I promise." Obi-Wan spoke aloud to know one. This was the first time though the young Jedi meant to keep that promise.

    "Master Kenobi?"

    Obi-Wan Kenobi forced himself to his feet from the chamber floor and turned in surprise to see the Queen of Naboo herself standing in the door frame. She was a small girl with dark brown hair and eyes to match which stood out from the white makeup that painted her face. She was dressed a deep purple and black colored gown. The colors reminded Obi-Wan of his earlier mood.

    "Your Majesty!" He bowed slightly. Obi-Wan couldn't manage anything else. Not today.

    Queen Amidala walked into the room with a regal grace worthy of her position and it made Obi-Wan remember how his master could also command a room with such little effort. The rememberance made him give a small, sad smile for the young Queen.

    "I wished to inform you personally that the Jedi council members will arrive soon. Also to ask if I may invite Anakin for a late afternoon meal to my Suite."

    "I believe h
  2. Valairy Scot Chosen One

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    Sep 16, 2005
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    The young Jedi fell to his knee's as a heartroken cry escaped him. The sound shocked him. It had been a very long time since he had wept for anything. The loss of control was frightening as the pain worked it's way past those iron barriers. With Qui-Gon he hadn't lost simply a teacher, he had truly lost everything with the Jedi master's unexpected and sudden death. He was a father, he was a dear friend, he was a protective older brother. He truly had been everything for Obi-Wan.

    Could he himself be all those things for Anakin?


    That was a wonderful passage, very poignant and touching. With the loss of Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan lost - for a moment - control of his ability to contain his emotions.

    Well done!
  3. KELIA Manager Emeritus

    Member Since:
    Jul 26, 2005
    star 6
    Oh, Obi!

    :_| :_| :_|

    You did an amazing job capturing his devastation following Qui-Gon's death.

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  4. Gkilkenny Force Ghost

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    Mar 27, 2004
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    Such pain and sorry in those early days after Qui-Gon's death, but Obi-Wan still has faith in the Force and he will do his best with Anakin.

    Lovely insight to Obi-Wan's thoughts.=D=
  5. GeneralKenobi7 Jedi Grand Master

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    Jan 18, 2009
    star 4
    :_| :_| That was so sad and touching.
    Great job!=D=
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