The Cave (preTPM, young Obi-Wan)

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  1. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Okay, so I'm posting a new fic without finishing the old one. *Ducks flying objects*

    Title: The Cave
    Author: Imzadi

    Summary: Six year old Obi-Wan Kenobi and his Master, Qui-Gon Jinn visit Yoda on Dagobah. While exploring, young Obi-Wan winds up in the cave (from ESB).

    Rating: G, minor violence but nothing worse than in TPM.
    Disclaimer: Mr George Lucas owns all Star Wars characters and information. No copyright infringement is intented, this is for fun and I make no money from it. (I wish).
    Feedback: You know you want to.
    Author's notes: I'd like to say a special thank you to Jane Jinn for her help. As well as Chesire Cat, and all the wonderful poeople on the beta's anonymous list.

    Now that that's out of the way.

    * * *

    Glancing over the controls of the transport, Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn allowed his mind to wander over the events of that day. It had started out ordinarily enough, prying his young apprentice out of bed for breakfast. At the time he hadn?t expected anything like this to happen. Their very first mission together. And Obi-Wan?s first visit to another planet. Of course it was a simple mission, considering that his apprentice was only six years old. The excitement of the day had sent his Padawan to bed hours earlier. Checking the controls one last time, Qui-Gon prepared for bed himself. He couldn?t help smiling at the memory of when he told Obi-Wan that they had a mission. Of course the young boy didn?t know that Dagobah wasn?t exactly the highlight of the galaxy.

    Entering their sleep quarters, Qui-Gon checked on his apprentice. He looked so young and innocent in his sleep. Qui-Gon hoped he would remain that way. Such a sweet boy need not learn the harsh realities of life. Again, Qui-Gon couldn?t help but smile at the memory of their first meeting. Obi-Wan had only been about four years old at the time. They had both learned so much since then. Qui-Gon couldn?t imagine his life without the small boy. He went to sleep, thinking about their first mission. Escort Master Yoda from his annual retreat on Dagobah. It was an appropriate first mission.


    If you want more, post feedback! LOL




  2. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Sorry that was a bit shorter than I thought. Where's my sig?
  3. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Oh, it's there now. Ohkaaayyy. This new system is freaking me out. I'll go now.
  4. Alli-Wan Jedi Knight

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    An interesting AU. What strange things might be in the cave, when anything inside is what you bring with you, . . . and you're only six.

    Intriguing.

    Awaiting more. --AWK
  5. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Thanks! Here's more:

    In the early hours of the morning, a small noise brought Qui-Gon out his light slumber. Reaching out with the force, he checked the monitors of the transport. Seeing that everything was in order, Jinn settled back in bed. Jinn shot up when he heard the noise again. His apprentice let out a small whimper in his sleep. Using the force to turn the light on, Qui-Gon approached the sleeping form of Obi-Wan. Seeing the boy twisted in his sheets, gripping tightly to his stuffed wookie, Ferkel, Qui-Gon reached out through their bond. The boy was indeed having a nightmare, but he couldn?t quite see it.
    //Padawan, wake up,// Jinn sent gently, settling himself on the side of his apprentice?s bed.
    ?Master!? Obi-Wan shouted as he awoke breathing and sweating heavily.
    ?Padawan, it?s alright. You?ve had a bad dream,? Qui-Gon soothed. His apprentice made no response, he layed in bed frozen, his eyes filled with terror. Allowing the boy time to calm, Jinn sat beside Obi-Wan, letting him feel his presence as he smoothed the boy?s hair.

    After a few minutes, Obi-Wan had relaxed significantly, and was now looking up at his Master.
    ?It?s alright Padawan. Do you want to tell me about your dream?? Qui-Gon asked gently.
    ?I don?t remember it all now,? Obi-Wan said truthfully.
    ?But it was scary?? Qui-Gon asked. Obi-Wan nodded and continued to cling to his stuffed wookie.
    ?Alright. We can meditate on it tomorrow if you like. Do you think you can go back to sleep?? Jinn asked.
    ?Yes Master,? Obi-Wan answered. Although Qui-Gon sat with Obi-Wan, continuing his efforts to calm the boy, he still did not fall asleep. Jinn decided to use a slight force suggestion to let the boy rest and placed his large hand on Obi-Wan?s forehead. But, after a few minutes, despite his best efforts, Obi-Wan was still awake.

    ?Obi-Wan, you need to rest. I?ll be right over there,? Qui-Gon assured him, referring to his own bed along the opposite wall.
    ?Okay,? Obi-Wan reluctantly agreed, his Master once again sending him the suggestion to sleep. Eventually, Obi-Wan?s eyes closed.

    Returning to his bed, Master Qui-Gon worried about what would frighten his apprentice to that degree. He slid into a restless slumber.
  6. Kaylla Norn Jedi Knight

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    If I post many times with usless and wacky posts, will that count as lots of feedback? <sigh> probably not.... Oh, but how will I convince you to post again ...soon! But not a george lucus movie release date soon but a six year olds soon! And Ali-wan is right... what on earth can a 6 year old have to bring into that dark cave... this sounds <shiver> ... sounds like I must hear more!

    Pleeeeeeeaaaaaasssse!

    ;~o
  7. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Okay, since you asked so nicely. LOL, hers's a little bit. Just so you know this story is not very long. But I could be persuaded into making it a series. *wink*

    * * *

    The next morning, Qui-Gon woke to see his Padawan leaning over him, with two bright green eyes peering at him intently.
    ?Obi-Wan?? He asked his Padawan.
    ?Yes Master?? Obi-Wan responded seriously, straightening up.
    ?What are you doing??
    ?Nothing,? Obi-Wan replied honestly confused.
    ?I see,? Qui-Gon replied perplexed by Obi-Wan?s behaviour.
    ?I was waiting for you to wake up,? he stated, innocently.
    ?I see,? Qui-Gon repeated, sitting up on his bed. To his surprise, Obi-Wan climbed up to sit with him.
    ?Master?? Obi-Wan asked.
    ?Hmm,? Jinn responded, indicated the boy should continue.
    ?What?s Dagobah like?? he inquired, curiously.
    ?We should be there any minute now, you?ll be able to see for yourself,? Qui-Gon said with a smile.
  8. Kaylla Norn Jedi Knight

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    aww sweet.

    now about that series... how nicely do we have to ask... is pleeease with a jedi knight carring a bunch of chocolate, all wraped up in a bow... good enough....

    ;~)
  9. jodiwent Force Ghost

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    I know if I tell you to write more, I'm going to hear the same but I'' chance it. MORE!

  10. imzadi Jedi Master

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    I'm probably going to regret this, but it's already about two thirds written. So um, I don't... actually... need... to write... the next post. Here have some more. *Runs away* I'm in a strange mood, I have an exam tomorrow for which I have not studied at all. Nothing like exams to get me writing. Enough blabbering, more:

    As Qui-Gon began the landing sequence, he once again found himself smiling. He did that a lot when around Obi-Wan. The boy was sitting, or more accurately crouching in the copilot?s chair next to him. The look of sheer wonder on the boy?s face, was more than enough to melt the heart of the elder Jedi. As they slowly descended into the planet?s atmosphere, Obi-Wan could barely contain his excitement.

    Following a smooth landing, the two Jedi collected the supplies they had packed the previous evening. After securing the ship, Qui-Gon lowered the exit ramp. Obi-Wan was amazed at the sights, sounds and smells that greeted them. It was truly another planet. In fact it seemed to be the exact opposite of Coruscant. The planet was covered with flora and fauna. Although Obi-Wan was less connected to the living force than his Master, he could feel it emanating all around them. Stepping off the ramp onto surface, Obi-Wan was surprised by the squishing noise the mud made beneath his boots. The air was hot and humid, and already the Jedi could feel their tunics clinging to them as they perspired. {At least it?s not raining,} Jinn thought.

    Qui-Gon was surprised by Obi-Wan?s reaction to the planet. In his experience, not many people enjoyed visiting Yoda on Dagobah. Truth be known, few were ever invited. However during his training, Qui-Gon had accompanied his former Master on his retreats. He was struck by an odd feeling of nostalgia. The last time he had been here, he was a Padawan himself, and although he had had apprentices before Obi-Wan, they had never come here. He knew that his former Master had a particular fondness for Obi-Wan, still he was intrigued by their invitation. As they walked to the diminutive Master?s home, Obi-Wan took in all that he could. Despite the weather and the smell, he found Dagobah interesting. Every few metres he would discover something new and fascinating. He would have to remember to ask his Master about what he saw.
  11. imzadi Jedi Master

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    So um, I love feed back. And if you feel the need to up the thread I won't mind ; ) So post away. *Comes back the next morning* where are all the posts?

    Oookayy, I should go to bed now. Or maybe I could study. Hmm. Oh BTW if anyone would be willing to beta another fic I've started could you PM me. I am part of a beta list, but I've already got two fics going there. So um, volunteers? No?

    Seriously going now!!!
  12. Calayka_Bele Jedi Knight

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    This is really cool!
    UP!:)
    Are you going to post more soon?
    Huh?
    Are ya?
    I'll be waiting!
  13. Kaylla Norn Jedi Knight

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    Up up so everyone can find and read such a lovely post!

    ;~)
  14. Kaylla Norn Jedi Knight

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    up so imzadi can find it to update tonight... errr... this morning.... or .... uh, just upping so imazadi can find it.

    ;~)
  15. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Thanks everyone!!! Now Kaylla Norn, would this Jedi with roses be a Jedi of my choice? : ) More:

    Their journey soon came to an end. As they approached Yoda?s home, they both spotted the ancient master waiting outside for them. Losing his Jedi composure, waving, Obi-Wan called out to the master, ?Master Yoda!? Qui-Gon nearly laughed when Obi-Wan gave the Master a hug. He found it amusing that the revered Jedi Master Yoda, now smaller than Obi-Wan, returned the hug gratefully.
    ?Good to see you it is, Padawan Kenobi, Master Qui-Gon,? he said.
    ?Master,? Qui-Gon said, as he bowed respectfully.
    ?Come, time to eat, it is,? Yoda invited. Glancing at Jinn?s Padawan, he continued, ?Hungry you must be, hmm?? At the comment, Qui-Gon almost groaned. Indeed his apprentice always seemed to have an appetite. However Jinn was unsure how long it would last in the face of Master Yoda?s cooking.

    Entering the small Master?s home, Obi-Wan was grateful that he was not yet as tall as his Master. Seeing the unusually tall man stooping to avoid hitting his head was more than the boy could handle, and he began to giggle. After receiving a stern look from his Master, Obi-Wan coughed to quash his amusement. They both sat down as Master Yoda began serving the already prepared meal. Obi-Wan wrinkled his nose as he was handed his bowl, but started eating without complaint. He had shared meals with Master Yoda before he became Qui-Gon?s padawan, and so he knew what to expect.

    When they completed their meal, Qui-Gon and Yoda became engaged in a conversation about Obi-Wan?s training. Tuning out, Obi-Wan wandered over to one of the small windows. Staring out at the swamp like scenery, he was startled when a tiny frog jumped onto the windowsill. Obi-Wan studied it intently, intrigued by the odd looking creature. He had seen frogs before, in books, and in the animal gardens, but he had never been this close to one. Not realising how much time had passed, Obi-Wan was startled when his Master addressed him.
    ?Padawan, what are you looking at?? He asked.
    ?A frog Master,? Obi-Wan answered, with his eyes still locked on the creature. Across the room, Yoda and Qui-Gon shared a knowing glance.
    ?Would you like to go exploring for a few minutes before we meditate?? Qui-Gon asked, already knowing his answer.
    ?Can I Master?? He asked, already getting excited by the prospect.
    ?Just don?t wander too far,? Jinn said in his best masterly tone.
    ?Yes Master,? Obi-Wan said, already on his way out the entrance.
  16. Kaylla Norn Jedi Knight

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    uh oh, is this where one little boy becomes lost and ends up wandering into a particularly dark place... oh, dear....


    (and yes, it's any jedi you want as long as you keep posting! <vbg>)

    ;~)
  17. JEDIMASTERYU Jedi Master

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    I'm all caught up and eagerly waiting for more!!! Great story, post soon.
  18. Abbi_Cee Jedi Master

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    Aawww... so far this whole story is too cute. I love young Obi stories, I think it's the mother in me. Now what mischief can one young padawan get into in a swamp with a mysterious cave? Can't wait to find out.
  19. imzadi Jedi Master

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    *ominous music* Doesn't Qui read fanfics, he should know what's gonna happen, anyway, more:

    Beginning his exploration, Obi-Wan came across a trail by a swampy waterbed. Careful not to fall in, he followed the edge, deciding it would make an interesting path. Also, he thought it would make it easier to find his way back to Master Yoda?s home. After following it for some time, Obi-Wan spotted an unusual looking bird like creature in the foliage. Diverging from the trail to investigate, Obi-Wan encountered various varieties of vines as well as the occasional snake. Approaching the area where he had first seen the animal, Obi-Wan could no longer see it. Turning around intending to retract his steps back to the path, he felt a sudden chill around his body. Wrapping his arms around himself, Obi-Wan continued. Off to the side, he saw the same creature as before, but it was much closer. Momentarily distracted by the creature, Obi-Wan did not notice the hole in the ground a few steps ahead of him until it was too late.
    ?Ahh!? He cried out in surprise as he fell. When he landed heavily in a patch of mud, his surprise was replaced by pain.
    ?Ow!? he muttered, rubbing his head where it had impacted as he fell. Taking in his surroundings, Obi-Wan concluded that he was in fact in a cave. Standing, and looking up, Obi-Wan tried to reach the surface to pull himself out. After a few attempts, he realised that he was far too small. Just moments earlier he was grateful for his size, now he found himself wishing he were as tall as his Master. Abruptly he sensed a presence behind him.
    ?Obi-Wan.?

    TBC

    Cliff hanger! MWU HA HA HA HA!!!!!!!
  20. imzadi Jedi Master

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    MWU HA HA HA! MWU... *cough* *choke*
  21. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Okay, I've decided to make it a series. (Where's my Jedi Kaylla Norn?:) It's going to be called "Shining Star Series." Well that's my idea at the moment it could change any time, so be warned :) So far the story ideas I have are, do you want to know? If not do not read any further, 'kay?

    1. Qui and Obi's first meeting
    2. Obi's first day of school/as Jinn's padawan
    3. A "Qui, where do babies come from?" one
    4. And a few angsty ones for good measure.

    I still need some encouragement however, so post! : ) *giggle*

    Imzadi

  22. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Aw, come on people. Someone please post! Okay now I'm getting insecure. I need reassurnce. *giggle* "I will post more, when I get some responses" Imzadi said in a mock authoritative voice. Going now! *giggle*
  23. Eryce Jedi Knight

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    Ahem.. I came out of my self-imposed exile to say I'm enjoying this thread ...*grin* POst a lil more often, will ya? I KNOW you have more of the story hidden somewhere.....
  24. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Since you posted! *giggle* I think I had too many lollies today. Hmm. Anyway, this is a bit short, cause there is only a little bit left and I have to start writing, so here it is:

    * * *

    Obi-Wan whirled around in response to his name. Seeing his Master, relief washed over him.
    ?Master! I?m so glad you?re here. I fell down, and can?t reach the top,? he said as he approached the form of his Master, looking at his Master?s smiling face. Qui-Gon?s facial expression suddenly changed into a visage of pain and shock.
    ?Master?? Obi-Wan asked, concern etching into his voice. His Master looked down at his chest. Obi-Wan followed his gaze.
    ?MASTER!? Obi-Wan cried, when he saw the edge of a lightsaber, wielded by an unseen attacker, protruding through his Master?s tunic. Raising his gaze to meet his apprentice?s eyes, Qui-Gon fell to the ground.
    ?NO!? Obi-Wan screamed, as he raced to his Master?s side, cradling his head in his lap.
    ?Master,? he whispered, tears flowing down his face. And then just as quickly as he appeared, Qui-Gon was gone. Obi-Wan had heard the stories. His Master was now one with the force. There on the ground in the cave, Obi-Wan began to cry uncontrollably.

  25. imzadi Jedi Master

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    Do you think "Shining Light," is a better name? Any suggestions? Do you think I should continue it on this thread when I finish this story, or start a new one? Hmm.
    More tomorrow, my tomorrow that is. Or maybe earlier if I write more.

    Imzadi
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