The Champions of the Force Fan Scipt

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by Jedi Knight Anakin, Apr 25, 2000.

Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.
  1. Jedi Knight Anakin Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 8, 2000
    star 1
    This is the script for my new fan movie coming out God knows when. This is the first page. I will post more pages if I get positive feedback. Tell me what you think!
    Star Wars
    Champions of the Force
    Episode IV
    The New Jedi

    First Draft

    A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away?

    Text appears on the screen and rolls back into infinity.


    Champions of the Force
    Episode IV
    The New Jedi

    It is a time of war in the
    galaxy, the weak government
    cannot stop the many interplanetary

    On the small water planet of KLOA,
    the armies of IEGO have attacked
    the peaceful planet unexpectedly.

    Determined to solve the conflict, the
    JEDI COUNCIL has sent two Jedi,
    Anakin Southring and Rohan Ambrai,
    To negotiate with both leaders and
    Restore peace once again?.

    Zoom down to Kloa, the planet that is mostly blue, save a few specks of cities.

    The JEDI CRUISER flies past the camera.

    Int. Jedi Cruiser

    Two cloaked figures reside in the cockpit. One of them watches the planet while the other pilots the ship.

    There, land outside the city limits. We don't want to get Iego's troops on our heels.

    Yes Master? You know, I never did like swimming.

    Rohan gives him a look, then stares back out the window.

    Kloa Surface- Day

    The ship lands on the water using hover jets. From under the ship, a small watercraft is deployed. The Jedi exit the ship and step into the craft. Anakin pilots again, and heads towards the horizon.


    Ok so it's a rather pathetic first page. If you want me to post more I will, I just need your opinions!
  2. Return of the Wattowatta Jedi Youngling

    Member Since:
    Mar 11, 2000
    star 4
    Um it's pretty good. Pretty damn good. You've got a good career coming.
  3. Jedi Knight Anakin Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 8, 2000
    star 1
    Here's the next page, hope you like it so far. If there is anything here you feel needs changing, tell me!

    Jedi Sea Runner (Tulaan Sea- Day)

    Anakin is becoming impatient.

    Anakin: Well? Where is it?

    Rohan: Patience, young one.

    On the horizon, a city appears. It is made entirely out of beautiful stone and glass.

    Anakin docks the ship at the port, and they exit the ship and walk to where two people are waiting for them, an older man and a young woman, about Anakin's age, possibly older. When they reach them, the man steps forward.

    K'eyl: I am K'eyl, head of security. This is my assistant, Daanya. She's the best soldier in the force.

    Daanya: How do you do.

    Anakin smiles at her.

    Rohan: We are Jedi Knights, sent to negotiate the conflict.

    K'eyl: Ah yes, follow me.

    He leads them down the main road.

    Anakin: What is the current situation?

    Daanya: Currently most of our cities are occupied by their troops.

    K'eyl: Except the capitol, of course. But they are advancing; they may capture us soon if we do not call them off.

    Rohan looks at Anakin.

    Rohan: Be mindful. I sense something. There is no reason for them to invade. Something else is behind this.

    Anakin: I agree. It's not a natural occurence. There is no hostility between the planets.

    Rohan: Then we must be mindful. Keep your eyes open for anything out of the ordinary.

    Anakin: Yes Master.
  4. master obi-wan skywalker Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    Apr 26, 2000
    star 1
  5. Whiskey in the Jar-Jar Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Apr 17, 2000
    star 4
    I like where this is going. I'm anxious to see how the plot develops.

    I can't wait to see the trailer for this when it comes out. You would grace us with that much, woudn't you?

  6. Jedi Knight Anakin Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 8, 2000
    star 1
    Woohoo! Thanks! Here's page three....

    K?eyl leads them to a large door to the palace. He presses a button on his wrist-comm and speaks into it.

    K'eyl: The Jedi are here for negotiations.

    The large doors open, revealing a magnificent hall. Anakin and Rohan look on in awe.

    Daanya: We are renowned for our architecture.

    K?eyl: Some of the most beautiful buildings you will ever see.

    Anakin: I agree. It is beautiful here.

    Int. Iego: Government Palace

    A terrified government aide stands before a hologram of a figure, clad in all black. Its voice is hidden behind a voice changer, and it?s face it completely shrouded.

    Figure: The General was not supposed to attend the negotiation session. The attack was supposed to continue on schedule. Without any interruptions.

    Aide: He was defiant my lord, and persistent? He did not want to be?

    Figure: Enough. That weak-minded coward shall pay for his actions.

    Aide: My lord, he is already there? We cannot cross the interplanetary border or send a missile, it would only make the Senate intervene and have the Jedi after us...

    Figure: I will make sure the Jedi do not interfere.

    Aide: Yes, my lord?

    Figure: After he is destroyed, annihilate the Jedi and the guards. Kill the governor also. Then the capitol will be ours for the taking.

    Aide: I will do my best...

    You will. Do not fail me.

    [This message has been edited by Jedi Knight Anakin (edited 04-26-2000).]

    [This message has been edited by Jedi Knight Anakin (edited 04-26-2000).]
  7. Jedi Knight Anakin Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 8, 2000
    star 1
  8. cheerful Jedi Padawan

    Member Since:
    Jan 3, 2000
  9. Jedi Knight Anakin Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 8, 2000
    star 1
    Thanks again! Everyone says I am a good writer but I am very apprehensive of my abilities due to my... simple writing style. Oh well that's just me.

    Int- Conference Room

    The two Jedi are lead into a small room. The leaders are seated at the head and foot of a long table. The Jedi seat themselves at the mid-section, facing each other. Daanya and K?eyl position themselves at opposite corners of the room. Daanya busies herself with cleaning her gun.

    Anakin: Now let?s get started. General of the Military of Iego, why have you invaded Kloa?

    The general is silent.

    Anakin: General, please answer.

    The general is still silent. Rohan looks worried.

    Rohan: General?

    Rohan gets up and puts two fingers to the general?s neck.

    Rohan: Dead?

    Everyone in the room lifts their heads to the sound of the word.

    Daanya cocks an eyebrow.

    Daanya: Do you hear something?

    Anakin listens, and then backs away from the door. The Governor of Kloa is hysterical with fear.

    Anakin: Footsteps, metal ones, and a whole lot of them.

    Rohan: They?ve set us up.

    Rohan pushes the body from the chair. He finds something on the back of his neck.

    Rohan: An automated electro pulse. Usually used for slaves. One wrong move and it fries your brain.

    Daanya: Yuck.

    Anakin: Who would do that? He?s a high-ranking officer. One of the highest, next to the Governor. Unless there is someone above him and the Governor...

    Everyone is silent.

    K?eyl: Uh oh.

    Ext- Conference Room

    Troopers file up to the door, blasters armed and ready. After a few seconds, another officer runs up behind them. They turn to look at him.

    Officer: New orders from command. Kill them all.
  10. Flame151 Jedi Padawan

    Member Since:
    Sep 26, 1999
    Very good.. although a little too like TPM...

    What fan movie is it?
  11. Jedi Knight Anakin Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Mar 8, 2000
    star 1
    To da top!

    And for Flame151:

  12. QBJ Jedi Padawan

    Member Since:
    May 22, 2000
    I can not watch movies (avis) that have been encoded with Cinepak and I don't know why. I am running Win98 on an AMD K6 266. Any ideas?
  13. Jean Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    Oct 7, 2003
    star 1
    Upping for the move
Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.