Saga The Color of the Night (Repost, 2 Poems - it's a packaged deal!)

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  1. ThatJediGirl Jedi Master

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    Mar 11, 2001
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    Well, since the board change, I thought I might bring my two poems over to the correct boards. Enjoy them again! And feedback is always welcome. And much thanks to my good friend, JadeSaber, today's chat has surely been enjoyable - and if it wasn't for you, I would be without a title. I love ya, girl [face_love]


    ***

    Written in the Stars

    ***

    Walking at the waters edge on the beach of raven
    A figure stands, reminiscing in her once haven
    Her emotions are sad, running torrent like the wild
    While a tear slips down her cheek in remembrance of a child
    The child that was taken from her safe, comforting arms
    He is now in a place far from this world of harms

    She screams, hollers, and pleas to the heavens to just let her die
    But she cannot and descends to the sand to cry
    This is not how she wanted her life to be
    Stuck in one place, not able to live free
    Wondering if she will escape this deserted place
    Nothing is here, not a creature or a face

    Emptiness plagues the streets and alleys
    And she wishes to be rid of these valleys
    That are deep within her distressed heart
    From a love that is no more, no part
    Although this man still lives today
    He is not the one she loved from far and away

    The water rises, softly touching her bare feet
    She is reminded of the numerous days incomplete
    Of the missing times spent here on this beach
    No longer a memory, no longer in reach
    She doesn?t know how much longer she can last
    Haunted from the memories, of life, and the past

    Her child is gone, her husband now corrupt
    Things will never be the same, not even with luck
    Nothing can bring her back to pleasure of bliss
    For she is one whom no one dares to miss
    A mere reminder of what had been
    Something that will not ever be again

    The man she had called husband for many years
    Now taunts her dreams and darkest fears
    He is not liked or loved, but praised for his works
    The work that kills, tortures, and hurts
    Faced with his pain and anger
    How long will she be in danger?


    She has but only one single desire
    And it lasts within like a raging fire
    A smaller hand takes hers, it is the last hope
    And she waits with her, able to cope
    Another child, saved from the darkness that lingers near
    Love will give them the chance to live, not sear

    The mother and daughter wait in silence
    For their hero, their savior in tamed reliance
    It is on this night that freedom will reign
    At least for mother and daughter, it will be regained
    For living this life is becoming troubled quickly
    They need to escape from this planet of sickly

    No longer will they worry about dark lord
    Or the perilous enemies from which they ward
    To take on new identity they make a vow
    Anything distant from this land of now
    This is the life they choose, away from this place
    Nothing is here, not a creature or a face

    Looking out far beyond the timid water
    The older woman reaches for her daughter
    For in the speckled sky above
    Lies the reminder of her once love
    It is written in the stars living so high
    That the once love, will forever walk on by

    So many crystal tears have been shed
    So many nights have there been dread
    How can you miss those who don't give love?
    For they are cold and push to shove
    Love, as they know it, will cease to exist
    However, there is but one slight twist

    Although love may threaten to consume
    the hearts of the many weak and immune
    it's simple meaning is for love succeed
    when those troubled minds are in need
    The great love will find a way to prevail
    It's power and mercy cannot not fail

    So this mother and daughter wait in pride
    With nothing else to lose or hide
    For if they are to be concealed
    The broken hearts will not be healed
    They have a sole chance for it to take place
    For nothing is here, not a creature, not a face

    ***







    TJG [face_love]

  2. ThatJediGirl Jedi Master

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    Mar 11, 2001
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    Here's my other poem. Enjoy!



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    The Color of The Night

    ***


    She sometimes wonders why life has to be this way
    Sitting in her room, she cries from day to day
    Her family is distant, her friends don't know
    What it is that bothers her so
    So she puts on a mask and carries on
    This is all just a game, and she is it's pawn

    She wishes for nothing more than happy existence
    But sadness ensues with persistence
    It takes over her life and consumes
    This sadness is alive and assumes
    That she is weak and willing to die
    And it is right; her spirit torn - her will dry

    What is she supposed to do?
    Her situation isn't new
    It has been with her for many years
    Feeding off her doubts and fears
    This growing sadness will be her death
    And take from this girl, her one last breath

    The great sadness is being driven
    By a subtle force, unforgiven
    It works so fast, without a sound
    Turning it's victims completely around
    Drowned in darkness and sweet sorrow
    This lonely soul won't last to tomorrow

    The sadness is strong and encasing
    It weaves through happiness, interlacing
    No longer in life is there delight
    For it was obscured, put out of sight
    Into a far place, cold and dim
    With colors of despair and grim

    This game it plays with conceit
    Knowing that it will defeat
    the tired girl sitting alone
    she is losing to side unknown
    But she knows this force from long ago
    That bitter sadness that taunts her so

    For so long has that presence teased
    Making her soul spoiled and diseased
    But this pleasure comes with a price
    that fatal collision of fire and ice
    Beat to the end, tired and bare
    She will die from a lack of love and care

    That force from long ago is but a simple metal
    It tore open her skin, like a blade through a petal
    She cut herself and bled a river
    A horrible pain, a small shiver
    It pooled on the floor, a puddle of her life
    Drained from her own silver, little knife

    So on this wooden floor she lay
    Bleeding slowly, life slipping away
    This is her wish, to die and be free
    Nothing else more, just that plea
    The evening continues on, no moon in sight
    Red, from her wrist, is the color of the night

    Sadness will no longer be of her concern
    For she is leaving to a place of no return
    Where she will go is not of this world's design
    But, to place of beauty for her dark eyes can shine
    And as she slips slowly away, her eyes begin to close
    This is her end, the end to all her pain, the end to all she knows


    ***


  3. Hananiah Jedi Master

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    Jan 15, 2003
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    Thease are really beautiful and sooo sad, I really get the isolation and despair Padme feels well done!!!!
  4. AERYN_SUN Jedi Grand Master

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    Apr 1, 2001
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    :eek: Wow, those were unbelievably beautiful, JediGirl. The rhyme was so perfect. I can't just pick one stanza I love so much, but they were :eek: Wow again :eek:

    ~aeryn
  5. ThatJediGirl Jedi Master

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    Mar 11, 2001
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    Hananiah: Isolation and despair - very good job in describing Padme's emotions. Thank you!

    AERYN_SUN: Thank you so much! In my own opinion, my favorite stanza's are the ones that begin with:

    Looking out far beyond the timid water...

    and

    That force from long ago is but a simple metal..


    And of course - I chose one from each poem. That has got to be the most :eek: faces I've ever recieved in a review!


    TJG [face_love]
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