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Saga The Flames Within... (sort of a poem)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by 92SE-R, Aug 4, 2006.

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  1. 92SE-R

    92SE-R Jedi Master star 3

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    Apr 15, 2005
    My first shot at a poem, of sorts. Probably done wrong, but I figured, what the heck...

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    Fire and rage,
    that is who I am.

    To the untold trillions,
    an object of fear and loathing.

    I fight for myself,
    despite what others may think.

    I fight for my freedom,
    something I have not tasted since childhood.

    Fatherless from the start,
    and motherless in the end.

    The stars are my home,
    and the galaxy is my backyard.

    To the unending stars I fly,
    and in their beauty I embrace myself.

    Only one had beauty such as these,
    and like a supernova, I made that beauty dissappear.

    I am hollow and alone,
    yet my thoughts of her haunt me daily.

    I had no siblings,
    yet I gained so many.

    I gained siblings,
    yet I killed them all to bring peace.

    My own brother has turned against me,
    into the bowels of hell we fought.

    In the heat we battled,
    and only one of us emerged victorious.

    Now I sit in this suit,
    a prisoner in my own body.

    Life has no meaning anymore,
    I pray for death to come.

    I have lost everything,
    yet I gained more than I thought was possible.

    Love bit me like a viper,
    filling me with it's poison.

    The poison ran though my veins,
    and in the end killed the man that I was.

    It was love that made me do those things,
    things that other beings would consider attrocious.

    I did all things for love,
    and in the end it was love that repaid me with a slap in the face.

    Now I will search for them,
    those that called themselves friend and brother.

    They will all pay,
    and it will be in the crimson light that they will fall.

    I am Vader,
    and nothing will stop me.
     
  2. jackyyy17

    jackyyy17 Jedi Master star 4

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    Jan 12, 2006
    Good poem.

    I think you captured Vader's emotions good.


    jacky
     
  3. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Whoa! :eek: Incredible! =D=

    My own brother has turned against me,
    into the bowels of hell we fought.

    In the heat we battled,
    and only one of us emerged victorious.

    Now I sit in this suit,
    a prisoner in my own body.

    Life has no meaning anymore,
    I pray for death to come.


    A superb piece of work!
     
  4. 92SE-R

    92SE-R Jedi Master star 3

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    Thanks, I tried to think about how he might have felt, possibly on a mission to find a Jedi.



    thanks, for the kind words. I figured that he would still have been obsessing about Obi-Wan, and the battle on Mustafar.
     
  5. anakin_luver

    anakin_luver Jedi Knight star 5

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    Jul 26, 2005
    Fatherless from the start,
    and motherless in the end.


    oh i really liked that, it was worded in such a wonderful way.

    amazing job!
     
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