The Foolish and the Weak: A Corran Horn Story

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  1. Corell Jedi Master

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    I can't read the 73 page either. Hmmmm.
  2. Stranded in space Jedi Master

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    Uhhh, i don't know what your mean by the 73 page.

    probably has to do with going on to many roller-coasters and having my brain turn to mush.

    yeah, that's it.

    UP!!!!!
  3. RogueJai Jedi Master

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    We got to nearly the last scene at our sleepover . . . I don't know *where* 'jedir is, and since she has the story . . . :) She'll get it up ASAP, I'm sure.
  4. Jedi Master Nejaa Halcyon Jedi Master

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  5. Corell Jedi Master

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    The sooner, the better! :D
  6. padawan lunetta Force Ghost

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    Great posts Jedir! I caught up, wahoo!
  7. JediTrilobite Force Ghost

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  8. Stranded in space Jedi Master

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  9. Stranded in space Jedi Master

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    is MORE!!!!!! to subtle of a hint!?!?!?!
  10. Stranded in space Jedi Master

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    Hello?!?!??!?

    well Happy Mother's Day.
  11. maramijade Jedi Master

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    well unfortunately for Corran, his mother isn't there for him this mothers day. .. at least in the story. . . ;)
  12. Perator Jedi Knight

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    UP! Can't wait for the next post.

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  13. Aralna Force Ghost

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  14. Ejedir2 Jedi Master

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    OKAY! HA! I HAVE RETURNED! *grin* After a long troubling last quarter of school, I have only a week left, and I am quite glad, because the only thing I have left to do is a report on Christopher Columbus. . .go me. ANYWAY. . .Here's the scoop. We have FINISHED writing the story, and we're going to give you all of it . . .EXCEPT the last scene . .hehe SO, I want LONG, EXPLICIT, replies. . you should have PLENTY to comment on. . hehe. Here ya go. . this may take a couple posts. . .
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    Corran strutted around like he was King of the Academy. . .which he was. Being eighteen now, he at least had somewhat reached the usual age of student entry. Somewhat. He had earned the respect of every other student and teacher at the school. . .most of them anyway. He was still having problems with Inspector Grabbek, and he was the most important to get along with, seeing as he gave out final grades and determined who was scrubbed and who was able to go on.

    Life was looking up after six months at the school. The administration was planning a ?field study?. In other words, a big trip, meaning lots of things to do. He laughed evily to himself. Not that he was going to do anything. But if an opportunity presented itself. . .who was he to turn it down?
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    ?Blue team, red shuttle. Green team, yellow shuttle. Red team, orange shuttle. . .? And the officer droned on while the trainees stared at him stupidly. What were they trying to do? Confuse them all so they didn?t have to take all the students on this ridiculous field trip?

    ?Why don?t they use the same colors?? Corran whispered to his roommate.

    ?Because, they?re not that smart.?

    ?Right. So we?re team purple on the chartreuse colored shuttle??

    Chance grinned. ?Shaddup. Red shuttle. Hurry up.?

    They trotted to their assigned shuttle and produced their identity/clearance cards. The guard waved them through, ?Seats eleven and twelve,? he mumbled.

    ?Coronet here we come.? Chance said as they plopped in their seats.

    Corran sighed and shook his head. ?How is Coronet ever going to cope with two incredibly hot guys like us??

    Rolling his eyes, Chance replied, ?You wish.? Then, he glanced around, as if to check for spies. Corran looked at him curiously. Once Chance was satisfied that whatever he was looking for wasn?t there, he reached into his pocket and threw what he had grabbed into Corran?s lap.

    ?Keg?? Corran questioned. He took out the package of cards, and sure enough, real Keg cards. ?Isn?t this kinda illegal??

    ?Illegal?!? Chance huffed. ?Hah! On Corellia!?

    Corran shrugged. He had a point, even if it was illegal, no one cared. ?And you want to go into law enforcement??

    Chance shrugged. The remainder of the trip was uneventful, save for the one girl getting air-sick. Other then that, things were smooth sailing.

    When students were taken on trips such as these, the officers in charge were called Monitors. Most students thought of them as fun-hating evil overlords. The purple-team?s monitor was named Vando Kole. He had sharp features and jet black hair. He always looked as if he were about to murder someone. Vando began to speak. ?Listen scrubs. You do what I tell you and everybody goes home happy. You don?t, and I can promise you, you won?t like it. We?re stopping at the hotel for the night, it?s about 2200 hours, you have an hour to do what you like. Lights out at promptly 2300. The keys for your room are up here with me. You lose your key, you?re dead. Don?t be late. Come up and get your keys. After curfew, no leaving your rooms either.?

    Chance grabbed the first key. It was room 509. The fifth floor. ?C?mon Cor, let?s go see the sights for an hour.?
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    The duo returned to their room at exactly 2258. ?Wow, we?re not late. Be amazed.? Corran said.

    ?Time for a game of Keg, no?? Chance grinned as he locked the door behind them.

    ?Let?s wait until the Monitor comes and checks on us, then go get the other boys on the floor. More credits that way.?

    Chancee shrugged. ?Fine. You always have to come u
  15. padawan lunetta Force Ghost

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    You weren't kidding when you said LONG! But it was great, I can't believe this story is coming to an end! *sniff*
  16. Aralna Force Ghost

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    Great post! :D It took me a half-hour to read, and I wasn't distracted at all during that time. :)
    Nice of you to include Iella and Gil in that. And of course, Kirtan Loor is important.
    I hope the last scene's long too. It's hard to believe this is ending.
  17. Ejedir2 Jedi Master

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    Sorry peeps, the last post is only a page. . .but I expect it will make an impact :D
  18. Perator Jedi Knight

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    Great work. Wow, that took a LONG time to read. I think I can guess what the next (and final :( ) scene will be. I really enjoyed the beginnging academy part, and I think having all of Carran's friends go adn join the rebels was a great touch. It makes Corran's choice easier to understand.

    I can't wait for the final part. Hopefully it will be soon.

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  19. Jedi Master Nejaa Halcyon Jedi Master

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  21. Calamity Jinn Jedi Master

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    Wow!!!

    That was great guys! You certainly reappeared with a bang! :)

    I loved the bit where Corran climbed into the room with the girls, and how you've included alot of the people to appear in the future.

    One post left?!?!?!?!? :(

    Looking forward to it though!!! :D

  22. RogueJai Jedi Master

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    Thanks Calam! Must give credit where it's due, though grin. That scene is the actual, nearly word-for-word High School Band Trip experience of a good friend of ours :D :) :D
  23. Perator Jedi Knight

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    LOL! Can't wait for the last scene. I'm sure I know what it is. When do we get it?

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  24. Perator Jedi Knight

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    UP AGAIN! When do we get it?! :D :D :D
  25. Ejedir2 Jedi Master

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    Here it be! AND I have another snippet of news for y'all. . .Jai and I have begun writing a new story and we will begin posting sometime in the next month(We hope) it's called: "Taking You Home: The Story of Wedge Antilles" So yeah. . be on the lookout for it!
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    Corran flipped on the surveilance equipment and sat down in the black leather chair. The
    inside of the Sunset Tapcaf, was anything but inviting. The walls were a sickly green hue, wallpaper peeling around the edges. The seats were a gruesome orange and looked about threadbare. Tables were tilting on their supports, and the bar was cracked. Not one glass was not chipped or split, and the carpet was the worst. In the middle of the room was a huge sun, and the carpet, he supposed, had once been a fire red. Now it was more like. . .dingy gray.

    His father sat in the far corner of the tapcaf where it was shadowed and dark. They were about fifteen minutes early. Corran relaxed and sat back in his chair.

    ?Hi.?

    Corran spun around, hand on his blaster, ?Who are you?? A stunningly beautiful woman stood in the doorway.

    ?Gina Hasratian, I?m on duty here today.?

    ?Well,? Corran placed his charming smiled on his face. ?I guess I can trust you then.? He reholstered his blaster and tipped back in his chair, balancing on the two legs.

    Gina laughed. ?Oh, you?re special. What is it with guys and that chair, they all feel the need to balance it for me, I am quite aware of its ability to balance, I?ve done it myself.?

    Corran tipped the chair back to its original position with a thud. ?So, what brings a beautiful girl like you to a dank little place like this.?

    ?Oh, I haven?t heard that one before. Honestly, you would think after hundreds of years, human males could come up with some new pick-up lines.?

    ?It?s our duty, as males, to be as stupid as possible for the amusement of the girls.? Corran glanced back at the screen, the two infomants had arrived, and Hal was beginning the conversation.

    ?So,? Corran said. ?You?re in surveilance then??

    ?No,? she replied, ?I like to sit in this box for my enjoyment.?

    Corran shrugged. ?You never know, some women do.?

    ?Right, now, since you?ve become so acquainted with me. . would you mind telling me your name??

    ?Oh, right, heh, Corran Horn.? He looked back at the screen, his father was becoming agitated, he could tell. He was poking a finger at the human man, and the color was rising in his face. He was about to turn around and continue his conversation with Gina, but then something in the corner of the screen caught his attention. He swiveled full around, facing the screens.

    A Trandoshan walked with purpose to the corner table. The repltilian creature was wearing a bulky dust-cloak thrown over his shoulders. He turned around, so that Corran could now see his face, but eclipsed the table behind him. It was Bossk. The bounty hunter. Corran fumbled for the com switch and thrust it up and on. ?Dad!? No answer, or any sign that Hal had heard him. He toggled the switch again and screamed, ?Dad!?

    It was too late. Bossk had unveiled a blaster and smartly turned and threw shots into the three sitting at the table. The Quarren, almost immediately, exploded into a black mist. Corran cried out in anguish as his father took two shots in the upper chest. The other human male tried to duck under the table, but was shot once Bossk had demolished the table. It was over before Corran had even reached the door. He shot across the alley, with no regard for rules or regulations and ran to his father?s side. Kneeling in blood, he grabbed a cloth that was sitting on a nearby table. He lifted his father into his arms. No pulse beat through Hal?s body. Two gaping holes stared at him as he wiped the Quarren ichor from his father?s face.

    . . . . open your eyes . . . open your eyes . . . open your eyes . . . .



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