Beyond - Legends The Fragile Peace (Skywalker-Jade Revival Society Challenge)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Revanfan1, May 22, 2014.

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  1. taramidala Jedi Grand Master

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    Haha! That's actually who I'd guessed, but I triple-checked to make sure he wasn't already on the list!
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  2. Gemma Jedi Knight

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    Fantastic. I like how Fett snuck away. Sad that the Noghri died. Liked how Damien and Jaina confessed their love for one another. Another great story closes. Tag me for the next one.
  3. K'Tai qel Letta-Tanku Jedi Grand Master

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    Fabulous. Now, when is the next installment coming? ;)
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  4. AzureAngel2 Jedi Grand Master

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    So, the sith are back...

    [face_nail_biting]

    Dear me!

    I hope they can be stopped...
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  5. JadeLotus Jedi Grand Master

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    Great ending! I loved how you worked in all the new characters and left things open with Ahli as the villain for Episode VIII.
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  6. Revanfan1 Force Ghost

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    With the trailer released yesterday, I decided to go back and look over this, and I was surprised by some of the things I got right. :p

    Things I Got Right:
    1. There are X-wings on a planet with an ocean and islands
    2. An X-wing pilot is a main character (in my story, Kameron Antilles)
    3. There seems to be a battle in a snowy forest (of course, I probably heard this rumor before writing this)

    Things I Got Wrong:
    1. Oscar Isaac is the aforementioned X-wing pilot main character, not a Mandalorian
    2. Andy Serkis did the voice-over for the trailer, so he's probably a villain, not a Noghri bodyguard
    3. John Boyega is a stormtrooper, not a Jedi

    Maybe I'll come back to this thread after the movie's released and see just how close–or far off–I was.
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  7. Force Smuggler Jedi Grand Master

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  8. Revanfan1 Force Ghost

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    Thank you! :)
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  9. Force Smuggler Jedi Grand Master

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    Yw. Now to speed read through the RoD and get to the last one.
    Is it bad that I want Ben and Ahli to get together?
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  10. Revanfan1 Force Ghost

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    [face_laugh]

    Must be Ben/Vestara syndrome seeping through. ;)
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  11. Force Smuggler Jedi Grand Master

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    :D Yes. Must be. Darn you! ;)
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  12. AzureAngel2 Jedi Grand Master

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    Book that off under "author´s freedom". But thanks for pointing mistakes out. Nobody who wrote the PT script would ever do such a thing. @};-
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  13. Revanfan1 Force Ghost

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    Thank you everyone who nominated this story for Best Epic. It's an honor. :D
  14. Jedi_Lover Jedi Grand Master

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  15. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    Suddenly, Luke got a Force nudge from Leia. Was just attacked by assassins. I'm fine. Focus on the mission.

    great so far, but this is not accurate unless you want to redefine the force. There is not a single book that describes perfect word for word communication through the force over distances. They can only vagely communicate feelings.
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  16. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    i think it is funny how you and so many others see Han Solo as a fleet general. This to me, is the opposite of who he is. He left the Imperial Academy as a young man, because he hated the strictness and formality of the military. He is a rogue figure, who works best under his own orders. I can see him being a general by title, but never outside of his ship. Being on some Star Destroyer is not Han Solo.
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  17. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    awesome excerpt. It's fun to read.
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  18. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    awesome. I love how you have Jacen. Could he really be a grey Jedi? Is that even possible? I love his explanation though . Tough to read. Makes me miss him.
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  19. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    love it.!!! Mara is so cool. I missed her .
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  20. Revanfan1 Force Ghost

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    @JediMatteus, thanks for the comments and critiques! As to the Force comment, I used the word for the reader's benefit; Luke probably felt something more like reassurance from Leia. As to Han, I agree, but I was going off what we knew about Episode VII at the time I wrote this, and that indicated that Han would be in charge of a Star Destroyer. That seems to be out of the picture now, but it was what I had to work with at the time for the sake of the challenge. Glad you like it, though! :)
  21. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    You have taken characters that are beloved to me and actually make them true to life better than most authors. Thank you.
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  22. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    Loving the Luke action!!
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  23. JediMatteus Jedi Master

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    Love the Mara scenes!!. I was actually hoping that Jacen was on to something.
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