ok chuckles... got a couple comments for you. it's a really good concept. i like it. i would and probably will play it. however, the OP is just too danged long. there's a couple things you could do for this, and yes i realize the feel you're going for but sometimes going for a certain feel when it creates something like this is a detriment instead of a bonus. idea 1. you cut out the past section of this post and put it in the introduction thread, that way people who don't look in here get a taste for it. cuts the whole length down a bit, and make sit more likely people'll actually read the whole thing. idea 2. similar to idea one, you put both of the past and present in the intro thread and have a shorter oral history account in the actual OP. idea 3. you just rewrite the whole thing as an oral history, as though it's someone trying to entertain people around a campfire with a tale of their past. honestly, i like this idea the most, because it fixes the biggest problem with the style you wrote the history parts in. history books are just dry. it's a simple fact, most historian's do not know how to tell a story. however those who kept them as oral histories were just as accurate and far more interesting. i'm not saying what you have there isn't interesting, because it is. it's just that the style you wrote it in is just too dry, and it gives the whole thing kind of a dusty feel to it, which while it lends a since of weight and age to it, does not exactly help you out very much. doing it as an oral history would still lend it that weight and age but would keep it more polished, and would likely make it shorter as well. just my thoughts. the rest, what i've read of it so far, is fine from what i can see.