Beyond ~The Jedi Trials Episode I: Darkside Uprising~

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  1. SwordoftheJedi Force Ghost

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    Good job, kakarot, good job Seko!
  2. JediKnight20043 Force Ghost

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    Study for exams???? :confused:

    I thought the exams were over ages ago

    Its the summer holidays now




    Good Work Though, Cant wait for the next part!
  3. DarthKakarot Jedi Youngling

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    I had to study for first term exams, my mum is a pain in the butt with that stuff.

    Anyway.

    Part 5

    The team passed through a short, narrow hallway with no disturbances, which was strange, as usually they would have been caught up in another tangle that would end up with a few injuries. This time it was different. A few moments later, Sekotian lifted his right arm waist height and pointed to a set of pipes protruding through the wall,

    "Look, the pipes, over there!" Sekotian expressed as there was a slight sign of relief within his voice.

    The team quickly ran to them and. Oddly enough, the coverings were easily removed. Sango just waved her hand across the entrances, causing the weak welds to give way and the covers fell to the floor with a clang. Kakarot caught Sango's eye, and she stared at him for a moment, looking puzzled.

    "Ladys first" he said with a slight grin.

    "Why me?? She frowned. ?Oh lets be done with it, the sooner the better", She then smiled before crouching down, and crawled into the maintenance tube. The team followed. The inside of the pipeline was dark, damped, and filled with a thick dust covering, a few moments into the tube, Sango stopped.

    "Master Sekotian, you got a glow rod?" She questioned, she reached out her hand, which was now covered in dirt.

    Sekotian searched his utility belt until he found a container that he took and handed to her, "Nope, but I have a Halo-lamp", he said as he passed it to Sango, who flicked it on.

    "What a nice place you found us Master, it's like being back on ORD Mantell, brilliant!" Sango said sarcastically as the team continued the crawl down the shaft.

    "Oh, yes Sango, part of your training. that was a disaster, I lost my boot on that mission." Kakarot laughed as he accidentally put his hand green three figured hand in a large amount of lubricant oil dripping from the side.

    "Ha ha ha, yes Master, I remember, you forgot to bring extra and had to spend a week in your socks" Sango whispered humorously.

    "Well, yes, you and Master Starweilder had a good laugh about that, it's funny now, but at the time it was a nightmare." Kakarot chuckled, a bit to loud. Sekotian just let out a ?shush?.

    The grouped continued downward on their search for an exit. ?Party pooper? Kakarot muttered at Sekotian.
  4. JediKnight20043 Force Ghost

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    :)


    Keep up the good work


    I only wish the parts were longer :(
  5. DarthKakarot Jedi Youngling

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    If they were longer, the story would be over sooner :p

    On the upside, this thing is a trilogy.
  6. Master_Burhead Jedi Master

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    Great fanfic Kaky keep it up
  7. darth_nemisis Force Ghost

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    Good stuff here, Kakarot. :)
  8. masterjedi343 Force Ghost

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    yes very good.i read part one just now and its very good =D= keep it up i will read the rest later tonight :)
  9. Saora_Bin Jedi Master

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  10. Zandoran_Celix Jedi Grand Master

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    I must say I am enjoying reading this. Great Job, for a Jedi.....[face_devil][face_laugh]:p
  11. Rilwen_Shadowflame Force Ghost

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  12. dri-ma-kadi Jedi Master

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  13. JEDI_KNIGHT_FRAZ Jedi Master

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  14. Ghost_Jedi Force Ghost

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    excellent job so far


    keep up the great work, is their going to action outside the star destroyer?
  15. DarthKakarot Jedi Youngling

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    Answer= Yes, but after the battles onboard etc.

    UPDATE!!!

    Part 6

    A crackling smash echoed throughout the hallway as Rabai brought his saber down on Master Horax?s. The two exchanged and parrried blows relentlessly as the fight went on.

    "You are reckless!" Horax proclaimed as he swung his lightsaber to the left with total control.

    The two sabers crashed together once more. Both Jedi and Sith stayed locked in a powerful struggle between each other. Moments passed with no side emerging the victor. The pair were sweating furiously as they continued to try to overwhelm eachother and break the lock.

    "You are the one who is reckless, with your foolish ways, Lord Vassago is the key to power! Not you!" Hissed Rabai, his voice clearly twisted by the dark side. Rabai was clearly not human, infact he only resembled a humanoid by his stature, he had the head of a savage beast, his many teeth showing, his eyes glowing a brilliant yellow, his skin, a light brown, he was a monster, that much was certain.

    Using a burst of speed he broke the saber lock, dodged Rabai?s saber and knocked off the Sith?s footing. Rabai hit the floor with a thud, but quickly flipped back up and called his saber back to him. The saber reignited in his had as he leaped for Horax. Horax managed to grab him by his arm and threw him on to the smooth floor. Rabai continued backwards due to the force of the toss and slid into the wall, head first.

    Turning his back on the Sith, Horax walked off in the direction his teammates had left.

    "Don't you turn your back on me fool!" Rabai screamed in rage as he stood up and charged towards Horax, who was only a few seconds away. Horax whipped fluently around and sliced Rabai in two from the head down. Shaking his head he asked himself, "I'm the fool?"

    Wiping sweat from the top of his head, he sighed before saying, "What a waste, you could have been a great Jedi". The Jedi Master quickly reattaching his lightsaber back onto his belt and ran down the corridor in the direction of his fellow Jedi teammates.
  16. Darth-Horax Force Ghost

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    [walken]What this fanfic needs...is more Horax...oh, and cowbell, too![/walken]

    Good job!
  17. LemmingLord Jedi Master

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    Nifty. If you require a handsome and humble rogueish character, Lem Lo would be a spiffy version of my name to use..
  18. Darth-Vassago Force Ghost

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    Interesting. This can only get better in time. :)

    ~Vassago
  19. Axle-Starweilder Force Ghost

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    good work here kakkay, the exposition is proceeding most fluidly. your style is rather poignant and evokes good visuals.
  20. DarthKakarot Jedi Youngling

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    Maxle, I think thats the most complicated thing I've ever seen you say ;p
  21. darth_nemisis Force Ghost

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    Figures....you kill the Sith...[face_plain]

    :p Well, I better be seeing me in this story! ;)

    Anyway, good update!
  22. SwordoftheJedi Force Ghost

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  23. Master_Burhead Jedi Master

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    I echo what the others are saying good job Kaky keep it up
  24. JEDI_KNIGHT_FRAZ Jedi Master

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    Brilliant Master Kaky, good fic so far like. Keep it up .
  25. masterjedi343 Force Ghost

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    this is a really good story! i love it! keep up the good work.will we see some more familiar jedi deeper into the story?
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