The Long Way Around-AU

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  1. Renton Kenobi Force Ghost

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    The Long Way Around

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    I stand here watching the medical droids working furiously to save my master's life. They will save his life, this I am sure of. I have no other thoughts in my mind that he would live. But...but then there...I have doubts...but I can always hope as survey this god forsaken place. But it has a glaze covered toping. Crestfallen I try to think of what will happen if he does live.

    But would I be able to face my Master again?

    I know he was only meaning kidness when he made me promise to train young Anakin. He probably found that the thing that needed to be said. But, if I had let him die there in that hangar that would have been the last thing he said to me.

    I knew...or at least I think my master loved me. I always felt so sure about that. I knew that no matter what happend I would at least have one person I could turn to if I needed help.

    But now my heart is torn in two.

    With what would have been his last breath he would have spoken about Anakin. A mere boy that he had met all of a few weeks prior instead of me. Is it so wrong I feel this jealousy? I know that it is not what the Jedi teach us. But as a person, as a human being is it? Qui-Gon Jinn had raised me for more than half of my life. The only true family I would ever know. And with what would have been his last moment he didn't say anything to me about us, but about the boy.

    I have to admit. The people of Naboo have been very gracious to me. I. I just. Oh. I don't know any...anymore. So much has changed. I try to stop my figiting hands long enough to rub my tired glossy eyes. Being flung into knighthood like this was not what I wanted Master. Not for us. No...not like this. They knighted me today Master...would you have even been there if you could have? No...NO! I have to stop thinking like that. He would have been there...he would.

    Wouldn't you?

    But no matter what happens Master. I will stay by your side till you are better. I will try...I will do all that I can to help. I promise Master... I...I promise.
  2. Rosemary Jedi Knight

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    Aug 20, 2000
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    Nice start =)
    Kinda makes you think huh? ';'
    Man I wish Qui-Gon & Obi-Wan had had some more character development =)
    Oops rambling, Keep it up! ;D
  3. JediKnightZarc Jedi Master

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    I love this story! Write more soon! =)
  4. Kit' Manager Emeritus

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    Yeah, keep going. Stupid Qui-gon, I would be feeling so bad if someone I loved died in my arms and their last words were about a sithly boy they ha only met a couple of days ago.


    Kithera
  5. Julie Moderator Emeritus

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    Very nice start! I love AU! Will you be switching between points of view or will we see everything through Obi-wan's eyes? I'll be watching for more.
  6. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Aug 9, 2000
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    YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!ANOTHER AU!!!!!!!!

    Hope to see more soon!
  7. KADI-WAN_KENOBI Jedi Master

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    Hey, what is this doing all the way down here?!

    UP!
  8. anya Skywalker Jedi Master

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    Hmmmmmmmm.....
    Where's the rest?
  9. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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  10. Rosemary Jedi Knight

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    "More please." (._.)
    "MORE?"

    Hehe sorry ;)
    You can't leave it there
  11. Renton Kenobi Force Ghost

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    May 24, 2000
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    EVIL SCHOOL!
    Sorry I will post after I get home!
    May the force be with you!
    -Rents
  12. anya Skywalker Jedi Master

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  13. Jade's Fire2003 Jedi Master

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    Oct 12, 1999
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    Keep it up.

    //starts banging hands on the computer screen and chants "Post post post post..."
  14. Kit' Manager Emeritus

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  15. BannedOnTheGauntlet Jedi Knight

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    Oct 18, 2000
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    I like what you've got so far. I'd love to see more!
  16. Renton Kenobi Force Ghost

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    Okay I didn't like how I got started with this so I'm going to start over in another thread...it'll be called "Hero" if anyone cares...
  17. JediRogue9 Jedi Master

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    May 8, 2000
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    This one doesnt suck either, Renton. Its awesome!
  18. Obi the Kid Jedi Master

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    "Hero" ? I will keep my eyes open for it...although I love the way this one began.
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