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Discussion The Lucasfilm Story Group: Questions and Answers/Feedback Thread

Discussion in 'Star Wars: Episode IX - Spoilers Allowed' started by Darth Chiznuk , Jan 19, 2018.

  1. Hopeless

    Hopeless Jedi Master star 4

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    So maybe start by showing the Battle of Crait as viewed from the Imperial Remaint?
    Discover the First Order was their version of Leia's Resistance, but properly funded.
    Snoke a former Adept in service to the Emperor uses the Emperor's Messengers to eventually usurp power from the Imperial version of the Senate kidnapping and brainwashing their kids.
    Things seem hopeless as first they learn about Kylo Ren whose revealed as Ben Solo, Han Solo's death is seen as heroic by them because he tried to get his son back something elements in the Remaint actually look upon with awe.
    Then Snoke is killed as word reaches them of the Rogue Stormtrooper who escapes certain death even as Kylo ascends the throne.
    Kylo isn't Snoke it's now the Remaint sees their chance and attempts to contact Princess Leia to offer their aid...
    Would that work?
     
  2. 3sm1r

    3sm1r Jedi Knight star 3

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    How do you intend to glue the flashback with the opening crawl?
     
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  3. Hopeless

    Hopeless Jedi Master star 4

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    Have the crawl happen after to let it sink in!
    Nope can't see them even considering doing that having their bad guys have hidden depths!
     
  4. 3sm1r

    3sm1r Jedi Knight star 3

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    This is something that needs to be fixed IMO. The opening crawl must be (let's say for historical reasons) the first thing you see in the movie right after the GFFA phrase. This is the problem I also have for flashbacks in SW. But you might introduce a character who tell it as a story maybe. I don't know [:D]
     
  5. Storm_Cloud

    Storm_Cloud Jedi Knight star 3

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    Although moving the crawl to the middle or end of the film would subvert expectations and therefore be clever and cool film making :)

    I would consider that the opening crawl, the no dialogue final scene, Artoo and Threepio are immutable. There's other stuff that wouldn't be a worry for a treatment, like JW or the wipes etc.
     
  6. Django Fett

    Django Fett Jedi Master star 4

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    When writing a treatment think of it as a road map, you begin your story as if it's a journey and you show the basic route to the end of the journey. You don't have to put in details and dialogue unless they are pivotal to the story, most treatments are a basic synopsis of the story with new characters getting a short description outside the plot.
     
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  7. GregMcP

    GregMcP Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Subverting the Crawl.
    I think you can change it up a bit, but it's a tricky, dangerous experiment.
    Your audience is pretty pedantic about such things.

    Make is shorter? Make it more personal and less "The State Of The Galaxy"?

    This is the game. How can you surprise people without stepping too far?
     
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  8. Little Ray Sunshine

    Little Ray Sunshine Jedi Knight star 2

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    By "respectful send off." do you mean Dark Leia is forbidden?
     
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  9. Darth Chiznuk

    Darth Chiznuk Four Time PT Trivia Champ/GOAT/New Films Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Nothing is off limits unless it breaks one of the forum rules. :)
     
  10. Nipuhanipera

    Nipuhanipera Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Wait, is this thread specifically for the Story Group?
     
  11. Darth Chiznuk

    Darth Chiznuk Four Time PT Trivia Champ/GOAT/New Films Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    No. It's just meant to be a thread where you can get feedback on any idea you might have or if you need to ask a question about some piece of SW lore you aren't sure about. So it serves kind of the same function as the actual story group but it's for those who want to take part in the treatment contest.
     
  12. Baron_Papanerd

    Baron_Papanerd Jedi Master star 4

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    LOL @Darth Chiznuk; you are in for a lot of reading. You might have been better off, if the contest was for writing the Opening Crawl only. :p