Saga The Naboo Chronicles: Complete. More replies (9/17/07)

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  1. sethsky Jedi Knight

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    Jun 27, 2005
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    Fantastic chapter MasterRev,

    I loved the ending, i'm pretty sure that Ani isn't going to die or stay dead becuse he's still has alot of things to do in this lifetime.
    Maybe we needed this scene so that Padme can't start realizing how deep her feelings really go for Ani.
    And it's good that Ani got mortally wounded, since it will keep him grounded that he's still a mortal and not a god, something i think Palpatine has forgotten about himself, that arragont SOB.

    seeya
  2. Gina Force Ghost

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    Jun 3, 2003
    star 4
    Now that was an evil cliffie! [face_shame_on_you] I hope he's not really dead. :_| That was certainly a thrilling, action-packed chapter. =D=

  3. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Feb 5, 2004
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    He can't be dead! [face_not_talking] I refuse to believe it. [face_shame_on_you] You had better fix this. :p

    Only two more chapters to go??? :_|

    Okay, fix this now and I won't have to hurt someone. :p [face_laugh]

    A great update. =D=
  4. AP4EVER Jedi Master

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    May 23, 2005
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    ...and with General Tro?s abrupt departure meant there were no lessons to complete.

    What? No goodbyes?

    Ellisé nearly jumped out of her seat and clenched at her chest, giving Anakin a sour look. ?I hate it when you do that.?

    Oh but it's so much fun!

    I aughta know.[face_devil]

    Staring at Pooja, Padmé wondered about what it would be like to have a child of her own.

    Oh, she'll find out soon enough.[face_whistling]

    Behind her mother?s back, at that same moment, Padmé stuck her tongue out at her sister and whispered, ?Shaak face.?

    Sola snorted. ?Goober fish.?


    Sibling 'clashes' don't have age decrepency.[face_laugh]

    ?And how is my favorite girl??

    ?I thought I was your favorite?? Padmé declared while flashing him a playful grin.

    Anakin?s face flushed a deep red as he placed Ryoo back down on the ground. This prompted Sola to remark, ?I didn?t know that the beloved hero our people could turn such a deep shade of red.?


    Oh that is Cruel![face_laugh]

    Anakin must be so red that he'd make a tomato seem pale.

    She paused to cast a happy smile at Anakin. ?... I would like for you to be the one to accompany me this time.?

    ?Me?? Anakin replied, unconsciously pointing at his chest.


    No, the Ewok trying to benchpress that shaak in the back, of course you!

    ?Of course you realize what this means?? Padmé said, sharing a conspiratorial glance with her sister.

    ?What?? Anakin timidly asked.

    ?My mother, Sola and I will decide upon what you will wear.?

    All the adults in attendance tried, but failed to sequester their laughter at the utter look of horror that completely consumed Anakin?s face


    What is this, 'Torment poor Anakin Day'?[face_laugh]

    After docking their transport Obi-Wan and Siri, dressed in nondescript clothing,

    Yes! The mission has comenced!

    ?Where were they going?? Siri growled, pressing her blade closer to the man?s face.

    ?Duro,? he nervously stuttered. ?He was taking them to Duro.?


    At least they have a target suspect. I hope they find him soon!

    When they previously had spoken, Anakin had felt as if the Chancellor could see straight through him.

    Oh, he has no idea...

    ?Perhaps in time your skills could be of service to me??

    ?Excellency?? He looked at the Chancellor, bewildered.

    Palpatine stopped walking and gave Anakin a solemn glance. ?Of course, I mean the Republic.?


    *cough* Bullsh...*cough*

    ?The High Protector will be escorting Queen Amidala to the ceremonial dais. Under no circumstances is he to be severely harmed. I have?plans for him.?

    Gee, I wonder what those plans are?

    Plus, I still think that Sidious is setting Veruna up for a fall...all part of the 'master plan'. After all, Palpy is the master planner.

    Renaltus found himself praying to the spirits for guidance.

    I have a feeling they're not with you.

    ?No I will not be quiet you tiny little rust bucket?General Panaka was most displeased with your little repair of his speeder.?

    3PO: He may never regain use of his pelvis! Or his legs! And they're still looking for his right ear!

    [face_laugh]

    ?I wear it because it is precious to me. It was given to me to by someone who saw me for who I truly am, and not my position.?

    No comment except, how true how true.

    ?Besides, by tonight you will be dancing with some very gorgeous sons of dignitaries at the gala.?

    Anakin glared at her before returning to his meal.


    Do I detect a hint of jealousy, I think I do!

    Padmé smiled as she rose. Turning to Anakin, she extended her hand and said, ?Shall we??

    A: :D =P~ YES!...uh, I mean, or course you highness.

    As Anakin basked in Padmé?s glow, a sudden blackness overcame him. He closed his eyes briefly to pick up several presences whose energy was building up in anticipation of something dark.

    Yes, he's aware!

    Without thought, he activated his emerald green bladed lightsaber as a flurry of
  5. geo3 Force Ghost

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    Sep 29, 2002
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    Great post!!!

    Loved the glimpse of Anakin-as-ship-designer; I could so see that happening if it weren?t for a few other minor qualities in his character?you know, being the chosen One and all!!!! [face_laugh]

    With scenes like that one and the one after with Padmé and her family, you have such a gift for rounding out the characters in wonderful, human ways, making them so warm and real. Sola and Padmé [face_laugh] ? that?s so true, it could have come out of my own family! ? and yet we never lose sight of their rightful place in the GFFA and in your story. Lovely storytelling, my friend!

    I felt sorry for Siri and her sadness, but I have to say that she very quickly convinced me (at the end of her lightsaber, as a matter of fact!) that she is going to achieve her goal and find the child. I have no doubt of it.

    The scenes with Palpatine and Veruna were seriously creepy. I?m glad that Anakin felt uneasy, but he is still too young and inexperienced to put all the pieces together. That alone was enough to give me a Very Bad Feeling? the plans of the assassins made it even worse, and then the way you built up to the terrible events at the end of the chapter made it downright awful.

    I knew something horrible was going to happen. :eek: Horribly enough, I was right? :_| You didn?t pull any punches, did you?

    Anakin was about to turn about when Padmé screamed, ?Behind you!?

    A sharp pain pulsated through his chest. He fell to his knees. When he looked down, he saw the pointed end of a dagger sticking out of his torso with blood soaking his hands. Strangely, he laughed as he dropped to the ground.

    ?I honestly don?t know what was so special about you, Skywalker.? Renaltus barked.


    I mean, by all the gods, Rev! Anakin did his best and fought bravely, but look what you did to him!!!!

    As she carefully leaned him onto his side, he reached up to touch the side of her disheveled face. Wiping away a stream of tears, he smiled sadly. ?Don?t cry, my angel Queen? I love you so? I had to save you.?

    ?And I love you,? Padmé muttered through her tears. ?Please don?t leave.?

    ?I am already there,? he sighed and closed his eyes.

    ?Ani?? She called out, but he remained still. ?Anakin!? she cried out as she cradled him in her arms. ?Somebody please help me!?


    You had better fix this!!! Immediately!!! I mean it!!!! And soon!!!!!!!
  6. JediMasterRev Jedi Master

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    Dec 2, 2004
    star 4
    To Everyone: My Thanks to everyone who are reading and/or lurking. Only one more chapter to go after this one. Hope you all enjoy!


    Darth-Buddy: Wow! stunning update.

    Thank you very much!

    The ending was so powerful. Please give us a happy ending and don't let Ani die. Pretty please.

    Glad you hope. Will do the best I can ;).

    AngelQueen: *jaw drops* Methinks Palpatine's gonna be quite... irritated. He didn't want anything to happen to Anakin. *smirk* That's what he gets for getting stupid underlings to do stuff for him. They always screw up. Hah. Serves him right!

    He definitely has to rethink his position of not doing his own dirty work. I can probably predict that he wasn't too happy with what happened ;).

    Great update, Rev! Sweet! And what did I tell you? Anakin totally PWNED them, even if he got himself totally sliced up in the process.

    Well, you got to cut the guy some slack. He's still a Chosen One in training ;).

    And Pooja's here! *squeaks happily and cuddles her favorite little Naberrie girl* Hear ye, hear ye! All rise and greet the future Senator of Naboo!

    For the moment she'll only be debating her teddy bears ;).

    Thanks so much for reading!


    Across-the_Stars: Ani can't die!

    Unfortunately, he can :(.

    Wait did Padme just tell him she loves him? Ok, I need to take a deep breath before I hyperventilate.

    She sure did :). Please, don't pass out on me :D.

    Oh, who I'm I kidding I'm a mess! See what you've done to me JediMasterRev . Please update soon, or the suspense will kill me.

    Sorry about the evil cliffe....no I'm not ;). Glad you liked! More is here :).

    PS:pALPATINE MUST DIE

    I wholeheartedly agree ;)


    Astarael: OMGOMGOMG

    [face_laugh]

    You did NOT just kill Anakin off, did you?

    [face_batting] Well...he's not quite dead yet ;).

    Update soon please! This is a really evil cliffy!

    [face_skull] Thanks so much.


    Rocketscientist: Wonderful update Revmaster! You don't skimp on the chapters do you? that's so nice!

    I never want my readers bored. Always have to assume I have at least something up my sleave ;).

    Little Ani breaks baaaddd!

    He definitely held his own.

    OK - We've got a little bit of a problem here! There IS or course the possibility that the knife may have missed his vital organs, but he's gonna bleed to death in short order if someone doesn't do something quick! And I don't think direct pressure is going to be enough!

    Not only that but he probably is having some respiratory issues. All will be revealed. But yes, direct pressure won't be enough.

    Oh my - oh dear!

    :D

    Thanks for reading!


    DancesWithBlasters: I have faith. You will not kill Anakin. You will not kill Anakin. Repeat after me, now: I WILL NOT KILL ANAKIN!!!! Please! Promise me, promise me.

    Ok, I promise that I won't personally kill Anakin. However, these characters seem to have minds of their own ;). I'll try my best though.

    What am I kidding myself? You're an EVIL CLIFFIE writer. You're one of those slippery folk your mums warn you about. The kind who never promise anything, and if they do, it's an empty promise.

    [face_laugh][face_laugh]

    Wording's everything, ain't it? You can totally avoid a subject by omitting a few words, and confuse people with big words so it keeps them from figuring what you're really saying. (Yes, I am slightly in awe of politics, while somehow maintaining a healthy hatred of it.)

    Absolutely. More coming up now. Thanks for reading!


    Bobilll: what an exciting episode! Anakin's really growing into a young warrior!

    And he's only 14...

    Can't help but burst into uncontrolled laughter... silly little boy...

    Definitely not king of the ladies..at least not yet ;).

    Thanks so much for reading!


    Sethsky: Fantastic chapter MasterRev

    Thank you ve
  7. AngelQueen Force Ghost

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    Mar 1, 2001
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    *squeaks happily* YAY! Anakin's all right! Ilianya's back and helped guide everyone in saving Anakin and realizes just how important Padmé is, Qui-Gon's talking to Obi-Wan, Lady Force introduced herself to her little Chosen One and is getting into threatening matches with Palpster (I assume it was her, anyway), and now Palpster and Dooku have put Order 66 into the clones. Eep. That's not good. Lotsa good Jedi are probably gonna end up dead. :(

    Great chapter, Rev! Much fun!

    AQ
  8. astarael Jedi Knight

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    Jan 8, 2005
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    Yay! Anakin's alive! I knew you wouldn't kill him off... at least I hoped not. Everything seems to be backon track in a manner of speaking.

    'Cept for the clones with Palp's order 66. That never ends well!

    Great post!
  9. VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus

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    Feb 5, 2004
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    Whew! What a relief! :D

    As Ilianya initiated the bond, she jarred when she felt the shear strength of the Force within Anakin. It was as if she had flown into a supernova?it was beyond anything she had ever experienced. Yet despite his raw power, she was able to glimpse memories of kind acts and gentleness. In that moment she understood the true nature of his existence.

    ?You never cease to amaze me, Exile.? The Force called out to her.

    Ilianya opened her eyes to see the woman gently caressing Anakin?s forehead. ?Did it work??

    ?He?s still alive isn?t he??


    :_| So beautiful!

    =D= Lovely chapter!
  10. sethsky Jedi Knight

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    Jun 27, 2005
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    Fantastic chappie, MasterRev.

    I'm glad that Anakin has met his personified force mother.
    Looking forward to the last chappie, are you then going to skip forward a couple of years or so?

    seeya
  11. DancesWithBlasters Force Ghost

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    Jan 22, 2006
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    I knew it!!!!!!!!! I knew it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU DIDN'T KILL ANAKIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! [face_dancing] Thank you. [:D]:*[face_love] Love the way Anakin reminded me of JediKnight!Luke when he was talking to Lady Force. And yay for Ghostie Qui Gon! Now, about this being there only being one more chapter: [face_plain]:([face_worried]:_| Please don't leave us!! Maybe you can do a sequel in the OT? [face_batting][face_praying]:D
  12. AussieGrrl Jedi Padawan

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    Dec 2, 2005
    Rev,

    Can I just tell you how happy I am that you didn't kill Anakin?! You could've gotten away with it, what with him being High Protector and all, but I'm glad you didn't! Those two crazy kids need some time to do something about their love! So, thanks for that!

    Another great update! I'm sad that the story's almost done, but I'm glad you're writing it! ...you're a fantastic writer Rene (as I've said elsewhere, kethani), and if the stories keep coming, I'll be ecstatic to read them!

    XOXO
    Kate
  13. Ladynaye Jedi Master

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    May 24, 2005
    star 4
    Palpy and his evil schemes!! And Ani will be ok!!
  14. rocketscientist Jedi Knight

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    Nov 16, 2005
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    *Sigh* What a good chapter!

    Nice to see Qui-Gon, he's always got the right thing to say!;)

    If she had, then perhaps he would be sitting with her at that moment. What if he died? What would she do without him? Tears began to trail down the sides of her face, which she made no effort to wipe away.

    Poor Padmé's anxiety is so touching. Makes me sniffle [face_worried]

    I was so glad Obi-wan could come to Anakin and I really liked this:

    The raging storm disappeared and she found herself in a peaceful meadow filled with flowers and rolling hills. In the distance she saw a tall tree on top of a hill with a still form sitting underneath. Moving closer she smiled at the look of surprise on Anakin?s face.

    And this was wonderful too:

    ?My lady, may I only ask only one thing?? The Force smiled and motioned silently for him to continue. "Why am I your chosen one?? Anakin asked, cocking his head to one side.

    The Force leaned her face next to his ear, but rather than speaking, she kissed his check then straightened. ?Always remember, you are never alone.?


    ?Are you an angel?? He asked with a crooked grin.

    She could not help but cry as she reached over to embrace him. ?Anakin?I thought I lost you.?

    Ok - sniffling again!

    Reaching into the Force, Sidious allowed his consciousness to search until he found the right answer. ?We shall call it Order 66?the destruction of all non-clone commanders in the field.?

    ?I will see to it immediately, Master Sidious.?

    Oh man! Sinister!:eek:

    [face_peace]
  15. unknown_shore Jedi Knight

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    Jul 26, 2005
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    You know, Qui-Gon made TPM for me. Even now he's the part that most sticks out, so it's always nice to see him. He's just rockin'.

    The Force personified: it's an interesting take. I really do need to get back into the KOTOR games...you do a fine job with the Exile, I just wonder if I wouldn't like it more if I knew some of the backstory. ;)

    Perfect, sinister ending: the birth of Order 66. Your Palpatine/Sidious is engrossing and thoroughly creepy.

    A fine job, Rev....
  16. Darth-Buddy Jedi Master

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    Sep 18, 2005
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    =D= I thought last chapter was my favorite, but I think I like this chapter more. Wow, I just loved the interaction between Gen Tro and Anakin and Anakin and The Force. She is always so mysterious. Lovely character, it seems to make sense more than just a bunch of Midichlorians and a force energy field. I am so looking forward to see how you end this.=D= =D= =D= However, I will be sad when the end comes........Is there a sequel in the future??????
  17. AP4EVER Jedi Master

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    May 23, 2005
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    ?Hello, my son,? the familiar gentle voice called out.

    ?Qui-Gon!? Obi-Wan said in disbelief.


    In the flesh!...almost. Ah who cares, all that matters is that he's here!

    ?By rights I should be expelled from the Order,? Obi-Wan sighed.

    ?In the eyes of the Jedi, perhaps.? Qui-Gon responded with a mirthful grin. ?However, the Force itself is pleased and remains with you.?


    And that is all that should really matter when it comes to obeying the will of the Force.

    ?The will of the Force is something that is beyond simple mortal understanding. Only now am I beginning to comprehend her infinite secrets.?

    ?Her?? Obi-Wan asked curiously, raising his eyebrows.


    Well, if anyone was still questioning as to who this mystical women was...there's your answer.

    He had saved her life once again, but this time the price had been much higher. She was angry at herself for not taking his nightmares more seriously. If she had, then perhaps he would be sitting with her at that moment.

    She'd better take his dreams seriously, fore they'll only become more intense as time goes. by.

    ?he?s lapsed into a coma. There?s a strong possibility that he?s suffered brain damage.

    I can definately see why Obi-Wan would be most helpful here, in more ways than one might think.

    ?Oh Ani,? she whispered as she reached for his hand. ?Why do you have to be so brave??

    It's all for you, dear. He'd do anything and everying for you.

    It took every shred of his practiced control not to destroy the building with his wrath

    The vein on his forehead must be pulsing right now.

    The damned fool Veruna had betrayed him...In the end it would have been better to have killed him back at the highland?s castle.

    So he really expect Veruna to succeed. Well, knowing Palpy, even with this setback he's nowhere near out of the game yet.

    ...the luminescence of the Force that usually surrounded his student was slowly fading into oblivion

    Better act fast then!

    Obi-Wan placed his hand on Anakin?s forehead, attempting to channel some of his own Force energy into his friend. However, the void was immense, causing him to recoil painfully.

    Oh boy, not good. Now what?

    It was early in the morning when Ilianya returned to Theed.

    Thank the Force, perhaps she's the one who'll bring Anakin back.

    As Ilianya initiated the bond, she jarred when she felt the shear strength of the Force within Anakin. It was as if she had flown into a supernova?it was beyond anything she had ever experienced.

    Supernova would be most accurate.

    ?I have done nothing but kill others,? Anakin said somberly. ?I hardly think that deserves any praise.?

    The Force smiled as she rubbed the side of his face with the back of her hand. ?But what about the lives you've saved? By your actions you've prevented a terrible fate from befalling the Naboo people.? He was about to protest when she lifted her hand. ?It was my will. That should clear your conscience; but all in due time, my beloved."


    If he doesn't wise up after that, nothing will. But something tells me he'll take what 'she' says to heart.

    ?Are you an angel?? He asked with a crooked grin.

    OF course he already knows the answer to that.;)

    Siri chimed in, ?How did you do it??

    ?Magic,? Ilianya replied, offering a wink at Anakin.

    ?However you did it?our many thanks.? Padmé said happily.


    Thanks are in order. But something tells me someone will want an explanation on said 'magic' in the future.

    ?We shall call it Order 66?the destruction of all non-clone commanders in the field.?

    Let us hope that this dreaded order is neve implemented.

    =D=An absolutley marvelous post, Master Rev. It truly gets better the further I read. Can't wait to read more!:D
  18. Gina Force Ghost

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    Jun 3, 2003
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    Padmé opened her eyes when she heard the chime of the life support machines echoing louder and louder. Darting her gaze over to Anakin, she gasped when she saw his blue eyes fixed upon her. For a moment, she didn?t know what to say as she looked upon him.

    ?Are you an angel?? He asked with a crooked grin.

    She could not help but cry as she reached over to embrace him. ?Anakin?I thought I lost you.?

    ?Impossible,? he answered, his grin growing. ?You said I still have much to do. And who am I to disobey your orders??


    Whew! I'm so glad you didn't kill him! [:D]

    I especially liked how, in the beginning of the chapter, Padme and Anakin's roles were somewhat "reversed" with Padme being the one feeling guilt that she couldn't save him or that she didn't prevent it from happening.

    And as for Palpy, he never gives up, does he?! :mad:

    Excellent chapter! =D=

  19. aldocassidy Jedi Knight

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    Jun 22, 2005
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    Stunning finale, Rev! The transition from the peaceful and innocent family meal to the assassination attempt was smoothe and perfect. Anakin was quite the impressive hero; after this scene I would be surprised if everybody on Naboo didn't worship him. By the way, I had complete faith that you wouldn't kill him off...what you write for a sequel then?
  20. JediMasterRev Jedi Master

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    Dec 2, 2004
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    To everybody: Well, at long last, this is the final chapter. I want to take the opportunity to thank everyone who has been following this story since the beginning, both posters and lurkers alike. Your comments, suggestions and encouragement has, i think, helped me to become a better writer. Thank you and an extra special thanks to all of my betas who have helped me at one point or another during the tenure of the story: Pokey1984, Alethia, Hansgirl1031 and Geo3!. I couldn't have done this without you ladies, so my deepest and profound thanks for all your help.

    AngelQueen: YAY! Anakin's all right! Ilianya's back and helped guide everyone in saving Anakin and realizes just how important Padmé is, Qui-Gon's talking to Obi-Wan, Lady Force introduced herself to her little Chosen One and is getting into threatening matches with Palpster (I assume it was her, anyway),

    Yes, lots happening and more still to come ;).

    and now Palpster and Dooku have put Order 66 into the clones. Eep. That's not good. Lotsa good Jedi are probably gonna end up dead.

    As Palpy would say, 'all is going according to plan.' He is so wonderfully evil though. Have to appreciate that.

    Great chapter, Rev! Much fun!

    Thank you so very much!


    Astarael: Yay! Anakin's alive! I knew you wouldn't kill him off... at least I hoped not.

    I'm not THAT evil ;).

    Everything seems to be backon track in a manner of speaking.

    More or less ;).

    'Cept for the clones with Palp's order 66. That never ends well!

    Well, we all know how that one goes...or so we think ;).

    Thanks so much for reading!


    VaderLVR64: Whew! What a relief!

    :D Had you going there for a minute ;).

    So beautiful!

    Thank you so much!


    Sethsky: Fantastic chappie, MasterRev.

    I appreciate that!

    I'm glad that Anakin has met his personified force mother.

    It is definitely the beginning of an 'interesting' relationship.

    Looking forward to the last chappie, are you then going to skip forward a couple of years or so?

    Hope you enjoy. As for the sequel, I've decided to be skipping ahead about 3 and a half years. Essential it will be two years before the outbreak of the Clone Wars, at least in the timeframe in canon. In this universe, anything is possible though. ;).

    Thanks so much for reading!


    DancesWithBlasters: knew it!!!!!!!!! I knew it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU DIDN'T KILL ANAKIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you.

    Wasn't up to me. Like I said, these characters have minds of their own ;).

    Love the way Anakin reminded me of JediKnight!Luke when he was talking to Lady Force.

    He does seem to have a different perspective on things now.

    Now, about this being there only being one more chapter: Please don't leave us!! Maybe you can do a sequel in the OT?

    Oh don't worry. The sequel is being written as we speak. I have already posted a teaser trailer in Resource if you're curious. As for the OT, we are still a long way off, but that is an interesting premise.

    Thanks so much for reading!


    Aussiegirl: Can I just tell you how happy I am that you didn't kill Anakin?! You could've gotten away with it, what with him being High Protector and all, but I'm glad you didn't! Those two crazy kids need some time to do something about their love! So, thanks for that!

    Well, I did promise I'd do my best to rectify the situation ;).

    Another great update! I'm sad that the story's almost done, but I'm glad you're writing it! ...you're a fantastic writer Rene (as I've said elsewhere, kethani), and if the stories keep coming, I'll be ecstatic to read them!

    I really appreciate that. Thanks so much. And yes, I too am sad that NC is ending. It has been a labor of love and over the year I've written it, a lot has happened to me personally so it offered me a perfect escape. But near fear, the sequel is going to coming very soon!

    Thanks so much for rea
  21. DancesWithBlasters Force Ghost

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    Jan 22, 2006
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    *Snags First Post and Jumps with Glee* Sigh. That was the most perfect ending I could think of. Putting closure to a lot of things, but still leaving others things open, letting us wonder. YAY for Sabe and Obi Wan finally getting together!!!!! [face_love] [face_dancing] [:D] [face_love]Obi Wan's proposal was SOOOOOOOOO SWEET!!!!!!!!! And YAY for Ani and Ami!!!! Staying on Naboo was definetly the better choice for Anakin, he's really a lot more mature and in tune with the will of Lady Force where he is. The Jedi Temple sufficated him, and tried to twist him into a typical Jedi, but he didn't and couldn't fit that image. I guess he always harbored bad feelings, somewhere deep down because of that. All Palpatine had to do was play off his fear and anger, and voila . . . "Rise Lord Vader." On a different note, I'm still definetly worried for Dahlia and Siri, things really aren't going too well for them.
    Very glad that you're doing a sequel. I only suggested the OT becuase I think it'd be really interesting to see how this affected Luke and Leia and their friends' lives. In short, Master Rev, I love you. @};-
  22. Darth-Buddy Jedi Master

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    Sep 18, 2005
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    [:D] Lovely ending, I look forward to the epilogue or whatever else you would like to write. Well done, you really have a way with words.=D=
  23. Ladynaye Jedi Master

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  24. AngelQueen Force Ghost

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    Mar 1, 2001
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    *shrieks happily* Obi 'n Sabé tied the knot! *squeals and bounces around the room* The wedding scene was beautiful, Rev. As I read it, I couldn't help but think that it complimented Anakin and Padmé's wedding in AotC. I could almost imagine the setting sun shining through the windows of the chapel, its rays resting on the two of them. *sighs dreamily* Beautiful.

    The moment between Anakin and Padmé was wonderful as well. *smiles indulgently* I love that they both accept one another's positions and are aware that there will one day be a time and place for them, when Queen Amidala and Lord-Protector Skywalker are no longer needed so much. And Lady Force sings of patience to her Chosen One. :D =D=

    Wonderful chapter, wonderful story overall, Rev! This story has been a joy to read! Can't wait to see what the epilogue has in store for everyone!

    AQ
  25. AussieGrrl Jedi Padawan

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    Dec 2, 2005
    Epilogue and cast list not withstanding, this was a fantastic wrap up, Rev. And, it leads the way nicely for a sequel (hint hint)! I'm so happy you saw fit to share your story with us, and I'm even happier (for you) that you finished it! ...that's definately one of my problems!

    XOXO
    Kate
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