A very good start, great reading. I'm finding the names hard to remember but the intent of the story is definately making a mark. I'm only up to your second post but will get through what you have written within two weeks [that's about 14 while I read!] I'm enjoying the grit of war!Furthermore the political intrigue you allude to! The explosion expanded to the valley?s edges instantaneously, consuming everything within. The Followers surrounding Altima were vaporized, and the other warriors on the battlefield were blown to pieces, unable to escape the field of destruction. Skin peeled off of bodies, followed by muscle and bone that was shattered into thousands of fragments. Body parts flew in all directions before being incinerated in the bright fire that burned away everything within the entire valley. The surrounding hills melted away, the ground collapsing in a crater as large as the valley was wide. The conflagration rose into the sky, burning away the very atmosphere creating a swirling vortex kilometers wide. Nice work!