The Storm Dynasty (JA)

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  1. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    Wow the new stuff is neat but I like the old colors beter.

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    The next morning the people of Kempen buzzed about the news of the King?s ?powers?. The night before someone had melted a hole in the wall of the ceremonial platform, revealing four huge turbo fans. Now everyone believed the King had no real powers and that he was a liar. Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan entered the negotiation room to find a very cheerful Kalen, and an incredibly sullen King. Again the King refused to bow to the demands of his people, but this time he wasn?t so arrogant about it. And so for the next five days the Jedi attended gridlock negotiations. The only plus to all of it was that Dahlia allowed them to accompany her to the lake every night, which the two found extremely relaxing. They also found out that there was a lot more to her than her strange appearance. Here spirit and cheerfulness seemed to overflow and effect both of them.
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    The following day as the Jedi walked to the negotiation room, they were met by the same cold advisor that greeted them when they landed. ?There will be no negotiations today.? he announced. Qui-Gon saw Obi-Wan brighten. ?His Majesty, has royal business to attend to up North, you are required to come as his protection. The representative of the people is also required to attend.? he said leading them down another hallway. Obi-Wan gave his Master a look that asked ?do we really have to go?? A glance from Qui-Gon told him his answer. Qui-Gon himself was pleased that they would not be spending time in negotiations, but having to spend the day on a transport didn?t sound much better to him.

    And it wasn?t. They spent a few hours traveling north, exited the transport, waited for what seemed like eternity while the King was in another room, then when he was done they got back into the transport to head back to the palace. The only good thing about the trip was that Kalen never left them, so they had someone to converse with. By the time the transport landed in front of the palace, the sun had long since set and it was dark. As they exited they were met by twenty armed guards and the same cold advisor. Qui-Gon felt a warning from the force. He turned to Obi-Wan who already had his hand on his lightsaber. Qui-Gon surveyed their position. They were completely surrounded by the guards. If anyone tried to attack them they would have to get through the guards first, and judging by their heavy weaponry that wouldn?t be an easy task. The only one Qui-Gon could see that could be in any danger was the advisor because he was standing on the outside of the circle of guards.

    Suddenly all the guards turned and pointed their blasters at the King, Jedi and Kalen. Two lightsabers ignited simultaneously. ?Put down your weapons Jedi, unless you want to have a few new holes. You can?t block every blaster bolt.? the advisor warned. Obi-Wan looked to his Master. They couldn?t block all the bolts at this range.

    ?What is the meaning of this!? the King shouted.

    ?The people of Kempen have decided a new leader is in order and have demanded that the old one be executed.? the advisor said with a cruel smile.

    ?You?ve betrayed me.? the King bellowed. ?You will die for your treachery.?

    ?You first.? the advisor replied.

    Kalen stepped forward. ?Brothers please.? he pleaded. ?We all want things to change, but this is not the way to do it.?

    ?And negotiations are?? he said. ?No, we have waited long enough; the time has come to act. Now Jedi, put down your weapons or the guards will fire.? Reluctantly the Jedi dropped their lightsabers and a guard came foreword and retrieved them. ?Don?t hurt the representative, he is on our side.? the advisor directed.

    There was a noise to their right and they turned to see a figure emerging from the woods. The figure stepped into the moon light. It was Dahlia. She was dressed in black and her long hair was down instead of up as she usually wore it. She froze upon seeing several blasters pointed at her. She must be coming from the lake, Obi-Wan and Q
  2. Master_Tahl Jedi Knight

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    A post, plot twist, and cliffhanger. What more could we ask for? How 'bout another post? Please!

    :)
  3. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    I'll post another part tonight if I get enough feedback.
  4. Master_Tahl Jedi Knight

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    Oh, post again please!! Here's feedback, this is a great story, but you left us with a cliffhanger, ah!
  5. padmemicheline Jedi Knight

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    Oh no, a cliffhanger! Post soon as I want to find out what happens to Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan as soon as possible!
  6. Kaylla Norn Jedi Knight

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    Pooooooosst please!!!! I was wondering.... This funny little niggle is telling me that the ability to control the weather really does run it the royal family but it's not the king that inhearited that gift..... Is my niggle wrong? What will happen, will Qui-gon use the force or ..... well, you wouldn't let them kill him I'm sure... right? <whimper> ...please don't kill him....please... Post soon! Please!!
  7. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    Sorry I didn't post last night. Someone else was hogging the computer. Anyway I have some good news. I finished my other story The Sith Rising Again, so I don't have to worry about updating it anymore and I can post on this one more often. I can't post right now but I will post sometime between to day and tommorrow. :)
  8. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    Here it is. I hope you enjoy. Sorry its kinda short.

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    ?Stop!? The guards turned back to Dahlia. ?I demand that you stop this at once. You may want to get rid of the King, but the Jedi have nothing to do with this. Let them go.?

    ?Who are you to make such demands?? the advisor asked. ?You?re just a servant.?

    ?And you?re just a terrorist, which doesn?t give you any legal power.? she retorted. ?Besides the King is going to be dead in a minute, so the crown is up for grabs.?

    ?So the servant is knowledgeable about anarchy. Still, that doesn?t give me any reason to obey you.? He turned back to the guards, ? Kill him.?

    ?You want a reason? How about this one.? she said, raising her arms to the sky. Her eyes changed from violet to silver. The wind began to blow, sending tendrils of silver hair around her face. Thunder rumbled in the distance. There was a brilliant flash of light as a bolt of lightning struck a foot away from the advisor.

    ?No, it isn?t possible!? the advisor said. But Dahlia wasn?t finished. The wind picked up, sending half of the guards flying in different directions. Obi-Wan himself was knocked off his feet, but Qui-Gon helped him up and put a protective arm around him. The ten remaining guards were pelted with huge hail stones until the only ones left standing were the advisor, Jedi, King and Kalen. Kalen was clutching his shoulder where a hail stone had hit him. Finished, Dahlia lowered her arms as her eyes returned to their original color.

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    Remember, feedback is welcome. ;)
  9. Master_Tahl Jedi Knight

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    Yay a post! A great one at that. Post more soon!
  10. Kaylla Norn Jedi Knight

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    nope my niggle was right. fun post very descriptive. Please post again soon

    ;~)
  11. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    I made you wait too long for another post. Sorry. I've run out of the prewritten stuff and writer's block doesn't help, but I 'll try to post as often as I can.

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    Everyone stared at Dahlia. They all were surprised, even the Jedi. ?Well that explains the tingly feeling.? Obi-Wan said. The Jedi quickly retrieved their lightsabers and approached the advisor who was still in shock. The King called for more guards who arrived almost immediately and arrested both the advisor and the wounded guards. They were escorted away but before they got very far the King ordered them to stop.

    ?You are all guilty of treason and will be decapitated tomorrow morning at dawn.? he said.

    ?You can?t do that. We haven?t had a trial.? the advisor protested.

    ?I can do whatever I please. I am the King.? he retorted.

    ?No. You have no powers. The servant is the true ruler. You cannot convict us of treason, we mearly tried to kill a worthless nobody.?

    ?We?ll just see about that.? the King snapped. ?Take them away.? On command, the guards departed taking the prisoners with them. The King then turned to Kalen, who was still staring at Dahlia. ?Meet me in the negotiations room in thirty minutes, and bring the servant with you.? he said and left.

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    I really don't like the new boards.
  12. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    Sorry. No new post. I wanted to tell you guys that I've written the next part, I just have to type it up. Unfortunately I can't today and I can't tommorrow cause I'm celebrating my birthday. It should be up by Friday. Sorry for the delay. :)
  13. Master_Tahl Jedi Knight

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    Thats good, and Happy tomorrow Birthday!
  14. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    I know, its past Friday. I just have to type my next post. It'll be up in about an hour. Sorry it took so long.
  15. Ibis Jedi Knight

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    Here it is.

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    Kalen still stood staring at Dahlia. ?It?s true.? he said finally. ?The legend of the powers is true.?

    ?You aren?t going to have a heart attack or anything are you?? Dahlia asked, she had been watching him turn paler and paler.

    Qui-Gon walked up to the representative. ?Kalen?? he asked. Finally he seemed to snap out of the trance he was in.

    He looked at Qui-Gon. ?Forgive me. This is just such a shock.?

    ?It is to the rest of us too.? Obi-Wan said crossing his arms and looking at Dahlia.

    ?Don?t look at me like that.? she retorted.

    ?You must admit,? Qui-Gon began, ? you didn?t exactly mention that you were a relative of the king during any of our conversations. Negotiations could have actually gone somewhere.?

    ?But-? Dahlia began.

    ?Had we known we wouldn?t have lost so many days in negotiations.? Qui-Gon continued.

    ?But-?

    ?Your failure to tell someone of your heritage could have caused a civil war and threatened the lives of hundreds of people.? Qui-Gon pointed out.

    ?But-? Dahlia said, trying one more time.

    ?We can argue later.? Kalen broke in. ?Now we have to get to the negotiations room.?
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    In the negotiations room the five people sat around the table. ?I want to know how the servant is related to the royal line and whether she wishes to go after the crown or not.? the King demanded.

    ?She is not a servant.? Kalen said. ?She is the heir to the thrown and the rightful ruler. You will address her as Princess Dahlia, and of course she wants the thrown.?

    ?I will not address a servant as a Princess!? the King retorted.

    Qui-Gon decided to interrupt, ?Your Majesty, I suggest you do as the representative asks.?

    ?I will not bow to the demands of a civilian!? the King said raising his voice.

    ?You do realize, ? Qui-Gon pointed out, ?that if Dahlia goes to the public with her talent, you will not remain king for very long.?

    The King gave the Jedi Master an angry look. ?Fine, I?ll call her Princess.?

    ?Now that that?s settled we should discuss how we should go about telling the public.? Kalewn said continuing.

    ?Tell your Princess that I will pay her a large sum to keep her mouth shut.? the King said.

    ?You cannot bribe us.? Kalen said. The discussion continued between the two. Dahlia who had just been sitting there listening decided to speak.

    ?Can I say something?? she asked. The two men ignored her and kept debating. The Jedi who were paying close attention to the men didn?t hear her. ?SHUT UP!? she yelled. Suddenly all eyes were on her. She was extremely irritated after being ignored. ?Listen, I never said I wanted to be the ruler.? she said.

    ?But don?t you-? Kalen started.

    ?I?m not FINISHED!? she snapped, ?and I?m not related to the royal family.?

    ?If you?re not related to the royal family, then why do you have the powers?? Obi-Wan asked.

    ?The legend of Eftran says he said that the one who has the powers will be the rightful ruler. He never said it was hereditary, that was his son.?

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    I know this is an odd place to stop at but I haven't written any more.
  16. padmemicheline Jedi Knight

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    Don't stop there! This is becoming quite an interesting story. Post soon!
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