The tale of Darth Vaders Son - A SW - AU (please be nice and post a lot of comments)

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  1. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    It was great, although Ive just noticed something. You called Ord a Outer Rim Depot. After reading the Essential Guide to Planets and Moons I just saw that it translated as Ordnance Regional Depot. Just wondering if you knew that.
  2. FTeik Force Ghost

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    That happens, when you get your information from a translated source. There it translated ORD as Outer Rim Depot and, for it was easy to memorize, stayed this way in my mind and i didn´t thought it necessary to back-check. Shame on me, since you are right, Spike.
  3. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    People make mistakes. We're only human.
  4. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Update tomorrow (or so i hope).
  5. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Lol. Hope everyone had a good thanksgiving anyway.
  6. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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  7. FTeik Force Ghost

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    And here it is as promised. Uff, you have no idea how difficult it is to write good battle-scenes until you try it yourself. My respectful bow to Timothy Zahn, Aaron Allston and Matt Stover.



    The tale of Darth Vaders Son


    Inside the system of ORD Grottos things weren´t looking well for both sides.

    The ?Intrepid? had finally lost its shields and had been knocked out by the ?Stormhawk?. The survivors of the crew were already fleeing the doomed ship in escape-pods and shuttles. The ?Intrepid? had´t died easily as the burning wreckage and the drifting debris of a sixhundred meter long Enforcer-Class-Picket-Cruisers and a Lancer-Class-Frigate showed. The ?Death´s Head? and the ?Tyrannic? in the centre of the formation seemed to have finally noticed the ships approaching from behind and were turning away from the main complex of the spacestation. It seemed Admiral Pellaeon wasn´t on shedule and Harbid didn´t wanted to get cought in the rear by the ships of the New Republic, that had been hidding behind the fifth planet of the system.

    ---

    General Olhum shook his head. The imperials had really waited till the last moment before turning against the new arrived attackers. But only the ?Death´s Head? and the ?Tyrannic? were turning around to face them, while the ?Stormhawk? and the ?Nemesis? seemed to ignore the new arrivals.

    For the sector-base itself that was a relief, since the two ships and their squadrons attacking it were those, that were now facing the New Republics reinforcements and out of ten Golan-Defense-Stations only one Golan-II and two Golan-I were still operational. The others were shieldless and had been powered down after being hit by Ion-cannons. For the squadrons of the ?Free Will? and the already destroyed ?Intrepid? the situation remained unchanged.

    For a moment the Elohim wondered, if he had allowed the imperials to much time to attack the sectorbase. His attempt to lure them into a position where they could be ambushed from behind seemed to have worked, but the price would be high. On the other side, he hadn´t expected the imperials to bring that many ships in their attack. Olhums original plan had been to leave those worlds alone, which the empire had attacked as a bait, while waiting for the imperial attack on the sector-base and the revelation of their real target. He had intended to quickly crush the imperial taskforce with his ships kept in-system and after that to sent them to help the defenders of one of the three most important systems inside the sector. But now he wondered, if the imperials main target wasn´t the sector-base itself.

    At the beginning of the battle it had been two Republic-Class Stardestroyers, four Assault-frigates, six Nebulon-B-frigates and ten Corellian Corvettes supported by four Golan-II-defense-stations that could fight ships to the size of a Victory-Stardestroyer and six Golan-I-defense-stations designed against starfighters and small frigates on the side of the New Republic. The imperials had brought four Imperators, twelve Victories, sixteen Enforcer-Class-picket-cruisers, twelve anti-starfighter-frigates of the Lancer-Class and twenty Corellian Gunships to the party.

    At the beginning of the battle thirty out of those sixty-four ships had been concentrating on the sectorbase of ORD Grottos and its defenses and out of them those still intact had stopped their attack and were now turning to face the second force Olhum had kept inside the system: Two ISDs, seven VSDs, three Enforcers, four Lancers and seven Correlian Gunships against four Mon Calamari-Cruisers, three ISDs, two RSDs, four Assault-frigates with a lenght of seven-hundred meters, six MC40-destroyers with a lenght of five-hundred meters, ten Dreadnoughts, eight Nebulon-B-frigates and twelve Corellain Corvettes.

    Finally the New Republic outnumbered the imperials, but not enough to make the fight easy.

    Despite that Olhum and his staff were now looking with some optimism to the future. They might suffer heavy losses today, but they would defeat the imperial oppressors and after t
  8. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    My God! An ESD and a not quite so well done "Thrawn Manoeuvre". Christ you keep coming up with gems. Gimme MORE :D

    (your own fault if you weren't quite the writer you are now i wouldn't demand more ;):p)
  9. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Better lower that writing quality Fteik, otherwise you'll be harassed forever. :p
  10. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    He's a writer, he's supposed to like being harassed ;)
  11. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    I wish people harassed me on my story.
  12. FTeik Force Ghost

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  13. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Sorry for the long delay. While it would be easy to blame the celebration of Christmas or "Lord of the Rings: The two towers." (yes, i also like such a piece of pure fantasy) the reason was quiet and simple a huge "Darth Writers Block".

    We should reach an end to the battle for the Kwa´ala-sector with the next part and we´ll also have a fighter-battle there. Until then: Enjoy!!!



    The tale of Darth Vaders Son


    Far away from the planetary atmosphere of the world called Kalmir Captain Finder watched the other ships of his task-force move into position above the shielded areas of the mining-centre. His own ship the ?Grandmoff Tarkin?, the Escort-Carriers and those of the imperial Strike-Cruisers that had been refitted to carry fighters were covering the landing operation against possible attacks from space, although Finder didn´t expected any kinds of reinforcements of the New Republic for the next few hours.

    Those forces were busy elsewhere.

    The transport of troops and their vehicles from orbit to the surface was always the most difficult and most dangerous part of an invasion. Planetary batteries of turbolaser- and ion-cannons which were designed to fight and to destroy capital ships would have an easy game with the smaller and less shielded transports, which were to big and to slow to evade the powerful enemy-fire like most fighters could. Especially if they had to slow down enough to be able to pass through the particle-shielding of the planetary shield. Finder might have been a Navy-man, but that didn´t meant, that he shared the wide-spread animosity between Fleet and Army. In moments like this he felt admiration for the grunts, who took such risks (more or less) willingly.

    At the time of the battle of Endor the Strike-Cruiser had been one of the most recent additions to the imperial fleet. Armed well enough two of those ships buildt by the Loronar Company were able to engage a Victory-Stardestroyer with chances of success and their modular construction allowed them to be build in a short frame of time and to be modified for a number of purposes. The standard version of the Strike-Cruiser carried one company of troops, one AT-AT, two AT-STs and one squadron of fighters. The four-hundred-fifty meter long ships could be configurated to serve as garrison-deployers, troop-transports, launch-platform for TIE-fighters (in that case they were able to carry three squadrons or the half of an imperial fighter-wing) or as planetary assault vehicles. In that case they carried up to five AT-ATs or ten AT-STs.

    Eighteen of those cruisers, that were actually medium sized frigates if compared with the empires destroyers and real cruisers and battleships, had been assigned to each of the three task-forces the empire had sent against the worlds of Pluwal, Botka and Kalmir. Of those eighteen Strikes six served as fighter-platforms, but they carried only two squadrons of TIEs instead of the possible three. The reason for this was the (for now slowed down) decline of the empire and the shortages in manpower and material. The other twelve ships from Loronar were modified for planetary assault. Instead of the usual AT-ATs they carried sixty AT-STs and sixty AT-Anti-Aircraft and two regiments of army-troops with a total number of four-thousand-eighty soldiers.

    As the name implied the All-Terrain-Anti-Aircraft was a walker, which had been designed against flying enemy-vessels. It was a flattened, quadropedal vessel with a flak-turret and while very effective in concert with other walkers or tanks, it was easy prey, if it was on its own. The reason for this was because its sole weapon was designed against aircrafts and not other tanks or infantrie and its armour was only slightly stronger, than that of a Scout-Walker.

    The Strike-Cruisers were not the only vessels, that deployed ground-troops. The Stardestroyers had taken positions in a low orbit above the planet and above those areas, that weren´t protected by a theatre-shield. This way they were out of the firing-arcs of those weapons of the New Republic´s defense
  14. FTeik Force Ghost

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    By now there are some open ends in this story (the assassins Lucan hired, the mission of his apprentice, the orphaned Gorin, the reaction of the NR-government to the new imperial campeign and so on).

    Although i will deal with all of them sooner or later, which do YOU want first?
  15. Cantus Jedi Padawan

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    great story FTeik

    I want to read NR-government reaction to the imperial campaign.
  16. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Yeah, a new vict.., ehm i mean reader.

    Welcome aboard Cantus. Glad you liked it.
  17. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Oops, did I forget to reply? Silly me.

    Ah, new blood. Fresh souls for Spike! Nwah ha ha...erm...*cough*

    I mean, welcome Cantus, I hope you enjoy this story as much the rest of us have.

    Oh, and I wanna know what happens to the apprentice. I think Ill have to reread this story since its been months since I did it originally. I keep forgetting the plot. Same with Union, I forgot about all the clones of the villains :p
  18. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    I'd like to see a mix between Lucan's "little" mission and the NR reaction.
  19. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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  20. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Thank you all for your replies.

    Unfortunately it will take some time for the next part (probabely till sunday), since it will be very long and have some very complex scenes of a fighter-battle. I only hope i can do it right.
  21. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    I have absolute faith you can
  22. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Don´t ask. This took longer than expected. I hope i can post an update tomorrow evening.

    See you and have a nice weekend.
  23. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Finally. This took one and a half week longer than expected. But i´m confident, it was worth the wait.

    Now enough of my whining and on with the story. Tell me what you think!



    The tale of Darth Vaders Son


    Unable to believe what his tactical displays were showing him, General Olhum watched horrified the marching up of the imperials.

    By now one Superstardestroyer, two ships that seemed to be some kind of superheavy destroyers or light-cruisers and six Imperial Stardestroyers. With the imperial ships at the other nine worlds, that were under attack at the same time, the empire had assembled the ISDs of a small sectorfleet.

    The timing of the attack of the reinforcements of the imperial forces couldn´t have been better. General Olhum´s fleet was already at combat-ranges with the imperial attackers, that were already inside the defense-perimeter of ORD Grottos and so the Stardestroyers were going to catch the ships of the New Republic, where Olhum and his staff had attempted to get the imperials: At the rear of their ships, where the density of weapons was lowest.

    ?What is the status of the ships in our dry-docks.? Olhum demanded to know with a hoarse voice.

    ?The engineers and their crews have doubled their efforts since the battle begun. Two of the Victories are combat-ready to seventy percent, one of the Mon Calamari-Cruisers to sixty-five percent.?

    The General took a deep breath. ?That has to be enough. They shall join the fight as soon as they have left the docks.?

    ?Yes, Sir.?

    Olhum looked back at his displays. The ships of the New Republic outnumbered the imperials nearly two to one, but the majority of those ships were frigate-sized and couldn´t compete with the firepower of a destroyer.

    However they could serve as distraction and screening-vessels. If they managed to force the imperials to divide the attention of their gunners, the few really big ships the New Republic had available wouldn´t have to take the entire brunt of the imperial firepower.

    That and the faith in the superior starfighters used by the New Republic were the lone Generals only hope to prevent defeat in this battle.

    Olhum had no idea, what else the imperials had in store for him and his forces.

    ---

    Crost Brey´lay was a male, from Bothawui and pilot of an A-Wing. He and the other members of his squadron had been stationed aboard the Stardestroyer ?Intrepid?. The imperial assault had turned the vessel of the Republic-class into a burning wreakage and, if there would have been time available, Crost would have wondered, where he and his comrades were going to be stationed after this battle was over. If there was an ?after the battle? for him.

    The chances weren´t bad for the bothan pilot and his wing-mates. Until the arrival of the imperial reinforcements the fighters of the New Republic had outnumbered their imperial counterparts. Their second advantage were the shields their fighters were equipted with and if things came to the worst, they could use their hyperdrives to escape. A third factor Crost Brey´lya considered to be important for his survival was the high number of fighters participating in this battle.

    Most people wouldn´t believe it, if they heard of it for the first time, but it was a fact, nevertheless. The higher the number of fighters on both sides participating in a space-battle, the lower the number of kills.

    There were several reasons for this. First, the number of targets, who were attackers at the same time was much higher. It is more difficult to shot your enemy down, while you have to evade his numerous comrades at the same time, who try to do the same to you. As a second the majority of beings has a deep-rotten instinct against killing without necessity. Morals and eduction strenghten this instinct in sentinent beings. Much of military training is therefor devoted to the supression of this instinct and to remove the moral barrier against killing. If an expansively trained, but still ordinary soldier would view his hostile counterpart as a living being, with a life, a fa
  24. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    Worth loosing my sleep over.. I'll give you more FB friday (tomorrow is to full for me to come online)
  25. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Excellent work Fteik, and that was a long chapter. I noticed a couple of spelling mistakes but I dont wanna criticise.
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