The tale of Darth Vaders Son - A SW - AU (please be nice and post a lot of comments)

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  1. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    Unlikely. That would be too easy. I expect more from FTeik... Or at least a kickass strategy.
  2. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Which will probably end up with his ass on a plate :p

    Or not, seeing as Fteik's read my comment so he'll make Han win just to spite me :p ;)
  3. FTeik Force Ghost

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    The exceptions of the readers and the need to surprise them makes turns unavoidable.
  4. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Updated the "Union"-story. I´ll try to have an update on this story at Thursday evening, but don´t let your hopes up.
  5. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Only two days late, must be a new record.

    This and the update to come might look like a filler, but i think it necessary to provide a few insights into Ogradevi-culture.

    Hope you like them.



    The tale of Darth Vader´s Son



    The moan, that escaped Tersar Frascati´s mouth didn´t resemble a sentient being, but sounded more like an animal. A very large animal.

    The praetor of the Ogradevi-Settlement Number 7,459 dropped his large body into the chair behind his office-desk. The weight of the seven foot tall non-human was enough to cause the joints of the seat to squeal.

    Taking a deep breath Tersar leant his massive head back and stared at the ceiling.

    His entire body hurt. Well, perhaps not his entire body. His head felt like all drums of the universe were beaten inside of it. Frascati knew, that until tomorrow his purple-grey skin would be covered with blue, if not blue-black bruises and scratches.

    The medic, who had looked him over after his fight against Lucan Vader had assured him, that he hadn´t suffered any internal injuries and that there were no signs of a possible concussion. After that the man had literally put him down, that Frascati wasn´t a young man anymore, that such fights were for the young hot-heads, but not for the praetor of the settlement, what had been going through his mind and so on.

    Tersar hadn´t interrupted the rants of the man, once, because he was to tired to argue with the medicine-man and second, because he knew, that the medics tended to become over-protective towards the Ogradevi, whom they didn´t have to sent to the termination-chambers. And of course, because his body hurt everywhere. And even if he had lost his fight against Lucan Vader, now his enemies and wanne-be-succesors as praetor had something to think about. "Takes probabely a week until the bruises will vanish." thought Frascati darkly. "Same goes for the pain. Admit it, you are not the youngest anymore."

    He sighed. To feel pain for a week was bad enough, but worse was, that decisions had to be made in that time.

    Significant decisions.

    Decisions, that would change the fate of the Ogradevi forever. Decisions, that included their visitor from outside the system.

    Lord Lucan Vader.

    By the "Evil Eye", what punch the man had in his fist. Lord Vader had made a convincing and passionate speach, while Tersar Frascati had been knocked out. He had seen a tape, while the medicine-man had taken a look at him. In beings more emotional and less calculating his words might have ignited a dangerous fire, there was enough hate and anger within the Ogradevi to provide more than enough fuel for it.

    However Ogradevi, who were ruled by their emotions usually didn´t survive very long, so Lucan Vader hadn´t gotten the reaction he might have hoped for. Frascati had seen it in the eyes of the man, even on tape. But he had also seen, that the words of Lucan Vader had fallen on fertile soil. Oh yes, the path before them would be a dangerous one. And it was his duty to guide and protect his people on that path. He doubted, that the motives of Lucan Vader were of similar nature. The man had outed himself as an enemy of the Galactic ..., no, of the New Republic and the Jedi-Knights.

    For a short moment the Praetor of Settlement 7,459 wondered, what had occured during the last two-thousand years (eight-thousand standard-years), that the name of the galaxy-spanning government had been changed. Not that it really mattered. It was the succeeding organisation of their old enemy and the Jedi-Knights were its protectors and if the Jedi were the protectors of this "New Republic", the differences to the old one couldn´t be that huge.

    So this Lucan Vader had a grudge against the Jedi and the Republic. So did the Ogradevi.

    It was obvious, that Lucan Vader wanted the Ogradevi as allies. That was the easy part. More difficult was, that the well-being of them was of no concern to him. Tersar Frascati couldn´t even blame the man for that. It would have been the same situation for him, were he in the place of L
  6. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Wow. That was some great depth you added to the Ogradevi. Can't wait for more.
  7. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    An unique insight in their culture. Chapters like these are needed for quality. Great job
  8. FTeik Force Ghost

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    I´m back.

    Sorry for the long wait.
  9. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    Whew glad to have you back. It would be a shame to see this one end before the finish
  10. FTeik Force Ghost

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    I don´t intend to "end" this story before it is over.

    The end will be the end. Promised.

    And if it takes another two years. Although it would be easier, if i won´t loose the last half of a chapter in the future, like i did with this one. This means we´ll have to wait a little longer until we get back into the "real" action.


    The tale of Darth Vader´s Son





    Stunned silence filled the doorway, while the eyes of Olwees Orny flickered in beginning panic over the form of the man standing in front of her.

    If the black uniform with its broad stripes of red at sleeves and legs and a broad belt of equal colour hadn´t confirmed the identity of the exterminator, one look into the stony face and the cold, hard eyes would have done so.

    Aside from the haetar, the exterminators belonged to the second group of a settlements population, whose appearence somewhere wasn´t a welcome sight. But while the haetar - despite their important social function - were more despised and viewed as useles eaters, the exterminators were met with fear and hate.

    They were met with fear, because they enforced the law inside the settlement and there was only one kind of punishment, if one was found to be guilty. Fear, because they were the ones, who kept the balance aboard the settlement intact by eliminating those, who were found to be expendable. Nobody knew, when the men in black and red appeared, if they were coming for him or another unfortunate Ogradevi sentenced to die in the termination-chambers.

    They were met with hate, because there was nobody, who hadn´t lost somebody to the implacable enforcers of death. As babies the Ogradevi probabely didn´t remember other toddlers taken out of their cribs, but they remembered other children at school taken away to be never seen again, co-workers, who didn´t came back to work, trainee-warriors, who were picked out of their fightgroups, comrades and friends from the dormatories, messhalles, gyms, nobody was spared and the only small comfort was, that they hadn´t come for oneself this time.

    If that wasn´t enough to cause feelings of resentment, the meeting with an exterminator, the way they did things, not to mention, what they were capable of, always caused feelings of impotence and helplessness within the other Ogradevi. It wasn´t, as if many ogradevi willingly surrendered themself to their fate, the will to survive was as strong inside them as in any other being, perhaps even stronger for the constant threat of death hanging above their heads. And while nobody seriously expected old ones or minors to succed against the emissaries of death in their black-red uniforms, workers and warriors in their prime were equally helpless.

    There were many stories and tales of doomed Ogradevi, who fought viciously, but without success against their executioners, the most famous one about the members of an entire fight-team trying to protect one of their comrades against two of the exterminators, while the third one (they usually operated in triplets) had been guarding the door. More cynical Ogradevi claimed, that the grim morale of that story was, that exterminators respected corps-spirit, since they had eliminated all ten members of the fight-team. For Ogradevi less cynical, the morale was a lot simpler:

    NOBODY escaped the exterminators.

    The exterminators lived in their own, confined area of the settlement, nobody knew, how they lived there and where they got new candidates for their horrible work and what they did to them, since exterminators had shown to be able to do things impossible for other Ogradevi to do, no matter how hard they might train. It couldn´t be the higher gravity in that section of the settlement alone, there had to be something else.

    But those thoughts were not the ones crossing the mind of the companion-turned prostitute. All Olwees Orny was able to think about was, that it was impossible, that her time had already come or that she was too young to die. What was a foolish idea, since the exterminators didn´t spare Ogradevi much younger than her.

    ?Olwees
  11. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    In case you have forgotten, i´m still a haetar. Frascati probabely needs to get laid

    [face_laugh]

    Those exterminators sound great. I wonder how Lucan will use them.
  12. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    i think they would look good in full red.... hint ;)
  13. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Emperor's Royal Guard?
  14. Wyn_Fel Jedi Knight

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    Great story! I can't wait to see where you're going with this. Keep it up. :D
  15. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Wow. Thank you and welcome Wyn-Fel. I hope i can keep up the quality.

    As for the exterminators, think of another group wearing black with red stripes, ah, badges.
  16. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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  17. FTeik Force Ghost

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    I had more a group from real-life in mind.
  18. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    I'll probably want to slap myself silly after hearing the awnser (cause i really should have got the other one with our dear CDU leader) but what the hell are you hinting at? Which group?

  19. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Well, remember, what the exterminators do.

    Updated The Colliding of Empires.

    See you all there, hopefully.
  20. FTeik Force Ghost

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    I´m back.

    I´ve updated the Union-story and i hope i´ll have an update of this story ready next sunday. But given past experiences you shouldn´t rely on that.

    See you and happy eastern.
  21. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Alright, here we are again.

    Contrary to those chapters, that deal with violence, torture or genocide (think Alderaan), this part ISN´T suited for minors and teenagers, so if you belong to one of these two, wait for the next update. Guess three times why.

    You have been warned.

    In our next chapter we´ll return to the action and the horrors of war. But until then: ENJOY!!!








    The tale of Darth Vader´s Son



    Olwees Orny let her eyes wander carefully over the interior of the room Tersar Frascati called office. Somehow she had expected it to be larger. And for the standards of the Ogradevi it was a huge room, it was just that the powerful presence of the praetor seemed to fill it to the last corner. The professional companion barely dared to breath. To her it felt, as if she had entered the personal cave of a very dangerous animal. This was the place, where all the important decisions concerning a million billion or one quadrillion beings were made. It was here, where it was decided, who would live and who would die. The thought reminded her of the Exterminator, who had escorted her to this place and who was now waiting outside. If Tersar Frascati wasn´t satisfied with her performance ... . Olwees Orny took a deep breath.

    She was a haetar, it was her profession to please people, to take care of their sexual needs, to entertain them and to help them relax and - by the stardragons - she knew her job. There was no reason for her to be afraid, the praetor was just a man, too, so she should have no problem to give him what he wanted.

    With those thoughts running through her head she was finally able to examine the man sitting opposite to her more closely.

    ---

    Tersar Frascati sat in his chair like a piece of stone. Only the golden pupils of his eyes were moving over the frame of the female he had called to his office. The first impression of the whore - the praetor thought of himself as a man, who didn´t wasted time or thoughts on euphemisms - seemed to confirm the valuations and observations collected in her file.

    Adjectives like rational, strong-willed and adaptable were the essence of those. Exactly the characteristics of the person he needed. Not to forget her physical attributes.

    Olwees Orny was a woman with long, slender legs, wide hips and a narrow waist that broadend over a ribcage with two perfectly shaped half-orbs into strong shoulders. The pale-yellow colour of her skin formed a nice contrast to her darkblue hair with a slight touch of green. For an Ogradevi-woman the features of her face were almost to delicate. Despite the fully developed body of a grown woman she reminded Tersar Frascati of a child, especially because Olwees Orny was less than six feet tall.

    Perfect.

    ---

    Trying to lay down and rest had shown to be fruitless exercise for Lucan Vader. Not even ten minutes had passed and Darth Vader´s son was on his feet again walking like a caged animal from one side of the room to the other. Lucan had discovered, that it was easier to think for him, when his body was in motion. It also stimulated the healing-process of his hurting body in addition to the small and short healing-trance he had initiated.

    Behind his forehead the mind was racing, weighing possibilities, calculating risks and benefits from an alliance with the Ogradevi, considering options and problems, the moves to make now and in the near future and the steps to take even later. After the fight he had been through Lucan should have felt tired and tried to relax, but he was already eager to get back to the task he had sat himself, to take over the galaxy and to shape it into the image his father and he had thought it should be.

    What concerned the son of Darth Vader was the fact, that he didn´t knew, how the war of the empire against the New Republic was going. He and the "Spectre" were only away for three days by now, but alot could happen in such a short time. Events, that requested his attention. Instead of that he was here in this force-forgotten system, among a total of twelve quintillio
  22. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    The lucky bastard!

    Oh, one thing.

    Instead of that he was here in this force-forgotten system, among a total of twelve quintillion beings

    By the American numberal system, that equals 12'000'000'000'000'000.

    Isn't that more than the galactic population?
  23. Grim_Reaper Jedi Knight

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    Hell not only is he a lucky bstard if word get's around of this millions of beings will look at those imperial recruiting posters a lot more positive...

    (They'd still need to get to the top of the food chain but still... I'd join ;))
  24. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Count me in. As long as I can spend my shore leave in that system :p
  25. FTeik Force Ghost

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    To answer an older question first, the real-life-example for the exterminators i had in mind were the men from the German "Waffen-SS".

    As for the population of the Ogradevi, i have a few things to clear up. Unfortunately, i still sometimes confuse the european numbers-system with the american system (the old one as well as the new one) in the heat of writing.

    Its simply, that i´m used to:

    Million = 10^6
    Milliarde = 10^9
    Billion = 10^12
    Billiarde = 10^15
    Trillion = 10^18

    while the classical system is:

    million = 10^6
    thousand millions = 10^9
    billion = 10^12
    thousand billions = 10^15

    and the new system is:

    million = 10^6
    billion = 10^9
    trillion = 10^12
    quadrillion = 10^15

    You understand the difficulties, i have to face?

    Yes? Good.

    Anyway, an average Ogradevi-settlement has a population of 10^15 people, the total population with 12,000 settlements would be 12*10^18 people (actually it will be more, but for the how and why you have to wait a little longer).
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