The tale of Darth Vaders Son - A SW - AU (please be nice and post a lot of comments)

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  1. Pelranius Force Ghost

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    *Does a celebratory dance*

    Finally!

    I have my guesses, but I'll keep them to myself.

    Luke is acting more and more towards Legacy Jacen, but he doesn't have an overgrown chicken on his shoulder yet.
  2. Darth_Abtranor Jedi Master

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    You're back!!!=D=
    A force using prisoner...hmmmm....
  3. FTeik Force Ghost

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    I've been a member of these boards for almost six years without a problem. However during the last three or four months i was temporarily banned (largely for disagreeing with the new VIP-policy at the literature-board) trice.

    I don't own this place and i don't make the rules, but I'm also not willing to censor myself or keep silent on matters i think different of feel strongly about, so it might happen again and i don't know, if I'm coming back in such a case (there is a live outside of JediCouncilForums).

    Should this happen there would be no future updates of my stories on this board, but I am and would be posting them at fanfiction.net or stardestroyer.net.

    In any case, here is the next part. Enjoy!




    The Tale of Darth Vader's Son


    Suddenly there was a hole in the Force, a bubble of nothingness and if Miney hadn't been prepared for what to expect, she might have given herself away. The Ysalamiri responsible for the hole in the all-encompassing energy-field created by all living beings were just another obstacle out of many. And as her Master liked to point out obstacles existed to be overcome and so he had made sure, that she was able to operate without the Force. Considering how far she and Giswad had already gotten into the dungeons of the Altraz-prison-facility half of the job was already done.

    The four NRI-guards had escorted them first over a bridge, then inside a small dome-shaped building that housed nothing but a large lift-platform, which had transported them to the Sixth Level of Block Four. There a walkway had been extended from the central pillar, bridging a gap of perhaps ten meters and then they had walked through another fourty meters of corridor with doors left and right. The end of the corridor lead into a large cubical room. Smaller pillars with cages and life-support-systems for the small lizards from Myrkr stood in the corners, while two desks for the guards were placed on opposing sides of the cell made of transparisteel in the centre of the room.

    And inside the cell was a man laying on a narrow bed.

    "Is that him?" Miney asked, trying to put some awe into her voice. It never hurt to flatter the misconceptions about their own importance people like these guards had to have.

    "Yes, that is him." One of her escorts answered and Miney almost heard the unspoken "And we are the only ones good enough to guard him." The man pointed at the prisoner. "Take a good look. You'll never get that close to an Imperial SupremeCommander again in your life."

    A long time ago the man laying on his cot inside the cell must have been an impressive sight. Must have been, but now he seemed to have aged a century since his capture. With his hair fallen out, his eyes laying deep in their sockets and the loss of several kilograms of weight Xecr Nist was a thin, frail looking shadow of his former self, more dead than alive. How such a pathetic sight could be of any help to her Master's plans was an enigma to Miney, but she had her orders and appearences could be deceiving.

    The Sith-Apprentice allowed disappointment to enter her voice. "I don't know, but i expected a former Imperial SupremeCommander to be more awe-inspiring." She shrugged her shoulders. "On the other side, i don't expect lots of trouble transporting him in that condition." She turned to the guards. "I suggest you take the prisoner out of his cell, while me and my companion open the stasis-box."

    The entire way since she and Giswad had been assigned their entourage the young Sith-Apprentice had been working on the minds of the NRI-soldiers to make them more compliable to her suggestions. Miney had known what to expect, that she couldn't use her powers on the soldiers of the NewRepublic with four Ysalamiri around and so she had tried to influence them in another way. It was impossible to give them orders which would be in conflict with their loyality and the purpose of their job, but as long as Miney's words didn't create a conflict the men would be open to her "suggestions", even when she was unable to directly influence
  4. Pelranius Force Ghost

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    Juicy.

    Looks like Miney and her master are rounding up darksiders left and right.

    Though to be honest, I was expecting Bevel Lemelisk to be the target of the jailbreak.

    Two credits that Miney and Xecr narrowly escape Luke, but not before Luke finds out she's a Sith.
  5. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Since when is Bevel Lemelisk (who is already executed at that point of time, IIRC) force-sensitive? [face_whistling]

    And what do you mean with "rounding up darksiders"? :oops:
  6. Pelranius Force Ghost

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    I'd forgotten that the prisoner was force sensitive! :oops:

    And I assumed from Pellaeon offensive (complete with Star Dreadnought Reaper and all) that this fic was set before ABBY 14 (Crystal Star). IIRC, Bevel Lemelisk received a furlough from his captors to look at Hethrir's worldcraft, according to NEGtC.

    "Recruiting" would be a better term, but somehow, I'd think some of them (darksiders) would need a little bit of "persuasion".
  7. FTeik Force Ghost

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    I have to look up the EC again, but I'm sure CrystalStar was before Pellaeon's Orinda-campaign. BTW, a few chapters of THIS story prior we had a small scene with Leia comforting Anakin about his bad dreams and the episode with Hethrir mentioned there.

    If not and the time-line of ToDVS is different from the official time-line then I have to say "Sorry, who cares, I'll take an artistic liberty with this. It is my story, after all." [face_whistling]

    Lucan doesn't want to recruit Nist. He wants him for the same reason Luke Skywalker was/is at the prison-facility.
  8. Pelranius Force Ghost

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    I jumped the gun, I see. (I'm talking about my assumption that Miney was coming recruit Nist)

    All questions will be answered, I suppose.

    Incidentally, I'd like to see a Sith without a red lightsaber one of these days.

    It's good to see NR guards be cannon fodder once for a change (besides the Tantive IV)

    Though looks like Cracken is losing his touch. Only stun weapons? Though there must be a FIDO droid somewhere.

    PS: Rebooted the Perilious Balance as Destiny's Inferno.

    PPS: If I remember correctly, Xecr Nist was quite porky in his face. Prison did some good for him in that department, at least. [face_whistling]
  9. FTeik Force Ghost

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    To quote the last update:

    "She understood the reasoning behind giving prison-guards only stun-weapons, it would prevent prisoners trying to break out from getting their hands on lethal weapons, "[face_dancing]
  10. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Just found this update too.

    Nice jailbreak scenes. And I have to admit, too, I thought Lucan would be looking to recruit some darksiders for his cause.
  11. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Here is the next part of our prison-break. Actually I had planned to update the "Union"-story by now, but that showed to be more difficult than expected. The pieces simply won't come together and before I descended into a total writers-block, I decided to continue here.

    Have fun.



    The Tale of Darth Vader's Son



    The blade of energy completed the circle it had cut into the ground. For several moments the piece of ferocrete and durasteel was still a part of the floor, then it dropped down. The four guards surrounding the hole tightened their grips around their stun-rifles, the shafts of the weapons pressed firmly against their shoulders. The four men were far enough away from the edges of the hole to be seen from below and close enough to make it impossible to miss should the prisoner and those trying to rescue him decide to stick their heads out. They also had every reason to assume, that they were far enough away, should the first thing to come out be a grenade - at least far enough that only two of them would be impeded, should the grenade explode, while the others would be able to get away in time.

    Unfortunately nobody had prepared them for a Force-user.

    ---

    Miney held the piece of floor in position with the Force long enough for herself and her companions to get away from the hole in the ceiling. Discovering the locations of the four guards on the next level had been no problem. The young woman, who had already caused so much mayhem took a grenade from her belt. Setting the timer on ten seconds she let her Force-grip on the ceiling slip and levitated the grenade below the newly created opening. Counting back she was by three seconds when she pushed the hoovering grenade straight upwards.

    ---

    The guards looked up in surprise. From one moment to the other it had been there. A cylindrical object, that had come out of the darkness in a straight line and was now hoovering one meter in the air when they had expected the thing to clatter on the floor on one side of the hole after being thrown in a wide arc. Which meant, that the distance from every soldier to the grenade was the same.

    "Huttslime." one of them tried to curse and then the thing exploded.

    ---

    The light and heat and shockwave were barely gone when Miney leaped through the hole. The guards had tried to get away from the grenade, but even if the explosion hadn't killed them it had thrown them to the floor. One of them on the side where she had landed was unconscious, but his comrade was already trying to get back on his feet, his hands gripping at his weapon. A buzzing sound was the last thing he heard before something hot and crimson severed both of his lower arms. With a scream the man dropped back to the floor and passed out, while Miney twirled around to face the men on the other side of the hole. Both of them had managed to stand up and they were bringing their weapons into shooting-position when an invisible hand picked them from their feet and threw them against the wall. They joined their consciousless comrades already on the ground.

    The female Zabrak looked down the corridor, then back over her shoulder making sure, that nobody was left to attack them, then she stepped to the hole in the ground.

    "Alright, you can come up."

    ---

    Luke Skywalker reached the first ramp upwards to the next level. Through the Force he felt the pain and the fear of the men on the upper floor of the prison-block and for a moment it caused him to forget the more exotic means designed to prevent prisoners from escaping. Out of a full run he jumped on the ramp, was already making the next step -

    "Don't. The floor is ... ." one of the guards behind him shouted.

    - and his feet lost their grip on the ground.

    "... smooth like a mirror."

    The Jedi-Master dropped very undignified down and only in the last moment Luke Skywalker managed to deactivate his lightsaber before his body hit the ground with a loud thump. The impact drove the air out of his lungs as he slided down the ramp and over the flat floor towards the two men Direct
  12. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    This could be quite a fight.
  13. Pelranius Force Ghost

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    Major ouch time.

    Luke could probably deal with CD-16 or Miney seperately, but trying to do both at the same time while following the platform should be quiet interesting to watch.

    Do Jedi Masters bounce when they fall?
  14. FTeik Force Ghost

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    I have good news and bad news. The good news is I got a new job at the beginning of the year. The bad news: it is a vergy good job, one I want to keep and also very complex. So aside from regular work I have to do one or two hours in addition in the evenings to get myself up to the task. Consequently this is time I no longer have for hobbies and the making of updates. This will change back once I'm fit at my new field of work, but until then it will take even longer than before. I'm really sorry about that, but the issues of real life take priority.
  15. FTeik Force Ghost

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    A small update for those who want to know, what happens next in our prison-break.

    Enjoy.



    The Tale of Darth Vader's Son



    Luke Skywalker flew through the air, lightsaber ignited, when the blasted droid opened fire with its four weapons. Guided by the Force Luke's blade intercepted the incoming shots with almost lightspeed, but while they didn't kill him their impacts pushed him away. Already he was loosing altitude and with a resigned sigh he allowed himself to drop towards the floor.

    ---

    "I think we won't see him again." Savan claimed calmly.

    "Don't be so sure of that." Xecr Nist cautioned. "You underestimate the power of the Force."

    "There is only one exit to this building and Skywalker is more than fifty meters below us. How should he catch up with us in time?"

    "By slowing us down." Miney, who had ignored the exchange between her two wards, hissed.

    Xecr Nist and Savan looked in wonderment at the young female, who was the one in charge, despite still a teenager and therefor much younger than both of them. Now, that they had stopped bickering they could hear the buzzing sound of a lightsaber getting louder and louder.

    "That's ..." Savan muttered nervously.

    "A lightsaber." Xecr Nist confirmed. "How ... ."

    "Just his lightsaber." Miney clarified. Then the entire platform was shaken through and came to a halt. "He has hit the repulsor-block. The lift is no longer able to move."

    ---

    Calling his lightsaber back into his hand Luke looked upwards to the lift-platform. Clipping the weapon back to his belt he started to climb up the pillar. Actually climbing was a misleading term, the designers of the facility had put the steps of a ladder into the pillar in cases of emergency and the Jedi-Master pushed himself upwards to another step ten meters above him. After four of those jumps he was close to the platform, reaching out with his Force-enhanced senses he could make out his opponents further upwards, climbing up the ladder.

    All, but one.

    ---

    Miney stood on the platform, waiting patiently for her opponent to arrive. Above her the rest of her party was climbing up the ladder at a much slower speed than she felt Luke Skywalker using. On her own she would have been as fast as the Jedi-Master, if not faster, but unfortunatly she was limited by her companions. Only Xecr Nist might have been able to keep up with her on a good day, but the good days for the former Executor of the Empire were long gone. Savan and Giswad couldn't use the Force and CD-16, while still able to climb faster than an ordinary human, was too heavy.

    For a moment she had considered leaving CD-16 here to take care of the blasted Jedi, but the territory didn't favour the weapons-systems of the droid. He might have been able to slow Skywalker down, but would have certainly been destroyed in the process and she still needed the droid for their enemies on the other end of the ladder. No, she was the only one able to slow the Jedi down without dying during the attempt.

    ---

    Shrouding himself in the Force Luke Skywalker slowly climbed the last few meters towards the platform, his lightsaber in one hand, ready to activate it in a moments notice to deflect incoming blaster-bolts. He would have felt more comfortable, if he could have activated the weapon, but the buzzing sound might not only give his presence away, but also betray his exact position to an observant enemy. The thought caused him to make a sour face, again Luke was forced to realized, that the prime weapon of the Jedi wasn't developed for situations, where stealth was required. On the other side Jedi weren't supposed to sneak around in the dark like common thugs and they were also supposed to have other options available to them. Options that were negated by an opponent, who could use the Force, too. He had almost reached the platform, when a small sound caused him to freeze. Had he been discovered? But no, the being trying to ambush him had simply shifted its weight from one foot to the other. A few moments passed and when nothing happened Luk
  16. Ocelotl_Nesto Jedi Master

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    I still look forward to Luke meeting his half brother.
  17. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Good luck with your new job, FTeik! [face_peace]
  18. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Thank you, Spike.

    To be honest, I wanted to be finished with this part of the story by now, but I never expected a prison-break could be so long. I suggest you just enjoy it. There are also two references to works of the EU in this update. Wonder, if you'll recognize them.



    The Tale of Darth Vader's Son


    Miney reached the opening in the ceiling of prison-block four. Taking a last look back she couldn't see anything of Luke Skywalker, but she could still sense him in the Force. Supressing a sigh she admitted to herself that, if it would really have been that easy to kill the Jedi-Master, Skywalker would have been killed years ago and she wouldn't have to fight him now. Turning towards the walkway that connected block four with the central hub of the Altraz-prison-facility the Sith-Apprentice discovered, that her companions had covered two thirds of the way. The crew of the prison would have to be blind and deaf, if they hadn't noticed the alarm in block four and they would have to be totally incompetent, if they wouldn't await prisoners trying to break out on the other end. No, she and her companions would have to fight their way out. It was time to call for re-inforcements.

    Pressing a button on the comlink on her left wrist Miney activated the combat-droids still aboard "Danaer's Gift". "CD-10 till CD-15. Code "Bloodflow". You're to leave the ship and attack the prison-facility."

    Deactivating the comlink Miney made a sour face. The five combat-droids were the last trick she could pull out of her sleeve. From now on all cards were on the table and either she succeeded or... . There was no use thinking about the "or". She had other things to worry about. Even with the five combat-droids attacking the prison from the outside and causing a distraction the guards on the other side of the walkway would slow them down, what would give Luke Skywalker enough time to catch up with them and prevent them from escaping.

    What meant, that she still had to take care of the Jedi-Master.

    A sound like "whoosh" reached her ears. Miney looked through the opening in the floor, but couldn't see anything. Again the "whoosh". As if a large, un-aerodynamic mass was shoved through the air. Whatever it was, it meant that Skywalker would sooner or later - more likely sooner - arrive and Miney wasn't interested in a repeated performance of what had happened on the lift-platform, so she started to run.

    ---

    When he regained consciousness he kept his eyes closed. From what he remembered there had been a blinding white hurting them. In fact every cell of his body seemed to hurt. He was laying on his back, cool air was drifting over his exposed skin and - Luke Skywalker remembered, where he was and his eyes shot open. The fight on the turbolift-platform, the thermal-detonator, his jump away from the explosion. How long had he been out of action? And had his inactivity allowed his opponents to escape? Checking his internal sense of time Luke discovered, that he had been out for less than a minute. Not bad for being within the blast-radii of a thermal-detonator and making a drop that would have killed any kind of ordinary being. But for a Jedi, who could make jumps twenty meter or more downwards without breaking his legs when hitting the floor, a drop out of fifty meters wasn't a lethal affair.

    Just a very painful one.

    As the flash proved, that run through his body when he tried to stand up. A groan escaped Luke's lips and he looked around to take in his surroundings. He was on the ground-level of block four, the lower part of the central pillar had come down after the explosion (thankfully no parts of the debris had hit him) and he could see Director Yuun and his guards winking at him from two levels above. Where were the escapees?

    Reaching out through the Force the Jedi-Master discovered the small hint of a presence high above him, just outside the opening in the ceiling through which the turbolift-platform would have come in or taken exit, when it wasn't blown into pieces. Question was, how could he get up there
  19. Spike2002 Former FF-UK RSA and Arena Manager

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    Wonder what the strength (and weakness) is???

    Couldn't spot any references to the old EU, but I did recognise a paraphrase of the, "If droids could think then none of us would be here" that I definitely remember from somewhere from Star Wars :p Tho I'm sure it was one of the movies.
  20. Ocelotl_Nesto Jedi Master

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    I like the post... Will she pull a Dooku and attempt to harm another to make her escape?
  21. FTeik Force Ghost

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    We shall see, we shall see.[face_whistling]
  22. reagan64 Force Ghost

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    Hmm. I don't like the looks of that smiley...
  23. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Just to inform you all: This story is NOT abandoned. Real life just doesn't leave me with any time at all. At the job we're doing the halfyear balance, ten of my relatives celebrate their birthdays during June/July and my sister is getting married.

    Expect an update as soon as I have the time again.
  24. FTeik Force Ghost

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    Just thought I'd let you know, that the next update is halfway finished.[face_whistling]
  25. anakinskywalkerhalo1 Jedi Knight

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    I got ?:
    How do u post your our stories here
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