Saga ~The Thoughts of an OC Jedi~

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by LittleMissNightsaber, May 2, 2009.

Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.
Moderators: Briannakin, mavjade
  1. LittleMissNightsaber Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    May 2, 2009
    star 3
    Title: The Thoughts of an OC Jedi
    Author: LittleMissNightsaber
    Genre: Vignette
    Summary: Before her death, a young Jedi Knight thinks.


    Long ago I was respected. Now I am spat upon by everyone. My friends gone. My enemies rule. I sit in this cell awaiting my death at the hands of a cutthroat. I cry when I feel the pain of my trusted allies, and I smile faintly when I feel they are at peace. Soon this galaxy will be liberated. Soon this Empire shall fall. Soon I will be at peace.

    When I dream, I see images of a widow dying, babies crying. An old Jedi sitting in sand, an older one living in a swamp land. Then I see the babies growing up and destroying the Empire. And then I sense great joy coming from... a monster, and I hear the screams of a tyrant, calling upon the force.

    When this comes true, I will be at peace, knowing that the galaxy is free.

    I know it's short, but hey, I just signed up
  2. Valairy Scot Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    Sep 16, 2005
    star 5
    Hey, I know it's short, too :D but it's very well done. Sometimes (points to self) long and overblown dilutes the story; sometimes short and succinct, like many of the drabbles, tell volumes in a few well-chosen words.
  3. padawan lunetta Force Ghost

    Member Since:
    May 15, 1999
    star 6
    Very nicely done! I like the vision of Obi-Wan and Yoda. Good job!
  4. LittleMissNightsaber Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    May 2, 2009
    star 3
  5. mujapple-juicey Jedi Master

    Member Since:
    Jul 21, 2008
    star 4
    Absolute masterpiece... perfect emotional expressions!
  6. LittleMissNightsaber Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    May 2, 2009
    star 3
    I've got another fic called I scream You scream. BTW thanks.
  7. GuNgAnFaN3090 Jedi Grand Master

    Member Since:
    Oct 16, 2008
    star 5
    Short and sweet. Very nice. I liked the last line. Keep up the great work!

    =D= =D=
  8. LittleMissNightsaber Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    May 2, 2009
    star 3
  9. LittleMissNightsaber Jedi Knight

    Member Since:
    May 2, 2009
    star 3
    For anyone who reads this in the future: Thank you:D

Moderators: Briannakin, mavjade
Thread Status:
Not open for further replies.