Saga Uber Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith (teaser)

Hi all,

Haven't posted here for awhile, but I've been getting a number of messages lately asking me about when I plan to finish the Revenge of the Sith rewrite, and, since I DO have some of it written, I thought I'd share those scenes with you all in the faint hope of stalling the torches and pitchforks

Please note that this is an unfinished draft. Whole scenes may yet change as need be, and certainly some of my dialog is still stilted (my editor hasn't seen this yet ) And bear with me... Revenge of the Sith WILL be finished.

My other rewrites are at:
http://swiftbow.com/UberStarWars/index.html
or at this site:
(Ep I: Phantom Menace)
http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22222783&brd=10476&start=22291774
(Ep 2: Rise of the Empire)
http://boards.theforce.net/Message.aspx?topic=22795930&brd=10476&replies=2


Title: Star Wars Episode III: Revenge of the Sith
Author(s): Travers Jordan and Kenyon Jordan
Timeframe: 19 BBY
Characters: Anakin, Padme, Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Palpatine, Count Dooku, General Grievous, Mon Mothma, Bail Organa, Garm Bel Iblis, Ackbar, Yoda, Mace Windu, and various Senators, Jedi, new characters, and others.
Genre: Alternate universe/remake
Keywords: AU, AotC, A/P, EU
Summary: This is the (as yet) unfinished third and final prequel episode. The tale follows the rise of the empire, the beginning of the Rebel Alliance, and the fall of Anakin Skywalker.



EXT. SPACE ? TITLE CARD

A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away?

A vast sea of stars serves as the backdrop for the main title, followed by a roll-up, which crawls into infinity.

EPISODE III: REVENGE OF THE SITH

The fate of the Galaxy hangs in the balance. The newly formed GALACTIC EMPIRE, faced with increasing defiance, is bringing forth the might of its clone armies to eliminate all resistance.

System after system is falling under the yoke of the Empire. The SEPARATIST ALLIANCE is breaking apart. Only the TRADE FEDERATION remains intact, but its resources diminish with each passing day.

However, with the newfound aid of the JEDI KNIGHTS, the Trade Federation may finally be poised to strike a blow against the Empire that will rally more systems to the cause?

Pan down to reveal a Lambda class shuttle, flanked by two TIE fighters. They head toward a large space station, one of many orbiting Bilbringi. These are the Bilbringi Shipyards, owned by Sienar Fleet Systems. This is evidenced by the corporate logo and signs on the space docks. Many Star Destroyers can be seen in various stages of completion.

The shuttle and its escort enter a docking bay.


INT. BILBRINGI SHIPYARDS DOCKING BAY ? DAY

A small contingent of Clone Troopers stand to attention as GRAND MOFF TARKIN emerges from the shuttle. Tarkin dresses as an Imperial fleet officer, but with the markings of his rank as a governor of multiple systems.

He is quickly greeted by an Incom ENGINEER.

ENGINEER
Welcome to Bilbringi, sir. Mr. Sienar sent me to help you with your things.

TARKIN
(frown)
Aren?t you an engineer? Do you even have security clearance for this wing?

ENGINEER
Well, um, things have been hectic? lots of construction going on? Mr. Sienar?s waved most of the security requirements temporarily.

TARKIN
Oh, has he?

Tarkin pauses, because RAITH SIENAR, head of Sienar Fleet Systems, is approaching, with a broad smile on his face. Sienar is dressed formally for the occasion.

SIENAR
Greetings, Senator, or should I say, Grand Moff Tarkin?
(they shake hands)
Congratulations on your appointment to the Outer Rim Territories.

TARKIN
(smiling back)
A pleasing assignment from the Emperor himself. These new vessels in production will be a great aid to policing this sector, Raith.

SIENAR
Thank you. But I assume you haven?t come just to offer praise.

TARKIN
(with a chuckle)
No indeed.

The two depart the docking bay. The Engineer gathers up Tarkin?s bags.


INT. SIENAR?S OFFICE ? DAY

Sienar and Tarkin enter the office. Sienar motions for his companion to sit and he pours both of them drin

 

This is great. I cannot wait for the rest of it.