Before What Remains - Obi-Wan/OC, of Padawans and Masters

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  1. obimom Jedi Grand Master

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    I have to wonder what happened to Obi-Wan on that mission?

    I've also wondered and meant to ask how old is Obi-Wan and Kali in this?

    Good chapter - looking forward to more!

    :)
  2. Skywalker_T-65 Force Ghost

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    Great chapter. I am wondering just what happened on that mission with Obi-Wan though. Looking forward to the next update.
  3. laloga Jedi Grand Master

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    Only two chapters left! obimom: Thanks for all of your reviews! Obi and Kali are about 16/17 during the events of this story.

    Skywalker_T-65: I forgot to note that some of the events of the book,
    Secrets of the Jedi, by Jude Watson, were referenced in the last chapter. If you haven't read that book, let me just say that Obi and Siri encounter some "issues" with attachment.


    As she'd expected, Dex had lent Obi-wan a somewhat food splattered tunic that more or less concealed his outfit, though Kali did not miss the shrewd look of understanding that gleamed in the Besalisk's eyes as he took in her companion. He made no comment, however, just handed Obi-wan the garment and winked at Kalinda. Lirra made a place for him at the bar, where she promised to keep his glass of muja juice full, while Kali made her way back onstage.

    Though she had played before him many times, something was different now and she felt oddly anxious as she considered what song to play. Finally, she settled on one of the older songs that she'd learned from studying the Archives, a fast paced and intricate melody with equally complex vocals. It got the crowd clapping along and she felt a little thrill of pride, as she often did, at the way some of the audience members responded to her music. She could feel their enthusiasm, a tangible ripple in the Force that encouraged her and added to her own delight in the music; that energy she focused back inward on the way her fingers slid over the gitar and the resonance of her voice.

    As the final notes of the song faded, she couldn't help but grin at Obi-wan, who raised his glass to her before setting it down to applaud with the rest of the audience. Someone shouted out a request and several others seconded the motion, so Kali was happy to oblige.

    Several hours later, when Dex shut down the kitchens and Lirra began to collect the scattered glasses, Kali realized that it was far past the time when she usually left. After stowing her instrument safely in the back, she met Obi-wan by the stage, who was looking at her with admiration.

    ?That was impressive,? he said as she mopped at her forehead with the edge of her sleeve. ?I've never heard half of those songs, but you were very good.? He glanced at his chronometer. ?Blast!?

    ?I know,? she replied, waving goodnight to Lirra. ?It's a lot later than I usually leave.?

    ?Ah, I see you have an escort home, kiddo,? Dex said as he shambled over to them. He looked at Obi-wan. ?I worry about her sometimes, running around Coruscant this late.?

    ?I-?

    ?I know,? the Besalisk said, putting one of his large hands on her head. ?You can take care of yourself. But I'm still glad that you have some company tonight.?

    Kali rolled her eyes. ?Goodnight, Dex. Tell Joyle I'm leaving, would you? I think she's in the back, counting stacks of credits. I don't want to disturb her from her favorite pastime.? With a final wave goodnight to Dex, the Padawans exited The Chrysalis and headed out into the evening.

    Generally, Coruscant was climate controlled, but the weather regulators liked to give the illusion of actual seasons; this night, the air had the barest edge of a chill to it, a sudden change from the heat that her body had gathered while she stood under the lights of the club, and Kali found herself rubbing her hands on her arms to warm them up. A moment later, she felt a spreading warmth across her shoulders as Obi-wan placed his cloak over her. She smiled at him.

    ?You're such a gentleman.?

    He shrugged. ?You looked cold. I'm still a bit warm, to tell you the truth.? An air taxi sped above them, and he glanced up, following its path with his gaze. ?How do you normally travel? Do you walk every night??

    She shook her head. ?The only money that I take from the tip jar is to cover the fare to and from the Temple. Come on, the best place to catch a taxi is around this corner.? They headed towards one of the hubs where would-be passengers waited for taxis. Several minutes later, they were speeding home through the night. Coruscant was neve/>
  4. obimom Jedi Grand Master

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    I was going to say - they are going to be in so much trouble...but now they already are...

    Obi-Wan - loves two girls? (I know you hinted that what happened to Obi was "The Secrets" story basically).

    But he's acting on it with one...Kalinda...hmmm...


    What will she do if she finds out about what happened with him and Siri?

    Now whats going to happen to Kali as she has to face the council about her sneaking out to sing business...?

    Good chapter...lookign forward to more.
  5. JediKaren Jedi Master

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    wow...another great chapter. I really, really, just really like your chapters and characters. And I really agree with the whole Force and Love are the same thing and the Jedi should embrace that. lol I wouldn't make much of a Jedi in that temple.
  6. serendipityaey Force Ghost

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    Chapter 7... Very nice! It's very nice seeing Kali begin to come into her own, especially this way, using music :D I love picturing her out in the more - interesting - parts of Coruscant, doing something for *her*


    The hardest part of covering her tracks for that night was getting all of the glitter off of her clothes.


    Ha, this made me smile [face_laugh] And Obi couldn't find her there? O:) Obi and Kali keep narrowly avoiding strip clubs... you've really got me wondering... I feel a nag coming on...


    ?You gonna turn into a pumpkin on us??

    ?What??

    The blue-skinned woman rolled her eyes, and pushed Dex aside. ?Never mind him, he never makes any sense.


    And this really made me smile! Of course, Dex would say something like that :p Just love it.

    And finally this...


    ?That was for you, dad,?


    [face_love] Great chapter


  7. Valairy Scot Chosen One

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    I've read (and enjoyed) your stories over on ff.n and I'm glad to see you on here. Like Obimom (Deb), I prefer Siriwan when Siri is in the story, but this also works.

    Boy, though, are the two padawans going to be in trouble.
  8. laloga Jedi Grand Master

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    Thank you so much to those of you who have reviewed! It means a lot to me, it really does. It's funny, I wrote this so long ago...it's a bit strange "revisiting" it, now. In a good way, of course!

    obimom: Ah, young love. It's a crazy thing, yes?

    JediKaren: Thank you! If you like Kalinda, you're in luck, as pretty much all of my stories center around her, and there are many! I'm glad you like the Force/love connection...it's rather important to Kali and comes back into play at several points in her life.

    serendipityaey: Hmmm...are you suggesting that I write a fic where they miss and wind up IN a strip club? :p Thanks - as always - for your review and your encouragement. You rock!

    Valairy_Scot: I'm a fan of your work as well! Glad you found me over here! Thanks for reading and reviewing.


    And now, onto the next chapter...



    It was not until later, when she was tossing and turning in her bed that she remembered the holochip that the frightened Nemoidian had brought to her. When she activated it, the grinning visage of Non looked at her, his eyes empty and black; his voice shattered her fragile peace and sent her back to that mission, that night, that moment, which she had tried so hard to forget.

    ?Hey there, sugar!? He waved in an almost friendly manner, as though greeting her on the street. ?Hopefully you got this message, otherwise that little frog-man is toast. Ah, who am I kidding? He's toast no matter what!? Non tilted his head to one side, putting his chin in his hand in an exaggerated motion of thoughtfulness. ?Now, where was I? Oh yes. So, now that your teach is out of the way, what say you and I play a little game, hmmm? By now you know I take my games very seriously, so I think you'll play along. Won't you?? He paused and bent to pick something up. It was a picture of a little girl, a Togratan. ?She's a cutie, isn't she? Force-sensitive, so they say. Anyway, I think you should meet me at the coordinates at the end of this message, ASAP, or this little girl.....? He held up the picture and tore it in two, slowly, his hollow eyes fixed on Kali's. A giggle escaped his throat as he waved goodbye, letting the pieces of the picture flutter out of the frame. ?Don't bring any of your Jedi buddies, either! That wouldn't be fair at all! Bye bye!?

    A series of coordinates appeared-from Couruscant, no less- then the transmission ended.

    Kali, who had been standing in the middle of her room, held perfectly still for several moments, inhaling and exhaling in one of the meditations that she had done her entire life. She felt a strange calm wash over her, a sense of certainty and utter rightness that accompanied her single thought: I know what I must do. It took her only a few minutes to gather what supplies she needed: cloak and boots; the pack that came with her on every mission, filled with spare food tablets and other necessities that she had never unpacked from her last mission; Jonas' lightsaber, which she had managed to keep after his death, clipped to her belt offered her a measure of comfort.

    At the entrance to the stairs, she paused; her instincts told her that going alone was not a wise thing, but she was reluctant to involve anyone else. Still, she thought, toying with the hem of her robe. I should at least tell someone where I'm going....just in case. With that thought in mind, she hurried to Obi-wan's room, however, as she raised her hand to rap at his door, something made her pause. No. I should do this alone. I can't get him in any more trouble than I have. Shoulders squared, she slipped down the stairs, moving as quietly as she could, her mind running over the next bit of her fragmented plan; since she didn't have enough fare to take her to the destination, she'd have to work something else out. Perhaps someone is at the club, she thought as she exited the Temple, glancing around carefully before taking the final steps onto the street. Or maybe I can contact Dex?

    ?Kali!?

    She whirled around, her mouth dropping open as a rumpled an/>
  9. obimom Jedi Grand Master

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    Well, Elek had better hurry! And Mace - he's there somewhere I know.

  10. serendipityaey Force Ghost

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    serendipityaey: Hmmm...are you suggesting that I write a fic where they miss and wind up IN a strip club?

    Why... yes! Yes, I am O:)

    Chapter 8: I really like Kali and Obi's little heart to heart, even though it's laced with so much sadness, sometimes those are the times we really have to learn to connect with someone. Very meaningful words, love and the force, and poor Obi trying to sort it all out.

    A wookie keyboard player! [face_love]:D


    ?What kind of music is that? And why is everything so.....sparkly??

    Oh Obi-Wan! Haha, he's so adorable [face_batting]

    Very, very nice, they are together! I like where this is going, great chapter [:D]


    P.S - is anyone else not getting email notifications? it's driving me crazy [face_plain]
  11. JediKaren Jedi Master

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    Update? very soon? Need to know what's gonna happen!!!!!
  12. serendipityaey Force Ghost

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    Chapter 9: The image of them in the air taxi watching as the lights of Coruscant pass by is very nice, just like the barest chill in the air, there's the barest hint of tension, the good kind :) I love how natural they are together, so sweet and lovely, even though we know Obi isn't fully connected to the love idea, he can feel it with Kali, and I just love reading that.

    Them saying I love you, is sweet, also, but then of course they get caught, it's so hard to catch a break at that age. Ah the trials of growing up - it is written so well here. And I noticed the mention of Mandalore this time! Yikes :(

    Great great job as always :D
  13. laloga Jedi Grand Master

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    Here we go! The last chapter....but if you're enjoying Kali and Obi, get ready for more stories! THANK YOU to everyone who has read and reviewed! You guys rock! =D=



    From his perch in the rafters of the warehouse, Obi-wan gritted his teeth as he watched Kali raise her saber at the terrorist. He wanted to leap down to her rescue, but she had been adamant about her plan, hastily conceived as it was. ?Come on, Kali,? he muttered, sweat starting to trickle down his forehead. ?Give the signal.?

    ?Padawan.?

    Qui-gon's voice nearly caused him to lose his balance as he whirled his head around to see his Master, crouching-uncomfortably-upon a series of rafters several meters from where he stood. ?Master??

    Qui-gon frowned. ?Mace is not far.?

    ?But....? In that moment, a booming noise shuddered through the warehouse as a series of small explosions detonated below them, sending up a wave of heat. Kalinda, Obi-wan thought, releasing his grip and using the Force to guide his descent away from the flames. He hit the floor running, heedless of his Master's urgent voice in his mind. Kali....


    Anger coursed through her as she stared at the man who had murdered so many innocents, the man who had taken her father from her. Kalinda felt a dark, roiling ripple of power within her as she focused on her anger, causing her eyes to widen. The dark side, she thought, her eyes locked on Non. It feels....strong. I feel powerful. He seemed to sense the change in her, his giggling laughter incongruous with the fact that he was pressing a blaster to her jaw.

    ?Here it is, dollface,? he whispered, moving his other hand to caress her cheek. ?The only thing you have to live for now is a quick death.?

    Her mind grew blank with fear, until she heard her name, as clearly as if Obi-wan was shouting it in her ear, and something within her broke. Some floodgate opened and she felt a calm sense of purpose settle over her. Using the Force, she tossed the blaster from his hand and knocked him back, calling her saber to her hand in the next moment as she held it as his throat. ?Surrender, Non,? she said, though her voice was cracked and weak.

    He looked at her. ?Kill me first.?

    ?Kali, don't!? Obi-wan was running to her, the edges of his robes were singed by the flames. ?Don't do it!? Qui-gon was behind him a moment later, his eyes fixed on Kalinda.

    ?I second that,? another voice said. A Togrutan male stepped from the shadows, his blaster rifle trained on Non. ?Good work, Kam...I mean Kali....er, whatever. He's worth more alive than dead.?

    ?Elek,? she breathed. ?You're late.?

    The bounty hunter shrugged. ?Close enough.? He raised his rifle and fired, sending a bolt of energy toward the criminal, causing his eyes to roll back in his head briefly as he fell at her feet, stunned, though he managed one last glance at her.

    ?Clever girl.?

    Kalinda ignored him, instead she nodded to Elek. ?He's all yours. Good luck.? The bounty hunter stepped forward and locked a set of handcuffs around Non's wrists, eying the unconscious terrorist dubiously.

    ?Kalinda,? Mace Windu's voice rose from the other side of the building as the Jedi Master stepped through the dying flames and approached her. He paused before Non's form, regarding him with disdain. ?Did you really think that you could sneak out of the Temple and attempt the capture of a galactic terrorist without my knowledge??

    She looked at him, feeling her stomach drop. ?Yes.? He raised his brow and she winced. ?I mean....well, yes, Master. I just...I did what I thought was necessary.? She swallowed. ?I will accept whatever your decision is, on one condition.? The Jedi Master said nothing, but she could feel his incredulity. Her voice trembling, she continued. ?Just punish me, Master. Everything was my idea; Obi-wan came along to make sure that I didn't get hurt.? She wanted to look away, look down, anywhere but Master Windu's dark gaze.

    Finally, he glanced at Elek, who was attempting to drag Non's body towards the exit. ?Who is your employer? There is a p/>/>
  14. Skywalker_T-65 Force Ghost

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    Great story and great ending. Considering we are jumping ahead to the Clone Wars it will be interesting to see Obi-Wan and Kali's reaction to Anakin and Padme (I'm a firm believer that Obi-Wan knew what was going on to a certain extent and just kept quiet about it). Looking forward to the next story.
  15. laloga Jedi Grand Master

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    Thank you for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed this!
  16. obimom Jedi Grand Master

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    Good ending...I'm glad Kali remains with the Jedi...hope she and Obi behaved themselves during that time...but now the clone wars...hmmm....should be interesting...:)
  17. serendipityaey Force Ghost

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    ?You're crazy and I love it,? she whispered,



    I just love their togetherness [face_love] What was Obi doing out of bed? I wonder if he could sense her. His devotion to her, and (both) their conviction to do what's right is just lovely.


    ?You're crazy and I love it,? she whispered,

    I LOVE this. That he's been watching her, and that he has a measure of faith in her, and has been planning on taking her as a padawan.


    ?I will always come for you.?

    [face_love][face_love][face_love]:_|



    ?We should never have let them go alone.?

    Mace's brow lifted. ?We didn't.?

    I absolutely adore the way you write Mace here, it seems spot on to me, and he's a tough one to nail down. More ;)

    Non is truly scary, and the scene is very intense, great job with it!

    I'm so glad the plan with Elek worked! It was really fantastic! The gratification of seeing Non fall, and having Kali survive was really great, I loved it. And Kali can move on :)


    ?But I'll never stop loving you. No matter what.?

    He nodded, his face serious as he pulled her to him again. ?No matter what.?

    :_|:_|


    Great, great story!



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