Saga White light, for the PT rewrite challenge

White light
Author: Earlybird-obi-wan
Timeframe: 32 BBY
Characters: Obi-Wan, Qui-Gon
Genre: PT challenge
Disclaimer: Star Wars is owned by George Lucas
Summary: Obi-Wan during the wake for Qui-Gon



White light.

Starlight on Naboo.
The light of the stars was shining in the ponds enhancing the flickering of candles.

Black sky.
Night on Naboo.
The murmuring sounds of a fountain were enhanced by the melodious singing of birds.

Cascading water on Naboo.
The roaring sound of the large waterfall was enhanced by the nocturnal sound of aquatic wildlife, chirping and chattering at the edges.

Soft footsteps and a whimpering sound on Naboo.
The young Jedi knight was wandering the great halls and corridors, whimpering softly and clutching a strand of hair against his chest. It had been his padawan braid severed by the hands of the great Jedi master. He had cut the braid in two pieces and was now headed to the place where his master ? his father ? was. The other piece ? the end adorned with a red bead and the hair of his master ? was with a leather thong also sporting a red bead put in a little box in his utility belt.

Murmuring on Naboo.
The young Jedi knight was passing a room where the masters of his order were holding their wake.

Ma-dhu-rah sweh-pna, go rah-do-mah sweh-pna.
Ma-dhu-rah sweh-pna, go rah-do-mah sweh-pna,
moor-it-tioo, ma-dhu-rah sweh-pna.

A soft whimper escaped his lips and he repeated the words.

Sweetly dream. Find sleep.
Sweetly dream. Find sleep.
Overcome death. Sweetly dream

The young Jedi knight continued his walk, coming to the place where his master was placed on a pyre.
A soft teary smile passed his face when he saw the starlight shining on the pale features enhancing them with an ethereal beauty. Grey strands of hair were shimmering like silver threads.
He took the last two steps towards the pyre and gently lifted one hand.

?Master ? father ? this is a token of my eternal bond to you. In the great tradition of the Jedi, I give this part to you. This, the part severed by Master Yoda. But I closed my eyes and it felt as if you were severing it.?

He placed the part on the chest of his master. ?This was where I felt your heart beating strong when you were comforting me. I felt it for the first time after you took me in your arms after the braiding ceremony. I felt it when you held me after the ceremony for Shh-kir.?
The young Jedi knight remembered the words voiced during that ceremony and he sang

Noirani chani a nenya
Nenya alt el engwa rhani
Nenya alt el engwa imdal

Echoing it in the basic language

Black turned to white
White like the eternal soul
White like the eternal spirit

The young Jedi knight knelt down and started his wake beginning with the meditation of the white light.

White
White like the eternal consciousness
White like the beings I will meet
White like the Force

I am white
I am luminous
I am a white luminous being.

If we watch carefully
We see their faces
Pure, innocent and white
Pure eternal love
Pure like their souls

If we listen carefully
We hear their voices
Gentle like the waves
We hear their voices
In hushed whispers
On the wind

You and I will meet again
And all will turn to silver light
A light that will ignite the stars
All souls pass into the light
That is
The Force?


FIN

 

Beautiful as always.

 

That was just beautiful



And a great response to the challenge

 

Sometimes your texts are so wonderful that I must cry with joy.

*is happy that she just got tons of paper tissues at the LIDEL*



Your writting is very intense in this text and despite all the loss you let the light of the force shine bright, bringing calmness to the soul.

 

Valairy_Scot thank you

KELIA thanks again (also for the challenge)

AzureAngel2 thanks and this was written as a kind of poem.