Without you - A Tahiri poem

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  1. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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    This came up one night and I wrote it down:
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    Without you


    Without you my heart is naked
    Falling into the shadows of my soul


    Without you my heart is chained
    With the key lost long ago


    Without you my heart is stained
    Shattered with pieces of my past with you


    Without you my heart has borders
    With no chance of fading at all


    Without you I?m lost
    Forever vanished in my minds memory of you


    -Fin-
  2. Jade-Walker Jedi Master

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    Poor Tahiri! :(
    Good job, Elfsheen! :D
  3. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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    Thanks for noticing Jade_Walker!
  4. Eowyn_Jade Force Ghost

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    :_| Oh poor Tahiri! Beautifully done Elfsheen!

    UP!

    EJ
  5. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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    Also thanks for reading Eowyn_Jade! Sad it is indeed.
  6. darth_boy Jedi Master

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    Nice

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  7. AERYN_SUN Jedi Grand Master

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    Without you my heart is naked
    Falling into the shadows of my soul

    ...

    Without you I?m lost
    Forever vanished in my minds memory of you


    those are my two favorite stanzas. beautiful poem.

    ~aeryn
  8. Duke-Dogwalker Jedi Master

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    Without you my heart is stained
    Shattered with pieces of my past with you


    moving.
  9. Jek_Windu Jedi Master

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    That was beautiful, Elfsheen, I can't wait 'till you write a full-lenght fic!! :D
  10. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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    Thank you all for reading :) Moving and sad this peom was meant to be!
  11. C-3PX Force Ghost

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    Great. I like seeing differant mediums used. :) Not just all first person stories. :p
  12. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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    Thanks! ;) No, no not at all ;)
  13. Stormsong Jedi Padawan

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    To my master I must answer, to obay is my duty. Tell up this is her wish ;)
  14. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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    A trusty sock I have ;)
  15. Rogue_Even Jedi Knight

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    Oh, poor Tahiri! :( Your poem is beautiful, though. Great work, Elfsheen. :)
  16. SilverWander Jedi Master

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    Wow Thats just beatufil!
  17. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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    Ohhh thanks Rogue_Even and SilverWanderer
  18. aelie Jedi Knight

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  19. Elfsheen Jedi Grand Master

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