Beyond Your Father's Lightsaber (Mara, Luke, vignette, 13 ABY)

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  1. ViariSkywalker Force Ghost

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    Title: Your Father's Lightsaber
    Author: ViariSkywalker
    Timeframe: 13 ABY
    Characters: Mara Jade, Luke Skywalker
    Genre: vignette
    Summary: Mara Jade takes an unwanted vacation and reflects upon the gift Luke Skywalker gave her four years ago.

    A/N: A big thank you to Gabri_Jade for looking over this and making sure my portrayal of Mara was as accurate as possible. [:D] This takes place between Darksaber and Planet of Twilight; I tried to stick to canon, but some AU elements are possible. (I just haven't read those novels in a looong time ;) )

    Disclaimer: I own the Star Wars franchise, and I'm making millions off this story :p ...riiight. But seriously, it all belongs to George. I'm just having fun with it. [face_peace]

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    Your Father's Lightsaber


    It was sundown on this side of Yavin 4 as Mara Jade piloted her personal ship, the Jade?s Fire, toward the ancient temple that housed Luke Skywalker?s Jedi Praxeum. She was flying away from the light, her vessel casting a long shadow across the old stones. Amid the trees at the edge of the immense structure was a landing pad lit up for her arrival.

    Of all the vacation spots I could have chosen, she thought to herself as the Jade?s Fire descended. It probably wasn?t the place Karrde had in mind when he?d insisted that she take a vacation, but it was the only one that made any sense, the only place where she could actually accomplish something with her time off.

    Maybe one of these days I?ll take a real vacation, she mused. Right now I have too much to learn.

    What was it that Palpatine used to tell her?

    ?You may rest when you are dead, Mara. Now get up, and do it again.?

    Mara shook her head and blew out a short breath as she powered down the ship. She wouldn?t wait that long. Even a former assassin had her limits. Thankfully she was nowhere close to reaching them.

    She grabbed her lightsaber and flipped off the lights. Sitting by the ship?s hatch was a simple cloth sack containing some clothes and the rest of her weapons. She hoisted the bag over one shoulder and walked down the ramp, wondering which Jedi trainee the Praxeum had sent to greet her.

    The light was fast disappearing beyond the vast jungle, and Mara had trouble seeing her escort in the darkness. She sensed him before she actually saw his face: that bright, wide-eyed face that she had grown slightly more accustomed to over the last few years. He was grinning like an idiot, of course. But whenever she told him that, he had the awful habit of blushing and then telling her how glad he was to see her. Despite the years of cautious friendship between them, nothing made her feel more awkward than Luke Skywalker?s silly grin.

    His features became much clearer as he stepped within arms reach of her. She recognized the inquisitive blue eyes, the dark blonde hair that always managed to look wind-tossed. He was wearing a light tan, sleeveless shirt and mud brown pants. The shine in his eyes suggested that he?d run there, though Mara could detect no trace of fatigue, no hardness of breathing.

    ?Mara!? he said brightly, reaching his arm out in a gesture somewhere between a hug and a handshake. Before he could get too close, Mara stuck out her hand and grabbed his.

    ?Good to see you, Skywalker.? She examined his outfit once more. ?I hope I?m not interrupting something.?

    Luke looked down at his attire and laughed. ?I was on my way to do a little saber practice when security told me you?d arrived.? He released her hand and a look of concern flashed across his face. ?We weren?t expecting you until tomorrow. Is everything okay??

    Mara smirked and turned to close the hatch. ?I?m fine. Karrde wanted me to go early. He thought if I waited too long I?d change my mind.? She turned back to face Luke and shrugged her shoulders. ?Do you want me to leave and come back tomorrow??

    His dismay was obvious. ?Of cours
  2. star_writer24 Jedi Master

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  3. LadyPadme Manager Emeritus

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    What a vivid vignette. You did Mara perfectly. Great job on her introspection--you showed a lot of growth and maturity in her from the Mara we knew in TTT. WonderfuL!
  4. Irish_Jedi_Jade Force Ghost

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    Third Post!!!!! :D hehe...that was Beeeeaautiful Viari!!!! You had Mara down to a science...her introspection was as perfectly balanced as the lightsaber, and I aboslutely ADORED the added deapth you gave to Anakin, along with Mara's unique viewpoint of him as a person. Overall, that was positively brilliant! You did our beloved Mara proud, and I loved the ending line. Beautiful!! And I liked how you didn't get tooo mushy, but simply allowed Mara to acknowledge her friendship to Luke as just a friendship, a very good freindship. If you haven't gotten it already, I LOVED that! Thanks so much for writing such an awesome story!!


    =D= =D= =D= =D= =D=
  5. Knight_Aragorn Jedi Master

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    This is wonderful. Loved the introspection - Mara's thoughts, her mental voice, feel just right for this time frame and setting. And their relationship is perfect. They have that warmth, the glimpse that there is potential for more, but for the moment, neither is really ready to take the relationship that way. The use of description is beautiful as well - I had such a clear mental image of the praxeum, the sparring room, the lightsaber. It flowed perfectly.

    Well done! :D
  6. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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    Wonderful viggie. =D= Mara's voice rings very true to this time period. :D Very true to canon, and to what Mara's feelings would have been then. [face_thinking]

    But you have to know, if this continues, I want this to take a sharp right turn into the soulmate kind of loving. [face_love] :* I always do!!! [face_laugh] ;)
  7. SilSolo Jedi Grand Master

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    YYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE very nice job with teh Mara characterization. that is soo her
  8. JadeSolo Manager Emeritus

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    But it's quite the greeting, isn't it? [face_love]

    [face_laugh] I busted up at this. Can't quite put his attitude into words, but I think it's enough to say that it fits perfectly with Mara's.

    And this vig itself is perfect. I really liked the idea of Mara understanding Anakin through his lightsaber. =D=
  9. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    That was wonderful

    I loved her introspection and confusion over her feelings for Luke.

    You captured Mara's character perfectly.

    Great job on this

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  10. ViariSkywalker Force Ghost

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    Replies!

    star_writer24 - Thank you! :)

    LP - Great job on her introspection--you showed a lot of growth and maturity in her from the Mara we knew in TTT.

    --I was hoping to strike that balance between the Mara of TTT and the Mara who marries Luke. I'm glad you liked it! :D

    Irish_Jedi_Jade - You had Mara down to a science...her introspection was as perfectly balanced as the lightsaber, and I aboslutely ADORED the added deapth you gave to Anakin, along with Mara's unique viewpoint of him as a person.

    --I'm honored that you think so! It's no secret that I'm an Anakin fan, and I think Mara would definitely have a unique view of him... I mean, she knew him before his own son did! :p

    You did our beloved Mara proud

    --I hope so! After reading the latest LOTF books, I feel a strong need to write fics that feature Mara as a strong character who is not just Mrs. Luke Skywalker (and who is also not dead ;) )

    And I liked how you didn't get tooo mushy, but simply allowed Mara to acknowledge her friendship to Luke as just a friendship, a very good freindship. If you haven't gotten it already, I LOVED that! Thanks so much for writing such an awesome story!!

    --I'm so glad you liked it, and I'm happy that the balance I was going for was apparent. I think this stage in their relationship is not written about enough, and I'm happy to have contributed to it!

    Knight_Aragorn - This is wonderful. Loved the introspection - Mara's thoughts, her mental voice, feel just right for this time frame and setting.

    --Thanks! I was worried about writing something with Mara as the sole main character, and I'm glad I was able to do her character justice.

    And their relationship is perfect. They have that warmth, the glimpse that there is potential for more, but for the moment, neither is really ready to take the relationship that way.

    --That's exactly what I wanted to convey! :)

    he use of description is beautiful as well - I had such a clear mental image of the praxeum, the sparring room, the lightsaber. It flowed perfectly.

    -- [face_blush] Thank you! Details and description are my weak point, and I was really trying to evoke more vivid mental images.

    Jade_eyes - Wonderful viggie. Mara's voice rings very true to this time period. Very true to canon, and to what Mara's feelings would have been then.

    --Thanks! I'm glad you liked it, and I'm really happy that I was able to capture Mara's voice.

    But you have to know, if this continues, I want this to take a sharp right turn into the soulmate kind of loving. I always do!!!

    -- [face_laugh] Don't we all! Well, if the authors of the EU had had any sense, there would never have been a Callista, and then maybe Luke and Mara would have been around each other enough to say "hey, you're actually quite wonderful, maybe we should get married now instead of waiting 10 years!" :p Can you tell I'm not a huge fan of the whole Callista plotline? o_O

    SilSolo - YYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE very nice job with teh Mara characterization. that is soo her

    --I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)

    JadeSolo - I busted up at this. Can't quite put his attitude into words, but I think it's enough to say that it fits perfectly with Mara's.

    --That's sarcastic!Luke. I think we often forget about Luke's snarky side. (As Gabri_Jade pointed out to me: "Why don't you outrun 'em, I thought you said this thing was fast!") ;)

    And this vig itself is perfect. I really liked the idea of Mara understanding Anakin through his lightsaber.

    --That was the initial plot bunny for this viggie: what would Mara think about using the lightsaber that once belonged to Vader? Glad you liked it!

    KELIA - That was wonderful

    I loved her introspection and confusion over her feelings for Luke.

    You captured Mara's character perfectly.
  11. mara_jade_rox Jedi Master

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    Oops...I was too late for replies. Oh well. You got Mara's character perfectly! It was a wonderful piece of writng.

    MJR[face_monkey]
  12. correllian_ale Jedi Master

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    I know I read this, sorry I didn't reply, thought I had.

    I loved how you tagged Luke and Mara's relationship dead on. :D And Luke's "farmboy" looks and expresions. Again loved it.

    It was neat of Luke implying the possibilities of redemption through the gift of Anakin's lightsaber.

    =D= Bravo!
  13. Idrelle_Miocovani Force Ghost

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    Wonderful piece, Viari! You got Mara's character right on! :D It was so enjoyable to read!
  14. Master_M_Sky Jedi Knight

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    Love it! You captured Mara perfectly!
  15. Gabri_Jade VIP

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    Ah, where to start? So much that I like. :D

    I really enjoyed your portrayal of Mara here. She's a complex character, and you catch so many of the nuances of her personality: her history, how it shaped her, and her attitude toward it, her intelligence, her discomfort with anything emotional. She's very Mara-ish here. And sarcastic!Luke is definitely underused, but you captured him beautifully, as well as balancing him realistically with the sensitive, open Luke we see more often. Mara's thoughts on Anakin and his lightsaber are great; I love seeing Mara be introspective like that, and the balance between Vader and the Emperor's Hand is something I always enjoy reading about. And as always, your writing is just plain lovely to read. Awesome job, my dear. :D
  16. RebelMom Jedi Grand Master

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    Wonderful job Vi. I like how you allowed Mara to begin to understand Anakin and who he had been. She knows how Palpy manipulated people and it gives her a connection to Anakin.
  17. Jedi-2B Force Ghost

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    Such a lovely vignette. Fits perfectly with how I picture Mara at this point, and I really liked her introspection about the lightsaber. I have one of those replicas of that saber in a case, and I like how it's labeled simply 'Skywalker Lightsaber.' Always owned by a Skywalker: Anakin, Luke, Mara, and perhaps Ben eventually.
  18. Jade_Pilot Force Ghost

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    Great viggie! You captured Mara perfectly!

    Bravo! =D=
  19. redtenko Jedi Grand Master

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    ooo this was awesome! so in character too, mara can be a real philosopher when something grabs her attention. And I love Luke, ever the sweet polite farmboy, but he's of course in need of Mara to challenge him

    great job!
  20. ginchy Force Ghost

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    I just found this last night and didn't get a chance to review until now. I'm not sure how I missed it! But I really enjoyed it--I loved the look at Mara's thoughts four years after Luke gave her the saber. Excellent idea--and excellent work! =D=
  21. Bri_Windstar Force Ghost

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    You always have such insight into the Skywalkers, paticularly Anakin. It totally makes my day when you get the chance to share those insights in fics like these.

    There's something very poignant about the vig to me. Mara's reflections on who she thought Vader was then, how she sees him now, how she sees Anakin, and how she tries to meld those two together are very in character and not something often touched on, but you do it with ease here.

    And of course, I love the deep but still-wary friendship she and Luke have. You'd think that kind of relationship would be something of an oxymoron, but they seem to work best that way. :p

    Another wonderful outing, Vi. [:D]
  22. ViariSkywalker Force Ghost

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    mara_jade_rox - Oops...I was too late for replies. Oh well. You got Mara's character perfectly! It was a wonderful piece of writng.

    --That's okay! Thanks for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

    correllian_ale - I loved how you tagged Luke and Mara's relationship dead on. And Luke's "farmboy" looks and expresions. Again loved it.

    --Thank you! :)

    It was neat of Luke implying the possibilities of redemption through the gift of Anakin's lightsaber.

    --Yeah, I feel like it would be a strong symbol of the possibilities of redemption, and I thought it was only natural that Mara wonder about this weapon that is supposed to be one of her most important ones.

    Idrelle_Miocovani - Wonderful piece, Viari! You got Mara's character right on! It was so enjoyable to read!

    --I'm so happy you liked it! :D I was really trying hard to get Mara's personality just right, so I'm glad it all turned out the way I'd hoped!

    Master_M_Sky - Love it! You captured Mara perfectly!

    --Thanks! :D

    Gabri - I really enjoyed your portrayal of Mara here. She's a complex character, and you catch so many of the nuances of her personality: her history, how it shaped her, and her attitude toward it, her intelligence, her discomfort with anything emotional. She's very Mara-ish here.

    -- *dies* I think that's one of the ultimate compliments! [face_blush] Since I don't normally write Mara - at least not frequently and not from this time period - I really appreciate the time you took to look over this and make sure my Mara was a true representation. :)

    And sarcastic!Luke is definitely underused, but you captured him beautifully, as well as balancing him realistically with the sensitive, open Luke we see more often.

    --And I worked especially hard to fix that one line without losing the snarky attitude ;)

    Mara's thoughts on Anakin and his lightsaber are great; I love seeing Mara be introspective like that, and the balance between Vader and the Emperor's Hand is something I always enjoy reading about.

    --It's really weird how this whole thing came together. I was just wondering what Mara might think of using Vader's old lightsaber, and then everything started pouring out of me. My muse is a thing of mystery, but when it gets going, watch out. I haven't read Allegiance yet, but I based Mara's opinions of him on what I'd heard about that book and from what I read in TTT. I'm glad to see it worked well!

    And as always, your writing is just plain lovely to read. Awesome job, my dear.

    -- [face_blush] Aw, thankies!

    Mom - Wonderful job Vi. I like how you allowed Mara to begin to understand Anakin and who he had been. She knows how Palpy manipulated people and it gives her a connection to Anakin.

    --Thanks! I thought that would probably be one of the strongest links between Mara and Anakin, that they had both been manipulated by the same man. It only makes sense that Mara should come to a somewhat deeper understanding of the man whose lightsaber she wields (and whose son she eventually marries ;) )

    Jedi-2B - Such a lovely vignette. Fits perfectly with how I picture Mara at this point, and I really liked her introspection about the lightsaber.

    --Thank you!

    I have one of those replicas of that saber in a case, and I like how it's labeled simply 'Skywalker Lightsaber.' Always owned by a Skywalker: Anakin, Luke, Mara, and perhaps Ben eventually.

    -- :eek: I want one! That's really neat, and I think it would be cool if Ben received it.

    Jade_Pilot - Great viggie! You captured Mara perfectly!

    Bravo!


    --Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)

    redtenko - And I love Luke, ever the sweet polite farmboy, but he's of course in need of Mara to challenge him

    --Of course he is! ;)

    ginchy - loved the look at Mara's thoughts four years after Luke gave her
  23. SithGirl132 Force Ghost

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    Nice introspection there. You put a lot of thought into this!
    Great story!
  24. ViariSkywalker Force Ghost

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    SithGirl132 - Nice introspection there. You put a lot of thought into this!
    Great story!


    --Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! :)
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