Youthful Mistakes

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction Stories--Classic JC Board (Reply-Only)' started by KnightMara, Aug 5, 2000.

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  1. Herman Snerd Jedi Master

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    Oct 31, 1999
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    Great action KnightMara.

    And even better reactions by Luke and his uncle.

    Now I may be a bit confused, but was Owen being patient and compassionate????? How unlike him. ;)

    As a former young man, I should say that you captured Luke's feelings toward his uncle well. Those little moments where a young man connects with a father figure are more important than anything.

    I do hope there's at least an epilogue though.

    (I know, call me greedy)
  2. KnightMara Jedi Padawan

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    Former young man? What, are you an old man now, Herman? :)

    I'm glad you guys are liking it. And I'm glad you didn't think I went too overboard on the whole male bonding thing. hehe
  3. Herman Snerd Jedi Master

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    Yep, I'm an old geezer.

    Just give me my cane and rocking chair. ;)
  4. Vergere Jedi Knight

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    oh knightmara that was wondeful!

    "And one day, when Luke was grown, they'd laugh about all of the silly things he'd done."

    awwwwwwwwwww, that made my heart stop! they'll never do that... :'(

    the male bonding part was great. poor luke, so afraid of killing when he HAS to later on...

    epilogue?


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    heh. Herman, you sure don't look old in that pic of yours ;)
  5. Jedi Master Mara Jade Jedi Padawan

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    Last post? :sob: That's not true! That's impossible! =( I do understand your need for more time, KnightMara (we could all use some), but it's so sad to see this story finish. It's so well-written. Thank you for sharing your time and effort with us!

    And I really loved that last post. I'm glad that we see the bits of good in Luke that are peeking out from all those other bad signs. Besides, I always thought that Luke's reaction to his first kill was a little underrated; his reaction to the demolation of the Death Star even more so. Thank you for clarifying this point! Good job as well in making Owen such a great character; he's easy to hate, but with this story (especially the latest post) we get another aspect to him.

    Thanks again, and keep up the great writing.
  6. RebelMom Jedi Knight

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    Wonderful KnightMara. The male bonding was great. Luke's reactions were good. His thoughts about the future tinted with sadness. I think the ending is fine. It ends on a powerful note and doesn't really need an epilogue but that is up to you.

    Way to Go, Teach!
  7. RebelMom Jedi Knight

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  8. I love Sci Fi Jedi Master

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  9. Princess Sari Jedi Padawan

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    One word: WOW!

    That was an amazing ending, KnightMara! The whole story was amazing! Wonderful, and definatly one of the best I've read. I'll be looking for any more stories of yours.

    No... ::wimpers:: It *can't* be over! :(
  10. KnightMara Jedi Padawan

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    Well, now comes the hard part: Do I leave the story as is, or do I add the epilogue?

    Readers, it's your call. Yea or nay?
  11. Vergere Jedi Knight

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    YEA!!!!!!


    YEA

    YEA

    YEA

    YEA

    YEA!!!!!


    ...i think i speak for everyone? :)
  12. Herman Snerd Jedi Master

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    More story is always better than less story.
  13. Princess Sari Jedi Padawan

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    YEA! [lots and lots of YEA!]
  14. Jane Jinn Jedi Knight

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    Yes, add the epilogue!

    That was such a great post. I really liked the way you showed Luke using the Force (even though he didn't recognise it at the time) and how he spared the Raider on the Bantha who was just coming in to collect the body. Luke's reaction to taking four lives was very realistic and believable, as were his thoughts and hopes for the future. You've also managed to make Owen come alive as a character. Excellent. I'm looking forward to the epilogue and anything else you feel like posting.
  15. Princess Sari Jedi Padawan

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    Hmm... I tried posting yesterday, but I guess it didn't work...

    YEA! [lots and lots of YEA!]
  16. Princess Sari Jedi Padawan

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  17. Vergere Jedi Knight

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    [subscribing]

    more?>
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