Beyond Z's Drabbles (Mara, Leia, Jaina, Alema, Ackbar, Lusa so far)

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  1. Zonoma Force Ghost

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    "When words are scarce, they are seldom spent in vain." -William Shakespeare

    This thread is a response to THE ULTIMATE DRABBLE CHALLENGE, located in Resource. Join us if you dare!


    Week 1: Mara Jade
    Week 2: Princess Leia
    Week 3: Songs of Jaina Solo
    Week 4: Alema Rar (/Zekk)
    Week 5: Admiral Ackbar
    Week 6: Lusa (/Raynar)


    *Every piece of artwork you see in this thread was found in the JC Fan Art Forums and displayed here with permission. The links beneath each portrait will take you directly to the thread of the 'feature artist'. I encourage you to poke around over there and perhaps leave an encouraging comment or two. They are generous folks to allow me to display their art with my work.

    Zonoma


  2. Zonoma Force Ghost

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    **MARA JADE**
    [image=http://img126.imageshack.us/img126/3514/mjpainting20ii.jpg]
    Artwork provided by Snap


    1~ Beginnings

    Everyone forgot to tell her fires roared like dragons. She wished the man holding her would put her down. She wanted her mama. Daddy had passed her to him, though, so she trusted this man because Daddy did.

    The night was cold and she stared into the chaos, searching for some sign of her family. She shivered.

    A gnarled hand gripped her shoulder, ?They aren?t coming, little one. They saved you by passing you out to us, Mara.?

    She knew the man was right, she could feel it.

    ?What will happen to me now??

    ?You will come live with me.?


    2 ~ Middles

    Mara allowed the Senator?s eyes to travel her body lecherously and repressed the flash of revulsion. She had a job to do, and allowing him this brief moment of triumph was part of it. She took a small breath before speaking, allowing her breasts to strain the confines of her gown.

    ?The Emperor wishes you to know that your game was well played. I am sent to you with his compliments.?

    Her hands opened, beckoning, and he came to her willingly. She let down her hair, smiling enticingly as she stuck the lacquered pin from her hair into his jugular.

    3 ~ Ends

    Screaming, she fell to the ground holding her head in traitorous, trembling hands. People gave her a wide berth, but no one stood forward to offer help. Instincts of Mos Eisley natives were sound, offering to help her right now was tantamount to suicide.

    Kill Luke Skywalker!

    Rage. Awful uncontrolled rage. Pain. Heat. Then the awful, icy rage again.

    Kill Luke Skywalker! Kill Luke Skywalker!

    She knew, stumbling blindly back to her transport, that her service to the Emperor was ended the way it began so long ago. In heat and pain and loss. In flames that roared like dragons.

    4 ~ First

    Doubting was something Mara was becoming more accustomed to, since the Emperor?s death so many years ago. Admitting them out loud was something new.

    Extending her hand out to the man before her, she introduced herself to Corran Horn. It was hard, allowing someone to know she was vulnerable. Is this what friendship was?

    She couldn?t quite explain it, but expressing her doubts about Luke?s teaching methods to Corran was safe. He wouldn?t turn on Luke. He was Luke?s friend and as concerned as she was. He also needed someone, apparently, to express his doubts to.

    Perhaps this was friendship.

    5 ~ Last

    She sat in the dark, arms trembling from fatigue, systematically educating Skywalker on the error of his ways. She should be able to do this in her sleep.

    Except it hurt.

    The look in his eyes, as he clung to his perch beside her, was like a kick in the gut.

    As she forced herself to continue, she felt the last of her doubts slide away. These weren?t the arrogant acts of another egocentric maniac, but rather the idealistic and innocent mistakes of a simple farmboy that, for all his laurels, was still naive about the way the universe worked.

  3. jedi_of_ennth Force Ghost

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    =D= Wow. Those were beautiful. I love how you were able to fit so much into only one hundred words! I especially love the way you tied "Beginnings" and "Ends" together with the "flames that roared like dragons". Beautiful description. :)

    "Middles" was wonderful, too; the way you present Mara is perfect, and again, I'm just amazed that you managed to capture such a perfectly in-character little snapshot in so little space. :)

    Good job! =D=
  4. Kidan TFN EU Staff

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    Great job on those drabbles Zonoma!
  5. Killik_Twilight Force Ghost

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    Whoa ? this was real cool, Z. :D *sits down to wait for more*

    KT
  6. brodiew Force Ghost

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    This certainly is something new. I enjoyed reading them.

    I liked "first" the most. Corran and Mara are friends. =D=
  7. Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare

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    Z: :D!

    - The Imperial Ewok
  8. IrishEyedJedi Jedi Master

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    Loved the drabble - when will we see more . . . and when will I see you write H/L hmmm!!! [face_batting]
  9. Blue_Milkshake Jedi Knight

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    Yay! I love drabbles! [face_love] A good drabble can really set a reader's imagination going, and going, and going...

    My favorite was First.

    She couldn?t quite explain it, but expressing her doubts about Luke?s teaching methods to Corran was safe. He wouldn?t turn on Luke. He was Luke?s friend and as concerned as she was. He also needed someone, apparently, to express his doubts to.

    I think this thing that Mara couldn't quite explain is called trust.
  10. TelannaTani Jedi Knight

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    My first intro to drabbles - I'm hooked!

    I loved the "fire that sounds like dragons"! Such a great description of how a child must interprit the destruction surrounding them. Overall, a great interpritation of Mara, in all aspects of her life.

    Excellent, Excellent, Master! =D=

    My one thought: maybe you should include this warning...

    WARNING: Plot bunnies MAY be spawned from drabbles. Author cannot be held liable.

    :D
  11. Stormtrooper_TK-421 Jedi Master

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    :D =D=

    Awesome! Seriously, awesome! Can't wait to see another one! :)
  12. Jessoass Jedi Knight

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    Great work Zonoma!!!=D=

    Jess
  13. Feng_Huang Jedi Knight

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    Great work, I envy people who can produce so many images with so few little words
  14. Zonoma Force Ghost

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    On the site where the challenge is, the only rule is to write the ?drabble? in the order given and make sure it is exactly 100 words. It really trains the eye in how to cull out the clutter and go back to bare bones without losing the flavor.

    If this generates enough interest, perhaps we can begin a Drabble Challenge here, too. Just let me know, guys. I know there are Saga and Before folks interested.

    j_o_e ~ Thank you! ?Flames that roared like dragons? was my fave line, too. I was thought I was being clever at the time, but now I just like it.

    Kidan ~ Thank you!

    KT ~ I?ll post 5 drabbles a week. (Gee, that sounds familiar! Maybe I can do it this time.) Thank you for reading!

    brew ~ Yeah, that scene from I, Jedi was still fresh in my mind because I just read it for the first time last month. Interestingly enough, that was also my least ?confident? drabble because I wasn?t sure how it would go over and felt forced.

    Ewok ~ o_O :D!!

    Leah ~ Well, I?m sure I could manage some H/L drabble eventually. Just for you. Thanks for dropping by!

    Blue_Milkshake ~ You love Drabbles? Do you love writing them? Because I?m trying to figure out if there are enough takers for a Drabble Challenge. The only iffy thing would be the individual ?drabble threads? wouldn?t always contain era specific drabble.

    I?m glad you mentioned that one. It was my least confident drabble, it felt forced in some ways, but I felt that was a huge part of Mara?s transition.

    Voz ~ ROTFLOL! I love that warning! Now I really must know, did you have a bunny nibble on your ankles from this? I can?t wait to see the results!

    Padawan-Mine ~ [face_mischief] The next one we see should be written by you. I look forward to seeing the results of your current assignment! Thank you for taking the time to read mine.

    Jess ~ (First of all, do you know how many Jessica?s are in this thread? Three at the very least! I find that vaguely humorous for some strange reason). Thank you for reading and letting me know you enjoyed it!

    Feng_Huang ~ Thank you. [face_blush]

  15. jaina_clan_solo Jedi Master

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    =D= Great job with this challenge! I think that you captured Mara perfectly!

    I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with the next set of drabbles.

    jcs
  16. BigFatty Jedi Master

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  17. Zonoma Force Ghost

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    j_c_s ~ Perfectly!:eek: I'm glad you liked it!:p

    Piggy ~ Thank you! I hope you will join in the challenge, too.
  18. Kestrel_Kenobi Force Ghost

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    Fab Z! :) I look forward to many more! :D
  19. divapilot Force Ghost

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    Terrific work! Loved the "flames that roared like dragons" imagery, too. But I think my fav was "middles." Reminded me of Anakin "taking care of" the people at Mustafar.

    Wonderful job. =D=
  20. Nyota's Heart Combos & Paragraphs Host

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    Brilliant!!! Each built on the last and was so moving in each segment and in total; especially that her service began and ended with pain, heat and loss. So true. Was touched that it hurt her to tell Luke the truth about his mishaps with the Academy and that she realized it wasn't out of malice or cruelty but innocent idealism. :) I don't know how this works, as far as the drabble challenge goes, but if you ever do Mara again, or Luke--or anyone else, I'll be tickled pink. :D No brainer: the one for Han will be sweet and funny, I'm sure. :)
  21. Zonoma Force Ghost

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    Kes! ~ Thanks for stopping by! This is half your fault, you know. You and J_L got me hooked on these.

    divapilot ~ I'm rather partial to that one, too. Thanks for mentioning it. There's just something about a dangerous woman....[face_laugh] but being Trace's padawan, I imagine that you love the character. Period. I do, too.

    Jade_Eyes ~ If you find these that intriguing, you should consider trying it, too! The Ultimate Drabble Challenge is located in Resource. There is even an index for the challenge participants in the 3rd and 4th posts. Actually, I highly recommend checking out the others. I am not the best drabble author out there - I am new to this, too.

    This is just the first week of twenty. I you choose to check it out, and want to join, my PM box is open for questions. Challenge your friends to a Drabble Duel! ;)

    I am excited that you liked my Mara so much. I see your name in the Mara Resource thread often enough, and it is good to get a thumbs up from such a devout fan. Thanks!

    Zonoma
  22. jackyyy17 Force Ghost

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    Oh, those where good.


  23. KELIA Manager Emeritus

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    What a perfect way to feature the highlights of Mara's life.

    Bravo!

    =D= =D= =D= =D=
  24. Jedi-2B Force Ghost

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    I liked all of them. It's hard to pick a favorite, but I guess it would have to be the last one, pointing out Luke's mistakes. That had to be harder on her than it was on him.

    Hope to see more from you.
  25. princess_melissa Jedi Master

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    Those were awsome! They flowed nicely taking us through each stage in her life and bringing us on a roller coaster of emotions at the same time.

    I think my favorite was the 2nd one.

    She let down her hair, smiling enticingly as she stuck the lacquered pin from her hair into his jugular.
    :eek: ouch but that's kinda cool

    Nice job!
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