Saga - ST The Force Awakens (a fan-edit - AU?)

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This is a cool re-imagining of the story! I like how you start by demonstrating the ruthlessness and duplicity of the First Order. Very intense.

Interesting! I assume the "best pilot" is Poe, and they are looking for ...Luke?.. on Jakku. Is it a mistake and they are actually on the path to discovering not Luke but Rey? Or is Luke really on Jakku- and if so, is he with Rey already?

I like this story! Great action and nice interweaving of story lines.

 

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Beautiful details here! I see how you have altered the event on Jakku - Kylo Sorn instead of Kylo Ren, and Nines taking the place of Phasma. Are you planning to introduce her at some point, I wonder?

This stood out to me:

Finn has a heart, a moral center. His programming gets broken right there; he can't go through with the attack on civilians that Nines so gleefully indulges himself in.

And we get to meet Rey! She has the same feistiness and good heart that we see in the movie.

She does indeed have a good soul. Nice parallels with Finn and Rey; they both follow their own morals and their hearts, even when it puts them in danger.

Good updates!

 

@Kurisan You have all the fast paced riveting action of TFA and every one in character. But woot! Sorn instead of Kylo ... oh that changes things on a personal level for the Solos. For which I thank you!!!

 

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=d= Wonderful! BB8's "personality" comes through clearly and Rey's initial disinclination to get involved. Understandable she would feel that way. Something apparently will draw her in though.

 

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Rey was excellent as she struggled with her decision and finally made the right one. I know Beebee was relived.

 

But hearing voices in her head? This is either the beginning of a mental illness or a Force connection being established with somebody else.

 

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Riveting escape and teamwork and nice formal introduction with the exchange of names. But Finn was right.

 

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But I like your changes in so far.

I just wonder when we will face the big villain here. Or what happened to Lor San Tekka.

 

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I know Finn is totally convinced Poe didn't survive. YUCK! That water source is not the one I would choose

Enjoyed the conference between Sorn, Zarakken, and Hux with their common and differing goals/motives.

 

You indeed write great bickering scenes, where one also is able to understand each party that belongs to that conflict.