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Before - Legends A Change of Plans--An O/Q Short Story--COMPLETED 6.4

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by LuvEwan, Apr 30, 2004.

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  1. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Master star 6

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    Lovely post. I really loved how Qui-Gon reacted to Obi-Wan getting better. And yet he did his duty as a Jedi should.

    Great job. Breathing a sigh of relief that LE didn't kill Obi-Wan!!!
     
  2. jacen200015

    jacen200015 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Unless she has something more planned. :eek:
     
  3. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

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    No- don't give her any ideas. This isn't the kill Obi thread. That's at o_e's place.
     
  4. Opal

    Opal Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Awww. That was sweet. And now Ullo gets to take care of Obi for a short time? I wonder if that will convince him that he's cut out to be a master after all.
     
  5. LuvEwan

    LuvEwan Jedi Master star 4

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    I was having a really grumpy moment when I logged on here after being away for the day. This place is seriously an instant pick me up. So extra thanks to you guys. [:D] New post tomorrow, I already started writing it Monday evening but then my friend called so I spent Tuesday with her, snapping some black and white and color photos at these gorgeous park. A great day, but I still missed it around here! :_|


    Shaindl I'm rolling around some ideas about Obi-Wan and Ullo's interactions right now, since that post will probably be up Thursday. They haven't really talked during this fic, so I'm really excited for them to get a dialogue going, as well as Ullo revealing a few of his emotions. ;)

    jm2 Ah, yes, the card. :D Thank you for refreshing that stupendous memory. ;)

    jeday I know, I know, he had to leave Obi-Wan. But hey, he's still the Master--plus, it was needed for the plot and stuff. [face_blush]

    Kynstar I think mushy stuff has become a sort of specialty of mine! [face_whistling] But hey, even in LOTR the guys can show each other some love when it's appropriate! :p

    o_e Thanks. :D And aren't these new faces great?! [face_dancing]

    shan Well, thankfully the hat wasn't pinned. [face_laugh] But I also dropped my diploma case on this guy's foot twice. [face_blush] I'm not what you'd call 'graceful'. :-B

    diane I thought you would've known me better by now, diane. [face_shame_on_you] How can I gush over Obi in my story if he's dead?

    jacen200015 I guess no one's really gonna believe me til the end. [face_laugh]

    PK Yeah, isn't that ironic. o_e, who hates the idea of killing Obi, owning the thread where that infamous challenge began! [face_laugh] Seriously though, poor Obi gets put through enough. I'm not going to kill him in any more fics that I can think of..

    Opal It could just help persuade him. Ya never know. ;)
     
  6. LuvEwan

    LuvEwan Jedi Master star 4

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    Qui-Gon stood at the huge double doors to the Eume?Li capital house. Whereas most other buildings were featureless, the faux, manufactured wood surface of these doors displayed delicate carvings of the planet?s motto in several languages.

    With a finger, he traced the looping lines.

    Eume?Li. Wander to the fringe, wander to the edge, but home this will always be.

    ?Hm.? Qui-Gon stepped back, crossing his arms. It was slightly relieving to uncover a bit of culture, although he would have suggested a different greeting for the planet.

    Welcome to Hell. If you can?t escape, stay awhile.

    The Master swallowed the harsh chuckle tingling in his throat. Sounds like something Obi-Wan would say. The humor was stilled in his eyes then, as his purpose here was renewed?especially his need to speedily carry out that purpose.

    He knew Knight Tirr was a capable guardian for his Padawan. The innate compassion of the man struck Qui-Gon immediately upon their meeting. Really, the Master was shocked that Ullo had yet to accept an apprentice. He would make a very effective mentor for any young student, as soon as he permitted himself to not only acknowledge, but accept that fact.

    And he?ll take good care of Obi-Wan until I can join them. The inner assurance was delivered in a solid, doubtless voice. Qui-Gon inhaled steadily, straightening his body.

    But the despair-wrought images of his Padawan, lying among the grit , his skin pale wax and his lips stained an ugly, bruised blue would not relent, not even as Jedi obligation led him inside the building.

    Fortunately (or unfortunately, depending on your perspective), Qui-Gon reminded himself, all Jedi had to be Masters of multitasking.

    A human male of about fifty years approached him, dressed in thick, green, velvety robes. He was well-fed, with a deteriorating cap of gray hair. ?You must be the Jedi.? The man said, his brown eyes flickering just past Qui-Gon. He frowned. ?I was informed there would be three of you.?

    Qui-Gon would have buried his hands in the opposite arms of his robe, but he realized that piece of clothing was still wrapped around Obi-Wan, so he gave a short nod. ?Yes. During our travel in the jungles, there were three of us. But my student was stung by an insect that later revealed a serious allergy. He was at the brink of death,? He focused on the man?s indifferent face, trying to steer his mind?s eye from that terrible moment, the absence of life within Obi-Wan?s body, ?Thankfully, we were able to reverse the reaction. He?s receiving medical attention, accompanied by Jedi Knight Ullo Tirr.

    ?And I?m Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn.? He bowed. ?I apologize for the delay. Our communication malfunctioned, or else we would have alerted Eume?Li officials at once.?

    The man appraised him for a handful of seconds, lips drawn out in a thin line. Then he sighed. ?Well, there?s nothing that can be done about it now. You?re late and our patience has rapidly expired. Our planet?s in crisis, if you weren?t aware, and the plight of one child is insignificant in comparison.? He squared his heavily padded shoulders. ?This way. The others are waiting for you.?

    Qui-Gon could barely hear the instruction, his heart thundered so loudly and with such fury. He could not comprehend how someone could trivialize the suffering, the life and death of another, a ?child? as he said?one sent to this very planet to aid these sniveling imbeciles!

    But anger could not heat him when coolness was required. After all, the Council would not view this mission as anything remotely resembling a success if all the Eume?Li officials? heads were lopped off by an emerald saber.

    My apprentice. Qui-Gon nearly smiled as he followed the man into the depths of the building. Your wicked wit has become so much my own.

    He glanced at his sour, silent companion. I?ll need to thank you for that.

    ^^^ () ^^^

    Ullo crossed his legs and rested his chin on his hand.

    The hospital was lightly populated, and he was able to pr
     
  7. Opal

    Opal Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Hah! Ullo's cracking. He's gonna go looking for a padawan when he gets back to that Jedi Temple, I know it. :D
     
  8. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    hehehe yep looks like Master Tirr is becoming a regular softy! ;) hehehe

    Loved the 'heads cut off by an emerald blade' now that was funny! hehehehe Poor Qui, having to deal with imbecils! Ack.. never did like politics... negotiations have always been my weakness.. G'luck Qui!
     
  9. jedimommie2

    jedimommie2 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Yep! He's going soft! Can't wait to see if he realizes the relationship Obi and Qui have is something special and rare and that he could have that too! Great job as always!
     
  10. LuvEwan

    LuvEwan Jedi Master star 4

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    Opal Oh do you?

    Kynstar I hate politics too. Even after a half semester of government I just can't get the hang of them. :(

    jm2 I hope he realizes it as well! :D

    *Update on 'The Threat of Waking'*
     
  11. shanobi

    shanobi Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Welcome to Hell. If you can?t escape, stay awhile. [face_laugh] Oh my! How funny - and appropriate.

    Liked the part about Qui picking up Obi's wicked wit too. He has an effect on everyone he meets [face_love]

    And yes, Ullo is wilting :) He does seem to be a natural. And though I don't think he'll run right home and pick a padawan - I wouldn't be surprised to see him in another fic of yours down the road with a little one following him around.

    Great writing as usual.

    --shan
     
  12. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Master star 6

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    Qui-Gon, temper temper. I'm glad to see that Obi-Wan's wicked sense of humor is rubbing off on his Master!

    And poor Ullo doesn't have a chance does he? I'm sure Yoda will be parading potential Padawans in front of the poor man as soon as they get back.

    Good job.
     
  13. obi_ew

    obi_ew Jedi Master star 5

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    I wouldn't be surprised to see him in another fic of yours down the road with a little one following him around. Yes! Listen to Lady Shaindl you will! [face_hypnotized]

     
  14. AnariaZar-Rel

    AnariaZar-Rel Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Another great post. I love Qui-Gon picking up Obi-Wan's sense of humor :) and Knight Tirr is definately softening - can't wait for more!

     
  15. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

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    Run Ullo Run! The trap is closing in on you! Hurry before the sweet mushiness affects your brain!
     
  16. LuvEwan

    LuvEwan Jedi Master star 4

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    shanobi Shh! Don't talk about Ullo and fics while o_e's around! [face_worried] Thank you for your comments! :D

    diane Qui-Gon's temper? You haven't seen nothing yet! o_O

    o_e I'M NOT LISTENING! [face_not_talking]

    AnariaZar-Rel Thank you. [face_love]

    PK [face_laugh]



    ^^^ () ^^^

    ?That is an interesting claim, Master Jinn. But I hope you don?t resent my hesitancy to believe it.?

    Qui-Gon looked at the appointed weather specialist with weariness. He could describe the jungle?s sudden rainfall in a single way.

    And he couldn?t explain it in any way at all. So to start an involved argument with the man would be useless and worse, time consuming.

    ?It rained for hours. The proof is in the jungle.?

    The man, baby-faced with a medium build, put his hands on his hips, shook his head. ?I?m an expert forecaster. Nowhere in even the distant future did I expect rainfall. If a shower was nearing, why would the Senate rush you out here??

    Qui-Gon searched the other man?s face for a sign of deception. After all, Eume? Li had given him no reason to trust its inhabitants. But honesty was all he read from the forecaster. Honesty, confusion?and a great deal of irritation.

    To which Qui-Gon could relate. ?I?ve been pondering that same question myself.? He looked down, pursing his lips. When he ascended his eyes again, a determined cast overtook his features, one that Obi-Wan would have recognized immediately, ?As well as another.

    ?Why would you care so little about your planet?s ?crisis? that you would not investigate our apparent disappearance? Furthermore, why is there no radar device set up to detect alterations in the weather??

    The older gentlemen, Maw?Lon, who guided Qui-Gon through the building stepped forward. His brow was stretched severely over his eyes. ?We are a simple planet, Master Jinn. We haven?t the sophisticated technology of your beloved Coruscant.? A splash of venom from his tongue. ?And we have no desire for it.?

    ?I see.? Qui-Gon replied with smooth inflection. His eyes trailed the short line of Eume?Li executives. ?Your desire seems devoted to something else entirely.

    ?Greed and selfishness are better suited to misguided delinquents, not the rulers of a planet.?

    The man?s eyes widened in ire. ?What in the seven hells??

    Qui-Gon put up his hand. And while his adversary appeared ready to launch into a tirade, the action halted any movement. ?I have completed my task here. I have seen the dried ruins of your jungle. And despite the rain, it?s still at major risk. The lingering danger will be addressed in the official report I will distribute to the Jedi Council and the Senate?among other things.?

    A smirk from Maw?Lon. ?This isn?t about a misuse of funds.? He glanced at his fellow officials, then focused sharply on Qui-Gon again. ?You?re bitter about the incident involving your protégé. But the fault does not lie with us, Master Jinn. If anything, it is your fault, and your student?s, for being ill-prepared to tackle the jungle.?

    Qui-Gon could feel the furious tension swelling in his fingers, but he resisted the urge to ball them into fists. ?You stray from the topic at hand. Forgive my mentioning of it, but your planet is well known in the Senate for their misuse of funds in the past. Your motives seemed pure this time around, and I?m disappointed?disgusted?to discover that the best interests of your planet are still resigned to the backburner.

    ?So do not be surprised, sirs, if your disaster relief package comes complete with a new ?financial overseer? to aid your world.?

    Tossing away every attempt at niceties, Qui-Gon forewent his customary Jedi bow and wheeled around, stalking from the room.

    ^^^ () ^^^

    Obi-Wan laid his head back on the pillow. It was like nestling on a cloud borrowed from Heaven, after days of being jostled and writhing on gritty ground.

    Most of his memory of the journey was comprised of half-dreams from a fog of ether, probably brought on by th
     
  17. Opal

    Opal Jedi Padawan star 4

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    *sniff* How sweet. See, I knew Ullo was cracking. :D
     
  18. Kynstar

    Kynstar Jedi Knight star 5

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    Yeehaw! You tell him Tirr! Way to go!!!! Loved this:

    ?I?ve seen a lot of ugly stuff, Obi-Wan. As a Jedi, I?ve seen terrible things that ripped my heart out. But what I saw in that jungle pales everything else in comparison. Your Master was out of his mind with worry. And when he wasn?t struck silent by it, he talked about how much you meant to him.

    ?If you can?t even believe that, believe this. At this moment, I know why Masters have apprentices.? He stared into Obi-Wan?s eyes. ?And I know why, deep down, I?ve wanted an apprentice all along.

    ?That?s what I?ve learned on this mission, Obi-Wan. And I hope that now, you?ve learned some things as well.?


    Great job!!!!! Man did I ever love that! :D :D :D
     
  19. jedimommie2

    jedimommie2 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Wonderful job--I knew he'd soften up!
     
  20. obi_ew

    obi_ew Jedi Master star 5

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    [face_not_talking] Right back at ya! I'm ignoring you until you give in.
     
  21. jeday

    jeday Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Perhaps Ullo can help Obi-Wan to work trough his feelings of unworthiness and rejection. Ullo should speak about this to Qui-Gon too. :)
     
  22. dianethx

    dianethx Jedi Master star 6

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    Listen to Shaindl and OE, you should... LOL.

    Boy, Qui-Gon certainly can get heated when his ire is up and it was really up with that dig at Obi-Wan.

    Loved!!!! that poor Obi-Wan still has issues with Qui-Gon and how he fits into Qui's life. The part where he didn't reply to Ullo's question was very telling. Kid needs some serious hugs and a good dialogue of mush!!!


    Keep going. Looking forward to Qui and Obi's discussion.
     
  23. PadawanKitara

    PadawanKitara Jedi Master star 5

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    Too late for Ullo...

    **runs off to find another poor, delussional knight to rescue...
     
  24. Shaindl

    Shaindl Jedi Master star 4

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    Been offline a couple of days, LE - so what a treat I had to come back to today! Lovely posts - I loved how Tirr got irritated with Obi-Wan when he started to tell him that Qui-Gon o nly took him as a favour. And I LOVE that Tirr finally admitted he wants an apprentice.

    I really think you need to write a story about that... :D

    Cheers,

    Shaindl
     
  25. Calantha

    Calantha Jedi Master star 2

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    Ullo's come around! I really like him, and should you ever want to write another story with him, I'd be happy to read. If you want to. :)

    Obi-Wan?s smile was a little strained. ?If by magic, you mean luck.?

    There's no such thing as luck.
     
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