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Saga Alliance of Heroes - post-ANH AU (L/M, H/L, Vader, Palpy, Rogues) - COMPLETE - Part 2 cover up!

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by JediMara77, Apr 13, 2011.

  1. JediMara77

    JediMara77 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Mar 5, 2004
    Title: Alliance of Heroes
    Author: JediMara77
    Timeframe: 0 BBY - 1 ABY
    Characters: L/M, H/L, Darth Vader, Emperor Palpatine, Wedge Antilles, Tycho Celchu
    Genre: Drama, Action, Romance
    Summary: After the Battle of Yavin, the Rebel Alliance struggles to maintain its forward momentum in its quest to bring freedom to the galaxy. Meanwhile, even the most loyal Imperials face a crisis of conscience after the destruction of Alderaan. When old allegiances are forced to be set aside, can new alliances be forged?
    Author's Note: This is Part One of the Jaded Trilogy. Part Two - Night Must Fall can be found [link=http://boards.theforce.net/the_saga/b10476/31826079/p1/?1]here.[/link]
    Disclaimer: Don't own anything, although I wish I owned Rogue!Luke.




    [b]Dramatis Personae:[/b]

    [u]With the Rebel Alliance:[/u]
    Admiral Ackbar - Director of Fleet Command
    C-3PO - protocol droid
    Chewbacca - co-pilot, [i]Millennium Falcon[/i]
    Commander Arhul Narra - Renegade Leader
    Commander Luke Skywalker - Rogue Leader
    Flight Officer Dack Ralter - Rogue Six
    General Airen Cracken - Director of Intelligence
    General Carlist Rieekan - High Councilor
    General Jan Dodonna - Minister of War
    Han Solo - captain, [i]Millennium Falcon[/i]
    Lieutenant Hobbie Klivian - Rogue Four
    Lieutenant Wedge Antilles - Rogue Three
    Lieutenant Wes Janson - Rogue Five
    Lieutenant Zev Senesca - Rogue Two
    Mon Mothma - Commander in Chief
    Princess Leia Organa - High Councilor
    R2-D2 - astromech droid
    Red - astromech droid


    [u]With the Empire:[/u]
    Admiral Kendal Ozzel - Death Squadron commander
    Captain Firmus Piett - captain, [i]Executor[/i]
    Darth Vader - Dark Lord of the Sith
    General Maximilian Veers - Death Squadron ground forces commander
    Lieutenant Tycho Celchu - TIE fighter pilot
    Mara Jade - Emperor's Hand
    Palpatine - Emperor



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    [b][i]They were in the wrong place at the wrong time. Naturally they became heroes. - Leia Organa of Alderaan, Senator[/i][/b]



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    [b]Cover art by [link=http://boards.theforce.net/UserPages/Profile.aspx?user=Iverna]Iverna[/link][/b]

    [image=http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v109/JediMara77/JediMara77.jpg]



    [hr]


    [b]I'd like to give a huge thank you to everyone who nominated and voted for this fic in the 2011 Saga awards. It won:

    Best Alternate Universe
    Best All Around
    Best Canon Interpretation, Male (Luke Skywalker) (tie)
    Best Ensemble Cast
    Best New Author (tie)

    Thank you all so much! [/b]



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  2. JediMara77

    JediMara77 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Mar 5, 2004
    PROLOGUE





    The corridors of the Death Star were a brilliant white, a stark contrast with the dark uniforms of the officers escorting her down the hallway. The atmosphere was bright and sterile, like a medic?s office, but Princess Leia Organa of Alderaan knew that it was all part of the ruse to conceal the true, insidious nature of the Empire?s new battle station.

    Rumors about the Death Star had been flying among the Rebel factions for years. Even though the battle station had never been acknowledged by the Empire, and would remain a secret until it was fully operational, the leaders of the Rebel Alliance had known for years of Emperor Palpatine's ultimate plan to crush all opposition to his rule. He need only wait until the Death Star was operational, and then all opposition would cower at his feet.

    But Leia Organa believed differently. It would be impossible to remain neutral in the galactic conflict when confronted with the fact that Palpatine, and by extension his Empire, would do anything to maintain control of the galaxy. Even exterminate entire civilizations.

    If the Death Star?s primary weapon were to ever be used?Leia could only imagine the implications.

    A steel grip clamped down on her shoulder, and she twisted around to glance at Darth Vader, the second most powerful man in the Empire. Leia knew that others had crumpled before the Dark Lord?s gaze, but Leia would not let herself be intimidated by such a creature. She had withstood his torture only hours earlier and continued to refuse to divulge information about the secret Rebel base. The young senator could feel Vader?s anger at her stubborn refusal, but still that did not intimidate her. She would be dead soon anyway, and at least she would go to her grave knowing that she had not betrayed her comrades. The Rebels would gain possession of the Death Star plans, strike a crushing blow against the Empire, and the path to freedom would begin to once again take hold in the galaxy.

    Leia narrowed her eyes defiantly as she turned back to the scene in front of her. Her hands were bound, but the two officers beside her guided her towards a large room with a viewport. She allowed herself to spare a glance at the young officers escorting her. They seemed young and dutiful, like many fresh recruits from the Imperial academy, and Leia could only wonder if they knew the true nature of this battle station. The officer to her right met her eye and forcefully grabbed her arm and pushed her forward.

    Ignoring his actions, Leia focused on the room in front of her. A sneer came to her lips as she recognized Grand Moff Tarkin, the commander of the Death Star, standing next to an admiral she did not know. Still surrounded by the two officers and Vader, Leia marched defiantly toward the gaunt-faced moff. ?Governor Tarkin,? she began, giving him an approximation of a diplomatic nod. ?I should have expected to find you holding Vader?s leash. I recognized your foul stench when I was brought on board.?

    The older man smiled thinly. ?Charming to the last,? he drawled. ?You don?t know how hard I found it signing the order to terminate your life.?

    ?I?m surprised you had the courage to take the responsibility yourself,? she retorted. If she were to die, she would die with a fight.

    Tarkin did not answer right away; he paced around the room, which Leia approximated to be one of the battle station?s main control rooms, before turning back to her. ?Princess Leia, before your execution, I would like you to be my guest at a ceremony that will make this battle station operational. No star system will dare oppose the Emperor now.?

    Leia allowed herself a guffaw. It was so simple to understand, how could the Empire not see it? ?The more you tighten your grip, Tarkin, the more star systems will slip through your fingers,? she warned him.

    ?Not after we demonstrate the power of this station,? Tarkin countered. Leia?s heart fluttered in her chest?was the station already operational? ?In a way, you have determined the choice
     
  3. Hazel

    Hazel Jedi Master star 4

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    I get first post? [face_dancing]


    :D :D :D

    Nanci, have you been reading my mind?

    Great start and promises to be a very compeling story and I'm dying to see where you go with it.

    I'm also wondering how you're going to put this in your sig :p

     
  4. Lane_Winree

    Lane_Winree Jedi Master star 4

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    Mar 30, 2006
    They seemed young and dutiful, like many fresh recruits, and Leia could only wonder if they knew the true nature of this battle station

    You know, this is a really fascinating thing to consider. I have a feeling many people within the Imperial Military had no idea just what the Death Star was capable of. Firing it once on Alderaan may have been Tarkin's biggest mistake because the mass defections that occurred were devastating to the Empire. So much military training instantly became a part of the Rebellion.

    They were Alderaanians.

    It would be a disgrace for her to turn away. She had to witness.


    Ugh. This is just so painful, you know that this whole thing destroys Leia but to read this scene from her perspective is heart breaking.

    Seeing an opportunity, Leia grasped it. ?Do you agree with what was just done??

    The officer on her right grabbed her arm more tightly. ?Shut it, Princess. We?re not supposed to talk to you.?

    Refusing to be discouraged, Leia turned to the man on her left. ?And you? Will you stand by while the Empire murders entire worlds to demonstrate its power??


    Laying the seedlings of doubt. My stars, you know, what if Tarkin had decided to use Dantooine as a demonstration instead of Alderaan? Would there have been mass defections?

    And then he turned to Leia, a look of profound pain on his face. ?My mother was from Alderaan,? he whispered.

    Leia nodded in understanding. ?And you?re going to stand for this?? she asked, gesturing around her, to the battle station that had destroyed a world.

    For a moment the officer didn?t answer. The he stood military straight, narrowed his eyes, and activated the door panel, leaving Leia alone in her cell once again.

    But it didn?t matter. Leia knew that, in the space of a heartbeat, everything in this war had changed.


    Like I said, Tarkin's greatest mistake. Who knows if the Rebellion could have survived without the mass exodus of military personnel that followed the destruction of Alderaan.

    The young Hand could not help but think that destroying Alderaan had been a huge blunder.

    Mara's on the same wavelength that I am.

    ?Emperor?s Hand.? His voice stopped her before she could turn to leave the control room. She turned and graced him with her most obedient of expressions. ?Our master will be most interested to hear your misgivings regarding today?s test.?

    Oho, Vader on the same page too?

    Mara nodded, wondering at Vader?s overtures?had he finally realized that they were on the same side, and that she was not his enemy? Or did he have more devious intentions?

    You've really got the Vader creep factor dialed up to 11!

    Today, for the first time in her life, she had questioned the actions of the Empire. The reason did not matter; in questioning alone, the Emperor's Hand had done the unthinkable.

    And a fascinating little tweak in the canon to set up this AU

    Nanci this was very well done. Your Leia is fantastic!

    Can't wait to see where you go with this :)
     
  5. Luna_Nightshade

    Luna_Nightshade Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Great start! I love Mara's misgivings and Vader noticing it. Leia was so stoic and strong with this event. I can't wait to find out the more sensitive repercussions of this situation. PM's please? I can't wait for more.
     
  6. Piper057

    Piper057 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Nov 26, 2009
    You started it, you started it! [face_love]@};-

    I didn't dare to hope until you finish "Plooma..."...

    Nanci, I love you! [:D]

     
  7. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Game Host Who Loves Fanfics & RPGs star 7 VIP - Game Host

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    Aug 31, 2004
    I love love love love L/M in the Saga together -- all sorts of sparks and interesting stuff pulling and pushing them together [face_dancing] [face_dancing]


    Your Mara is stellar, naturally, as is the rest of the characterizations @};-

    Fave line: ;) [face_dancing] this is the first part of a trilogy.

    Yesness!!!!!


    [:D]
     
  8. Clarizabel

    Clarizabel Jedi Knight

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    Apr 2, 2011
    if you have a PM list, please add me
     
  9. Master_Jaina1011

    Master_Jaina1011 Jedi Master star 4

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    May 20, 2002
    You know... you totally gave in. Considering we were sitting across from each other just Saturday, and you stating,

    "No I don't want to post until I am almost finished with Plooma. Or just until I have enough to post."

    I see that didn't happen!

    [face_laugh]

    But I have to say I was absolutely insanely curious as to what you had going here. And yet again I was anxiously awaiting for this. That has to say something!

    Now onto the actual review.

    This is Part One of a trilogy

    Oh you got yourself this time! [face_laugh]

    Leia knew that others had crumpled before the Dark Lord?s gaze, but Leia would not let herself be intimidated by such a creature.

    I bow to you oh anointed one!

    I love your Leia! You really captured her inner turmoil this entire segment. You really have me curious now, Nanci!

    But it didn?t matter. Leia knew that, in the space of a heartbeat, everything in this war had changed.

    Oh yes the seeds of doubt. With those you can turn anyone...

    It does make you wonder how the war would have turned out if Alderaan hadn't been destroyed like that. Hmmm...

    NO! Will not think that!

    Anyways, you bring up a good point there. I'm anxious to see how you expand on that, not just from the Rebel's view but also from the Empire's view.

    The young Hand could not help but think that destroying Alderaan had been a huge blunder. She agreed that an example needed to be made of the Rebellion, so that other star systems did not openly rebel against the Empire. She knew that traitors to the Empire could not be tolerated; she had taken care of many of them herself. But using the Death Star against Alderaan? Organa?s homeworld or not, it was a cultural and historical center of the galaxy. Many sons and daughters of the Empire came from the planet. How would they react to its destruction? Would they question the Empire that they so loyally served? Would they want to join the Rebellion to avenge their families? deaths? Would the Empire soon suffer the repurcussions of mass defections?


    Alas, seeing this from Mara's POV was poignant. It again brings up the point as to why Tarkin chose Alderaan. You have Mara as the Emperor's hand down pat.

    ?I simply question Governor Tarkin?s insight, my lord,? she began. ?We all know that the Empire has recently experienced many problems with defectors. Therefore, I fear that today?s test will cause many more soldiers to defect to the Rebellion.?



    Ohhhh... speaking your opinion to Darth Vader are you now Mara? Is this your way of planting those doubts in his mind too? Or is he just taking your word and throwing it out the window?

    And her thoughts echo mine. great job!

    Today, for the first time in her life, she had questioned the actions of the Empire. It did not matter that her intentions were benevolent. It did not matter that the person she questioned was Grand Moff Tarkin and not the Emperor himself. None of that mattered. In questioning alone, the Emperor's Hand had done the unthinkable.

    And thus starts it all. You destroy one thing, and more people will start to rethink your actions.

    Pretty awesome start Nanci! I love it and can't wait to see what you do with it!

    Oh and Tycho on the Empire's side. Now that I am going to enjoy!

     
  10. Vivid_Scripts

    Vivid_Scripts Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Jan 21, 2004
    Very interesting start!

    I'm curious to see how Palpatine will react to Mara's 'suggestion' that Tarkin made a blunder. I agree hugely with Lady_Winree about the Tarkin's targeting of Alderaan being his greatest mistake and I love that you're exploring that line further (it's something rather prominent in my fic, too) by giving us glimpses of Imperial Troops being dismayed by the destruction that the Death Star is capable of. I wonder how many planets Tarkin would have had to raze before there was a mutiny aboard the Death Star. Two? Seven? hmm...

    Add me to a PM list, too, if you have one!
     
  11. EmilieDarklighter

    EmilieDarklighter Jedi Master star 4

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    Jan 19, 2002
    LE GASP.

    Is this by any possibility the thing we discussed which has my favorite brand of Luke ever in it? Methinks it is!

    [:D]

    Just a note. I think I am going to have to take Leia-writing lessons from you. Because despite the fact that I have seen and read tons of source information on Leia, I can never get her quite right. And even though I have seen the bit with Alderaan blowing up a hundred times in repeated ANH viewings, this reading was fresh because, I don't know. It was so very Leia.

    Also, can I say that I really really enjoy your Emperor's Hand!Mara? I'm starting to be completely unsurprised when you turn out to be excellent at writing her, but being excellent at writing her in so many different time periods in her life and making her feel like the same person - that's something else. <3

    Can't wait for more!
     
  12. Lady_Jedi93

    Lady_Jedi93 Jedi Knight star 4

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    May 11, 2010
    You're one of those writers that make people feel that they're right there in the scene.
    This is a wonderful talent, but I feel like my planet just blew up. [face_plain] :p
    Saga AU's are some of my favorites and I've already told you how much I like L/M ;) Looking forward to another great story. =D=
     
  13. kataja

    kataja Jedi Master star 4

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    They were in the wrong place at the wrong time. Naturally they became heroes. - Leia Organa of Alderaan, Senator
    I love that include this ? one of my all time favourite SW quotes ? and sadly neglected by most?


    Great insight into Leia?s thoughts! The scene was familiar but Leia?as POV made it all seem fresh!


    The officer marched away down the hallway, leaving his companion to follow. But before he did, he paused in the cell?s entry for a long moment, deep in thought. He reached out to activate the door?

    And then he turned to Leia, a look of profound pain on his face. ?My mother was from Alderaan,? he whispered
    .
    Hey ? contact!!! :D



    I loved Mara?s POV too, even more maybe as it was new and exactly the way I?d imagined it to be, had she been present:
    Despite the fact that the young senator was a Rebel and therefore Mara?s sworn enemy, she could not help but feel sympathy for the other woman?sympathy and respect. Sympathy because the Princess had been forced to watch as her world was figuratively and literally destroyed, and respect because, in the end, she still remained determined and defiant.

    The sympthy seems prefectly natural - but I suspect it might have serious consequences.... [face_love]

    ?I simply question Governor Tarkin?s insight, my lord,? she began. ?We all know that the Empire has recently experienced many problems with defectors. Therefore, I fear that today?s test will cause many more soldiers to defect to the Rebellion.?

    ?I see,? Vader replied. ?Perhaps you should present your misgivings to the Emperor. Surely he would be more than pleased to send his most trusted assassin to take care of such treason
    .?

    Vader turning against Tarkin should have been no surprise but is still intrieguing... Most intriguing...:D

    It did not matter that the person she questioned was Grand Moff Tarkin and not the Emperor himself. None of that mattered. In questioning alone, the Emperor's Hand had done the unthinkable.
    Such a promising start - I can?t wait so see where you take this! [:D] =D= [:D]


     
  14. JediMara77

    JediMara77 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Mar 5, 2004
    Hazel:

    Nanci, have you been reading my mind?

    Last I checked, I do not have that superpower. :)


    Great start and promises to be a very compeling story and I'm dying to see where you go with it.


    Thank you! Things will go...far...

    I'm also wondering how you're going to put this in your sig

    tinyurl for the win :D



    Lane:

    You know, this is a really fascinating thing to consider. I have a feeling many people within the Imperial Military had no idea just what the Death Star was capable of. Firing it once on Alderaan may have been Tarkin's biggest mistake because the mass defections that occurred were devastating to the Empire. So much military training instantly became a part of the Rebellion.

    Yeah. Tarkin wasn't the brightest bulb in the box there!


    Ugh. This is just so painful, you know that this whole thing destroys Leia but to read this scene from her perspective is heart breaking.


    I'm glad it's heart breaking, that means I did my job well. :D

    Mara's on the same wavelength that I am.

    Oh, yes. And so her world starts to collapse...


    You've really got the Vader creep factor dialed up to 11!


    Dialing up the Vader creep factor has become one of my favorite activities. I don't know what that says about me.


    Nanci this was very well done. Your Leia is fantastic!


    Thank you. :) There are a lot of characters in this fic that I've never written before, so I'm very nervous!


    Luna:

    Thank you for reading! There will definitely be lots of repercussions.

    I will put you on the PM list!


    Piper:

    I did, I did! I'm so impatient, just like Luke. :p

    Nanci, I love you!

    [face_blush]



    Jade:

    I love love love love L/M in the Saga together -- all sorts of sparks and interesting stuff pulling and pushing them together

    Oh, there will be a lot of that here. I hope. :)

    Fave line: this is the first part of a trilogy.

    Haha, yes. What did I get myself into?!



    Clarizabel:

    Sure thing! Thanks for reading!



    Jaina:

    I know, I know, I know. I am incredibly weak and impatient. To my credit, I had five chapters finished when I posted this (now six), so I'm planning on staying far ahead throughout this whole process at least.

    I love your Leia! You really captured her inner turmoil this entire segment. You really have me curious now, Nanci!

    Thank you, thank you. I love Leia in the Saga era, and she's very intimidating to write. I hope she continues to come off well.

    Alas, seeing this from Mara's POV was poignant. It again brings up the point as to why Tarkin chose Alderaan. You have Mara as the Emperor's hand down pat.

    Again, thank you. Emperor's Hand Mara is so weird for me to write. It's actually kind of painful, especially when she's with Palpy. Poor girl.


    Ohhhh... speaking your opinion to Darth Vader are you now Mara? Is this your way of planting those doubts in his mind too? Or is he just taking your word and throwing it out the window?


    Vader pretty much despises Mara. Palpy plays them against each other without Mara even noticing it. He's the master for a reason.

    Oh and Tycho on the Empire's side. Now that I am going to enjoy!

    Well, he is...but remember what happened with him in canon. :)



    Vivid:

    I'm curious to see how Palpatine will react to Mara's 'suggestion' that Tarkin made a blunder.

    You will find out soon enough. :) Let's just say that it does not end up very well for Mara...but it doesn't end up very well for Palpy, either.

    Will put you on the list!



    Emilie:

    Indeed, it is. (Speaking of our favorite brand of Luke, have you seen [link=http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v109/JediMara77/The-Legacy-Collection-Luke-Skywalker-Snowspeeder-Pilot_Big_6.jpg]this[/link] photo? I think I died.

    I think I am going to have to take Leia-writing lessons from you.

    Aww, thank you! I've never really written her before. It's going to be interesting getting into her head. Especially in Part
     
  15. JediMara77

    JediMara77 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Mar 5, 2004
    Decided to post on Tuesday since I've got something else going up on Wednesday. So updates will be on Tuesdays.



    [u]CHAPTER 1[/u]





    ?Are you sure this looks okay?? Luke Skywalker asked, self-consciously reaching up to adjust the collar on his bright yellow jacket. The kid had been doing that for the last fifteen minutes and if Han hadn?t known any better, he would have assumed that Luke was actually a thirteen-year-old girl from Kuat, not a nineteen-year-old farm boy from Tatooine.

    Han Solo sighed, stealing a glance at his Wookiee co-pilot, Chewbacca, who was doing his best to ignore the situation and leave Han to comfort the nervous hero. ?I told you, kid, you look fine,? Han reassured him. ?Besides, nobody in there,? he gestured toward the large auditorium-style room where the ceremony would take place, ?is going to give a damn what [i]you[/i] look like, I can guarantee that.?

    Luke turned, somewhat insulted, still fiddling with his jacket. ?Well I [i]did[/i] fire the kill shot, you know.?

    Han rolled his eyes. ?I didn?t mean it like [i]that[/i]. I meant that everyone?ll be staring at the Princess.?

    ?Oh.? Luke turned again, seemingly staring through the thick temple walls to where the Princess was waiting for them. ?Yeah,? he replied absently. ?You?re probably right.?

    The two men stood silently for a while, the only noise coming when Chewbacca rumbled a soft question. ?No, I don?t know why we?re waiting,? Han replied. ?I guess the Rebels aren?t as organized as the other side.? Chewbacca guffawed at that, but Luke kept pacing, oblivious to their exchange.

    ?Are you [i]sure[/i] this looks fine?? he asked again, palming his jacket again.

    ?For the hundredth time, yes! You look fine.? Han himself was wearing the same outfit he'd come in on, but Luke's desert clothes weren't necessarily appropriate to wear when receiving a medal from Princess Leia Organa, so he'd scrounged together whatever he could find when they'd told him about the ceremony, and he'd been fretting ever since.

    Luke looked down at himself, frowning in dissatisfaction. ?I don?t know how you can be so calm,? he finally said. ?Do you know how many people are going to be watching us??

    ?So? You infiltrated the Death Star, rescued a princess, and flew head to head with Darth Vader, and now you?re scared of a little medal ceremony? All ya gotta do is walk down that aisle, smile at the Princess, and get your award. Simple as ryshcate.?

    ?Flying?s easy. I didn?t have all those people watching me fly.?

    ?Well actually you did, you just weren't thinking about it at the time.? The kid stopped in his tracks, visibly blanching, and Han immediately regretted what he had just said. The smuggler took a deep breath and leaned in conspiratorially. ?Look, Luke. These things aren?t that big a deal. With the way you fly, you better get used to ?em. I bet the Rebels are gonna want to give you a lot of these medals.?

    Luke smiled sheepishly. ?Thanks, Han.?

    ?No problem. Trust me, you do get used to it.?

    ?How do you know?? Luke asked curiously.

    ?What, you think a guy like me has never gotten a medal before??

    ?Oh?no?that?s not what I meant??

    Han laughed and patted the younger man?s arm. ?Just messin? with you, kid. Actually?? Han trailed off, wondering about what he was going to say. He wasn?t ashamed of his past, not by a long shot, but he wasn?t one to go spilling his guts to every new person who entered his life. [i]Especially[/i] not to a kid who was hell bent on joining this Rebellion.

    But surprisingly, Han didn?t see a reason not to be honest. He shrugged. ?If you want to know the truth, I attended the Imperial academy at Carida.?

    Luke?s eyes widened. ?[i]You[/i] went to the academy??

    ?Yup. Graduated top of my class. Trust me, we had to go through [i]a lot[/i] of ceremonies like this one. Graduation was a piece of work. I hated them at first, but I got used to them. It was just part of the gig that I learned to live with.?

    ?So what happened??

    ?You mean, why am I not in the Empir>
     
  16. EmilieDarklighter

    EmilieDarklighter Jedi Master star 4

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    Jan 19, 2002
    Daaaaaaaaaaaaaamn, girl. When you deliver, you deliver, don't you?

    Well. Back to gushing over how well you write Luke! :D

    ?Are you sure this looks okay?? Luke Skywalker asked, self-consciously reaching up to adjust the collar on his bright yellow jacket. The kid had been doing that for the last fifteen minutes and if Han hadn?t known any better, he would have assumed that Luke was actually a thirteen-year-old girl from Kuat, not a nineteen-year-old farm boy from Tatooine.

    ...oh my god. I laughed so hard. I would never have imagined it myself, but that does make perfect sense. Luke will have worn nothing else but his clothes from Tatooine or the like, which would definitely not be appropriate. I always liked that outfit, though, even if it was yellow. After RotJ all people ever describe him in are those Jedi blacks, and I have begun to hate them. That, and his RotJ haircut. It made me want to ruffle his hair so bad.

    Ahem. But enough fashion analysis. On to the story!

    Luke is so squishy and adorable for the whole first scene, I would have to highlight all of it to get my point across. But I do want to single out this:


    ?I can?t. I borrowed it.?

    ?From who??

    ?Wes Janson; new pilot, just got in from the Tierfon Yellow Aces. Said he wanted to honor the destroyer of the Death Star with his official squadron colors.?


    WES! <3 x a billionty. This is the kind of integration with the EU I love to see. And oh, Wes. Luke is going to be your CO soon. This is going to be interesting.

    Leia raised an eyebrow, amused. ?They say? I highly doubt that a man such as yourself is unfamiliar with the effects of wine??

    She trailed off, allowing the innuendo the hover in the air, wondering what in the galaxy had prompted her to say something like that, but Han just chuckled, forcing the glass into her hand. ?Actually, I am.? Again she raised an eyebrow. He leaned in to whisper, ?I usually drink ale.?


    Oh, Leia! What would your father say, consorting with scoundrels? I love that even though she's just become the leader of the Rebellion (somewhere, Padme is so very proud) Leia still feels like a teenage girl here. :p You're a multi-talented woman, JM! If you can write Wedge/Iella and Corran/Mirax you'll have run the full gamut of my favorite canon couples. :D :p

    ?And you grew up in a castle on Alderaan. He grew up on a moisture farm on Tatooine. What does he know about how the galaxy works? Kenobi fed him what he wanted to hear about his father and that Force business and now all Luke wants is to follow in his father?s footsteps be the big Jedi hero.?

    Leia put her hands on her hips, forcing her expression to remain impassive when all she wanted to do was deck the man! ?And what, may I ask, is wrong with that??

    ?Nothing! If that?s what he really wants.?

    ?And why wouldn?t it be??

    ?Look, Your Worshipfulness.? Leia straightened up again, stepping forward as her brown eyes blazed at the man?s insolence, but he wasn?t deterred, and that enraged her even more. ?He?s got nowhere else to go. The Empire killed his family and now all he wants is revenge. But perhaps he doesn?t deserve this kind of life.


    Big brother Han ftw! Don't worry, Han - he'll grow up, but unfortunately he has a rare congenital disorder - he was born without a sense of self-preservation. He'll still need you to save his butt. Hey - you and Mara can keep score!

    ?So the officer stuffs out his chest, all pompous-like, and says ?You paid the tariff for this shipment?? And Booster just stares him down all serious and says ?No sir, I have an exemption form right here.? The officer snatches it, gives it a once over, says everything is in order and sends us on our merry way.?

    ?No offense, Wedge, but that?s not a very good story.?

    ?That?s ?cause I ain?t told the punchline yet?on the ?Reason for Exemption? line, Booster had written ?STOLEN GOODS.? I would've given a thousand creds to see the look on that CorSec officer?s face!?


    I'm going to have to compartmentalize, here, because there are so many awesome things here at once. First
     
  17. Luna_Nightshade

    Luna_Nightshade Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    This was so much fun. I loved seeing the interaction between Luke and Han, and Luke and the Rogues. They're great friends to have. I also loved Leia's annoyance at Han--so believable. Fantastic update--I love seeing all of this going on behind the scenes interaction. Can't wait for more!
     
  18. Piper057

    Piper057 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    I LOVE the first scene. Medal ceremony is my favourite episode in SW films - the guys are adorable here! [:D] You wrote them completely in character, I can clearly see their talk in canon. Especially this:


    By the way, I like him in this jacket! :p

    Why does everybody who knows Luke is so protective of him? :D Han is wonderful here. [face_love]


    Oh, Leia... You'll hear it the rest of your life. [face_laugh]


    Yup, he is such a kid... :D


    [face_laugh][face_laugh][face_laugh]

    Oh, these pilots...[face_love]







     
  19. kataja

    kataja Jedi Master star 4

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    May 4, 2007
    if Han hadn?t known any better, he would have assumed that Luke was actually a thirteen-year-old girl from Kuat, not a nineteen-year-old farm boy from Tatooine.
    [face_laugh] I like that about Luke - he's not afraid of his feminine sides... ;)


    So? You infiltrated the Death Star, rescued a princess, and flew head to head with Darth Vader, and now you?re scared of a little medal ceremony?
    Sounds very probable, yes?[face_plain] :p


    ?Flying?s easy. I didn?t have all those people watching me fly.?

    ?Well actually you did, you just weren't thinking about it at the time
    .?
    Not to speak of the film crew or the audience ? millions of people watching you, time and time again for 34 years? Blanching now, farmboy?[face_batting]


    Gratitude from the Princess was one thing, but gratitude from Luke?
    Yeah, the first one?s nice - but the other?:p


    I borrowed it.?

    ?From who??

    ?Wes Janson; new pilot, just got in from the Tierfon Yellow Aces
    .
    Heh? This is canon or you made it up? [face_batting]


    For Han Solo, in that one moment, her smile was a greater reward than all the credits in the universe.
    Awww? [face_blush] Now it?s not only Mara, but Han too?s softening ? oops that was in another fic?



    She was alone?orphaned for the second time?and forced to take upon her father?s role as leader of the Rebellion. She had accepted his mantle without hesitation, but deep down, Leia wondered if she was up to the challenge. She was only nineteen, and while everyone in the Alliance seemed to respect her, there were many, many times she still felt like a little girl playing dress up.
    Amazing insight into Leia's mind here! =D= Not before reading The Force Unleashed did I think of how straightly and quickly she uinherited that...:(


    He?d been an enigma to her since she?d first laid eyes on him in the Death Star's detention block, a combination of fierce loyalty to those he deemed friends and utter indifference to any sort of higher cause. She?d been deeply hurt when he left before the battle and was overjoyed when he?d returned, saving the day like a bona fide hero.

    And she would never admit to anyone, much less herself, that her heart had fluttered a bit when she?d heard his cheer coming in loud and clear over the comm
    .
    This - is - perfect! =D= =D= =D= Not too much, not too little - just perfect! [face_peace]



    Care for some wine??

    She shook her head and turned back to the railing, leaning against it. ?No, thank you.?

    ?You sure? They say it calms the nerves.?

    Leia raised an eyebrow, amused. ?They say? I highly doubt that a man such as yourself is unfamiliar with the effects of wine??

    She trailed off, allowing the innuendo the hover in the air, wondering what in the galaxy had prompted her to say something like that, but Han just chuckled, forcing the glass into her hand. ?Actually, I am.? Again she raised an eyebrow. He leaned in to whisper, ?I usually drink ale
    .?
    [face_laugh] Oh, he's such a charmer! I LOVE the way you write their exchange! [:D] It's spot on!


    But he?s a kid, Princess.?

    ?He?s the same age as I am,? Leia countered.

    ?And you grew up in a castle on Alderaan. He grew up on a moisture farm on Tatooine. What does he know about how the galaxy works? Kenobi fed him what he wanted to hear about his father and that Force business and now all Luke wants is to follow in his father?s footsteps be the big Jedi hero
    .?
    Han, Han, you're so soft and sweet - and you show that to Leia without even thinking about it! And the best is - she's too indignated to realize it too! [face_laugh]


    ?This is my life, Captain Solo. I?m not asking him to do anything that I?m not doing myself.?

    They glared at each other until Han finally looked away, suddenly embarrassed. ?I?m sorry, Princess
    .?
    And he's actually apologizing? Bravo! =D=


    ?And you can call me Leia.?

    He winked again. ?Wh
     
  20. Hazel

    Hazel Jedi Master star 4

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    Nov 9, 2010
    Gotta love farmboy!pilot!Luke. [face_love]

    EDIT: :oops: I can't believe I forgot - PM please?
     
  21. Lady_Jedi93

    Lady_Jedi93 Jedi Knight star 4

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    May 11, 2010
    Am I the only one that actually thinks that "the yellow jacket" wasn't that bad? [face_laugh] The scene with Han and Leia was very cute [face_love]
    Luke and Wedge [face_dancing] I love them bunches! :D Great job!

     
  22. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Game Host Who Loves Fanfics & RPGs star 7 VIP - Game Host

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    The feel of this is very ANH-ish =D= =D=

    Your H/L dynamic/tone is especially stunning [ perfect!

    :D
     
  23. dancing_star

    dancing_star Jedi Master star 4

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    Feb 24, 2007
    This is amazing. =D=@};- Brilliant characterizations- so real! I especially loved Han's conversation with Leia, his concern for Luke. Kataja's review sums up what I thought. Wonderful job on this so far! I'm looking forward to more! [face_dancing]
    [:D]
     
  24. Jace1709

    Jace1709 Jedi Youngling

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    Jul 9, 2004
    Really good start, looking forward to seeing how it goes.

    If you're doing a PM update, please sign me up
     
  25. Briannakin

    Briannakin Grand Moff Darth Fanfic & Costuming/Props Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Feb 25, 2010
    Okay, you have sucked me in once again. All of the characterizations are spot on. PM please?

    On another note: that jacket should have been burned. There is no way that thing can look good... unless it is on our farmboy.