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Beyond - Legends An Unlocked Soul -- OC's, Kyp/OC (AU) -- Completed 01/02/09

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Ceillean, Apr 13, 2008.

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  1. Ceillean

    Ceillean Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    So there's another OC. Please excuse the name. I couldn't come up with anything better. :p




    Hera sat in the corner of the small hospital room, long legs gracefully draped over the other and her back rigid. Infinitely dark brown eyes scanned the area, taking in all the details her brain could handle in such a short time. And her mind could handle quite a lot, she thought with a smirk.

    Wearing a perfect black, tailor made business suit, Hera seemed to have jumped right out of a banking clan of sorts. Her straight black hair was carefully swept back and bound together at the nape of her neck; there was no doubting she was a tough and imposing figure. Hera counted on others being afraid of her and during the years she had even become accustomed to it and at times, enjoyed her person being the cause of fear.

    But not today. Today she sat with her own fear and worry buried deep within her heart. Because today would show how much her daughter already knew. So she waited.

    **********

    When Kyp entered the hospital room, he was surprised to see a visitor. At first he thought the elderly woman to be a colleague from the social service center but as she got to her feet in a fluid and graceful motion, he immediately caught the resemblance.

    The same dark eyes, the same curves along the mouth, the same high cheek bones.
    The woman came forward and extended a hand, ?I am Hera. And you are??

    Arching a brow, Kyp took her hand and shook it gently, probing the area with the Force; he could feel apprehension and concern. But not the sort that one would usually expect from a mother.

    She was a little smaller than Kyp but stood with pride seemingly etched into her very bones. She held her head high and within her eyes Kyp recognized stubbornness as well.
    ?I?m Kyp Durron.?

    Hera surveyed him from top to bottom, her eyes first lingering on his sandy brown Jedi robes and then on his silver lightsaber, dangling from his hip. Even though it was only a quick movement, Kyp caught Hera narrowing her eyes and he heard a slight intake of breath. But she stood firm yet again and smiled just slightly, overplaying the first moment of muted shock, ?Are you friends with my daughter??

    Kyp nodded once and keeping his ever-so-polite smile in place, moved forward to stand beside Liz; he felt Hera?s penetrating gaze on his back but he chose to ignore it. He couldn?t help but wonder why she was even here. According to what Liz had said their relationship wasn?t the best. Kyp assumed it was hospital protocol to inform relatives ? he didn?t believe Liz had called on Hera on her own.

    As he reached out to sweep a dark strand of hair from Liz?s closed eyes, his forehead creased into a frown. Her skin was cold and clammy. It was obvious she was coming down with something ? when he?d left earlier it was blatantly clear ? but something told him there was more to her current situation than met the eye.

    ?What happened?? he asked as he turned around to face Hera. He didn?t know how long she?d already been here but he was certain the Doctor had already given her the facts.
    ?It seems Eliziya was hallucinating.? The slightest of shrugs. ?The nurses found her in the gardens by the pond, mumbling about saving a boy.?

    Hera?s voice was the coldest Kyp had ever heard. She talked in facts and numbers, no emotions whatsoever.

    ?She will recover.? Hera added as she recognized the look on Kyp?s face to be worry.
    ?Did they tell you anything else??

    Hera shook her head, crossing her arms in front of her chest, ?She will be monitored henceforth. And once she is fit to travel, I will be taking her back with me to Chandrila.?
    It took a short moment for Kyp to completely comprehend what it was Hera had just said. He straightened and cleared his throat, ?I beg your pardon??

    ?Obviously she is not receiving the needed attention she requires. I have a group of specialists standing at the ready once we arrive. I am certain she will then make a full recovery.?

    ?Has she agreed??

    Hera?s eyes widened just a fraction, ?It
     
  2. jadesabre75

    jadesabre75 Jedi Knight star 4

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    Oooooo. Things are not going well.

    Loved the banter between Nikk and Kyp. That was freaking hilarious. I like Nikk too, but he did surprise me with the bad cop routine. Interesting.

    Hera is bad...I can't say what I really think. LOL

    So, Luce is gonna talk? Let's see if she gets too or gets offed for staying!

    Great updates!!!! I can't wait to see how Kyp gets Liz out of there.
     
  3. ccp

    ccp Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I'm thinking maybe Kyp should get Han involved. It's always good to have someone who will shoot first, shoot later and shoot some more on your side. Besides Han is usually so good at cutting through all the red tape.

    Great update!
     
  4. Robimus

    Robimus Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    [face_thinking] Very mysterious. Liz's mom is a Force witch of some kind prehaps? Or maybe she just indentified Kyp's Force use because she saw his lightsaber. Great update. I think Luce and Liz are somehow connected through the Force maybe?......And a Banking Clan like outfit? ....hmnnnn.....:). Keep up the good work!
     
  5. iamobiwan1970

    iamobiwan1970 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Wow! That was a huge update, and a good one. I?ve been off my computer for a few days, so what a treat. Weirdest thing though: this morning I was listening to the song ?Magic Man? by Heart, and there?s the line ...?my girl should be at home...? You know the mother is thinking she needs to control her child, but the child wants to be with the magic man. So I immediately thought of your story! I thought, ?oh, will we meet Liz?s mother?? Weird huh? Since that?s exactly what you delivered!

    So here are my favs with comments:


    And once she is fit to travel, I will be taking her back with me to Chandrila.?

    Figures! And she has every legal right! So I wasn't surprised Kyp said I'm getting you out of here. I would have done the same.

    Kyp clenched his jaw as he stared at Hera, his thoughts whirling around within his head how to solve this growing problem?

    I think this probably made him angrier than Kyrian!

    ?You must forgive me. I do not trust Force users.?

    Yeh! But likely you are one! Sith Witch! Nightsister![face_devil]

    There was the slightest smirk on the older woman?s face as she came closer, ?Is that so? And what do you intend to do about it??

    You know who you?re kriffin? with Lady?[face_shame_on_you]

    ?She is under the protection of the Jedi due to classified incidents. She cannot and she will not leave.?

    Good, quick lie Kyppie...=D= you always were fast with words![face_dancing]

    Hera crossed her arms in front of her chest and Kyp noticed a silver bracelet dangling from her narrow wrist.

    Sith medallion! She got Sith tattoos under that suit?

    ?The Jedi are involved. We hadn?t expected this.?

    Obviously she is working for someone who controls her..Palpatine clone...nope..but something sinister!

    The Jedi will be taken care of.?


    Yeh right! You think Kyp's bad? You haven't even met Luke! Puh-leze! :cool:

    I felt really badly for Luce and figured Tye would kill her, but I guess that spot was way too public. I hope the Jedi can help her. Or perhaps her info will help them. But I find it hard to believe she knows too much.

    Loved this! :D



     
  6. Ceillean

    Ceillean Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    I'm in a really good mood today. [:D] Next post should be up a little later; thanks everyone for your comments.






    I think that's kind of neat. And how great is it to know you're thinking of this story in your free time? [face_blush]
    Thanks so much for reading!



     
  7. Ceillean

    Ceillean Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    The instant Nikk?s comlink chirped he knew something was going on he wouldn?t like and most likely would have preferred not to know about. Grimacing, he downed the last bit of his drink and slammed the empty glass back onto the table.

    The Sanvia VitaJuice Bar was almost empty. Besides him there was only an old woman who seemed to be completely immersed in a holo novel she was holding in her wrinkled little hands.

    For a moment he thought about ignoring the call. Maybe it wasn?t even that important; whoever it was would leave him alone and he could go back to doing his work.
    What work? He asked silently. A few more days and he?d be heading back to Yavin 4. The interrogations had been completely scrubbed ? those worthless beings were already walking the streets as free men.

    He ripped the comlink from his belt, ?What??
    ?You here with your own ship??

    No greetings, no how-are-you-now-that-you?re-being-sent-back-to-babysit-the-younglings ?
    he chuckled; how he loved to sulk.

    He cleared his throat, ?I always travel on my own, Kyp. Why??

    There was a pause. The silence stretched into endless seconds and the feeling of not-wanting-to-know returned full blast.

    "I need to borrow your ship."

    Nikk inclined his head, tapping away on the floor with his boot. His ship was his most prized possession. He?d inherited a few thousand credits after his grandparents had died and he?d saved up a lot himself and then ? he?d bought Lucinda.

    A beautiful dark colored vehicle that bore absolutely no marks of fighting; she was perfect on the outside as well as on the inside. Just perfect. Built to blast anything smaller out of the sky and Lucinda was fast ? Nikk had lost count how many races he?d won when he?d still been living at home.

    Kyp?s question settled in and Nikk didn?t really know how to react. So far, no one had ever dared ask him to lend his ship. His baby.

    ?Huh?? He was amazed that this little tiny word came out as a squeak.

    ?I need to get Liz off planet fast, Nikk. Please.?

    It struck Nikk as odd that Kyp Durron was asking him for help. They didn?t really like each other ? there had been countless disagreements, some almost ending in fights at the Academy. But he knew Kyp usually never asked for help.

    ?I can?t.? Nikk shook his head. He couldn?t give Lucinda into the hands of someone he didn?t even call a friend. What if something happened to her? What if she?d get scratched up because Kyp couldn?t fly? What if she?d get shot?

    ?Nikk, you don?t understand. If I don?t get her off Coruscant ??
    ?Wherever you need to go, I?ll take you. But I can?t let you borrow my ship.?

    There was another one of those pauses as if Kyp was going over a plan in his head but then his voice came back, ?Thank you. Will you meet us here at the hospital??
    ?Sure.?

    There was commotion in the background, a shout and then quiet laughter, ?Could you bring some spare clothes as well??

    Nikk agreed and cut the connection. Let Kyp borrow Lucinda? He snorted; when the entirety of hell froze over ? yeah, maybe then he?d think about it.


    Liz sat on the bed, legs dangling back and forth as she fidgeted with her hands. She felt better; the cough had subsided, her head didn?t hurt anymore. But she was nervous and angry and really really really nervous.

    The anger she could completely understand ? the last time she?d seen her mother, they?d fought and Liz had said things she regretted afterwards. Well, not so much anymore. She knew her mother could be cold but the face she?d shown after Liz had woken up was a different matter all together. She didn?t recognize the woman who called herself her mother.

    The nervousness Liz could not understand. There wasn?t anything to be nervous about really. Once Nikk showed up they?d head out to his ship and they?d leave the planet. So what was there to worry about?

    ?You alright??

    She turned her head and smiled up at Kyp as she nodded. He stood behind her, his arms coming around her waist as he leaned down and kissed the
     
  8. jadesabre75

    jadesabre75 Jedi Knight star 4

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    Whoa. LOL I had to stop reading cause I was laughing so hard in the begining. Those three are a riot! The story just keeps getting better and better my dear! Love it!

    I wanna know what mommy dearest is up to. It ain't good, that's for sure.
     
  9. iamobiwan1970

    iamobiwan1970 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Yummy yummy as always!

    ?I made her see something else.? Was Kyp?s low response and Liz left it at that. She was very surprised at his abilities with using the Force. If he could make people see what he wanted, if he could tamper with their minds ? what else was he able to do?

    Just about anything he wants my dear! :D But don't worry, he's on your side.

    I knew Nikk would help! He's cool!

     
  10. ccp

    ccp Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Great update!
    I hope they run into some clear weather.
     
  11. angry_bendu1

    angry_bendu1 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Oh, goodness.[face_laugh] Nikk and his "Lucinda". Soooo funny!:p

    Great post![:D]
     
  12. Robimus

    Robimus Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    .....'Robimus banishes dirty thoughts'.........[face_whistling]

    Great update, even the "mush":-B. I've often heard Kyp referred to as the Jedi version of Han Solo, but I'd say Nikk is a lot closer. Love their interactions!

    And Liz comparing their situation to a fairy tale was a great little touch. I know you like to identify this as AU, but really it could fit right into canon very easily. Keep it coming=D=
     
  13. Ceillean

    Ceillean Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    [face_laugh]:D


    Mush is good! If not too much.


    Since Kyp is still rather young, I figured he'd have to first grow into the younger version of Han Solo. That's kind of like my personal theory.


    I'm really glad you think so.



    I had to smile while writing Nikk and Lucinda. The perfect couple. :p


    [face_devil]


    Yay!


    Yep. And more Force action coming up later. :p


    Glad you love it! And so glad the humor does come over as funny.




     
  14. Ceillean

    Ceillean Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    This next part doesn't really take the story forward but gives a little insight into who Nikk is. In the beginning he was just a character to fill in a vacant spot but now I really like him. So I thought he deserved a background story.
    Hope you like it all the same.




    Nikk sat with his arms folded across his ribs, his dark eyes gazing through the viewport. Soundlessly his prized possession passed through hyperspace, bathing the cockpit in different shades of blues and whites.

    Within this quietness ? quietness he so seldom received ? he liked to let his mind wander. And right now the colors reminded him of the mountainous regions of his home world. Living with his parents in their grand antique villa, he would gaze out and imagine hiking up to the silver peaks of the northern most mountains, breathing in the ice cold air.
    There was a beautiful, winding blue lake surrounding the villa, reflecting the midday sun with white, puffy clouds.

    His home was without doubt very beautiful but still Nikk had vowed never to return. No one would want to see me anyway, he thought with a pang of regret but shoved the unwanted feeling into the back of his mind.

    But then a small smile surfaced and he closed his eyes, the colors of hyperspace washing over him, bathing him in an almost celestial light. Perhaps someone would like to see him. But it would be almost impossible to seek her out when his father had banned him.

    Nikk laughed mirthlessly. While he was still a child, he?d had grand dreams of someday taking his father?s place as Count of their district but as he grew older, as he realized what the aristocrats had become, he knew his place would be elsewhere.

    And as a teenager not wanting to be part of a pack of hypocrites he had started to rebel.


    [i]?We shouldn?t be doing this!? the girl whispered as she splayed her hands on Nikk?s chest. Her cheeks were blushing red, her lips swollen. Even her perfect blond hair now lay tangled around her shoulders. ?I can?t let them see me like this!? Her voice was only a whisper, the look in her dark green eyes one of fear and embarrassment. ?My father will punish the both of us.?

    Nikk laughed as he dipped his head to the side of her neck, ?I?m not worried about him.?
    She pushed him back, ?You don?t know him! We should return before people start asking questions.? She reached up to attach the intricately designed golden pin back into her hair, hoping that she looked decent enough to at least make it to the fresher without people staring at her back.

    Patting down the folds of her dark red dress, she cleared her throat and held her head high, staring at Nikk with a raised brow, ?We will not be doing this any longer. Your reputation exceeds you, Nikk. You?re still a boy who treats women as play things.?

    Nikk grinned as he stepped back, ?You weren?t complaining a while ago.?

    Her dark green eyes narrowed slightly, ?No more. I am certain other women would gladly take my place.? With that she turned on her heel and hurried back to the ballroom.

    They?d been hiding beneath the marble staircase of the grand entry hall, tall native plants obscuring the view if people passed by. It was his favorite spot when getting away from the public eye; he wasn?t too worried about getting caught; no one ever looked for him.

    He straightened his jacket, combed his fingers through his too long dark brown hair and made his way back to the ballroom. He caught sight of his parents mingling with representatives of nearby worlds ? the count his father wore his military uniform with pride, his beautiful mother seeming like a Queen out of a fairy tale with a flowing white gown pooling at her feet.

    The dance floor lay one level below the atrium, another flight of marble stairs leading to a live band playing soft music and beings frolicking about without a care in the world. Nikk peered down and caught sight of the girl he?d been with just moments before. He?d already forgotten her name.

    There was a sudden tingling sensation at the nape of his skull and he knew his father
     
  15. jadesabre75

    jadesabre75 Jedi Knight star 4

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    Wow. And I thought Nikk was hot before. =P~ Oye vey....that was freaking awesome!!!!!

    Brilliant job Ceillean!!!
     
  16. iamobiwan1970

    iamobiwan1970 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Beautiful backstory!!!! I savored every word!! I like the idea of Nikk the reluctant count, strnage Force sensitive, somewhat rebellious teen. Yes, maybe he is more Han Solo. Sometimes I think if Kyp had a normal childhood he'd be less Han and more Luke. My initial attraction to Kyp was bad boy, but now 'm not so sure.

    I wouldn't really say Nikk is a bad boy either. But the tattoos and hair were a rebellion and an emo time for him.

    So now we can see why he would help Kyp rescue his love.

    Can't wait to see what you have planned next!?!? :D
     
  17. ccp

    ccp Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Great backstory
    Great update
     
  18. Robimus

    Robimus Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Kyp better keep a close eye on Liz with Count Nikk lurking around :p. I wonder if Nikk ever regrets his decision on some level? Not becoming a Jedi, but the forsaking of his family. Hope he's good with a Hydrospanner too :D
    Excellent back story, ties in well with his overall motivation to give Kyp a hand. :)
     
  19. Jinn_Soresom

    Jinn_Soresom Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Hi, Ceillean.
    I like this one. You make it racey without being crass. There's, uh, definitely some heat in this one!
    ...
    "Lucinda"
    *snickers*
     
  20. Ceillean

    Ceillean Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Thanks everyone for your lovely comments! [:D]
    Great to see you're back, Jinn. [:D]:*




    ?Don?t touch that!?

    Startled Liz whirled around doing her best not to drop the scanning device a second time. She scowled as Nikk came towards her with long strides. And this time he?d taken his shirt off ? to her dismay.

    For just a moment she closed her eyes, gritting her teeth, ?How the hell do you expect me to scan the interior of this stupid ship if you keep yelling at me??

    ?I wasn?t yelling.?

    Liz threw her arms up in defeat and squeaked, ?Yes, you were.?

    While Nikk had gotten auxiliary power back online, he?d made Kyp and Liz walk through the ship in opposite directions ? inch by inch ? and search for tracking devices, bombs ? anything out of the ordinary. Nikk had a bad case of paranoia when it came to his [i]Lucinda[/i].

    So far Liz had actually found one tracking device deep behind a wall casing, neatly stuck between batches of cables. Nikk had been convinced someone had boarded his precious ship and he had been right.

    Nikk came closer and pointed at a small control panel, ?This has a mechanism installed to activate a few traps for unwanted visitors. If you?d accidently activated it ? it wouldn?t be comfortable.?

    Liz frowned at him, ?How come it didn?t go off when someone was really here??

    He shrugged as his face darkened, ?I don?t know yet. Whoever this was bypassed a whole lot of systems.?

    Liz took a deep breath and returned her attention back to her hand held scanning device ? away from the tattoos on Nikk?s upper body. They were an interesting design and she was curious at their meaning. She decided ? should they get out of this situation in one piece ? she?d have to ask him about them. Maybe.

    The scanning device was a round and wonderfully cool object that fit into her palm perfectly. A flickering light blue hologram showing every detail of the back compartment of [i]Lucinda [/i] where she now stood. If she understood correctly ? and she wasn?t really sure because Nikk had started going on and on and on about technicalities that meant absolutely nothing to her ? the scanner was linked to the ship and if an object showed up red within the hologram, it didn?t belong and needed to be extracted.

    And where there was one tracking device, there were most likely more.

    Liz swiped at her forehead as sweat began pearling down her temples again. She felt like she?d stepped into hell?s personal sauna. Nikk had a large stash of water cramped up in a storage department but at the rate the heat was going, Liz assumed the water would be out in less than a day. Which meant they?d be stuck with average recycling procedures and she found that? well, she didn?t want to think about it.

    ?And by the way? Nikk said, crossing his arms in front of his chest. ?My ship is not stupid.?
    ?It?s a vehicle, Nikk!? Liz turned and glared at the taller man, ?It?s not alive. It?s an object to use. And you treat this thing as if it were alive.?

    She resumed the tedious task of scanning the walls, then the floor and then the ceiling. Inch by inch by stupid inch.

    Goodness it was hot. Liz leaned her head against the cool metal casing and took a deep breath. The normal sweet smelling air held a metallic scent now, ?I?m sorry.? She said in a low voice but keeping her eyes closed, ?I?m annoyed, that?s all. And it?s hot.? Her last words came out as a hiss and she squeezed her eyes shut.

    ?I?m working on it.? Nikk said in a low voice, ?I?m having the computer run diagnostics. Should be done in a few minutes.?

    ?What about the hyperdrive??

    Nikk sighed and dragged a hand through his hair, ?I?ll have to repair it manually. It?s not too much work it might just take a long while.?

    ?Oh.? Liz straightened, ?Which means we?re stuck with sublight then? Which means it?ll take us, what? Fifty years to get to the nearest star system??

    ?Look, I?m doing my best here, alright? It?s not like I asked for this to happen.?

    Liz sighed as she walked another few steps and moved the scanner u
     
  21. ccp

    ccp Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    ?What?s going on??

    She sighed while letting herself fall onto the cot, ?Nothing.?
    I hate that answer it inevitably means that you screwed up and you won't know how for some time.

    Great update!
     
  22. Robimus

    Robimus Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    "Don?t touch that!?

    My first thought was that Kyp and Liz were still in the bedroom [face_blush]

    ?My ship is not stupid.?

    No, not your ship, maybe its pilot though.......:p

    ?You?re driving me insane, baby!? Nikk shouted as he threw a hydrospanner across the room.

    [face_laugh] 8-} [face_laugh]

    Liz stood behind Nikk, pressing the scanning device to her chest as she stood on her toes to peer over Nikk?s large form ? even in a kneeling position, she realized, ?What?s that? It?s pretty.?

    ?It?s a bomb, Liz.? Kyp said with a slight shake of his head


    Silly girl, their stuck in the middle of space and she found something pretty....:p

    You continue to do an amazing job of keeping the right amounts of humor and drama blended together. This story just screams "Star Wars"=D=
     
  23. iamobiwan1970

    iamobiwan1970 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Oh I loved the tension and Kyppie and Lizzie had their first fight! It's kinda cute you know!? :p

    I loved the ties from this section to the others with Nick's past and his tattoos, but also with the fact that it is possible someone from Nikk's past might want to harm him.

    VEry well done and exciting to read! =D=
     
  24. jadesabre75

    jadesabre75 Jedi Knight star 4

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    I don't know what was funnier: Nikk and Liz arguing or Kyp listening to them argue. LOL That was some funny stuff, but what won't be funny is if they have to stay on that ship together much longer. Whoa momma. Tension!!! LOL Awesome update Ceillan!
     
  25. Ceillean

    Ceillean Jedi Grand Master star 5

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