Saga BROTHER, MINE - - - OT- era Vader story - - - Final Replies 8/28

What an amazing job of his background on Tattooine - I loved your writing of his dream, you described it exactly the way it feels - especially in this line:

I turn around in slow motion, the only speed of which I am capable.

I loved the blonde child too, the way he could be Anakin or Luke, or both. Edit: okay - I just reread it and caught the word "uncle" at the end. but while I was reading it I thought that it could be read either way and I liked it.

I was happy that the other reviewers mentioned that Poulin starred in some of your earlier stories. I'm off to hunt them down and now I'll have something else to read in between your posts!

 

Anyone else recognise the pilot?

 

Poor guy has an extreme case of survivors guilt. Very vivid and realistic. Enjoyed that little background scene on Tatooine and his encounter with Luke (hope). Very nice.

 

Hehe from the title I first thought this was an Owen/Ani fic... Interesting to see Poulin instead! Very nice description of his whole chase for Vader. It'll be sad if he ends up as just another statistic, though. I like the dream, very symbolic...

 

poor guy *shakes head sadly* survivor's guilt, indeed. he could use a good dose of counseling. doubt the imps will happy to oblige, though.

 

Oh boy..this is deep and I am lovin it. Reading in the first person gives one a feeling of 'being' the person in the way you have done it. Fantastic job. It is so cool that he is using his skills as a jedi but trying not to reveal them to others.

 

DarthBreezy:
Anyone else recognise the pilot?

YOWZA! It's Pell!
Can't believe I missed that!

 

Don't worry, l_n, So did I, and I pride myself on reading closely. Let's hope my clients don't find out

 

We need more stories like this on these boards - mature, objective, passionate, poetic. I have not read any of your previous stories, geo3 and perhaps if I did, I would appreciate this character even more than I already do but I find that hard to believe. The idea of a young Jedi padawan, a close friend of Anakin Skywalker, and probably one of the few survivors of the Purge... -


*How is it possible that he could have destroyed us so completely? How is it possible that I am the only survivor? Me, of all people? Why was I still alive when all the others had died? I was the least of them all.

The shame never goes away.
*

is intriguing. I enjoy the little echoes of the old code that appears every now and then in this story:

*(A Jedi approaches the Force as a partner, not as a supplicant.)

(A calm mind holds no expectations.)

(Jedi don?t dream)

(Jedi don?t lie.)

(A Jedi?s only family is the Order.)*

These statements look so real and so Jedi-in nature that I am attempted to wonder if they are not taken from an authentic source.

 

Thank you so much for the PM about this story. I'm a big fan of your writing and I wouldn't have wanted to miss one. Especially since Poulin is a featured character. Original charcters are not usually my thing, but I just love him and the relationship he had with Anakin. I'm sure their interactions in this story will be more on the angst side, but the ride will still be worth it.

 

Thanks so much for taking the time to leave comments, everyone! I love them. Feedback rules, and "feeds" the writer...

DarthIshtar Love his background on Tatooine, the mysterious or maybe not so mysterious rescuer, the cliffhanger.

Thanks! I think every chapter ends more or less that way, so it?s a good thing you like cliffhangers?

VaderLVR64 Another amazing chapter! Loved the rescue by the blue-eyed boy on Tatooine. You've done a wonderful job with this character; he's very real and complex. Nice work!

Thanks very much!

Mr_Boba_Jango I love this description of ?the blue eyed boy?, that the son of Skywalker would cause an unprepared Force sensitive being to stagger in his presence. Beautiful imaging.

Thank you!

anakin_girl Very, very good. I love the descriptions of Tatooine--you showed the reader that the setting was far too vivid to just be a dream, you made us feel, as Poulin did, that we were living it. Poulin's fear of using the Force because Jedi are hunted, his unexpected encounter with Luke, which staggers him, his desire to focus only on Luke, who is of the Light Side of the Force, and to block out Vader...very well done.

Thanks you! I?m glad I succeeded.

His memories of "Anakin's screaming death" and his survivor's guilt are enough to break our hearts.

Umm?er? actually, it was ?Alderaan?s screaming death?" which Obi, too, felt through the Force in ANH? this gives us a time frame for the story.

I've never experienced survivor's guilt and I certainly hope I never have to, but this is how I always imagined it to be.

Yes, me, too. It must be terrible.

isola What an amazing job of his background on Tattooine - I loved your writing of his dream, you described it exactly the way it feels - especially in this line: I turn around in slow motion, the only speed of which I am capable.

Thank you!

I loved the blonde child too, the way he could be Anakin or Luke, or both. Edit: okay - I just reread it and caught the word "uncle" at the end. But while I was reading it I thought that it could be read either way and I liked it.

Yes, it was the overwhelming impression of the boy that mattered. If Poulin was on Tatooine three years before the main part of this story takes place, then Luke would have been roughly 16 or 17 years old at the time of this encounter...

I was happy that the other reviewers mentioned that Poulin starred in some of your earlier stories. I'm off to hunt them down and now I'll have something else to read in between your posts!

That?s great! Thanks! Poulin only in ?Winds of Change.? He was a shy teenaged Padawan then. And a friend to Anakin at a rough time.

DarthBreezy Anyone else recognise the pilot?

LOL! Yes, he has appeared before elsewhere. Evidently he fell on hard times under the Empire. Still, for the purposes of this story, the details of his past are not important.

RebelMom Poor guy has an extreme case of survivors guilt. Very vivid and realistic. Enjoyed that little background scene on Tatooine and his encounter with Luke (hope). Very nice.

Thank you!

bobilll Hehe from the title I first thought this was an Owen/Ani fic... Interesting to see Poulin instead!

I wanted a different eyewitness for this time period...

Very nice description of his whole chase for Vader. It'll be sad if he ends up as just another statistic, though. I like the dream, very symbolic.

Thanks!

Mystic_Ally poor guy *shakes head sadly* survivor's guilt, indeed. He could use a good dose of counseling. Doubt the imps will happy to oblige, though.

Probably not!

qingauk Oh boy..this is deep and I am lovin it. Reading in the first person gives one a feeling of 'being' the person in the way you have done it. Fantastic job. It is so cool that he is using his skills as a Jedi but trying not to reveal them to others.

Thanks! Those Jedi skills help h

 

New Reader to your work and just want to say I'm glad I stumbled across this story.

Can I just say that Poulin, what I've read of him in these two chapters, is a very emotionally connectable character (hopefully that makes sense ). Not only do I really like him but the way you write his feelings and how he tells of his story up until this point is breathtaking and the maturity of your writing really sells his character to me.

The best part of this is the "dream" that Poulin relives, not only is it as Poulin describes as too vivid a dream but I feel like I'm physically there walking amongst the crowd with him as he's watching and feeling everything that goes on around him.
And the way you include Luke, very interesting I have to say, his potential with the Force hitting Poulin with such an intensity as to cause him a distraction, its well done.
The only minor flaw I could possibly distinguish is including Obi-Wan and Luke by way of Poulin knowing where they were and even going as far as to search for them but even so this is your story not mine and I can understand why you did it but I'm inclined (as I say to certain other Fanfic writers) by own personal taste in such details.

That however doesn't take away from the excellent work done so far and I'll keep my eye out for when you update it next.
Keep up the good work.

 

DarthTerrious New Reader to your work and just want to say I'm glad I stumbled across this story.

I?m glad!

Can I just say that Poulin, what I've read of him in these two chapters, is a very emotionally connectable character (hopefully that makes sense ). Not only do I really like him but the way you write his feelings and how he tells of his story up until this point is breathtaking and the maturity of your writing really sells his character to me.

It does make sense I?m delighted you feel you can connect with him.

The best part of this is the "dream" that Poulin relives, not only is it as Poulin describes as too vivid a dream but I feel like I'm physically there walking amongst the crowd with him as he's watching and feeling everything that goes on around him.
And the way you include Luke, very interesting I have to say, his potential with the Force hitting Poulin with such an intensity as to cause him a distraction, its well done.

Thank you!

The only minor flaw I could possibly distinguish is including Obi-Wan and Luke by way of Poulin knowing where they were and even going as far as to search for them but even so this is your story not mine and I can understand why you did it but I'm inclined (as I say to certain other Fanfic writers) by own personal taste in such details.

I?m not quite sure I follow what you mean. Are you saying that you would prefer that I had introduced those two characters into the story directly, and told at least part of it from their point of view? Or do you mean that I have made the multiple timelines and flashbacks too confusing?

That however doesn't take away from the excellent work done so far and I'll keep my eye out for when you update it next. Keep up the good work.

Thanks! I?m glad you?re reading!

 

Hee hee! Pell's back!

Poulin's dream was so heartbreaking... That he got to see Luke, and so briefly. And what the sensation of finding another light-side Force sensitive was like for Poulin... Wow. Wonderful descriptions, and very sad.

And so Vader has found Poulin after all. I guess we should have figured the Force would solve things.

Looking forward to more!

 

Now that I'm (sort of ) done moving, I can catch up with fan fics.

Yay, Poulin's still alive! Obviously he won't be the one to redeem Vader--I'm not sure he'll survive the story --but it'll be interesting to see what happens. I wonder if he'll find out what happened to Luke and if he'll learn Leia survived Alderaan.

--MissPadme
p.s. let me know when you update

 

I kinda guessed that might be confusing.

I?m not quite sure I follow what you mean. Are you saying that you would prefer that I had introduced those two characters into the story directly, and told at least part of it from their point of view? Or do you mean that I have made the multiple timelines and flashbacks too confusing?

Sorry, I meant in respect that I didn't believe Obi-Wan would have disclosed the information of his or Luke's whereabouts to anyone but Yoda, so Poulin knowing was just something that I was taken aback by. I can understand why you did it, and it doesn't ruin the story. Just my view of it.

Anyway I still say so far this is an excellent story, I'm keeping my eye on it.

 

DarthTerrious Sorry, I meant in respect that I didn't believe Obi-Wan would have disclosed the information of his or Luke's whereabouts to anyone but Yoda, so Poulin knowing was just something that I was taken aback by. I can understand why you did it, and it doesn't ruin the story. Just my view of it.

OK,I hear you. Thanks for the clarification. I can't really respond, because it's ultimately a question of the story's premise, but I appreciate your viewpoint.

Anyway I still say so far this is an excellent story, I'm keeping my eye on it.

Thanks!

And now, on to the next part of the story.

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In short order our tiny vessel is brought aboard the Starcruiser, with its on-board docking facilities and a command center. And a detention bay, of course. Armored soldiers escort us out of the PellMell at blaster point. It?s the first time I?ve been in Imperial custody, and normally I would be more curious than concerned. But I feel guilty about the trouble I?ve brought down onto my pilot?s head. I didn?t expect to meet with success so quickly, and I deeply regret having dragged the man into this situation with me. So my feelings, and behavior, are that of any other captive in the same circumstances. I?m nervous, and edgy, and looking around constantly for a way out. Without looking as though I?m looking, of course.

I don?t suppose it matters what we do, or don?t do, or how we feel. Our captors? impersonal efficiency is seamless. No one speaks to us, but it?s plain enough where they want us to go, and not going there isn?t any kind of an option. We are marched out of the huge docking bay into a along series of corridors that are identically lit and laid out, up in two different lifts, and then out into a small foyer that, we very quickly learn, leads to the Starcruiser?s compact but efficient holding facility.

While we are being processed I glance at my pilot. I know what he?s feeling without looking at him ? how can I not? His face is in neutral, but I have no doubt that if I were standing in front of him and if his hands weren?t manacled, he?d happily run me over in top gear, with or without a vehicle. Then he?d back up and do it again. But I look at him to catch his eye, and open my mouth to apologize.

?Don?t even say it, yer daft son of a stinking Ta?an,? he growls.

The words echo around the bright white chamber, making the soldiers look up at us. My mouth snaps shut.

?Quiet, Rebels!? one of them orders.

So it is as my pilot said ? they are preoccupied with searching for Rebels. That?s interesting. The Alliance must have scored a fairly notable victory nearby to generate this level of Imperial activity. Once more I glance at my companion, who is scowling at the floor. He lets out a soft string of heartfelt oaths before the Trooper beside him whacks him with the butt of his blaster, and silence reigns again. I feel his pain.

?Lord Vader wants them separated.?

Cold shudders suddenly begin to run down my spine. It seems that I am not as sanguine about the coming encounter as I would like to believe. For the third time I glance toward my companion, but already he is being shoved toward a short corridor on one side of us, while I?m not allowed to move. Oddly enough, my last impression of him, as I watch his retreating back, is that of a slight relaxation in him; it almost reads like relief. I can only assume that he?s happy to be rid of me, whatever awaits him.

I don?t blame him one bit.

(A Jedi does no harm to others.)

Since now it?s only a few Stormtroopers, and me, in the processing area, I turn my attention back to them and begin to take a few more risks. I want to know what?s going on.

?What did the Rebels do, blow up a convoy or something?? I ask casually enough, but it?s not a casual question at all.

?Quiet!? the Trooper by my side orders.

Good. I don?t expect him to converse with me. I just need his attention for a moment. With that one word, I get it, and with a small gesture, despite the manacles,

 

What a cool twist! This is really beyond the saga. Obi and Poulin meet up.. fascinating. I loved the description of the encounter.. flashback dream..hope Anakin does not sense him.. could be bad..

 

Geo3, Though i havent finished reading this yet, i really need to say how much i am enjoying it so far! I havent really encountered your stories before, seeing as i'm a creature of habit and tend to stick to the Saga forums. But I'm very glad i found this one. You are an amazing author and your work is an absolute delight to read. I look forward to getting up to date with this story!

Well Done

 

I agree that this is an interesting twist. I like hearing that Poulin is no longer alone... It'll be interesting what the two can accomplish together.

 

Another good one Geo! I especially enjoyed the encounter with Kenobi. Poulin?s emotions are off the scale once again. I really feel for the guy. And I could feel his tremendous sense of relief and joy upon finding Obi-Wan.

Your depiction of the good general was right on the mark as well. This passage in particular stood out vividly in my mind as I read it:

Vader doesn?t know that his son is alive. I am suddenly sure of it, but I have to confirm it. More pieces are coming together. ?He doesn?t know!?

Kenobi knows instantly whom I mean. Neither one of us is going to say Vader?s name out loud. Not in this place.

?No.? He looks down into his drink.

?Nor does the boy.?

Kenobi glances at me sharply. ?Certainly not.?

This is really good stuff. Can?t wait to see where you?re going with this.

MBJ

 

::Blinks.:: Waait, so Ben's still alive? Or was that vision merely a vision? Is he still alone?

 

Wow!

 

While we are being processed I glance at my pilot. I know what he?s feeling without looking at him ? how can I not? His face is in neutral, but I have no doubt that if I were standing in front of him and if his hands weren?t manacled, he?d happily run me over in top gear, with or without a vehicle. Then he?d back up and do it again. But I look at him to catch his eye, and open my mouth to apologize.

?Don?t even say it, yer daft son of a stinking Ta?an,? he growls. - LOL!

His memory trip was beyond wonderful, luminous and perfect! This is a really fascination piece, I can't wait to see more.

 

Ah, so Poulin finds ol' Ben! Silly me didn't recognize Pell either the last time.

--MissPadme