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Saga ~Detective Skywalker on the Loose:The Case of the Senator?s Assassin. AotC, a/p~

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by angel_of_the_force, Jul 11, 2005.

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  1. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    Detective Skywalker on the Loose:
    The Case of the Senator?s Assassin

    It was 10:00 at night- most cats would call it late, but I was just getting started. At this hour it was dark, the only light being sparks on my cigar. I was expecting a mission, but I had no idea what was coming?

    Int. - Corascant office space- night

    The women walked into my office, beautiful, and vaguely familiar. She had long, flowing, chestnut hair; even, fair skin; and a defined beauty mark. I wanted to stay away. This gal would only lead to suffering. She walked in and put away her umbrella. She had gotten just a bit wet from the rain. Maybe I was incapable of staying away. I put my cigar down, knowing that it would turn someone like her off. She sat herself down in the seat in front of my desk, looking innocent and needy.

    ?Jedi? I need your help.?
     
  2. Moons_of_Iego_angel7

    Moons_of_Iego_angel7 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    This is interesting, I hope u continue this. PM me when you update.

    MOIA7
     
  3. sithrules70

    sithrules70 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    interesting so far.please PM me on every update.
     
  4. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    sithrules70:yes... very interesting

    Moons_of_Iego_Angel7:a pm will be coming your way... as i am continuing this...
     
  5. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    She had a twang in her voice that you only got in Naboo. She was drawing me in more and more, breath by breath. No! Someone like me never fell into feelings like this so... soon.

    "I have a... problem, I thought, someone like...you, would be able to help me."

    "Someone like me?" There was the twang again. She was so mysterious, but the closest to family I had ever been since... somewhere I couldn't even go.

    "I was, um... around, and heard you did good work."

    "Babe, the only place you could hear of my work is in... why was someone like you, in places like that?" She flashed me a look that said she was not giving info to the likeness of me. It was my first, clear veiw of her eyes.

    "You're that senetor aren't you?" The same ol' look again.

    "Sorry," I managed to get out.

    "About your problem?" I didn't get why it was so hard for her to tell me. I guess I just made it hard for her.

    "Yes. I have felt shadows behind me for weeks. I think an assasinator in at hand, and I want answers." Uhh... that voice.

    "Well, sweetheart, I can't tell you anything, until you tell me... your name." My ticket in.

    She held out her hand. "Padme... Amidala" she answered. I shook her hand and smiled.

    "Skywalker" I said, "but you can call me Anakin. Now, how about we get outta here?"
     
  6. Moons_of_Iego_angel7

    Moons_of_Iego_angel7 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Short 'n' Sweet! I haven't been around for the last few days beacause of...technical difficulties...lol. Thanks for the PM and as always I'm looking forward to more!!!

    MOIA7 :D
     
  7. TrinityDay

    TrinityDay Jedi Youngling star 2

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    This story looks like so much fun (and has been fun in these first two posts). I'm looking forward to reading more of it.
     
  8. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    Moons_of_Iego_Angel7:
    you weren't gone too long. you were back the day i posted this. :)

    TrinityDay:
    fun, this shall be! *claps hands and laughs evily*
     
  9. Moons_of_Iego_angel7

    Moons_of_Iego_angel7 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Glad I was back for it.
     
  10. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    I took her to Coruscant?s most popular bar. I had to loosen her up a bit, and then I would work.

    ?Where are we going?? She asked, impatiently.

    ?Well, you?ll just have to see?? I was not about to tell her.

    She grabbed my arm tight and ran me into an alley.

    ?No!?

    She grabbed hold of my shoulders and rammed be into a wall. Even I couldn?t get loose.

    ?Oh boy?

    ?No man takes me anywhere without my okay! I am a senator, one with standards, and if it has nothing to do with my case, I AM GONNA KNOW WHERE WE ARE GOING!?

    ?Take it easy babe? I said as I fixed the collar she had messed with.

    ?Babe??

    ?Look, you?re going to have fun, and you have got to trust me. If you don?t, this case is going nowhere.?

    ?Wow Master Jedi, you really impressed me right there!? She was being sarcastic, I knew. I cast her a look. She was aggressive; all the chicks I had worked with just kind of let me lead them on.

    *****


    We walked on until we reached the bar. At the door I had managed to get my arm on her shoulder to lead her in.

    ?Wow!? She said.

    ?I thought you were just rude, but, wow.? She was really a fighter.

    ?You, have a problem?? I asked.

    ?No.? She said peeling off her coat and throwing it on me. ?Just lead me on your merry way.? I was still standing there with her coat, all the while she just strode along to a bar stool.

    The bouncer looked down at me. He felt my pain.

    ?She yours? He asked.

    ?Getting there? I said, dropping her coat.

    *****

    By the time I reached the counter she was sipping a green drink with pink fizz and batting her eyes at a bar tender.

    ?Why thank you!? She said to him. ?It?s about time you showed up!? She yelled at me.

    Quickly I changed the subject.

    ?That?s my favorite drink? I lied. ?How about another? I said slamming a credit on the counter. I had been talking to the bar tender, but the gaze to her was clear on. I was giving her a look that said, ?You-can-be-as-wild-and-mean-as-you-want-but-I-am-the-detective!? and her face was saying ?I-don?t-care!?
     
  11. Jadie

    Jadie Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Angel, why didn't you tell me about this!!!??? [face_shame_on_you]

    It great! I love how you keep the mistery and dark humour! :D

    Keep this up! :)

    You've got here a great begining! ;)
     
  12. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    Jadie:
    i did...[face_thinking]

    thank you!
     
  13. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    That night I really started to work. I figured out what it would take to win this babes heart, I needed to be a little less... me. I couldn't make any progress, until she came in with a clue.

    "Jedi!" She stormed into me office.

    "Please... the name's Anakin, and... take a seat." I told her... more gently then I had been for the past few days.

    "Take a look at this." She said with a sly smile.

    She pushed onto my desk a bullet of some kind.

    "This was to be shot at me last night. It missed and I managed to save it." She said.

    It had the markings "ASN-121" on it.

    I rolled it around between my fingers.

    "These are the markings of a droid." I said, talking more to me than to her.

    "A droid?" She asked, uneasy.

    "Yeah, I think a droid shot this at you. I can trace it to the owner very easily."

    "That... thats great!" She exclaimed.

    "No, it's not." I said.

    "How so?!" She asked standing up.

    "It would be much better if we could celebrate, out to dinner." I walked over to her side of the desk. "What do you think?"

    "I think you had me worried sick!" She said slapping me.

    As soon as my head turned back to her, she grabbed my cheeks and planted the greatest kiss of my life onto my lips.

    "So thats a yes?" I asked.

    "Read... my... lips." She kissed me again, only this time, I kissed back.
     
  14. Jadie

    Jadie Jedi Padawan star 4

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    That-Was-Great!!! [face_love]

    Awsome stuff, what you have here. ;)


    Please let the next part be longer... [face_batting]


    Great job! :D
     
  15. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    Jadie:
    *writes on pad of paper "next chapter be longer"*
     
  16. qtrhrs78

    qtrhrs78 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    I just found this. It's great. Can't wait for an update.
     
  17. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    qtrhrs78:

    do you want me to pm you so you know when an update is?
     
  18. qtrhrs78

    qtrhrs78 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Yeah, why not. I try to check in every day, but it seems I've been missing more updates lately.
     
  19. Lieutenant_Jaina

    Lieutenant_Jaina Jedi Youngling star 3

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    [face_dancing] Ohhh kiss! haha, great chapter. :) *leaps happiy*
     
  20. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    Lieutenant_Jaina:
    YAY! kisses!

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    The next night we went out together for the first real time. I sent a cab to pick her up, then to drive her to "The Galaxy's Finest", it was the nicest restraunt in the entire star system. She was shocked that this was coming from me.

    I met her at the restraunt with a single flower. I really didn't know what it was called, but the man at the flower stand clamed it would win any girls heart. I'm not sure I really believed him, but I was desperate!

    "Good evening, Padme." I said, very classy like.

    "Likewise, Skywalker." She said as I took her coat, very different from the other night, where she threw the same coat onto me.

    I then presented her with the flower, holding it strait out.

    "Oh, Ani!" She said

    "Why did you call me that?"

    "I called you Anakin!" She said defensively. "It's your name!"

    "Sorry, I thought you said something else." I said

    "It's... fine" She said.

    I touched her arm, as if to offer sympathy.

    "Excuse me." A droid said "We can now seat you."

    I took her hand and led her where the droid was going.

    Once we were seated the same droid handed us two menus.

    "Thank you" Padme said quietly.

    She hadn't stopped looking at the flower since I gave it to her.

    "These grow on my home planet." She said sadly.

    "Wow, thats odd" I said.

    "I have this memory of being on that planet, a long time ago. It was after a war." She started to talk like she was going to tell a story. "My gown was made out of this flower. Wherever I was, there was this little boy with me. He smiled at me. He was so... young, but he had such big dreams. I am sorry... you probably don't want to hear any of this." She said.

    "No... no it's fine." I said "I'll be right back." I stood up and walked to a restroom.

    I locked the door behind me, so no one else could get in. I splashed hand fulls of water on to my face. Meanwhile a smaller amount of water was falling down my face. As i wiped of my wet face, I realized why I was crying. The boy Padme was talking about, was me. What happened that could make me forget her? What had made her forget about me? Did either of us want to forget about each other? I had to get out of there!

    I ran back to the table. Padme was looking over the menu.

    "Hey, you want to get out of here?" I asked her.

    She smiled. "Sure, why?"

    "Just, c'mon."

    She laughed a bit. I laughed right along.

    "Lets go."



     
  21. qtrhrs78

    qtrhrs78 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Great update. I can picture everything in black and white, LOL.

    So they did know each other before. I wonder how long it will take Padme to figure it out.
     
  22. Moons_of_Iego_angel7

    Moons_of_Iego_angel7 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Interesting...very interesting...

    Thanks for the PM!!!...er make that PM's....lol.
     
  23. Jadie

    Jadie Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Oh, that was so sweet! [face_batting]

    Great up! ;)
     
  24. angel_of_the_force

    angel_of_the_force Jedi Master star 3

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    qtrhrs78: really? thats good. i was afraid it was loosing it's no-color-ness... padme? oh... just wait...

    Moons_of_iego_angel7: no prob... interesting in a good way?

    Jadie: thank you!
     
  25. Moons_of_Iego_angel7

    Moons_of_Iego_angel7 Jedi Youngling star 2

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    Yes, interesting in a very good way!
     
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