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Saga - PT Directionless (Obi-Wan and Anakin Oneshot for Monday Mush Mania)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by devilinthedetails, Apr 20, 2020.

  1. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Title: Directionless

    Author: devilinthedetails

    Characters: Obi-Wan Kenobi; Anakin Skywalker

    Genre: General; Humor; Mush; Friendship

    Timeline: Set between TPM and AOTC, but closer to AOTC in my head.

    Summary: Obi-Wan and Anakin struggle to navigate the skylanes of Coruscant. Much banter ensues.

    Author's Note: Written for Monday Mush Mania #9, the Hunting of the Snark.

    Directionless

    “The navigation application on my comlink says we should turn right onto the next skylane.” Obi-Wan kept his gaze glued to the yellow beacon that tracked their speeder’s progress along the perpetually congested skylanes of Coruscant. He was serving as Anakin’s co-pilot on this journey to a secure address to provide safe passage to the Senate for a Muun formerly affiliated with the Intergalactic Banking Clan who had agreed to testify before some Senate committee theoretically devoted to the ethical regulation of commerce.

    Over many harrowing years of serving as Anakin’s co-pilot, Obi-Wan had learned that it was best not to look at their surroundings as they flew as it only drew unneeded extra attention to the crazy stunts his reckless Padawan attempted on an all too frequent basis. The tight skylanes in this old district of Coruscant with lower than typical skytowers and not a superskytower in sight created by the fact that the skytowers had been built with less space between them only seemed likely to exacerbate Anakin’s tendency toward sharp, sudden maneuvers that left Obi-Wan’s poor stomach lurching.

    “Can’t.” Anakin surged past the very skylane Obi-Wan had told him to turn down, adding by way of explanation, “It’s closed for construction. Can’t you see the blaring holosign?”

    Obi-Wan couldn’t see the blaring holosign when he was frowning down at his comlink, which seemed to be equally unaware of any construction project blocking the skylane it had directed them to turn down to reach their destination. “The navigation application makes no mention of any construction down that skylane.”

    “Navigation applications never know where and when there are construction projects. It’s part of their standard disclaimer.” Anakin sped their speeder along the block after they should have turned off this particular skylane, making an entirely fair observation that made Obi-Wan pinch his forehead in mild frustration.

    “We’ll have to try to rely on the grid format of Coruscant’s skylanes rather than the navigation application then.” Obi-Wan swiped out of the navigation application that was now more of a hindrance than a help as it kept ordering them in increasingly louder and insistent tones to turn around and travel down the skylane it didn’t realize was closed for construction. Thank the Force that most of Coruscant’s skylanes were arranged in an orderly, predictable format to aid and simplify navigation for the trillions who traversed the planet’s crowded skylanes every day.

    The key and operative word, of course, was most as his Padawan appreciated, pointing out, “This is the old part of Coruscant, Master. There is no grid format in place here.”

    This was distressingly true as the skylanes of this particular district of Coruscant wound and twisted in a way that seemed entirely random and aimless beyond making Obi-Wan dizzy trying to understand their layout.

    “Turn right up ahead anyway,” Obi-Wan said as Anakin approached an intersection. “Perhaps that skylane runs parallel to the one the navigation application thought we should take.”

    “Unlikely.” Anakin continued down the skylane they were already on, pointing at another holosign Obi-Wan had missed that proclaimed the skylane Obi-Wan had wanted to turn down was in fact one way in the direction they didn’t want to go. This benighted section of Coruscant was brimming with one way skylanes because the skylanes were too narrow to accommodate traffic in two ways, and the one way they were going seldom seemed to be the direction Obi-Wan wished to go. It was as if this part of Coruscant had been designed centuries ago with the goal of irking him. “That’s a one way skylane, and it’s not headed in the direction we want to go.”

    “Of course it isn’t.” Obi-Wan took a deep breath, trying to inhale patience. Gesturing at the pedwalks that were almost as wide as the skylanes in this strange district and were bustling with beings of a thousand different species, he added, “Perhaps we could ask a local for directions instead of flying about haplessly?”

    “An excellent idea, Master,” Anakin answered too cheerily to mean anything good and a second later banked the speeder sharply to the left, causing Obi-Wan to jerk in his seat.

    “What are you doing?” Obi-Wan hoped his Padawan didn’t plan to pilot the speeder through the crowded pedway beside them but anything was possible when his apprentice was driving.

    “Asking for directions just like you suggested.” Anakin somehow managed to squeeze their speeder into a tight parking space in front of what appeared to be one of the millions of greasy spoon, hole-in-the-wall diners that were ubiquitous on Coruscant.

    While Obi-Wan remained in the speeder, massaging his throbbing temples in an effort to regain his nerves after another sanity-straining ride with his Padawan, Anakin hopped out of the vehicle and disappeared into the diner. Less than five minutes later (service was always quick at Coruscanti diners), he emerged clutching a fold-up map of the region in one hand and a grease-stained container of deep-fried wedges dipped in bright orange melted cheese substance in the other.

    “See if you can figure out where we should go.” Anakin tossed the map into Obi-Wan’s lap as he leaped into the pilot’s seat.

    He chomped away at the wedges that probably greatly increased his risk for cardiac arrest as Obi-Wan ran a finger along the map, plotting a course and commenting dryly, “You bought some wedges, I see.”

    “Would have been rude to ask for directions and not buy anything.” Apparently no longer concerned with proper etiquette, Anakin licked a stray drop of bright orange melted cheese substance from a finger. “My mother raised me to be polite.”

    “I found a route,” Obi-Wan announced when he had completed his study of the map. “We’ll want to take a right on the next skylane, which surprisingly is one way in the direction we want to travel.”

    As Anakin sent their speeder lurching into traffic once more, Obi-Wan deftly snatched the wedges from the hand that wasn’t holding the controls.

    “You stole my wedges.” Anakin shot Obi-Wan an accusing glare as they streamed, wind whipping at their faces, toward the next intersection.

    “You need to focus on steering.” Obi-Wan soaked in the delightful, deep-fried scent of the wedges that were as much a guilty pleasure of his as they were Anakin’s. He popped one of the remaining wedges in his mouth and smiled at the crunchiness of the wedge and the saltiness of the melted bright orange cheese substance that topped it. Melted bright orange cheese substance was wonderfully, shockingly decadent. Nobody made wedges as amazing as the ones Dex served daily in his diner, but these wedges were extremely satisfying to the tastebuds nonetheless. Not that he would ever offend Dex by sharing that notion. “I’ll focus on eating and navigation.”

    “Give me back my wedges.” Anakin made a grab for the container of wedges, but Obi-Wan deftly twisted away before his Padawan could snatch them. The speeder spun almost out of control with Anakin’s movements.

    “You’ll make us crash!” Obi-Wan snapped a warning as Anakin regained control of their speeder, and Obi-Wan breathed a sigh of relief at this aversion of another near-disaster with Anakin at the helm.

    “You’d better save me some wedges.” Anakin spared Obi-Wan a sour glance as he guided the speeder right down the skylane Obi-Wan had indicated earlier.

    “I’ll be as concerned with saving you some wedges as you were saving me some wedges when you were gobbling them up like oxygen before.” Serenely, Obi-Wan munched on another wedge coated in bright orange melted cheese substance.
     
    Last edited: May 3, 2020
  2. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Game Host star 7 VIP - Game Host

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    @devilinthedetails [face_rofl] [face_rofl] This is SO SO exactly how a "discussion" about where to turn and GPS and traffic disclaimers would go and then to top it off we get scrumptious so bad for you wedges dipped in melted cheesiness, which of course Obi-Wan loves as much as Anakin.

    Thank you so much for posting this.

    [:D]
     
  3. Starith

    Starith Jedi Knight star 2

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    Eating bright orange melted cheese substance with Anakin driving... Obi-Wan must have a strong stomach.
     
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  4. Cowgirl Jedi 1701

    Cowgirl Jedi 1701 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    Arguing with the GPS and fighting over fast food. Relatable.
     
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  5. RaiseTheFlag

    RaiseTheFlag Jedi Youngling

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    The description of the wedges made me hungry
     
  6. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Game Host star 7 VIP - Game Host

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    LOL Me too. [face_mischief]
     
  7. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    As always, thank you so much for commenting! :) For this piece, I definitely took inspiration from the drama of a discussion about where to turn, unreliable GPS directions and their standard traffic disclaimers, and I'm so glad that you found the result as amusing as I did. This was very much a fun story for me to write, and I loved being able to top it off with some marvelously unhealthy wedges dipped in delightful melty cheesiness. And I couldn't resist making Obi-Wan enjoy those cheesy wedges as much as Anakin. [face_laugh]

    Yes, he must[face_laugh]

    Thank you so much for commenting! I'm glad that you found the arguing over the GPS and fighting over fast food so relatable. I definitely think of it as the sort of thing that could happen to anyone, ha ha.

    I admit that I got a very strong craving for cheese fries after writing this story...
     
  8. amidalachick

    amidalachick Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Hahahahaha! I guess navigation applications are one of those things that are terrible in any universe. Conversely, deep-fried wedges with bright orange melted cheese substance are always a good idea in any universe! :p

    Fantastic Anakin and Obi-Wan banter too. I love seeing them in happy, ordinary little moments like this. Such a fun fic, thanks for sharing! :D
     
  9. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    @amidalachick As always, thank you so much for commenting! Haha, yes, I definitely picture navigation applications as one of those things that can be terrible in any universe[face_laugh] and deep-fried wedges with bright orange melted cheese are totally delicious in any universe as yo say. I really enjoyed writing the Obi-Wan and Anakin banter in this story, so it makes me so happy to know you enjoyed it as well. It was great fun to write a story focused on such a happy, ordinary little moment in a galaxy far, far away. Sometimes the simple moments are the best moments.
     
  10. mavjade

    mavjade It's so FLUFFY! Fanfic Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Hahah.... this was great! Such a relatable conversation that shows just how like brothers they really were. The banter is so much fun! And like others, now I'm hungry!
     
  11. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    @mavjade Thank you so much for commenting!:) I'm flattered that you thought this was so great and that it was such a relatable conversation since I admit it was partially inspired by my own adventures with a GPS and a dear friend from college (any experience can be inspiration for fan fiction). One thing I always loved about the dynamic between Obi-Wan and Anakin is that they can sort of bicker with the underlying affection of brothers, so I was so happy to be able to showcase that side of their relationship in this story, and their humor was so much fun to write.

    My apologies for making you hungry. Perhaps I should've included a warning that this story was likely to result in cravings for some not exactly healthy foods...[face_laugh]
     
  12. Kahara

    Kahara Force Ghost star 4

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    Yup, I'm the latest casualty and will be running off to lunch momentarily. :p I love the exasperated but caring brotherly dynamic you've built here. Obi-Wan knows it's just not worth it to fight some of the fights (looking out at the terrifying rush of traffic). And Anakin is appalled -- just appalled -- by the unrepentant cheese wedge thief, AKA his Jedi Master. [face_rofl]
     
  13. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    @Kahara As always, thank you so much for commenting! :) I'm sorry you were the latest casualty, but I hope that lunch was good at least. [face_laugh] It was really fun for me to write that exasperated but caring brotherly dynamic between Obi-Wan and Anakin here, and I'm so happy to hear that you enjoyed reading about it. I think Obi-Wan would've learned some survival strategies for coping with Anakin's piloting like not looking at the terrifying rush of traffic while Anakin would understandably be appalled to have his fast food stash unabashedly pilfered by his Master. This story was just so much fun to write in that way and to picture all of it happening was just wonderfully hilarious for me.
     
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  14. Thumper09

    Thumper09 Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    This was a fun story to read! :) It's moments like these that really show how close Obi-wan and Anakin were-- the normal, everyday banter and give-and-take (more "take" on Obi-wan's part with the cheese wedges though :p), when there aren't galaxy-shattering stakes to contend with or lives on the line. They enjoy each other's company, even if some of Anakin's... um... exuberant actions take a few years off Obi-wan's life, heh. Frustration over GPS devices and a fondness for cheese-substance wedges are relatable universal constants. :p Great work!
     
  15. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    @Thumper09 Thank you so much for commenting!:) This was such a fun story for me to write, so I'm glad it was also a fun one for you to read. I appreciated the chance to show how close Obi-Wan and Anakin were, and how they were able to have all this casual banter between them. You're right that Obi-Wan definitely takes more than he gives in terms of the cheese wedges[face_laugh] I do picture them very much as enjoying one another's company even though they can also drive each other crazy and being like true brothers in that sense. And I really did hope the frustration over GPS devices and the fondness for unhealthy cheese wedges could be relatable in any universe. Thank you again for your kind comment!
     
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  16. AzureAngel2

    AzureAngel2 Force Ghost star 6

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    To me Ani and his master sound like an old couple that has been married for ages. For the better and the worse. The way they argue reminds me even of a famous German comedian called Loriot (aka Viktor von Bulow). His sketch with the egg comes to mind.

    Anyway, thanks for writing this.
     
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  17. rktho

    rktho Jedi Youngling

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    This is excellent! I laughed out loud several times. I love fics that Star Warsify everyday Earth experiences. I've been meaning to write a road trip fic for awhile based on my own experiences, but I don't quite have enough material yet.

    A few notes:
    1) Munn is spelled Muun (pronounced "Myoon")
    2) Surely they would call it something less cumbersome and literal than "melted bright orange cheese substance," although that does add to the humor somewhat.
     
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  18. devilinthedetails

    devilinthedetails Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    @rktho Thanks for commenting! I'm flattered that you thought this story was excellent and that it made you laugh out loud several times. It can be great fun to Star Warsify everyday Earth experiences as you say. Thanks for pointing out that spelling error. I'll fix that now. I did mean for the cheese substance bit to be more humorous but I could see how it might have become cumbersome to read. Thanks again for commenting:)
     
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