Beyond - Legends Forefathers` Eve: OTP Holiday Challenge (OCs)

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  1. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Grand Master star 4

    May 11, 2016
    Title: Forefathers´Eve
    Author: Anedon
    Timeframe: 35 ABY
    Characters: Gaven Seral, Nev (OCs)
    Summary: While they pay respect to the gods of their home both Gaven and Nev deal with their feelings for each other.

    Both Gaven and Nev are major characters in my fic Attonement and its sequel Forgiveness. This story is kind of a prequel but can be read completly independent from my other stories.

    Great Thanks to divapilot for the beta and for convincing me to post it on the boards.

    Forefathers´ Eve, 35 ABY, Dearan

    Nev watched Gaven, she watched as her friend walked slowly through the staircases that had gathered around the old ruin. The building had once been oval shaped with a floor that was lower in the middle than at the walls. Several sets of steps were carved into the rock leading down to a small deep oval in the middle.

    There Nev could see the altar, an old piece of pure white stone in which runes were carved, and on it there was a fire bowl. Around the altar four priests, two men and two women, knelt, their heads bowed towards it. It was quiet as Gaven slowly walked towards them, and the people on the ranks stepped aside respectfully as he moved forward. He took his time, his grey eyes wandering across the ranks over the hundreds of faces there. For a second his eyes found Nev´s and she gave him a short smile. He returned it to her but then he looked away, almost guiltily.

    Nev was surprised by the silence around them. All these people -villagers, tribesmen, soldiers, even the priests- they all waited for Gaven to take his place in the first line directly next to the altar. She could feel the aura of respect.

    When Gaven finally took his place, the silence became even deeper. Nev looked across the faces of the assembled. Most of them were humans but she also saw a few aliens, their faces enlightened by the shine of the torches. Then after minutes of silence the priests rose from their kneeling positions. They stepped towards the altar, raising their hands towards the sky. The building had lost whichever roof it might have had in the past a long time ago and above them Nev could see the stars. They reminded her of her childhood, before all of this had happened when she and Gaven had lain next to each other below the heavens. This happened less than twenty years ago but it felt as if it had happened in the dawn of the galaxy.

    Again she concentrated on the ritual. The priests had started to utter a sermon of words in a language she didn´t understand. Nev had never been very religious herself; she believed in friendship and a good blaster instead of old spirits. But these were the gods of the Teris sector, the gods of her home. She was here to pay respect to the traditions and to the dead. The Forefather´s Eve was the day of remembrance of mourning and while the priests continued their sermon Nev bowed her head with the others and thought of the people she had lost.

    She remembered her parents and asked herself what they would think if they could see their daughter in this moment. Would they be proud of her?

    Her parents had taught her that she should always defend those who were weaker than her. Wasn’t that what she had done in the last years?

    Defending the helpless. She also thought back to the friends, friends who had fought at her side and who had fallen there, some even in her arms. Tears run over her face when she remembered, but Nev remained silent.

    She looked at Gaven. His face was almost emotionless. Her friend stared at the fire on the altar as if he couldn´t even hear the priests around him. Nev knew this look She had seen it more and more in the last twenty-three years since her parents had been killed, and it made her sad. A part of her wished he would be here with her. Like her Gaven wasn´t a believer in spirits but he was their leader and many looked up to him.

    The priests had offered Nev a place right next to him but she had declined; this wasn´t her religion and she had preferred to keep a clear head during the ceremony. The chance for an attack was low but there. The priests finished their speech and two of them started to add additional wood to the fire, while the other two took each a golden goblet filled with a dark liquor.

    One of them knelt before Gaven and offered him the goblet. Slowly Gaven took it. He lead it to his lips before taking a short ship. Then he offered the goblet to the woman next to him and she took it. The additional wood made the fire burn brighter and more smoke filled the bottom of the room but Nev saw the emotionless face of her best friend.

    He was the warrior again, the leader. It was a mask, a mask he used to hide his feelings behind a mask of duty. Many admired Gaven for his strength, his courage, and his ability to lead. But Nev knew that sometimes the mask broke and revealed the man behind it. His good heart, his gentle words when he comforted her, his careful and almost shy way of expressing his feelings, his honest and true friendship.

    This was the man Nev admired, the man she loved. Sometimes she wished nothing more than admit her feelings for him, to convince him to leave the fighting and the dying behind. But she couldn´t. Many people put their hopes in them. She, Gaven and the other members of the militia were the only ones that protected the Teris sector from the pirates. If they would leave Nev knew many innocents would suffer and she knew that her happiness was a small sacrifice for keeping them safe. Maybe one day, when the fighting was over, but only the gods knew when that would be.

    Later, when the ceremony was over and Gaven sat on the outer staircase of the ruin watching on the people below him. Music filled the night around him. The Forefathers 'Eve was a moment of mourning, a moment of respect for the dead, but now as it was over the celebration had begun.

    Gaven saw the locals and his men celebrating on the fields before him. He saw a young man asking a woman do dance with him and his eyes followed them as they went to the glade where other young couples were already dancing. A part of Gaven wished nothing more than to join them. To just go down there and enjoy the warm night, to dance with Nev on the grass until the sun rose again.

    Gaven shook his head and tried his best to ignore the thought. He had a duty to fulfill. With a sigh he again took the data pad, he had brought with him, into his hands and read. It was a report about the events in the main parts of the galaxy, about the great war that had killed billions of people there. In the Teris sector they had heard about the Yuzzan Vong but not a single one of them had ever come here nor had Gaven ever seen the worlds mentioned in it. But he needed to know what was happening in the main galaxy when he wanted to contact the Jedi. The plan had been in his mind for a while now. He knew that he and his small group where too weak to crush the pirates on their own. They needed allies.

    His thoughts finally left the topic and drifted through the night. He looked over the glade and searched for Nev. He hoped she enjoyed herself, and maybe she would even dance with one of the young men down there. This though made Gaven´s feel horrible.

    "Who is Jacen Solo?"

    Gaven looked up. Nev stood above him and looked at the data pad on his lap. She smiled.
    "A Jedi," Gaven answered and scolded himself for letting his thoughts leave the pad.

    "Do you want to dance?" she suddenly asked him. A part of Gaven had dreamed of this for the entire evening. He knew, he wanted nothing more than go down there and be with Nev. But he had a duty to fulfill, a duty to his men and to the Teris sector. He looked in Nev´s face and searched for words that wouldn´t hurt her.

    When he looked into her face he saw happiness in it. Since their parents had died such moments of happiness had become rare among them. He returned her smile. He could allow himself a dance, he guessed. The night would still last for hours so he would have time to read later. "Sure," he said and stood up. Nev gave him a hug before they slowly walked down to the glade next to each other. When they stood on the grass among the other couples Gaven hesitated for a moment but Nev gently took his hand and he followed her.

    While they danced many of the sorrows that plagued him left his mind and his thoughts became clearer. He completely followed Nev as she led them through the other couples. As time went on they remained on the field, together. Both of them smiled at the other. Gaven enjoyed every moment of it and for the first time in decades he felt completely happy, and he saw that Nev felt the same.

    Later when the two of them lay next to each other below the stars they again talked to each other like when they did when they were children. Gaven remembered the promise that he had given Nev, that they would one day see the galaxy together. Maybe when the war was over, Gaven thought, as he looked at Nev. Maybe then I will be able to give her the kiss she deserves. The kiss I´ve wanted to give her since we were children.
    Last edited: Oct 1, 2020
  2. divapilot

    divapilot Force Ghost star 4

    Nov 30, 2005
    You've done some awesome world building here, Anedon. I like the somber ceremony of remembrance, of recalling the memory of those who went before. Then you follow with the celebration. It's very much an idea that the first part, as seen through Nev's eyes, is looking into the past, while the second part, seen through Gaven's eyes, is looking towards the future. And in that future is the hope of happiness and maybe even love.

    The image of Gaven and Nev lying on their backs in the field and looking up at the stars is wonderful.

    Nice work!
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  3. Sith-I-5

    Sith-I-5 Force Ghost star 6

    Aug 14, 2002
    Very good.

    Well described, and put me in mind of an actual building that I read about recently, in a similar state.

    The respect and observance of the attendees is well stated and felt.
  4. Findswoman

    Findswoman Kessel Run Champion star 5 VIP - Game Winner

    Feb 27, 2014
    A lovely little vignette. :) Beautiful description of the temple, priests, and ceremonies, and I love how the solemn memorial ritual in honor of the ancestors is followed by a joyful dance for the enjoyment of the living. Even though this ritual is not part of Nev's own tradition and she prefers to be purely a spectator, she does get into the spirit things in her own way, as we see from her own remembrances of her parents, her friends, and her fallen comrades. As she looks at Gaven standing up there by the altar, just staring at the flames—well, I imagine he might be remembering similar things. Of course, the fight is not over: Gaven knows he'll have to keep an eye on those reports, but he also knows that taking a moment in the here and now with his beloved can also give him courage to carry on—and ditto the prospect of that future kiss! [face_love]

    Thanks so much for sharing and taking part in this challenge. :)
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  5. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Grand Master star 4

    May 11, 2016
    divapilot I´m glad you enjoy my describtion of the cerenmony. I tried to get the duality of serious remebering of the dead and the joyful celebration afterwarts.
    There is defenetly hope for Gaven and Nev in the future. ;)

    Sith-I-5 Thanks, I´m glad I was able to describe it so well.

    Findswoman Thanks I´m glad you enjoyed it. Yeah Gaven thinks the same as Nev when he stares into the flammes, the gods aren´t his either.
    It´s defenetly a good decision from Gaven to put his duty aside for a while, to do something that gives him happiness.
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  6. mavjade

    mavjade It's so FLUFFY! Fanfic Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

    Sep 10, 2005
    Lovely! @};- Such a sweet story!

    The picture you paint on the ceremony was beautiful! I could really see it in my mind and it was quite amazing to imagine.

    I especially loved this part:
    This tells us so much about Gaven, that he knows he must do his duty and in doing so has to hide some part of himself.
    I'm so glad they got the dance in the end. <3

    Great job!
  7. Ewok Poet

    Ewok Poet Force Ghost star 6

    Jul 31, 2014
    This got me giddy, since I had an OC named Nev some...sixteen years ago. Almost a lifetime ago, yeah. :p

    I am not familiar enough with Jacen Solo's story - I know only the basics and people seem to be very polarised about it - but any universe with well-thought-out redemption in it is a good universe, so...expect me to bump the threads a couple of years from now and be fascinated, and leave a comment that's not related to formatting. Not to mention that whatever leads you to this level of creativity has got to be worth it.

    Other than that, I don't have much to add, since I'm kind of late here - so I'll echo what the others said: amazing worldbuilding, great, great atmosphere. One can feel like they're present at this ceremony. And the idea of mourning the dead, and then celebrating life, on the ruins, is spooky-romantic in its own way. Love it.

    At the first glance, Gaven and Nev seem to be from different social classes - he is the leader of his people and led by duty. She is alone in the world and led by her heritage and personal values. Yet, there's an air of awkwardness to both of them and it's kind of adorable, at least in this particular situation. I am curious to see how, where and when they'll dance again and what kind of events will put them in such a circumstance.

    And a random question: does Nev have a last name, or are only the royals/leaders in this setting eligible for last names?

    Thanks for taking part in the OTP Challenge #3. :)
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  8. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Grand Master star 4

    May 11, 2016
    mavjade Thanks I´m glad you like it. Yeah Gaven is very dutifull and sometimes supresses his true feelings because of it.I´m glad you enjoyed my describtion of the ceremony.

    Thanks Ewok Poet You also had an OC called Nev? Intersting.
    I´m glad you like both Gaven and Nev. Although they are not from different social classes, they grew up and founded the milita together.
    Of course Nev does have a last name. Nev itself is a nickname actually. ;)
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  9. Ewok Poet

    Ewok Poet Force Ghost star 6

    Jul 31, 2014
    Thanks for that. :) Now I'm even more intrigued and sorry about the error.

    My Nev was a French girl and it was a nickname as well.
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  10. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

    Jun 29, 2004
    This was a beautiful response to the challenge! [face_love][face_love]

    I have to echo the above reviews that commended your world-building. The ceremony was somber and reflective, and Nev and Gaven's thoughts were a fitting addition to the purpose behind the festivities. Both of them are endeavoring to honor the past and fighting for a better future - even at the cost of their romantic relationship, though I hope that the time will come with a future that lets them be together. For now, just their dance and the depth of their friendship supporting each other was lovely. [face_love]

    Now I am intrigued as to how this world ties into Jacen Solo's redemption and the larger galaxy as a whole. I think that I need to add your stories to my reading list. [face_thinking] :)

  11. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Grand Master star 4

    May 11, 2016
    Thanks Mira_Jade
    I´m glad you liked the wordbuilding as well as the relationship between Gaven and Nev. :)
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  12. BookExogorth

    BookExogorth Force Ghost star 4

    May 4, 2017
    I liked it. The dance was sweet, and the happiness and joy in this work are palpable.
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  13. Anedon

    Anedon Jedi Grand Master star 4

    May 11, 2016
    Thanks, I´m glad you like it. :)