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Saga Jedi Snapshots 2 (JA short stories - humor/serious)

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Jemmiah, Jul 3, 2000.

  1. Jemmiah

    Jemmiah Jedi Master star 5

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    A Bird In The Hand...

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    The longish Corellian ferns and grasses rustled silently in the wind, the merest breath of warm air blowing amongst the myriad of scented plants nestling in the border of the large garden. It was one of those days, Thena thought idly to herself, when it was genuinely good to be alive. They'd done the right thing in returning to Joel's family home to enjoy the fine mid-year weather, even though it had cost them a lot of soul searching in the process. Her husband was a pilot and a very fine one indeed so it was said. One of the best in the Corellian Search and Rescue teams, except that he was based even further away now that they had moved. It wasn't just for herself she felt bad for but the children, who now got to see even less of their father than they did before.

    Thena watched her four-year-old son as he tried to close his hands round a butterfly that sat invitingly on a long stalk of grass. Todd always thought he knew best, always liked to have his own way, and yet he was strangely sensitive and quick to tears when things went wrong. Being a child they went wrong frequently, the merest scrape on the knee being turned into a life and death situation, the slightest bruise demanding instant attention from his mother. Joel thought he needed toughening up, but he was only little for star's sake! Perhaps she did spoil and mollycoddle him a little but it was so easy to give him affection that she found herself drawn in.

    The butterfly moved at the last minute, leaving a very disappointed little boy behind.

    "It moved." pouted Todd. "I was going to keep it in a tank and feed it on cake and candy and?"
    "Butterfly's don't eat that kind of thing." Thena said with a small smile, ruffling the boy's hair with her fingers.
    "What do they eat?" Todd frowned.
    "Well," Thena considered, "plants and greenery amongst other things."
    "But I eat greens." The boy squinted as another butterfly flew past, flapping enticingly as it circled his head. "So why doesn't it eat cakes and stuff?"
    "That's not how it works I'm afraid Todd." Thena replied fondly.
    "But why?"
    "They don't?they?just don't."
    "But why?" the boy insisted.

    Thena closed her eyes. Todd was at that age where every second thing he said was 'Why?' The problem she had was trying to find answers for his many varied questions. She didn't want to deny the boy his natural curiosity but some of the things he came out with?

    "What's your sister doing?" Thena changed the subject.
    "Playing." Todd stood up quickly and jumped as a Fork-Tailed Stinger zipped past his ear, squealing as it hopped away.

    Thena cast her eyes round and found her youngest child wandering round the trees at the back of the garden. How had she got down there without her seeing her? Once more the sheer speed of the girl completely took her aback. When she set her eye on something, no matter how distant, she usually went out of her way to get it.

    "Jemmiah!" Thena called. "What are you doing down there? Come back this instant!"

    Thena stormed after her determined three-year old daughter and hastened to catch up with her. This was usually the point where the girl would run off and try and hide in the hope of escaping a rebuke, but Thena could see that Jemmiah had found something far more interesting to occupy her mind with other than basking in the warm Corellian sun. As she got closer she could see the child's little hands grasping something - she couldn't quite make out what - and throwing it up into the air. The object, whatever it was, fell like a stone to the ground. Jemmiah's eyes followed the thing to the grass, a stubborn expression on her face as she bent down to retrieve it.

    Once again, the girl scooped up the peculiar shape and after a few moments repeated the same exercise, with exactly the same results. The stubborn expression became even greater.

    Thena stared as she strode forwards, thinking how much Jemmiah took after herself. In looks she was a peculiar mixture of both parents but the girl's personality was very similar to her own.
     
  2. Uisceban

    Uisceban Jedi Padawan star 4

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    That was so sweet.
     
  3. Calamity Jinn

    Calamity Jinn Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Priceless! Great snapshot of a young Jemmiah!

     
  4. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Community Squirrel Whisperer star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    A new Snapshot!!!!!

    What a tender moment in the life of Jemmiah Gleshan...if only..oh here I go wanting to change the future again.

    Excellent Jemmy!! Most excellent!

     
  5. imzadi

    imzadi Jedi Master star 4

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    That's so bitter sweet. That was great Jemmiah! I hope you plan to write more of her early life.
     
  6. Jemmiah

    Jemmiah Jedi Master star 5

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    Thanks! Actually, I may do the odd one or two young Jemmy snapshots. I did this one because it's kinda relevant to what happens later on Nargotria, and at some stage next year I plan to write the story of how she hooked up with Qui-Gon and Obi so I thought it would be nice to give some backstory :)
     
  7. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

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    Oh, Jemmiah, there I was being a silly mother-type person, with tears streaming down my face as I read this, remembering what was in store for little Todd, and then you had to go and write "He dropped your necklace down the fresher!" Only you, Jemmiah, only you!
     
  8. mouse2

    mouse2 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Yes, Jemmiah making people cry is just as fun as making them laugh. And you my friend are a master at both!

    Hope to read more!
     
  9. HaiGan

    HaiGan Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Touching, perceptive, and a nice bit of humour at the end. Oh, and the story before that was another good one. No, I don't think Valorum would have objected to the directions too much, either. :)

    Calam, I also loved your effort. Great touch of slapstick in there with all the chasing around.

    I'm cooking up a snapshot myself. Inspiration seems to have been contagious. I've already asked borrow a couple of characters, but I'd like to borrow one more, if I may. Who invented Isadora Lucey, and can I borrow her, please?



     
  10. Calamity Jinn

    Calamity Jinn Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Isadora's Jem's character! Just PM her if you want any particulars.

     
  11. HaiGan

    HaiGan Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Well, here goes nothing. My first JA fic, Part One. Please be nice (helpful suggestions count as nice!). Thank you, Healer Leona and Jemmiah, for the loan of your characters.


    DON'T TRY THIS AT HOME:

    "Master Windu, are you certain about this?" Leona queried, nervously. She tried to muster her arguments, but having Qui-Gon in the same room- conscious, for once- was distracting her. "I'm a Healer, not a chemist. I'm not sure that..."

    "You'll be fine," Mace assured her. "It's only an elementary class. You were top in your year for chemistry, weren't you?"

    "Yes, but..." Her eyes strayed towards the taller master in mute appeal. Qui-Gon was looking out of the window, and failed to notice.

    "I'm sure you'll find that it comes back to you quite easily. Master Ba'anz will be relieved to know that her class is in such capable hands."

    "But I don't..."

    "Her notes are quite extensive, so you should have no trouble at all in revising for the lessons. The technicians will have everything ready for you. Quite simple."

    "'Simple' isn't really how I would des..."

    "I know that Master Ba'anz can count on you." Mace concluded, giving the Healer a paternal pat on the shoulder. "You'll find the lesson plans in her office. I've arranged with An-Paj for you to have the rest of this morning off duty, to prepare for today's class."

    "I will need an assistant as well," Leona said with a burst of self-assertiveness, looking hopefully towards Qui-Gon.

    "Of course," Mace responded, "I thought of that already." He smiled. "Dimallie has been excused her exam this afternoon so that she can help you."

    Leona could only stare speechlessly after Mace as he joined Qui-Gon and left the room.

    "That was a little cruel, Mace." Qui-Gon remarked, once they were safely outside. "Picking on poor Leona because everyone else had turned you down and you knew you could bully her into it."

    "I didn't notice you leaping to her defence, Qui-Gon. That wasn't very chivalrous of you. Not having second thoughts about your date with her?"

    Qui-Gon looked away. "We were both drunk..." he mumbled, uncharacteristically unsure of himself, "...and maybe she isn't really interested, and... Stop right there." He turned to Mace with a stern expression, his uncertainty forgotten. "I believe that you were top of /your/ year in chemistry as well."

    "I wouldn't like to boast..." the other Master replied, modestly.

    "No, I remember now," Qui-Gon continued thoughtfully. "You were top in the written paper."

    "Ah, well..." Mace hurried forwards, as if to forestall Qui-Gon's next remark.

    "I seem to recall that the laboratory needed a new ceiling after your practical test."

    "The place needed decorating anyway," Mace replied, defensively.

    "Redecorating, not rebuilding," Qui-Gon teased.

    "Might I remind you that I still have to find someone to teach the advanced class until Master Ba'anz recovers from those acid burns."

    "Don't look at me," Qui-Gon said, unperturbed.

    "I am looking at you." Mace folded his arms and glared at his friend.

    Qui-Gon smiled back. "You forget what happened during MY chemistry practical."

    "Ah." Mace looked worried. "Permanent ban, wasn't it?"

    "Yes," Qui-Gon replied, happily. "I'd love to help, Mace, only I'm afraid I'm not allowed to."

    "But you're my only hope!"

    "Sorry, old friend. It looks as if you'll have to do it. I know that Master Ba'anz can count on you." Qui-Gon patted Mace on the shoulder, and left him to contemplate his fate.

    ******

    Obi-Wan was lying on his bed, reading. The activity was complicated a little as his hands were bandaged, but he had found a way around the problem and was now lounging on his back half way through Chapter Three. Qui-Gon's somewhat precipitous entrance into his room startled him, so much so that the datapad he was holding with the Force slipped from his control and dropped with a thud.

    "Mmmmph!"

    Qui-Gon reached down and pulled the datapad away from his padawan's face, relieved to see that nothing else appeared to have been broken. "For once I'm gl
     
  12. Jemmiah

    Jemmiah Jedi Master star 5

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    Hey, that was great! I loved the water fight, and Isadora...I nearly felt sorry for her. Nearly. Qui's anxiety about his date was also a nice touch, and so was the banter between Mace and Qui-Gon.

    Very enjoyable, extremely in character and the end had me laughing out loud: I hope you'll consider writing more soon!

     
  13. HaiGan

    HaiGan Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Thanks, Jemmiah. More is in the pipeline.

    Oh, and I knew I'd forget something. The story's set at the end of ANTAR, before the epilogue.
     
  14. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Community Squirrel Whisperer star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    OMG, HaiGan that was superb.

    Characters were great, I loved how both Leona and Qui were worrying over the other backing out.

    And the initiates were awesome.

    Then when Mace asked Depa about Truthfinders chemistry grades I couldn't continue reading from laughing so hard.

    Fantastic HaiGan, just fantastic!!!

    I hope we get to read more of Barin Truthfinder, sounds like a keeper!

     
  15. Calamity Jinn

    Calamity Jinn Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Great snapshot! The little doubts shared by Healer Leona and Qui-Gon were great, especially as their padawans were the ones giving support!

    Very sneaky of Mace; I don't think he should be allowed to get away with it...

    And I DO feel sorry for Isadora!

     
  16. imzadi

    imzadi Jedi Master star 4

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    That was excellent! Very enjoyable, I hope you write more soon!
     
  17. Jane Jinn

    Jane Jinn Jedi Knight star 5

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    Fantastic! Excellent! If you're not really Jemmiah in disguise, you'll certainly be giving her a run for her money with this and any upcoming Snapshots! Wahoo! I can barely breathe for laughter and I am looking forward to more!
     
  18. mouse2

    mouse2 Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Great snapshot HaiGan! I love it!

    Although I throughly believe that Isadora definately deserves what she gets!

    Can't wait for more!
     
  19. HaiGan

    HaiGan Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Aaaarg! I committed the cardinal sin of not checking the spelling of a character before posting the story! Sorry! And sorry Depa, too. (Why is it a cardinal sin anyway? Is it any worse than, say, an archbishop sin, or a curate sin?)

    Right, aaaarg over. You're all lovely, thank you for the nice remarks, you're much too kind and make me feel all warm and squiggly. No story post tonight from me today, though, it's not finished yet and I've got a work christmas dinner to go to this evening so I won't get it done until wednesday.
     
  20. HaiGan

    HaiGan Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Sorrysorrysorrysorry! I know I promised this for wednesday, but my IP's been acting up and I couldn't get online for long enough to post the thing. Everything SEEMS to be sorted out now, and so if it's any consolation I should be able to get the third and final part up tomorrow AND if people like Barin the character okay I could maybe post another one-part snapshot to make up for the wait?


    DON'T TRY THIS AT HOME PART 2:

    "The initiates decided to have a water-fight, but picked up the wrong bottles," explained a scarlet-faced Leona, catching her balance and placing herself between Isadora and the two men.

    Barin strode across to Dimallie. "Reassuring to learn that the Temple's Initiates are still being raised as the studious, responsible, mature individuals they always have been. Are you in need of assistance?" he asked, peering quizzically down at the coverall-strewn padawan and offering a hand.

    "It's okay, I'm used to it," Dimallie said, scrambling to her feet and finding to her embarassment that she was almost as tall as her would-be assistant. Men weren't supposed to be that short. The padawan stepped out of the pile of clothes, caught her toe on the edge of a tunic, and almost landed flat on her face again. Barin reached out in an almost absent-minded fashion to steady her as he bent to examine the steaming clothing.

    "I don't think they should do that," Dimallie offered.

    "Protective clothing certainly shouldn't react so readily with anything the Initiates could lay their hands on... but the tunics are also producing similar fumes," Barin mused.

    "I did wonder about it myself," Leona said, a little shyly, "but I had other things to worry about."

    "Speaking of which, would it be possible to obtain a suitable covering for the other damsel in distress?" Barin inquired. Isadora eyed him for a moment, deciding how best to handle the situation. Then she began to cry again, blinking at him with large, tear-filled eyes.

    "I didn't think you were that easily offended, Barin," Mace growled.

    "I assure you, Master Windu, it is deeply offensive to my aesthetic sensibilities to see a rubicund and maculated young lady in such exposed a position," Barin said, with a bow towards Isadora. Isadora didn't understand what he'd said, but it sounded flattering. She smiled tremulously and squeezed out a few more tears. Leona realised that he'd actually described Isadora as 'red and spotty', and for a moment didn't know whether to find it funny or to disapprove. Barin gave her the ghost of a wink, and she tried unsuccessfully not to smile.

    "There is a coverall hanging beside the door, Master Windu," the Healer suggested, "could you... oh, thank you," she added in surprise, as Barin whisked the coat out from under Mace's fingers using the Force and presented it to the Healer. Leona wrapped it around Isadora's shoulders. "I need to get her to the infirmary, and all the Initiates in the next room will need clean clothing."

    "If you and Dimallie are both in here, Leona..." Mace said, slowly, "who is looking after the Initiates?"

    The four adults looked at one another. Dimallie gulped. Leona glanced apprehensively at the door to the lab. Mace edged furtively towards the exit. Barin appeared mildly amused.

    "Perhaps I could keep an eye on things while the young lady is escorted to the sympathetic hands of the Healers," Barin offered. "If Master Windu could be imposed upon to arrange clothing for the other Initiates? I take it that they are not completely denuded?" He turned to Dimallie for confirmation.

    The padawan puzzled out what the question meant, then shook her head. "It was only the outer tunics that got wet," she said.

    "Thank the Force for small mercies," Mace remarked.

    "Are you sure you'll be alright with them?" Leona asked, still unsure what to make of the smooth-tongued stranger.

    "Worry not," Barin said, with an ominous grin. "There is nothing the little darlings can possibly attempt that I have not already done unto somebody else."

    "Why am I not reassured?" Mace asked, directing the que
     
  21. Uisceban

    Uisceban Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Lol!! They were good!
    I liked finding out a bit more about Kabe.
     
  22. Healer_Leona

    Healer_Leona Community Squirrel Whisperer star 9 Staff Member Manager

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    HaiGan, I loved that post!!!

    Barin is really quite intriging and I hope we read much, much more of him. I enjoyed his theatrics and handling of the initiates and his thoughts of finding the class a very interesting mental exercise.

    And Qui-Gon and Leona....*deep satisfying sigh* they were so cute, I loved that scene. I'm still grinning and my jaws are starting to hurt.

    And the end had me howling!!
     
  23. Lady_Dark

    Lady_Dark Jedi Youngling star 1

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    LOL! this has me splitting my sides with laughter. Especialy when the cart hit Yoda!

     
  24. imzadi

    imzadi Jedi Master star 4

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    That was excellent!! I was so relieved when Leona and Qui-Gon sorted it out. That whole post was so funny! I hope you are planning to write more!
     
  25. HaiGan

    HaiGan Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Well, here goes. Final part. I'm not sure that it's quite up to the same standard as the others, tho'. :(


    DON'T TRY THIS AT HOME PT3:

    Yoda straightened his clothes and faced the two other Jedi. "Now an explanation you will give."

    Dimallie tugged at her own disorganised tunic, and fruitlessly tried to tuck her hair back behind her ears. "Um... what do you want me to explain, Master Yoda?" she asked.

    "What? What? Why this... vehicle out of control was! Why such dangerous things speeding through the Temple are!"

    "I was taking it to the laundry facilities, some of the clothes fell out, and it rolled away while I was picking them up," Dimallie said, taking a step away from the angry Master.

    "How did Master Yoda come to be in the cart, Dimallie?" Leona prompted her padawan.

    Dimallie hesitated. "Well, the cart was rolling past the stairs when Master Yoda came sliding down the..."

    "Yes, yes, never mind," Yoda interrupted hastily.

    "...singing 'H-A-'"

    "Accidents happen," Yoda said, lifting his hand to tap the padawan with his stick, and finding that his stick was still in the cart. "Understand this I do. No more will be said."

    "Are you sure, Master Yoda?" Leona asked, trying to hide a smile. Master Yoda, sliding down the banisters? She and Dimallie would certainly have something to talk about later on! "You're not hurt? The Initiates are always hurting themselves sliding down those ban..."

    "Hurt I am not." Yoda said, with dignity. "Initiate I am not." He reached out with the Force to retrieve his stick from the cart. "For eight hundred years have I known the way to safely slide down banisters! Smoke, clothes should not. See to it, you will," he ordered, rapping Leona on the leg, and shuffled away.

    Leona and Dimallie looked at one another, and suppressed their amusement until the little Jedi Master was out of earshot. Then they both leaned against the wall laughing, as much from relief as from the humour of the situation.

    "I don't know how you get yourself into these things" Leona said, giving Dimallie a hug, "but at least you and Master Yoda are both okay. I suppose now we'd better get back to work. You drop off the cart, please, then join me in the lab. When you get to the laundry, take the cart straight to Dian Juanar and ask her to find out what's making these fumes. Do you think you could manage to find your way there /without/ any further accidents, while I get back to the class?"

    Dimallie nodded. "I'll try."

    "Do, or do not..."

    "...there is no try," the two finished together.

    "Master," Dimallie began, shyly, "you're a bit happier than you were earlier?"

    Leona smiled fondly at her padawan. "I am, thank you, Dimallie. I'll tell you about it later."

    Dimallie set her hands against the end of the cart and gave it a good shove to get it going. She grinned back over her shoulder as she pushed it away. Leona's wince gave the padawan just enough time to avoid another collision with the wall.

    Leona shook her head tolerantly and left Dimallie to her own devices.

    ******

    Leona reached the lab without further incident. As she pushed open the door, her first thought was that the room was empty. Then a voice shouted "Duck!" at the same moment as she sensed danger. The Healer dived under a workbench with reflexes that only a Jedi could display, then grabbed at one of the supports as an explosion shattered the relative silence. She waited a moment, then peeped cautiously over the edge of the worktop.

    A thin black cloud rolled across the room and dissipated in a fine rain of ash. A few shards of glass detached themselves from the ceiling and tinkled onto the floor beneath. The Initiates were, like her, cowering behind the workbenches, well away from the teacher's desk at the front of the room. A rather sorry-looking collection of shattered glassware and twisted metal was scattered across the desk. Behind them, a soot-faced Barin was scratching his head. "I am not convinced that Master Ba'anz's notes are entirely accurate," he said, then eyed the rest of the lab. "However,