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  1. Lady_Tahiri

    Lady_Tahiri Jedi Master star 4

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    Title: Dying of the Light
    Author: Lady_Tahiri
    Timeframe: Legacy era (relatively minor spoilers for FOTJ books)
    Characters: Ben, Luke, Jag, Jaina, others
    Summary: Luke Skywalker is dead, but to his son?s consternation, his body refuses to fade away.
    Disclaimer: George Lucas owns everything except what Dylan Thomas wrote.
    A/N: This plot bunny started life as an angst-filled vig, but has since evolved into a three- or four-post short story. I think.

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    DYING OF THE LIGHT

    They burned my cousin Anakin?s body on a funeral pyre fit for royalty. In a way I suppose he was. We all of us are, we who claim descent from the Sith Lord who plunged the galaxy into darkness ? and have consequently spilled our life?s blood to steer it back into the light. The New Republic my father helped found was not a continuation or revival of the Old Republic that my grandfather had helped shatter two decades earlier. In pointed contrast to the stiff formality of the Imperial Court, the New Republic chose to dispense with pomp and ceremony, to raise the Alliance?s egalitarian ideals like a shining galactic standard around which whole worlds could rally. But people cannot dispense with heroes, nor with royalty. Where the latter are in short supply they enthusiastically fashion them out of the former.

    I don?t know what we would have done with Mom?s body if the Force hadn?t taken her. Seeing as they deemed her important enough to merit a state funeral, I wonder if anyone would have voiced more than a token objection to a display of pyrotechnics that would have rivaled Anakin?s. After that, we could have scattered her ashes ? where? Jedi Masters are not in the habit of leaving instructions for the disposal of their corporeal remains. Usually there aren?t any.

    My father?s face stares out at me from his bier.

    I stretch out with my feelings, searching his familiar features for some sign, some hint, of how to proceed. There is none ? only the rustle of the wind in the trees.

    I have cobbled the bier together out of branches, trunks, and the occasional root; sawing large quantities of wood with a lightsaber is hardly quick or easy going, but in the end I get the job done. Dad would have preferred to rest in a place thriving with life, rather than lay in state in a dome of ferracrete, to be inspected by hordes of admirers, detractors, holojournalists and dignitaries. At least I can spare him that.

    But for how long? It?s been nine days, and he?s still here. Mom?s body became one with the Force after seven. How long can I remain here, in self-imposed exile upon this Force-forsaken world, and keep the rest of the galaxy from learning of his fate?

    They should have felt it by now. In the ordinary course of events, the passing of a Jedi such as Luke Skywalker should have sent tremors through the Force from the Rim to the Core. I glance down at him. His eyes are closed and his mouth relaxed. He is tranquil in death as he was in life. His presence in the Force has been waning for weeks ? wilting, rather, like a malnourished plant. At this point I doubt even Aunt Leia felt him go.

    Which is precisely the way he wanted it. I am sure now that it?s the rea
     
  2. kataja

    kataja Jedi Master star 4

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    A very interesting and original start. I like it a lot but I'll have to think about why! I hope I can give a better feedback by your next post! Could you PM me when you update please?
     
  3. mavjade

    mavjade It's so FLUFFY! Fanfic Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Wow! Awesome start... though I shouldn't have been reading something so sad while at work. It can be a little embarrassing when I start to tear up! :p

    ?Your mother and I met here. For three days she held a blaster to my head and threatened to leave Artoo lying under a bush in pieces.?
    ?I could swear you sound more pleased with yourself every time you tell that story.?

    I loved this line! I have a soft spot for Luke and Ben banter and this was great.

    The last line was ominous... I'm intrigued by what he means by deliberately??

    If you have a PM list, would you mind adding me to it?

    I'm very much looking forward to more!!
     
  4. SithGirl132

    SithGirl132 Jedi Master star 4

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    :eek: This. Is. Amazing.

    I shouldn't be feeding this angst kick that I've been on lately, but this is so fantastic that I can't resist. That is a fantastic poem from which you took the title. I would love to be on a PM list for more, also... and I can't wait to hear more!
     
  5. tahiriveilax

    tahiriveilax Jedi Padawan star 4

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    :eek:

    Great start. I am actually speechless. And that's a difficult task.

    Well done =D=

    EDIT: And could you please add me to the PM list?
     
  6. maplecroix

    maplecroix Jedi Youngling

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    This is really different and unique and I love it. I love the 1st-person POV of Ben. Can't wait to read the next part :)
     
  7. SilSolo

    SilSolo Jedi Knight star 5

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    A very different andunique work indeed. So Luke chose to die on Myrkr, away from the public eye.
     
  8. Lady_Tahiri

    Lady_Tahiri Jedi Master star 4

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    kataja - I'm looking forward to it!

    mavjade - I understand, I was pretty depressed when I wrote it. I knew he was going to die somewhere far away, but I didn't know where exactly until I hit on Myrkr and it seemed appropriate.

    SithGirl132 - I know, it's an oldie but a goodie - still my favorite poem of his. When I reread it the other day all of a sudden I thought of this.

    tahiriveilax - Thank you, and of course.

    maplecroix - Glad you liked it!

    SilSolo - Yes, he did.



    Thanks for reading ! I throttled back a bit on the angst in this post, but it'll come back later. As will the reasons for Luke's demise.



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    The armor of Uncle Han?s pride notwithstanding, the Millennium Falcon is neither faster nor more deadly than the Jade Shadow in a stand-up fight. It is, however, considerably better suited to sneaking, slinking, and other forms of skullduggery; after all my mother didn?t take up smuggling until long after my uncle got after of the business. I?ve seen Han pull out a list of false transponder codes long enough to hit every stop on the Corellian Run and half of Hutt Space besides. Unfortunately, the Shadow carried nothing equivalently helpful, and even if it did, I would have been reluctant to reenter Alliance space under such pretenses. The last thing the Order needed was for the government to obtain proof of yet another Jedi bending the rules ? especially when that Jedi?s name was Skywalker. Besides, I was hardly planning to keep my presence or my cargo a secret.

    A crackle of static over the subspace comm. ?This is Coruscant Control hailing unidentified yacht. Jade Shadow, you are not authorized to continue. In fact, you are in violation of the terms of your parole by venturing within fifty parsecs of Galactic Alliance air space. Suggest you withdraw immediately. Failure to comply will result in your compulsory removal from this system. ?

    As I watched, a flight of Skyhoppers peeled off from a patrol, heading straight for me in a loose wedge formation. When they got close enough half the squadron would break to starboard and I would receive an escort back into open space ? though if my descent continued I was just as likely to receive a couple of crippling shots from an ion cannon. Maybe a laser or two.

    ?Control, this is Ben Skywalker. The reason for the sentence of exile has ? ceased to be applicable. Request permission to land.?

    The voice on the other end lost some of its earlier hostility. ?Look, kid, you?re not responsible for someone else?s mistakes. Sins of the fathers and all that. But you can?t bring that ship anywhere near this planet as long as your old man?s on it. That?s the bottom line. Now, is he on board or not??

    It would have been easy, perhaps even defensible, to respond with a negative, but technically my father was aboard. A Jedi never lied if he could help it. And in this case, I could.

    ?Perform a sensor sweep, then. Take as long as you like. If you come up with more than one sizeable life-form reading then I promise to eat gotal for dinner.?

    ?This is no time to be playing games, kid. You can either turn around now or be towed out of here with a tractor beam.? The edge was back in his voice. Maybe it was the way he said ?kid,? but for some reason I pictured Uncle Han?s lopsided grin on the other end of that comm unit, and suddenly I knew this man, at least, harbored no animosity against the Jedi in general or my father in particular. All he saw was a kid who was in over his head. He was trying to help me the only way he knew how.

    What he didn?t know was that I wasn?t a kid anymore and that I hadn?t been one for a long, long time. On the day I laid my mother to rest in the almost certain knowledge that my cousin had murdered her, I had already left my childhood far behind.

    ?Please.? I tried to inject my tone with as much sincerity as I could muster. ?It wouldn?t take long to send someone to check. I give you my word to stay with my escort. We?ll continue to circle up he
     
  9. mavjade

    mavjade It's so FLUFFY! Fanfic Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Wonderful update!! =D= @};-

    I feel so bad for Ben! Not only has he lost his father but now when he comes back home he is greeted with such suspicion and animosity (not that it surprises me that he would be treated that way) . :(
    I'm so glad that Jag came to his rescue!

    Thanks so much for the PM! [:D] I am excited for more!!
     
  10. kataja

    kataja Jedi Master star 4

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    This is absolutely amazing!!! It was a very different mood here than the poignacy of the first chapter but each and every word ringed so perfectly true - to the characters, to the Corsucanti-part of the FotJ-story that's going on in the background and not leat to the story that's starting to emerge here. Very powerful and intense! Captivating!

    And I absolutely adore the voice you give Ben; the same insisting energy that his father had when he was young but tinged with the sharpness from loss and betrayal.

    Can't wait to read more!!!
     
  11. Ice1605

    Ice1605 Jedi Master star 1

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    Very interesting start, looking forward to reading more! Could I be added to the PM list, please?
     
  12. SithGirl132

    SithGirl132 Jedi Master star 4

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    Ohh, I feel so bad for Ben- going back to Coruscant like that, and the way he's treated... and you really did catch the air of anti-Jedi sentiment in FOTJ. And I definitely like your Jag- can't wait to see where this is going.
     
  13. Jaded_Girl

    Jaded_Girl Jedi Master star 4

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    Ooh! This is so interesting! Please PM me with updates! ^_^


    I especially liked: ?Your mother and I met here. For three days she held a blaster to my head and threatened to leave Artoo lying under a bush in pieces.? ?I could swear you sound more pleased with yourself every time you tell that story.? :D

    Also ?Because it?s a good place to die.? and Because otherwise I was going to have to explain how Luke Skywalker had slowly and deliberately killed himself. I am mightily intrigued!

    And yay for Jag looking out for Ben! [:D]
     
  14. tahiriveilax

    tahiriveilax Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Great update! =D= Can't wait for the next post :)
     
  15. Lady_Tahiri

    Lady_Tahiri Jedi Master star 4

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    mavjade - If I was thinking along the lines of chapter titles, that one would have been "Jag to the Rescue." ;)

    kataja - [face_blush] High praise indeed. I hope I can live up to it.

    Ice1605 - Of course, thanks for reading!

    SithGirl132 - Yes, this post was actually supposed to be shorter but the FOTJ anti-Jediness sort of ran away with the show.

    Jaded_Girl - Yes, chalk it up to a recent Thrawn trilogy reread. I'm working on the NJO now - all twenty-odd books of it - and I'm more impressed with Zahn than ever. I don't think I could stand to reread the NJO nearly as many times.

    tahiriveilax - As requested. :)
     
  16. Lady_Tahiri

    Lady_Tahiri Jedi Master star 4

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    Once, when I asked him for a story, Threepio recounted the unsettling experience of attending Chewie?s memorial service on Kashyyk. Amidst the towering centuries-old trees and thick, twining vines throbbing with life, he and Artoo had felt acutely conscious of their own immunity to that great equalizer of flesh-and-bloods? fortunes, death. Well, Threepio had been discomfited. I suspect Artoo is far too pragmatic to get his circuits in a twist by genuflecting on the suitability of an analogue between death and deactivation. My focus tends to wander whenever the protocol droid?s ruminations veer into a miasma of self-recrimination worthy of a mystic, or a philosopher, or a certain type of Jedi Knight. Instead, I imagine the raw grief writ upon my uncle?s weathered face, the vulnerability exposed there by the of sudden collapse of one of the pillars upon which he built his life.

    The irony, of course, is that had Chewbacca?s body been recovered, none of the humans present ? not even Han ? would have been permitted to attend the funeral; to say nothing of the droids. The secretive burial customs of Wookies remain a subject rife with speculation in certain subfields of anthropology. Meanwhile, Chewie?s remains are floating around in vacuum somewhere in the vicinity of what used to be Sernpidal.

    Uncle Han was the first person to tell me, Don?t get mad, get even.

    I feel like I just watched the man who owes me twenty million credits in sabaac winnings being shot out of the sky ? along with his ship, his crew, and every single witness to the long, intricate game we played. I mourn them as I mourn myself. Without him I am marooned here. In my dreams I am always marooned upon a deserted planet, awaiting the transport that will take me home. It is, perhaps, a dread peculiar to those of us who were born among the stars, born between planets and doomed forever to wander in their wake. But I am no less infuriated by my abandonment now than I was the first time. Dad, why did you leave me here?

    The planet is not merely deserted. It is a desert, its twin suns rising and setting with the rhythm of the tides. There are no tides here, only seas of sand. The heat assaults me in waves. The denizens of this place are either too cautious or too preoccupied to show themselves. There are canyons, caverns, crags, gorges; there are small scared creatures who scramble across my path; but above all there is time in abundance. Time to think, time to plan, time to fan the fires of my indignation until they smolder into a conflagration of righteous rage.

    Ahead, a dune rising gently out of the sand. With every step my feet sink deeper and it requires more effort to yank them out. I halt at the top.

    ?Dad!? I shout, my voice a knife in the stillness. ?I won?t let you get away with this!?

    And the dreamscape dissolves around me.

    I recall now that I have never seen Tatooine except in grainy holos, never allowed sand to trickle between my toes except on artificial beaches. Dad never thought to take me there ? not on a mission, not even on a vacation. When my cousins were ten they visited their father?s homeworld of Corellia; to no one?s surprise the whole trip went from ?vacation? to ?mission? in no time flat. Yet whatever the circumstances, they were able to reconnect with their heritage.

    For the first time I wonder at the source of my father?s reticence with respect to Tatooine. My father is hardly intimidating to look at ? it?s easy to be fooled by his kind blue eyes and easy, open countenance; even easier to be taken in by the absolute serenity he radiates through the Force. It?s easy to forget that he came of age in an era just as turbulent as our own. It?s easy to forget that Tatooine was my grandfather?s homeworld, too. By all accounts he was another young man bent on saving the galaxy one princess at a time.

    I used to think that I had been born too late. I was weaned on tales of my father?s heroism and my mother?s ruthless efficiency. There were more unauthorized biographies of my aunt than of any ten holovid stars combined, and oc
     
  17. mavjade

    mavjade It's so FLUFFY! Fanfic Manager star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Oh, Ben! :_|

    I can understand why he is upset with the Council. I would think they would be a little more understanding and have a little more respect, though I can see their side as well (to the public funeral).

    I'm really curious as to what he meant by he was going to see some one who understands??

    This was a great update and I'm very excited for more!! :D
     
  18. kataja

    kataja Jedi Master star 4

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    Wow!!! This is really intriguing!!! Most of all Luke's mysterious suicide (it that's what it is) of course but you really have managed to throw that into the midst of a boiling kettle! I do like FotJ but you bring the best of it up here! Can't wait to see where you're taking this!

    And wonderful, strong writing in the dream sequence. Loved Ben's musings!!!
    ?Dad!? I shout, my voice a knife in the stillness. ?I won?t let you get away with this!?
    That's perfectly Ben's voice - and I really wonder what he's going to do.

    Update soon!!!! [:D] [:D] :D

    PS I don't think Jaina's off character - people are different depending who they deal with and I think that her cousin would bring other sides of her out - and the circumstances certainly would!
     
  19. Zardi

    Zardi Jedi Youngling star 1

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    What a great story! While I hope Luke doesn't really die in FotJ, this does make an intriguing fanfic plot. Can't wait to see who Ben is going to see. Can you add me to the PM list?
     
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    whateveritis12 Jedi Knight star 3

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    Who does Ben think will understand? I'm putting my money on Vestara, only because she's the biggest name in FOTJ that you haven't used yet. But I think it's more likely going to be Cilghal. Kyp's also a good name considering he saw his brother die before his eyes.
     
  21. strwbrystarshine

    strwbrystarshine Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Wonderful story, very well-written1

    PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
     
  22. SithGirl132

    SithGirl132 Jedi Master star 4

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    *hugs Ben* Wow. I think your characterization of Jaina is quite good, considering that in such circumstances, most people are no longer themselves. And I'm very intrigued to learn what exactly happened to Luke. I wonder if Tatooine will come up again later in the story?
     
  23. Jaded_Girl

    Jaded_Girl Jedi Master star 4

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    Yay! PM and an update! [face_dancing]


    I don't think I could stand to reread the NJO nearly as many times.

    I couldn't stand to read most of them the first time... :p



    My focus tends to wander whenever the protocol droid?s ruminations veer into a miasma of self-recrimination worthy of a mystic, or a philosopher, or a certain type of Jedi Knight.

    *snort* Oh, he's so deliciously sardonic. ^_^



    Instead, I imagine the raw grief writ upon my uncle?s weathered face, the vulnerability exposed there by the of sudden collapse of one of the pillars upon which he built his life.

    Wow. That made me emotionally upset about Chewie's death all over again! Normally I'm more intellectually upset because of the change in storytelling tone that it represents. I guess "good job" is what I'm trying to say. :)



    In my dreams I am always marooned upon a deserted planet, awaiting the transport that will take me home. It is, perhaps, a dread peculiar to those of us who were born among the stars, born between planets and doomed forever to wander in their wake.

    [face_plain] Wow.



    When my cousins were ten they visited their father?s homeworld of Corellia; to no one?s surprise the whole trip went from ?vacation? to ?mission? in no time flat.

    It's in the genes. :D



    She paused. ?Is it bad that he?s lying there not two meters away and I?m trying to find the most politically expedient way of breaking the news to everyone??

    It's such a, well, fairly normal reaction. Awesome.



    ?My father believed that his willing death would ensure the survival of the Jedi Order.?

    Innnteresting. [face_thinking]



    If she was right, what did that make me guilty of ? one count of assisted suicide? Two counts of conspiracy to deprive the galaxy of its savior?

    I love the tangle of emotions laden in that sentence.



    ~?What did you mean earlier when you said you wouldn?t have known he was gone if you hadn?t seen it with your own eyes?... How did Uncle Luke die?? she pressed.
    ~"It doesn?t matter. I?m leaving.?
    ~?Where are you going??
    ~?To see someone who understands.?


    One: what could he possible mean by that? and Two: who is he going to see?

    SO... CURIOUS!!! :_|


    Excellent chapter! Up!
     
  24. Ice1605

    Ice1605 Jedi Master star 1

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    Wow! Another great chapter! I, too, am wondering who Ben is going to see...
    Thanks for the PM!
     
  25. pregnantpadme

    pregnantpadme Jedi Master star 4

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    I am so hooked.

    I love Ben's angst and I can't wait to see who he is going to see.

    I have a guess in mind... someone who knows a little something about pain and having to say goodbye to someone you love.

    Of course... I could be wrong.

    I could be very wrong.

    please add me to the PM list you've got going.

    And I want to see Hamner go down.

    I've never really liked him, and I still can't understand why Luke left him in charge.

    Should have handed the Order over to Leia... of course that would have prevented her and Han from galavanting around the galaxy.

    Elle

     
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