Before - Legends Mando, Poetry Thread (with translations) - 11/22: Aay'han

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by MsLanna, Jul 13, 2007.

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  1. celine

    celine Jedi Youngling star 2

    Sep 26, 2007
    Oooo...really loved the "remembering" poem. beautiful.
  2. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Erm, firstly to to those I had waiting so long. I am horribly bad at remembering to do author replies.[face_blush]

    Secondly: Thanks for the nomms![:D]

    w-righter - Thank you. I still want to write some more but it is a daunting task. So far, all attempts to actually 'learn' the language have failed.

    Ulic_Starwalker - Glad to be of help. If you ever get fluent, shot me a pm, I still need a beta-reader for these.;)

    DaenaBenjen42 - There are beginnings of more. But not enough words ending on 'ai' so - I'm working on it.

    celine - It is pretty with the short lines that even rhyme. I try to rhyme longer lines now, but it is difficult. there no Mando-rhyme-dictionary yet.[face_plain]
  3. Zandoran_Celix

    Zandoran_Celix Jedi Knight star 5

    Feb 16, 2005
    Beautiful! I love this!
  4. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Thank you Zandoran. They are kinda fun to do. You know, the hair-ripping, nail-chewing kind of fun that ends in 'headdesk:repeat'. ;)

    Finally, I got another one. *headdesk: end for now*;)

    ~ dar gai ~

    ni kar'tayli gar aaray chur naysol ashi gai
    Tracyn be sur'haaise hetti ni range dayn
    chaaj asyk runi bal ka'tra drashaa
    vurel dralshy'a cirys sa tra, dha sa ca

    ni kar'tayli gar gai bal an bic aarayse
    kyr'amu chur pirun ni de werde o'r sur'haaise
    Ni slana chaaj'yc bal 'chaashya
    mar'eyir su tome ni ures gar

    Meh kar'ta kyrayc, vaii kovid ven slana tion?
    Ni kar'taylir ne copaani, shi shekemi ni beten

    ~ untitled (without name) ~

    I know your pain under too many other names
    The fire of your eyes burns me to ash
    Distance between heart and soul is growing
    Ever stronger cold like ice dark as night

    I know your name and all it's pains
    I'm drowned (killed under water), by the darkness in your eyes
    I travelled so far and further
    Finding that even with you, I am without you

    When the heart is dead, where does the head go?
    I don't want to know, just follow my sigh
  5. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Okay, it was not that great, I agree. But this is wonderful.[face_love]
    It might not be really 'Mando' but more about clones and their supporters, few as they are. [face_love] them all.

    An solus

    Ner vode an cuy solus,
    cuy ori'shya soletar
    - An solus -
    Souls troan, jorad solus
    Solus kandosii kar'ta
    - An solus -

    ner vode cuy kotyc,
    mesh'la kyramla,
    - sa solus -
    buurenaare be ciryc
    buurenaar nadala
    - sa solus -

    Ner vode moti sa solus
    Draar Trattok'o
    -nu solus -
    Ori'shya kando solus
    yaimpa enteyo
    -val solus -

    ni cuy ti ner vode
    ashi troan, jorad ashi
    - su solus -
    kandosii kar'tase
    ti val dar aruetii
    - an solus -

    All one

    My brothers are all one
    are too many to count
    - all one -
    One face, one voice
    one indomitable heart
    - all one -

    my brothers are strong
    beautifully deadly
    - as one -
    storms of cold
    storm of heat
    - as one -

    My brothers stand as one
    never fall
    - not one -
    each one is more than important
    must come home
    - each one -

    I am with my brothers
    other face, other voice
    - still one -
    indomitable hearts
    with them no longer a stranger
    - all one -

    There's several pics with the poem and a trooper. I could just not decide wich was most pretty.[face_blush]

    [li] [link=]Stormie Version[/link][/li]
    [li] [link=]Clone Version[/link][/li]
    [li] [link=]White Version[/link][/li]
  6. NYCitygurl

    NYCitygurl Manager Emeritus star 9 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Jul 20, 2002
    Wow, that's so beautiful!!
  7. Svebor

    Svebor Jedi Youngling star 1

    Nov 13, 2005
    Awesomness!!! :D

    I tried reading it out loud and it sounds very cool. :)
    Great job! =D=
  8. Aludra_Jinnobi

    Aludra_Jinnobi Jedi Master star 1

    Aug 14, 2008
    I don't know the first thing about Mando, but these are beautiful poems. :)
  9. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Thank you NYCitygurl. It just poured onto the paper so to speak.[face_blush]

    Svebor - I try to make them sound pretty. It's not always easy but certainly worth it. Here's an [link=]audio version of Vercopa[/link]. (You need a quickplayer, I think...)

    Aludra_Jinnobi - Time to do some catching up then, huh?;) Glad you enjoy them anyway.:)


    Ni copani kar'tayli
    Sal be gar kar'ta
    Kaab be gar runi
    Haat be gar gai

    Ni copani aala
    Tigaan be gar gane
    Mureyca be gar haal
    Tracyn be gar sur'haaise

    Vercopa vencuyot
    Ni copaani 'mhi'
    nuhur ratiin copaani
    vercopa copad

    meg'ratiin ni copaani
    gar ru'dinu
    gar ru'gana
    bal ni copaani -
    - gar -

    Darasuum, darasuum
    A'miit cuy
    Darasuum, darasuum
    Gar copaani


    I want to know
    The colour of your heart
    The sound of your soul
    The truth of your eyes

    I want to feel
    The touch of your hands
    The kiss of your breath
    The fire of your eyes

    I wish a future
    I want 'us'
    I want good times forever
    I wish for desire

    Whatever I want
    You gave
    You had
    And I want
    - you -

    Forever, forever
    Is but a word
    Forever, forever
    I want you

  10. Dar_manda

    Dar_manda Jedi Master star 3

    Dec 27, 2007
    MsLanna, these are absolutely beautiful!
  11. azizah

    azizah Jedi Master star 1

    Sep 4, 2006
    These are beautiful, especially the end of Dar'tome.

    The audio was amazing. Truly wonderful and unique stuff.


  12. Svebor

    Svebor Jedi Youngling star 1

    Nov 13, 2005
    Audio version sounds better. I now realize that I used to mispronounce certain things. [face_blush] But its always good to learn. :D

    Dar'tome/Separated is very nice. =D= :)
  13. Robimus

    Robimus Jedi Grand Master star 5

    Jul 6, 2007
    So this is where your hiding the poetry :p I need to get out of my era a bit more often:)
  14. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Thank you Dar.[:D]

    azizah - I always intend to do more things audio and then I get distracted by - oooh shiny![face_hypnotized] Glad you like them.:)

    Svebor - Don't trust my pronunciation, I'm just a hibir myself.;) But it is nice to say it out loud for a change. Makes it all more real.:D

    Oya, Rob. What do you mean 'hide'? It's all in plain sight.:p
  15. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Just a short rhyme for the learning of the Mando numers from one to ten. [face_blush]

    Solus, t'ad, bal ehn, cuir;
    the first four numbers you have here.
    Rayshe'a, resol, e'tad, sh'ehn
    leave you a tad short of ten.
    She'cu gets you on a roll
    and with ta'raysh you reach the goal.

    Note of interest: sh'ehn is actually a t'ad short of ten. 8-} :-B [face_blush]
  16. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Welcome to the sing-along. :p
    I am sure you know the song, though I hope it won't be stuck in your heads as long as in mine. Let the decimation begin....

    Ta'raysh kih jetiise

    Ta'raysh kih jetiise
    Olaro Manda'yaim
    Solus ramaana be chaab
    Ogir cuy she'cu

    She'cu kih jetiise
    Be'slana val me'sen
    Solus shuku videk kemi
    Ogir cuy sh'ehn

    Sh'ehn kih jetiise
    Jetii'kad pirimmu
    Solus hokaani dar'kovid
    Ogir cuy e'tad

    E'tad kih jetiise
    Slana o'r tapcafe
    Solus kebbu pirur gal
    Ogir cuy resol

    Resol kih jetiise
    Epa tiingilar
    Solus eku 'kay ramaana
    Ogir rayshe'a

    Rayshe'a kih jetiise
    Tsikado akaanir
    Solus digu haalur
    Ogir cuy cuir

    Cuir kih jetiise
    N'haa'tayli aru'e
    Solus kyr'amu jare'la
    Ogir cuy jii ehn

    Ehn kih jetiise
    Urci Mando'ad
    Kaysh kyr'mau pakod
    Ogir cuy jii t'ad

    T'ad kih jetiise
    Akaani ori'dush
    Mando'ad kyr'amu bintar
    Ogir cuy n'solus
    Ogir cuy naasad

    Ten little Jedi

    Ten little Jedi
    Come to Mandalore
    One dies of fear
    There are nine

    Nine little Jedi
    Exit their ship
    One breaks his neck walking
    There are eight

    Eight little Jedi
    Ignite their lightsabers
    One gets beheaded
    There are seven

    Seven little Jedi
    Go into a tapcafe
    One tried to drink our ale
    There are six

    Six little Jedi
    Eat tiingilar*
    One chokes to death
    There are five

    Five little Jedi
    Prepare to fight
    One forgets to breathe
    There are four

    Four little Jedi
    Don't see the enemy
    One dies stupidly
    There are only three

    Three little Jedi
    Meet a Mando
    He kills one
    There are only two

    Two little Jedi
    Fight very bad
    The Mando kills them both
    There is not one
    There are none

    *blisteringly spicy Mandalorian casserole
  17. Darthrevan4ever

    Darthrevan4ever Jedi Master star 6

    May 3, 2008
    =D= really good
  18. Dar_manda

    Dar_manda Jedi Master star 3

    Dec 27, 2007
    [face_laugh] Those Jedi are so dumb!
  19. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Thank you Darthrevan.:D

    Dar - Yes they are. Too easy to kill althogether.[face_laugh]
  20. Mr-Fett

    Mr-Fett Jedi Youngling star 1

    Mar 11, 2009
    That is really intense... How did you learn Mando?
  21. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Glad you like them, Mr. Fett.
    How I leran Mando? The hard way: flash cards, more flash cards, and trying to spontaneously translate everything.
    Also working on a course book for Moando is great help. :D

    The next one, I did with almost no looking up. I am starting to get the hang of this language. [face_dancing]


    An mhi me'dinui
    An mhi ru'cuy
    An mhi lise ven'cuy
    Vencuyot ve'naasta
    Cuun vercopa
    Ba'slana cuun sa ta'd
    Mhi ru'cuy solus
    Tome'tayl moti acyk cuun
    Ke'dinui ni jorbe
    Solus jorbe
    Tion'jor meg staabi cuy

    Ni copaani ruyot tug'yc
    An ru'cuy staabi
    Nu'copaani nakar'tuur
    Dar gar,
    Mhi cuy shi tome'tayl


    All we share
    All we were
    All we can be
    The future destroys
    Our dream
    Leaves us as two
    We were one
    Memory stands between us
    Give me a reason
    One reason
    Why this should be right

    I want the past
    Everything was right
    I don't want tomorrow
    Without you
    When 'we' is just a memory

  22. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    Ge'sol Laar

    Ni nu'lise laarari gar laar
    Ni nu'partayli gar gai
    Ni vercopa ni cuy ti gar
    Gar ru'cuy petir ner sur'haai

    Bal draar mhi t'ad ven'urci tug'yc
    Ca'nara nu'cuy bat cuun eso
    Tome'cuy nu'cuy ret'yc
    Bal ni cuy ba'slanar ge'sol

    Jorcu ge'sol be'ner
    Bal ni ne'lise partaylir gar gai
    Jorcu ashi ge'sol be'ner
    Cuy shi ge'sol laar

    Half Song

    I cannot sing your song
    I don't remember your name
    I want to be with you
    You were the centre of my eye

    And never will we two meet again
    Time was not on our side
    Being together is not possible
    And I am left half

    Because half of me
    Marched far away*
    And I don't remember your name
    Because the other half of me
    Is just half a song

  23. Ulic_Starwalker

    Ulic_Starwalker Jedi Youngling star 2

    Jul 3, 2006
    Awesome, Mando-poetry is back! :D

    LMAO at "Ten Little Jedi"! [face_laugh] Priceless! =D= :D

    Last 2 poems are really beautiful, especially Tome'tayl. There's certain power about it. And it sopunds quite cool when pronounced outloud, esp the first bit.
    Great work. :)
  24. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005
    It's never really gone, Ulic.
    The frequency of the updates is dependent on my Mando Muse. He might have been on a holiday...;)
    I'm glad you like the Ten Little Jedi. It's a bit silly.
    It is difficult to make some bits sound in Mando. The parts that sound good, are usually those I made up directly in Mando without having to translate bits from English.[face_blush]


    Darasuum narise,
    - kebii'tra -
    Kebiin chur ni,
    - kyr'dar -
    Ke'tayli dayn gar gaan
    Tenn sur'haaise
    Mav kar'ta
    Bal cuun gaise

    Nayc kyr be'pirun
    - Ca'tra -
    Vencyuot cuun
    - Ne'tra -
    Ke'hiibi ner gaan
    Aala ni

    Ke'tayli ni!
    Gar cuy ner sho'cye
    Ner shereshoy
    Ke'tayli ni...


    Forever movement,
    blue sky
    Blues is under me,
    without end
    Hold out your hand
    Open eyes
    Free heart
    And our names

    No end of water
    Our future
    Take my hand
    Feel me

    Hold me!
    You are my ocean,
    My life
    Hold me...
  25. MsLanna

    MsLanna Jedi Master star 6

    Jul 8, 2005

    ni haa'tayli
    nu'cuy mhi

    ner kar'ta, mirshe, gaane

    a'meg ni haa'tayli lo gar sur'haaise
    werda, ca, prudiise
    ni copaani gar nuhunar tug'cy
    su meg ibac cuy


    I see
    about you
    about me
    there's no us

    but possibly?
    my heart, head and hands
    don't know

    but when I look into your eyes
    darkness, night, shadows
    I want you to laugh again
    even if that is
    without me

    *bittersweet perfect moment of mourning and joy
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