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Story [Marvel/Thor] The Lightning in the Storm

Discussion in 'Non Star Wars Fan Fiction' started by ThisIsMe1138, Dec 22, 2018.

  1. ThisIsMe1138

    ThisIsMe1138 Chosen One star 6

    Jun 26, 2018
    Title: The Lightning in the Storm
    Author: ThisIsMe
    Fandom: Marvel/Thor movies
    Genre: Angst/Poem-ish/AU
    Characters: Loki & Thor
    Summary: The result of me feeling like writing some kind of AU in study hall... which turned into an oddly poetic "If Thor killed Loki despite still loving him as his brother"... I'm sorry guys...
    Notes: Not really sure how I feel about this... it's like a mix between a poem and a story and it's a little strange. It was also an odd experiment with not specifically saying either Thor or Loki's names.... but whatever, enjoy if you can ;)
    *NOT "Thorki" or anything like that, brotherly relationship only....
    Disclaimer: Yup Marvel ain't mine...

    The Lightning in the Storm

    Lightning flashed. Thunder rumbled.
    A hammer whirled through the storm,
    Searching for its owner.
    Quiet in the night, green eyes faded into dull, dying grey; a young laugh lost its ring, never heard again
    Outside the minds of those it haunted.
    The lightning made way for the dark, moonless sky, but the air still cracked with draining adrenaline.
    Two hearts had been beating,
    Both in fear; one in horror.
    For when the thunder rumbled off into the distance,
    Only one heartbeat remained.

    There had been no screams.
    No tears, no pleading.
    No empty promises or vengeful threats.
    His expression soft in paling death, he didn’t seem angry.
    Or hurt.
    Or betrayed.
    As if he’d seen it coming all along.

    In the eyes of the killer, twin storms swirled.
    Cloudy, teary, lost.
    A mirror of the whirlwind that raged and flew around him.
    It wasn’t murder, he assured himself,
    He hadn’t had a choice.
    But it didn’t help, and the droplets fell harder,
    Dripping together from the leaves and down his cheeks.

    In the storms, there were oceans,
    But he was too afraid to blink,
    Dreading the feelings that danced behind his eyelids.
    Years would play, in one half of a second.
    Of joy
    Of sorrow
    Of highs, and of lows,
    Of victorious triumph
    And heartrending blows.
    Of the hundreds of lifetimes they’d been through together
    As comrades, as best friends.
    And as something better.

    It was a strong world, used far too casually in the human world.
    To them it defined such an offhand matter –
    Two men born of the same womb,
    Two men sharing of the same blood.

    But to the two souls alone in the middle of the storm,
    One dead; one alive,
    A brother meant so much more than just that.
    The term spoke of an unfathomable bond,
    Regardless of parentage, of status; of inheritance or alliance.
    It was the title of two warrior who fought together,
    Whether against a foreign army,
    A deadly concept,
    Or faced down devastation together with the force of their joint determination.

    It referred to two men who knew each other’s’ strengths
    And each other’s weaknesses.
    Who had congratulated the other on their greatest accomplishment
    And comforted them in their time of trial.

    It went so far beyond any physical bond,
    And in the end, when one went down,
    The other suffered too.

    So where his fallen brother’s face was peaceful in death,
    Tears streaked down his anguished own.
    He’d killed his brother without marring his body,
    But there was a gaping hole in his own heart,
    And an incurable ache in his chest.

    He knew he’d made he world safer,
    Protected millions of lives,
    But through his tear-stained, blurry haze,
    The universe seemed such a darker place,
    Without his brother by his side.


    This is my first Marvel fic that I've posted; let me know what you think! :)
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  2. WarmNyota_SweetAyesha

    WarmNyota_SweetAyesha Chosen One star 8

    Aug 31, 2004
    @ThisIsMe1138 you evoke so many tangled emotions: of battling, of defeat, but running through it all, the unbreakable bond of brothers, all with the striking imagery/comparison with a literal storm of thunder and lightning. =D= I like the poignant lines about how the survivor is devastated and anguished. @};-
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  3. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

    Jun 29, 2004
    Whew! That was a painful, brutal read, but lovely for its lyricism. I especially loved the last verse. Through everything, Thor has just wanted his brother back, especially since he's matured to really appreciate what they had. But now that's not possible. :(

    Excellent work, even if it hurt! ;) =D=
  4. pronker

    pronker Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Jan 28, 2007
    When I think of Marvel, I think of angsty heroes like Spiderman and eternally breaking up and getting back together teams like the Fantastic Four and the Avengers. Thor, at least the last time I read any of his comics, seemed to possess a sunnier nature. This fic brings him into the Marvel fold and the imagery of "an unfathomable bond" shows the bond broken with the best of intentions and the saddest of outcomes. Satisfying fic, way to go, author!:bluesaber: