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Saga - ST My take on Episode IX - The Rise of Skywalker

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by JABoomer, May 6, 2020.

  1. gizkaspice

    gizkaspice Jedi Master star 3

    Nov 27, 2013
    Happy ending! And love how at the end Rey is up to something....[face_thinking] Great work on this and an interesting take on the TRoS!
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  2. JABoomer

    JABoomer Jedi Master star 3

    Oct 23, 2009
    Thanks! The idea was to setup 15-20 years later, where Rey is the Jedi Grand Master, the Jedi temple is Jabba's former palace on Tatooine, Finn is Chief of State and Poe Chief of the Defense Force of the Galactic Alliance.

    Question for you and @Cowgirl Jedi 1701, some of the paragraphs in the later chapters got large. Were they too big, or still manageable?
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  3. gizkaspice

    gizkaspice Jedi Master star 3

    Nov 27, 2013
    Rey being the Jedi Grand Master is awesome.

    Generally, you should start a new paragraph when you move on to a new point or idea. For example, if the paragraph is about one character's thoughts, it's fine if it becomes large provided it's the same idea. So it's not so much about the length, but depends what the paragraph is about. That helps to break things up for easier reading. Hope that helps!
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  4. Cowgirl Jedi 1701

    Cowgirl Jedi 1701 Jedi Grand Master star 5

    Dec 21, 2016
    It wasn't a wall of text, so I guess it was okay. That said, it was a sufficiently well written story that I want paying too much attention to the formatting.
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  5. JediMaster_Jen

    JediMaster_Jen Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Jun 3, 2002
    Awesome re-imagining of The Rise of Skywalker!=D= Really enjoyed all the subtle and not-so subtle changes you made to craft a much better story than we got on screen, in my opinion anyway. But I have to admit, I was hoping for a Reylo ending. [face_blush]

    Will we get to see you build on this last sentence with a new story?[face_praying]

    Love the sound of this. @};-

    You wrote a great story from start to finish. ^:)^ Well done.
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  6. JABoomer

    JABoomer Jedi Master star 3

    Oct 23, 2009

    ...and thank you for taking the time to read it!

    Haha! That seems to be a common sentiment within the FanFic pages!

    I have to say I agree with the decision to kill Kylo/Ben for a few reasons:

    1) Disney bungled the sequel trilogy so badly, I didn't want to have to compare Ben with Jacen anymore than I already do.
    2) It makes for a clean ending to the 'Skywalker Saga', now that arguably C-3PO is Anakin's sole "living" descendant.
    3) I'm not a huge advocate of the Prequels, but it gives further proof to the Chosen One concept, because it was Anakin's offspring who trained Rey, and Anakin's grandson who helped Rey bring balance to the Force. So that in a way, his whole life (and the life of his family) was devoted to the prophesy.

    Ha! I have no plans to honestly. I haven't thought out any detailed story ideas for this, some initial thoughts were (other than a very general sense of starting a new Jedi academy):

    -Could broom boy be Rey's first student?
    -Are the B'omarr Monks still living there?

    I would really enjoy a Legends version 2 with this arrangement!
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  7. JABoomer

    JABoomer Jedi Master star 3

    Oct 23, 2009
    Before this thread recedes into the hinterlands of the fan fic forum, I’d like to mention a few things.

    I’ve updated all chapters to match my latest edit. Changes were mostly related to breaking up large paragraphs but I’m still finding past tense verbs to change. I also switched Leia’s lightsaber to a blue colour.

    It’s very difficult to write in present tense. Even when writing the last chapters, I would get into the flow of writing in past tense (without realizing), and then have to change everything while editing. Writing present tense as if watching a movie was challenging, but it also kept things simple. I didn’t have to explore character thoughts or explain anything that wouldn’t be obvious when watching this scrip put to film.

    The journey of writing this story has been very enjoyable. I would often enjoy thinking of new story elements throughout the day or be excited to find time to sit down and write. Although I had not written fiction since junior high, I feel like I’ve honed my writing skills with technical documents at work, and I quickly got into a groove.

    The writing, and even more so the editing, took a lot of time. I can guarantee I’ve spent over 200 hours working on the novella. I finished writing in mid-June, but the editing literally never stops. I’ve got the story to a place where I’m satisfied with it, I’d estimate there’s only about 20 minor changes I might make if I went through it one more time.

    Although writing this was never a burden, and I often found it relaxing, I don’t think I’ll be able to continue writing on a regular basis, life is just too busy. I will remember the fond memories of writing this story, in case I need an escape in the future. I will try and make my way back to this forum from time to time!

    My initial two viewings of TROS provided strong motivation to write, as I was determined to fix the story haha. I recently watched TROS again, and I enjoy it more each time I watch it. I think that’s just because the plot holes aren’t jarring at this point. I still much prefer my own version.

    I got what I wanted out of the project, which is a head canon version of TROS that wraps up the trilogy and saga in a satisfying way. I had no expectations for posting it, although you always hope people will like your work and it will gain some traction on the forum.

    Thank you to anyone who took the time to read some of my work. Special thanks go out to @Cowgirl Jedi 1701, @gizkaspice, and @JediMaster_Jen for taking the time to read my story and provide feedback.

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  8. JABoomer

    JABoomer Jedi Master star 3

    Oct 23, 2009
    Haha, boy was I wrong. After reading Rae Carson's novelization I decided it was a good time to revisit my story. Minor changes only, but there were many of them - only two printed pages made it through my reading unscathed from the red ink! Anyways, everything updated now in case anyone reads the story in the future.