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Beyond - Legends Once a Warrior [TUF ?Missing Moment? ? Tahiri/Kunra?!]

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Thrawn McEwok, Sep 7, 2004.

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  1. Thrawn McEwok

    Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare star 6 VIP

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    YK: I will. I'm going to try and go over all the PM's we sent back and forth again to get my mind working :)

    Aye - let me know! :D

    Hmmm :confused: You could talk about how the aged scars look differently. The way they turn really white and stuff.

    Sorry, I meant that metaphorically... there should be some scar-tissue, gristle and marbling to the meat of a YV-POV 'fic... it needs texture, variation, and maybe some parts that are tougher and don't taste as good...

    Tahi: Yummy - that was so delicious. I don't have time to comment on all the bits I liked - ie all of it LOL - at present, so will pop back later. :)

    [face_blush] Thanks! :D

    Though, um, see above! [face_laugh]

    Vc: That was great, TE!

    :cool: Thanks! :D

    - The Imperial Ewok
     
  2. Jags_Scoundrel

    Jags_Scoundrel Jedi Master star 4

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    Flashbackwards, mostsly! [face_mischief]

    :cool: :D

    Don't go giving me ideas! [face_laugh]

    Yeah, you have such a hard time coming up with plot bunnies on your own! :p

    Actually, I could see one or two places that might fit... :D

    If anyone could do it, I know that you could.

    but Scoundrel is looking thoughtful and interested, so she might find the inspiration herself...

    :rolleyes: I have a hard enough time writing things that I can actually picture! [face_laugh]
     
  3. YodaKenobi

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    Sorry, I meant that metaphorically... there should be some scar-tissue, gristle and marbling to the meat of a YV-POV 'fic... it needs texture, variation, and maybe some parts that are tougher and don't taste as good...

    I know, I was being sarcastic :D
     
  4. Thrawn McEwok

    Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare star 6 VIP

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    Scoundrel: Yeah, you have such a hard time coming up with plot bunnies on your own! [face_laugh]

    That's what I'm saying! :_| :mad:

    If anyone could do it, I know that you could. :D

    "Lying there beside her, tracing the lines of her silhouette with his eyes, Colonel Jagged Fel supposed that his Chiss upbringing had conditioned him to find blue skin sensuous and attractive...."

    :p [face_laugh]!

    [face_tired] I have a hard enough time writing things that I can actually picture! [face_laugh]

    I tell you what - we'll do this sentence about? [face_thinking]

    YK: I know, I was being sarcastic :D

    Gah! :D

    - The Imperial Ewok
     
  5. flowerbee

    flowerbee Jedi Knight star 5

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    [face_sick] Ewwwwwwww!
     
  6. Thrawn McEwok

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    [Just a quick little update to lead into the first flashback! ;D]

    I look at her, seeing her bite. She holds the ends of her skewer carefully between the pads of her thumbs and forefingers, but there?s something savage, carnivorous, and rather wonderful in the way she strips the meat with her teeth.

    I like that, the paradoxical combination of cultured elegance and animal grace, all at once carefully balanced and entirely natural, and more than either.

    She chews, experimentally, then nods.

    ?Eaten worse,? she says, reaching for the wine. ?Your cooking?s improved.?

    I smile back at her, and take a bite of my own drumstick. The meat doesn?t taste bad once you loose the automatic gag-reaction, and the sauce and the salt crust, improvised from stuff that survived in the back of the kitchen cupboard, helps disguise the fact it?s hawk-bat.

    Then again, my breakfast consisted of three raw granite slugs. Good protein source and a nice mineral taste. They wash down well with some of the Corellian ale that survived from Dad?s supplies.

    ?How did you find me?? I ask. I have questions too.

    ?Corran,? she says, smiling. "He thought there was something a little? odd about you."

    ?Yeah,? I grin, remembering. ?I was funking myself.?
     
  7. flowerbee

    flowerbee Jedi Knight star 5

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    'funking'? *looks it up* Oh...

    Interesting little bit.

     
  8. Thrawn McEwok

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    fb: 'funking'? *looks it up* Oh...

    :D [face_blush] ;)

    Interesting little bit.

    :cool: Thanks :D

    But no-one else seems to think so! :( [face_frustrated] :_|

    ;) [face_mischief]

    - The Imperial Ewok
     
  9. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    I do. :)

    I especially like this bit:
    I like that, the paradoxical combination of cultured elegance and animal grace, all at once carefully balanced and entirely natural, and more than either.
    More than the sum of her parts - ;)

    Also laughed at the hawk bat and granite slugs - are they like hoohoo grubs I wonder. :D

    What I was going to say about the previous post was that I really liked your use of the gaze - it being Tahiri's gaze of course. I especially liked the bit where she follows the track of his scar - there was something incredibly sensual about that. Of course that might have been because of the image of Anakin in his kilt. :D Whatever - that was a superb description as I could really see Tahiri's eyes tracing the scar line around his body. Great sexual tension there. :)
     
  10. Whitey

    Whitey Jedi Master star 6

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    *spits out drink* What the- :eek:

    Ewok: you sick, sick man. Nevertheless I will continue to read this. ;) :p
     
  11. Jaina_Solo_59

    Jaina_Solo_59 Jedi Master star 4

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    HawkBat! Grosss!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
  12. Lonewolf89

    Lonewolf89 Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Short, but sweet, Thrawn.

    I like that, the paradoxical combination of cultured elegance and animal grace, all at once carefully balanced and entirely natural, and more than either.

    I loved this bit. Excellent description. A nice look at Tahiri's personality, too. This was a good moment between the two of them, and I enjoyed Anakin's reflections.

    Then again, my breakfast consisted of three raw granite slugs. Good protein source and a nice mineral taste. They wash down well with some of the Corellian ale that survived from Dad?s supplies. :D

    ?How did you find me?? I ask. I have questions too.

    ?Corran,? she says, smiling. "He thought there was something a little? odd about you."


    Corran! ;)

    I'm looking forward to the next update!
     
  13. Thrawn McEwok

    Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare star 6 VIP

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    Tahi: I do. :)

    [face_blush] Thanks! :D

    I especially like this bit:
    I like that, the paradoxical combination of cultured elegance and animal grace, all at once carefully balanced and entirely natural, and more than either.
    More than the sum of her parts - :)

    :D Yes! [face_dancing]

    If anyone picked up on that, though, it would be you... ;)

    I assume Everyone has read Tahi's superb [link=http://boards.theforce.net/message.asp?topic=15635944]The Givin Poetic Theorem of Tahiri Veila[/link] by now...?

    Also laughed at the hawk bat and granite slugs - are they like hoohoo grubs I wonder. :D

    I was thinking of hawkbat as tasting like badly-shot and well-hung game (though the wild hawkbat of post-NJO Coruscant might taste more like goose) and granite slugs as something like land-based oysters, really... mineral taste, protien-packed, eaten raw, and gulped down with alcohol... :p

    What I was going to say about the previous post was that I really liked your use of the gaze - it being Tahiri's gaze of course.

    Well, who else's would it be? :confused: [face_mischief]

    I especially liked the bit where she follows the track of his scar - there was something incredibly sensual about that. Of course that might have been because of the image of Anakin in his kilt. :D

    [face_laugh]!

    Whatever - that was a superb description as I could really see Tahiri's eyes tracing the scar line around his body. Great sexual tension there. :)

    Thanks again! :D I'm glad someone saw that... I was worried I'd simply grossed everyone out... ;)

    Whitey: *spits out drink* What the- :eek:

    Ewok: you sick, sick man. Nevertheless I will continue to read this. ;) :p


    [face_laugh]

    **takes a bow**

    Honoured! :D

    J_S_59: HawkBat! Grosss!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    :p ;) :D

    Lw89: Short, but sweet, Thrawn.

    Yub yub! :D

    I loved this bit. Excellent description. A nice look at Tahiri's personality, too. This was a good moment between the two of them, and I enjoyed Anakin's reflections.

    [face_blush] Thank you! :cool:

    Corran! ;)

    Well, who else?

    I'm looking forward to the next update!

    Thanks again - I'll try to get it done soonish! :D

    - The Imperial Ewok
     
  14. SpeldoriontheBlended

    SpeldoriontheBlended Jedi Padawan star 4

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    [Insert comment here! :D ]
     
  15. Elena

    Elena Jedi Master star 3

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    Blended:

    Hah. And you say I've been corrupted...

    Elena
     
  16. Vongchild

    Vongchild Jedi Grand Master star 5

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    Am I supposed to say something besides *mr. burns fingers* excelent!
     
  17. Thrawn McEwok

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    Blended: [Insert comment here! :D]

    [face_laugh]

    Um...

    [...ditto? :p]

    Elena: Hah. And you say I've been corrupted...

    Oh, you have - just more subtly...

    EDIT: [link=http://boards.theforce.net/Beyond_the_Saga/b10477/17631212/]proof[/link]! :D

    Vc: Am I supposed to say something besides *mr. burns fingers* excelent!

    Well, you could stick something like "Quietly campaigning for Rishathra Rights" in your .sig, and encourage others to do the same? :confused:

    - The Imperial Ewok
     
  18. RK_Striker_JK_5

    RK_Striker_JK_5 Jedi Grand Master star 7

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    Hmm, like some others, I didn't realize you continued this.

    Saying that you writing the NJO would make it tolerable is a compliment, dude. Considering that typing what I really feel about that 19-book pile of bantha poodoo would get me banned, making it tolerable would be a good thing.

    So, the scarheads mutilated Anakin? The descriptions were quite...awesome. I could see the changes in my mind.

    Can we still unleash Alpha Red on the freaks, kill them and declare the series infinities?

    Sorry...
     
  19. Thrawn McEwok

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    Striker: Hmm, like some others, I didn't realize you continued this.

    That's okay... ;)

    Saying that you writing the NJO would make it tolerable is a compliment, dude. Considering that typing what I really feel about that 19-book pile of bantha poodoo would get me banned, making it tolerable would be a good thing.

    That's what this 'fic, and others like it, are meant to do! :D

    So, the scarheads mutilated Anakin? The descriptions were quite...awesome. I could see the changes in my mind.

    [face_blush] Thanks! :D

    And yes, they shaped him... less "mutilation" than "liberation", from their POV...

    Can we still unleash Alpha Red on the freaks, kill them and declare the series infinities?

    And where would the fun in that be? :p

    Sorry...

    Nahh... no worries...

    - The Imperial Ewok

     
  20. Jags_Scoundrel

    Jags_Scoundrel Jedi Master star 4

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    Slowly, but surely, catching up on replies! :D

    I look at her, seeing her bite. She holds the ends of her skewer carefully between the pads of her thumbs and forefingers, but there?s something savage, carnivorous, and rather wonderful in the way she strips the meat with her teeth.

    I like that, the paradoxical combination of cultured elegance and animal grace, all at once carefully balanced and entirely natural, and more than either.


    It sounds a bit odd to be complimenting someone on how they describe someone chewing meat . . . but that was just brilliant! :D

    Hawk-bat and granite slugs . . . yummy. [face_sick]

    Nice little post! Looking forward to more! :D
     
  21. Thrawn McEwok

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    Scoundrel: Slowly, but surely, catching up on replies! :D

    You'll actually be writing again soon!

    It sounds a bit odd to be complimenting someone on how they describe someone chewing meat . . . but that was just brilliant!

    [face_blush] :cool: Thanks! [face_laugh] :D

    Hawk-bat and granite slugs . . . yummy. [face_sick]

    Well, they're both based on foods that I like! :D [face_laugh]

    Nice little post! Looking forward to more! :D

    I'm just trying to iron out a glitch in the next post, and it'll be up! :D

    - The Imperial Ewok
     
  22. Thrawn McEwok

    Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare star 6 VIP

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    [So much for "ironing out a glitch". That was in November. :p

    [face_blush] Thanks for all your patience - you guys deserve an update! :D And massive thanks to everyone who nominated this 'fic in the Winter 'Fic Awards... [face_blush] :cool: :eek:

    I can't say I deserve all those noms - and that's before I get onto my doubts about whether this 'fic is a legitimate contender in any of the categiories it's entered in! :p Anakin and Kunra in the character categories?! "Best AU" for something canon-compliant?! [face_blush]

    But - thanks! :D [:D] :D]


    The light of our torches dances in the darkness of a dead world.

    Around us, the flames glance off canyon walls and cavern vaults ? dark, shiny and sap-smooth. Sometimes, the dark waters of a lurr canal wink back at us from the distance, or the torchlight catches a fleeting glimpse of living things that pulse and writhe in the darkness, twisted and distended in their niches amid the shadows.

    Around us, the foundations of the Yuuzhan Vong city grip into the planet, crushing the remains of the mid-level city into baulks of rubble, as cold and impenetrable and unseen as solid bedrock. Occasionally, though, you can still see a jagged fragment of metal embedded in the living flesh of Yuuzhan?tar ? and in most of these shards of sharp-edged wreckage, an imaginative mind can still find some engimatic suggestion of what they once were.

    My favourites are the relay pods where passing zealots have torn off the access pannels and left the fragile circuitry underneath untouched. I know of two that still have intact interface patches, and three with the glowing diodes of functioning powersources ? emergency batteries that might run for centuries, while the local processors wait patiently and quietly for a service droid to come along.

    Sometimes, a broken bulkead carries a broken inscription. G14. Service. Under Me. A capital esk that looks as if it was likely once part of a longer inscription. But I cannot complete these phrases. The wider pattern in which they once had meaning seems lost forever.

    At an intersection in the cargo-tunnel system, a proud inscription reading ?nsboro- is still visible in high relief beneath a veneer of dark coral. It might have once been a hoverrail depot. Further on, a neat white circle reminds me of the logo of a popular party-food manufacturer, suggesting that one of their factories once stood nearby. To complete the illusion, the glyphs of the company name have been daubed on the upper arch of the circle.

    The graffiti artist has even signed his work ? Phlebas, with a date well after the fall.

    But these may only be misreadings. These fragments look like shrapnel; keepsakes of a lover?s conquests, tucked away under scarred skin; or waste in the digestive tract of a monster that has snacked on a star cruiser. I wonder if there will come a time when people no longer even recognize them for what they are ? the last remnants of the three-dimensional world-map of durasteel and ferrocrete that we used to call Coruscant.

    I am one of the few now who can read the fragmented texts, and I read without any real understanding.

    None of my companions spares them so much as a glance.

    Unlike them, I suppose, the fragments have acquired personal meaning for me, fixed in their new contexts. I saw this world transformed with my own eyes. I even helped out, did my bit - when we first shifted our base to this sector, I worked undercover as a labourer for a klekket and a half, helping to shape the atmosphere-filtration systems beneath the Western Sea.

    But even here, where the Yuuzhan Vong have chosen to retain the existing features of Coruscant?s geography and infrastructure, there was no question of hauling out the rusted remains of the planetary iron lung and simply sliding the new in place.

    Instead, the lurrs, aerolungs and filter-tracts were physically rammed through the remains of the old machinery. The crushed wreckage was roughly shoved aside, impacted into the surrounding rubble, and sealed behind
     
  23. RK_Striker_JK_5

    RK_Striker_JK_5 Jedi Grand Master star 7

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    An excellent post, Thrawn. The descriptions of Coruscant's rape were very visceral and good.

    What's Corran doing there? And Anakin's part of the underground? Cool.

     
  24. RedGold

    RedGold Jedi Master star 4

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    Finally finished this,

    I'm actually enjoying it so far.

    Um, you okay Ewok?

    Breathe... remember to breathe!!
     
  25. Daughterofflame

    Daughterofflame Jedi Padawan star 4

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    I was like some of the others. I figured this was gonna be a one-poster. *smacks forehead* I should have known better. I'm not sure you've ever done a one-poster...

    Great job so far. You've got me twisted into knots trying to figure out how Anakin and Kunra can be the same. I guess we'll all find out eventually. Could I possibly beg for an update?

    ~*~Austyn
     
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