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Beyond - Legends Pilot Song - a poem for Wedge. Author thank you message - 7/31

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Tahi, May 21, 2006.

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  1. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Title: Pilot Song
    Author: Tahi
    Genre: Poem
    A/N: The reference to the scene from Wedge's childhood is based on his biography in the Rogue Squadron comic series profile edition, and to a certain extent to the first scene in The Phantom Affair.

    Thanks for clicking! :)


    [b]Pilot Song[/b]
    (For Wedge)

    It was one of those days that live forever:
    the hills, lush and green, folding endless
    into a distance as huge as the galaxy;
    the air earthy, sweetening the palette
    with the aroma of mountain grass
    moist and cleansed by the morning dew.
    And he, a boy, growing sturdy and strong
    lavished, cherished by his native sun.

    It was the simple joy of the moment:
    the warm pelt of the thak beneath him,
    the pitch and roll beat of hoof on turf
    and he, swaying with the shared rhythm -
    a song of union between boy and beast
    and land borne buoyant on the wings
    of dreams. And his spirits soaring,
    and the adoring world falling at his feet.

    He still hears the song sometimes, but
    it's different now; no longer simple.
    The melody is more haunting, layered
    with semi-tones of loss and regret.
    And the eyes that gazed guileless
    into the cathedral dome of the sky
    have discovered the abyss, and learned
    the warrior's guise of worn indifference.

    But the boy is not gone, not altogether.
    He catches him sometimes beckoning
    from behind the face in the mirror -
    senses him creeping through the chinks
    in his armoured heart to ride lordly
    his dominion from hills to sky and beyond
    to the glitter and sweep of stars . . .

    where his spirit flies on wings of steel
    and the galaxy rejoices at his feet.

    ~Tahi~
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  2. Jade_Pilot

    Jade_Pilot Jedi Master star 5

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    Oh my goodness. This is wonderful!!!!


    "He catches him sometimes beckoning
    from behind the face in the mirror -
    senses him creeping through the chinks
    in his armoured heart to ride lordly
    his dominion from hills to sky and beyond
    to the glitter and sweep of stars . . . "


    Just beautiful. Bravo! =D=
     
  3. Thrawn McEwok

    Thrawn McEwok Co-Author: Essential Guide to Warfare star 6 VIP

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    Tahi: [face_love] That was beautiful!

    I can see the basic shape, of course - the way you evoke the innocence of youth, and complicate it with experience, but still, subtly, retain the clear-eyed optimism...

    It's very true, and - of course! - very Star Wars... suffice to say, I loved the poem, and I'll hopefully have more to say when I can sort it straight in my head...

    Brilliant, though... :D

    - The Imperial Ewok
     
  4. BrentusofGath

    BrentusofGath Jedi Padawan star 4

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    Very fitting and wonderful.

    And I thought all you could write was comedy. ;)

    Bad Brentus, bad!
     
  5. Maggy

    Maggy Jedi Master star 4

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    Tahi:

    that?s just awesome :D =D=

    like how Wedge sees as a glimps what boy he was once

    - Mags

     
  6. FelsGoddess

    FelsGoddess Game Host star 5 VIP - Game Host

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    Very very good, Master. Excellent tone. :)
     
  7. oldjedinurse

    oldjedinurse Jedi Padawan star 4

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    What an excellent expression of Wedge's character!

    I love the echoes of his boyhood dreams in his adult life. Beautiful, just beautiful ... as always!

    oldj
     
  8. YodaKenobi

    YodaKenobi VIP star 6 VIP

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    Unbelievable, Tahi =D= That was so beautiful! *In awe* You use such vivid descriptions in here and the choice of words tickles the ear just right.

    This was my favorite section:

    He still hears the song sometimes, but
    it's different now; no longer simple.
    The melody is more haunting, layered
    with semi-tones of loss and regret.
    And the eyes that gazed guileless
    into the cathedral dome of the sky
    have discovered the abyss, and learned
    the warrior's guise of worn indifference.


    Lovely.

    I also liked the way you relate it back to Wedge seeing his face in the mirror and finding glimpses of the boy he once was. I'll have to check out that comic now, I'm curious [face_thinking]

    Fantastic work as usual :D You're certainly a gifted poet, but we've all known that for a long time ;)
     
  9. Knight_Aragorn

    Knight_Aragorn Jedi Master star 4

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    Wow, this was amazing, Tahi. Wedge is so right here, and the flow and tone of the poem is just stunning. Wedge's joy in flight is tangible, even through the hardships he's endured as a soldier. You've embodied that so well here... I love it. Well done. =D= :D
     
  10. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Thanks so much for the lovely feedback, everyone. I'll post proper replies as soon as I can. :)
     
  11. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Jade_Pilot
    Thanks. :) Lovely to meet a new reader.

    Just beautiful. Bravo!
    [curtsies] My pleasure. ;)

    Thrawn
    Yep - I always see Wedge as retaining his belief in innocence even when he sees nothing but loss all around him. And I think that there are times when he still just wants to glory in the thrill of flying because he still enjoys the essential purity of the experience. :)

    Brentus
    LOL There's comedy - and then there's comedy. ;)

    Maggy
    Thanks. :) I'm very fond of Wedge.

    Goddess
    [waves] Great to see you - and thanks for the feedback on the tone. [:D]

    ojn
    Thanks for that. I'm glad it rang true as a reflection of Wedge's character. :) It's easy to get carried away and use the wrong image in a poem and ruin the effect.

    Yoda
    the choice of words tickles the ear just right
    Hey - I like that phrase. :D That's just what I like to think of the poem doing.

    The Dark Horse series of X-Wing Rogue Squadron comics were great IMO. I have most of them in graphic novel form. The Phantom Affair is number 2 in the series, and it has wonderful art work. There's a little section at the start that talks about how a child's view of the world is radically altered by experience - and it's the look of wonder in the child's (I've always read this as being Wedge) eyes that I was trying to capture in the poem.

    Thanks for the lovely feedback.

    K_A
    Thanks for the feednack about the tangible feel. I'm glad that sense of Wedge's feelings about flying came through. It's also good to hear that Wedge comes over credibly in the poem. :) Thanks again.
     
  12. thusspakezarathustra

    thusspakezarathustra Jedi Youngling star 1

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    I dabble in a bit of poetry writing so it's nice to see poetry here. I like the structure with the 8 line stanzas and the half rhyme holding it all together - a lot of what I'd call internal rhyme, too. :) And then the last stanza works like a finale in a musical piece - which is fitting as the poem is a "song". :) Fits Wedge like a pilot's glove.
     
  13. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Yay! Hi, Zara. Fancy meeting you here. LOL

    Seriously thanks for the ?up? and the feedback of course. I see you?re finding your way around here. Told you it was a fun place.

    (To my friends and readers ? Zarathustra is a co-worker who, I discovered, is a closet Star Wars fan. Give her a wave when you see her around.)
     
  14. LianaMara

    LianaMara Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    I've never seen the particular X-Wing comic that inspired this poem, Tahi, but thanks to your beautiful imagery ... I can picture the young Wedge, and then the memories fulfilled in the experiences of older Wedge. It's gorgeous. :)

    (I'll have to share it with my sister tomorrow.)
     
  15. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Yay - good to see you Li. And thanks. :) Glad you liked the imagery as that's a feature I enjoy playing with. ;)

    Is your sister an X-wing pilot fan?
     
  16. LianaMara

    LianaMara Jedi Grand Master star 4

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    You're welcome! I love when your poems are built around physical imagery - everything seems so alive, and tangible. :)

    She's a bigger X-Wing fan than me; she has all the novels minus one of the Stackpole ones, plus a few of the graphic novels. I also think she's one of the few people who have listened to all the Wraith Squadron novels on audio tape. Her one-mindedness towards that series puts me to shame. ;)

    (I found your email stuck in a folder again, so I'll shoot off a reply tomorrow. [face_mischief] )
     
  17. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Ha ha - you have folders living lives of their own there. :D Like the Sorceror's Apprentice with his broomsticks.

    Well I love playing with imagery as I said. It's so satisfying.

    Ah - I love those X-wing graphic novels. :) The art is in some cases superb.
     
  18. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Hey thanks for the nominations guys. :) Much appreciated. Wedge says thanks, too. LOL
     
  19. Tahi

    Tahi Jedi Knight star 5

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    Thank you all so much for voting for this poem in the SFFA. It won Best Poem. :) Much appreciated, and a very nice start to the week.
     
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