~~Playing with Minds (JA)~~

it wasn't a stupid ending at all!! I'm just happy that Qui had the sense to decline it, and the Council enough to allow him!

This is a wonderful story Gimpy, and I'm bummed that it's over. But now that it's over, you can start on something else! I look forward to it!

 

Not a stupid ending at all, Gimpy. I'm just glad to see that our boys will have some time to their selfs...goodness knows they need it after what you put them through ^_^

I can't wait for the new story and, hey, if you need help with a title I can try to help.

Another great story and I look forward to more!

 

That was a wonderful ending to a beautiful story! Great job =)

 

No, it wasn't stupid. That was an excellent ending, you resolved the story very well. Also, the fact that Obi-Wan had still to recovery all his memories really added to it. Your portrayal of the Council did as well. Thanks for sharing such a great story with us, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your stories!

 

Gimpy,
Overall, I'd say pretty good. To be totally honest though, the last couple of posts seemed a bit rushed. The attention to detail was not always there to the level it was earlier in the story. I would suggest more on the thoughts and feelings of the central characters, in this case Qui-gon and especially Obi-wan. You did this very well early on but the detail seemed to fade in and out the longer the story went.

I realize how much effort you put into your stories and you should be commended. This was, overall, an excellent Star Wars adventure. Thanks! -Rilian

 

Thanks for all the wonderful comments, everybody!! And Rilian, thank you very much for being so honest, I will be sure to work on that!

 

I liked the line where Obi-Wan's laughter is like a bright beam of sunlight splashing over Qui-Gon. Beautiful! I'm also glad that Qui-Gon refused the mission. He knows his Padawan better than the Council does! I'm sad this excellent story is over. I would have liked to see more, especially another scene where Obi-Wan can't remember something or someone and Qui-Gon has to remind him. But I'm looking forward to your next story.

 

oohhhhh i looooved the ending!!! it was great!!! Lovely story!!!

 

awwww its over?
*sniff sniff*
that was a great story Gimpy!!!!!!
you did a great job.....
I'm just sad its over.....
CAN'T WAIT FOR YOUR NEXT STORY!

 

Thanks for the replies, all!! Actually, I'm hoping to have the next story up in a day or two, possibly even later tonight depending on when I get some feedback on the title from a friend. Thank you once again!

Levitating!

 

It was a good ending, I liked it...better than mine.

 

That was a great ending gimpy and I can't wait to read your next story. =)

 

Upping for Kelly to find!

 

Levitatin!

 

Thanks for the story Master Gimpy, I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Some great mental exploration, as well as an exciting storyline made this a real adventure, and I feel I know Obi & Qui better than I did before. Excellent work. I'll be sure to read more of your writings in the future.
May the Force be with you.