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Beyond - Legends Redemption of Angels { Dark J/TK One-shot}

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Mira_Jade , Dec 23, 2006.

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  1. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    Redemption of Angels

    Genre: general
    Rating: G
    Characters: Dark Jacen to Tenel Ka
    Time frame: LoTF speculation

    summary: A poetry thingy, er - not really poetry, I mean there are no verses, yet it's ? oh I don't know. You'd just have to read it.
    ;)

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    Redemption of Angels
    by Mira_Jade


    You speak to me of redemption.

    You speak to me of faith.

    You call me an angel, fallen from grace.

    Fallen . . . .

    You call me fallen. Your beautiful, broken, fallen angel.

    Yet what could you possibly know of angels?

    Then again, what could you know of demons either?

    You have never been near the dark.

    My perfect princess, the former Queen of my heart.

    You have no idea of demons.

    If you did then you would never call me 'angel'.

    How naive you are . . . .

    You speak of angels as if I am some pitiable tragedy.

    Tell me though, what about this 'heaven' should I miss?

    Should I miss the mediocre everyday?

    Should I miss the bowing, the sniveling, the groaning?

    No.

    Never.

    I am forging my own path, away from this heaven where your luminous ideas reside.

    I have not fallen.

    I am not that way.

    I have leapt.

    Leapt to enlightenment.

    Leapt, and discovered the truth.

    They call it 'fallen' that I have leapt for my own glory and not their own.

    So don't you dare speak to me of falling.

    You have no idea.

    I have risen above what I once was. Far, far above you.

    You speak to me as if I need saving.

    You speak of redemption.

    You give me blind adoration.

    Your eyes brim with hope, and this thing that you dare to call love.

    It's all lies.

    And I am tired of playing along.

    Your 'redemption' is nothing but a step back to the horrors that I have seen.

    Your hope is a desperate thing.

    Yet I can't see your wings now, can I?

    Your love is laughable, and that is not where I grew my wings.

    I will continue to rise, and you will see it as falling.

    It doesn't matter anymore.

    None of that does.

    You will change your tune whan you see the galaxy falling at my feet.

    When my wings spread out and cast shadows on the reverant ground beneath me you will know.

    And then it till be too late.

    So continue to talk about redemption.

    Continue to talk about faith.

    Call me fallen again.

    Take your broken halo back, and keep it tucked away when the fire burns, and the smoke rises.

    For that will be your only light.

    Yet my question to you is this:

    Why would I settle for being an angel, when I have a chance to be God almighty?

    There is no redemption for me now.

    ~MJ
     
  2. SilSolo

    SilSolo Jedi Knight star 5

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    Mar 5, 2004
    THis is very good, poetic, and biblical. Me likes.
     
  3. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    Anyone else?[face_batting]

    ~MJ@};-
     
  4. VaderLVR64

    VaderLVR64 Manager Emeritus star 8 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    Beautiful! [face_love]

    You speak to me of redemption.

    You speak to me of faith.

    You call me an angel, fallen from grace.

    Fallen . . . .

    You call me fallen. Your beautiful, broken, fallen angel.

    Yet what could you possibly know of angels?

    Then again, what could you know of demons either?

    You have never been near the dark.


    Really powerful! =D=
     
  5. NYCitygurl

    NYCitygurl Manager Emeritus star 9 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

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    This is amazing!! I love the style you wrote it in. Jacen's feelings are very well expressed, and I like the metaphor of his wings spreading out and casting shadows. You did an amazing job!!
     
  6. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    ~MJ@};-
     
  7. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    Anybody else?:confused:

    ~MJ@};-
     
  8. Darkwriter

    Darkwriter Jedi Master star 4

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    Wow. I really like the first few lines, how it sort of rhymes. This was such a totally awesome expression...it reminds me exactly why we have fanfiction. Thi is just so incredible---thank you!


    Janet
     
  9. ZebulaNebula

    ZebulaNebula Jedi Master star 5

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    Whoa ... that was powerful. The last line was chilling. Jacen seeing power as an end in and of itself shows how far he has fallen. He has passed beyond redemption, becoming a mockery of everything he once stood for. Tenel Ka would be wise to destroy the monster that has replaced the man she loved.
     
  10. Jade_Max

    Jade_Max Jedi Master star 5

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    Creepy, but beautiful all at the same time. In not recognizing his fall, in striving to show it as something other than what it is, he's truly beyond hope.

    For, until he admits to having fallen, there can be no hope of redemption.

    The analogy of the darkness spreading like the shadows of wings being extended is just a chilling image. Nice job :)
     
  11. Rexus

    Rexus Jedi Youngling

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    Dec 29, 2005
    It' s beautifull, and I feel it so close to what I am feeling right now... you ought write some more in that style.
     
  12. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    A big thanks to everyone who read!

    I love you all![:D]


    ~MJ@};-
     
  13. JagsEternalFlame

    JagsEternalFlame Jedi Youngling star 1

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    Aug 25, 2006
    Chilling, and simply amazing.:eek: =D=

    You should do another one from TK's POV
     
  14. Mira_Jade

    Mira_Jade The Fanfic Manager With The Cape star 5 Staff Member Manager

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    Flame: Oh, the possibilities.[face_thinking]

    Bad bunny bad!


    ~MJ@};-
     
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