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Discussion in 'Fan Fiction- Before, Saga, and Beyond' started by Findswoman , Jan 15, 2023.

  1. Findswoman

    Findswoman Fanfic and Pancakes and Waffles Mod (in Pink) star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Rose Garden, Evergreen Forest
    by
    Findswoman

    In memoriam Findsdad (1943–2022)
    native and resident of the Evergreen State

    Era: Mostly Saga, with possible incursions into other eras
    Characters: Anyone and everyone
    Notes: This is my anthology of stories written for @ViariSkywalker ’s 2023 Kessel Run Challenge. Each weekly entry will be a separate story with its own title and headers describing era, characters, summary, etc. Individual entries may or may not connect to each other, and any characters—OC or EC—may appear at any time.
    The title of course connects to my Rose Evergreen stories and OCs, and those characters will likely have a notable presence. But it also relates to the eclectic nature I hope this series will have: some stories may be like flowers in a garden, others will be like trees in a forest, and still others like both.
    Acknowledgments: Once again, many thanks to @Raissa Baiard for beta-reading, as usual, and to Viari for bringing back a challenge destined to become a JCF Fanfic classic!

    Contents
    1. Cold Courage (Lasat mercenary introspection)
    2. Say Yah to da U.R., Eh! (Ezra, Thrawn, post-Rebels, humor)
    3. The Silence of the Frogs (OC descendant of Frog Lady, Grogu)
    4. Night of the Terentatek (beast vs. Inquisitor, action)
    5. Jedha Triptych (double drabbles, drama, unnamed characters)
    6. Bridger 1, Purple Oaf 0 (Ezra, Zeb, Chopper, humor)
    7. Gand Is (OC Gand child viewpoint)
    8. Palo’s Sketchbook (Palo, Padmé, AU)
    9. From a Holorecording Found in a Cabin Drawer on the Ghost (Kanan speaking to Hera, angst)
    10. Red (Lasat OC introspection, touch of romance)
    11. T Minus Rose (OC ensemble casts, action/adventure, reverse narrative)
     
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  2. Findswoman

    Findswoman Fanfic and Pancakes and Waffles Mod (in Pink) star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    1. Cold Courage

    Prompt: Write a story of 100–1000 words with:
    • The first sentence “He had not been courageous.”
    • The following image as inspiration:
      [​IMG]
    Characters: Unnamed Lasat mercenary, various Wookiees
    Summary: At a Life Day celebration on Kashyyyk not long after the Siege of Lasan, a Lasat mercenary is hailed as a hero by his Wookiee rescuers. The clan leader’s speech in his honor leads him to reflect on what he did and why, and on the meaning of courage.
    Note: Once again, I thank @Raissa Baiard for beta reading.


    He had not been courageous.

    Karabast, no.

    Courage was what you had when you had to deal with extraordinary circumstances. And this hadn’t been extraordinary. In a way, it’d been completely routine.

    Because there was nothing extraordinary about doing your job. There was nothing, no, nothing extraordinary about fighting back when invaded. That’s why he had sabotaged and boarded the transport to begin with.

    And there wasn’t anything extraordinary at all about using any means necessary to keep it from happening again. That’s why he had gunned down those ISB goons one by one. A dead enemy ain’t an enemy no more, he’d always heard said.

    (Besides, if he’d been courageous, he would’ve taken out their leader, too—that paste-faced fellow with bantha chops who looked like a rotting giju was constantly hovering beneath his nose. He still wasn’t sure why he’d spared him. Maybe he’d just been tired. That was probably it. Not that it mattered now.)

    And all that was why it was more than a little awkward to hear the Wookiee clan leader rattle on about how brave and courageous and heroic he had been. Sure, as leader it was his Ashla-given prerogative to rattle on, especially on one of the main holidays of his planet’s year: Life Day, they called it. But it was karabasting awkward all the same. Especially in the middle of winter, with snow crusting everything over and no protection from the elements except a formless red sheet draped over him, according to the custom of the day. It was all very well for the Wookiees, with their fur about three times longer than his own. But for his own part, he just wanted the leader to wrap up his speech so they could all get on to the banquet.

    Then again, he thought, as the leader droned on, maybe he should just stuff these feelings of awkwardness and feel grateful. The Wookiees had rescued him, after all, and a few others too. Some of them were even here in the crowd with him now, also draped in the red sheets and also cold. (Maybe they were from the Southern Plateaus like him.)

    But not all his people had been so lucky. And that paste-faced, bantha-chopped Human he’d spared? He’d seen him later, leading a battalion of troopers through the capital—and mowing down any and every Lasat they saw with those ion disruptor rifles of theirs.

    So, yeah: if he’d really been courageous that day on that ISB transport, and finished the job and done more than finish the job, maybe no one would have needed rescuing in the first place. Not that it mattered now.

    At that point, the Wookiee clan leader took hold of a near-hanging wroshyr branch and gently drew it forward for his audience to see better. Snow sprinkled to the ground as he moved it, revealing a few limp red-brown leaves. (The Lasat was not sure why he noticed this, given that he had tuned out most of the rest of the speech. But he did.)

    [You see this branch, you see these leaves,] the leader said. [They are covered with snow. It has wilted them; it has turned their lush green to dead brown. But they are still leaves, and what is more, they are still wroshyr leaves. Just by hanging there, just by clinging to their tree, they will outlive the cold.]

    [We here are like those leaves,] he continued. [We are having an early winter, and bitter; snow on Life Day is no lucky omen. So, too, is our Galaxy having an early winter, and bitter, with the rise of the Empire, who have enslaved our youth and ravaged so many worlds.]

    Growls, grumbles, and hisses erupted from the audience. The leader waited for them to dissipate before he continued.

    [But, even beneath the snow, we are still wroshyr leaves, clinging to our tree of life. We are still Wookiees—and Lasat, too, of course.] Here he nodded toward the Lasat and his fellows.

    [And by being what we are, we will outlive the cold.]

    The Lasat smiled to himself. That made sense to him, finally. He had done what he’d done that day in the ISB transport for no other reason than that he was what he was. Just like those wroshyr trees in the snow, just like the bristlecones on the slopes of Lasan’s Basalt Mountains, which were always covered with snow. There was no courageto it.

    Or maybe that was courage.

    All right, then, the Lasat pondered, as the clan leader began working toward his speech’s grand conclusion (something with high-flung imagery of trees and light and life). If it’s about being what you are, then what am I right now?

    Well, dog-tired, for one thing. Spitting mad at the Empire for what they did. Everything they still do. Not over-happy with myself for not doing more.

    But grateful, too. Relieved as all get-out that I’m alive and the Wookiees were able to rescue as many of us as they did.

    And hungry? You better believe it.

    Succulent roasts, rich winter ales, decadent cakes, and fresh-baked ’ookiees were brought out for the banquet. The Lasat tucked into them heartily and was pleasantly full and drowsy when he returned to his borrowed tree-dwelling later that night.

    If this is courage, he thought as he drifted off to sleep, then maybe I’m more courageous than I think.

    fin

    The Southern Plateaus and Basalt Mountains are fanon locations on Lasan created by me and mentioned in various stories in the Lasan Series.
    [/notes]
     
  3. earlybird-obi-wan

    earlybird-obi-wan Chosen One star 7

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    love the descriptions of the trees and the speech of the clan leader
     
  4. Vek Talis

    Vek Talis Jedi Master star 3

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    Excellent, as always. =D=

    Beautiful depictions of people trying to be themselves, torn asunder by the ravages of the hands of men.

    And hungry? I do believe it. :p

    Excellent challenge response. :)
     
  5. divapilot

    divapilot Force Ghost star 4

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    Great to read about the Lasat again!
    Ugh. The guilt that comes with knowing that you could have done more, even though what you did was extraordinary. Unintended consequences from action will haunt you, even though you did what you could.

    Nice look at the Wookiees and their hospitality, and as we know from Chewie, how important a good feast is at the end of the day.:chewie:
     
  6. Nehru_Amidala

    Nehru_Amidala Force Ghost star 7

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    Being brave means even of you are scared, you keep going to give those around you hope. Another lovely installment of your Lasat heavy stories, look forward to reading more.
     
  7. Chyntuck

    Chyntuck Force Ghost star 5

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    Oooooh, a proper Findsstory full of aliens – and you know me, when there are Wookiees involved, I'm always here for it :) But Lasat and Wookiees together? Now that's a treat!

    I love how you took an unnamed background character and gave him a personality. During my first read of the story, I thought this was Zeb speaking, but something felt off, so I went back and checked the intro notes and there it was! Your mercenary has such a unique Zeb-but-not-Zeb voice. Loved this in particular:
    [face_rofl]

    I loved every word of the Wookiee chieftain's speech:
    The comparison of the Wookiees with the wroshyr leaves that just hang in there was so apt, so Wookiee, for last of a better word. I very much enjoyed how, to our Lasat mercenary, this is all very foreign. He notes in many ways how different he is to the Wookiees, and he interprets the line above in a narrow sense that applies to his mental conundrum, without understanding at all everything the Wookiee says about "trees" and "light" and "life".

    As for our hero's conclusion, I'd like to point out that surviving a Wookiee feast does require courage :p Don't forget the gut-perforating spices!
     
  8. Findswoman

    Findswoman Fanfic and Pancakes and Waffles Mod (in Pink) star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed, and always glad to have you here. :)

    Thank you! Yes, sadly, that is so often how it goes—right down to people being torn asunder for being themselves. But ultimately being yourself is the way to making it through. And if what you are if hungry, I say lean in—and tuck in! Especially when you have access to a Wookiee feast. :D

    Amen to that—absolutely right. Thanks so much for reading and commenting, and I’m glad you enjoyed! :)

    Oh, thank you so much! I really appreciate that, especially coming from you. :) The Lasat and Wookiees seem like sibling species, in a way, and I always loved that the Wookiees came to the aid of the Lasat when they needed it most, so I wanted them to be able to celebrate together too. I’m especially the chieftain’s speech came off as fitting—I know I’m not doing half bad if I can satisfy a Wookiee expert like yourself! :D And indeed, if our Lasat friend made it through the feast, he definitely has more courage than he gives himself credit for! :D

    More coming very soon! :)
     
  9. Findswoman

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    2. Say Yah to da U.R., Eh!

    Prompt: Write a story between 400 and 800 words using second-person POV in which a character is lost.
    Characters: Ezra Bridger, Thrawn, a mysterious voice
    Timeframe: Right after the events of the last episode of Rebels
    Summary: Pulled into hyperspace by the purrgil on Thrawn’s flagship, Ezra finds himself lost in hyperspace—and beyond. But it turns out not to be so bad, eh?
    Note: I promised myself that if I ever wrote anything about the Unknown Regions, I would give it this title (based on this bumper sticker, well known in the States and expressing pride in the Upper Peninsula of Michigan). This prompt provided the perfect opportunity to do so. I had my awesome Michigander mod colleague @Mira_Jade in mind while writing this, and I think (hope) she’ll get the jokes! Thanks once again to @Raissa Baiard for beta-reading. @};-


    Well, now you’ve done it.

    There’s no going back now. You knew that from the moment the purrgil king grabbed hold of the ship and had his subjects do the same with the rest of the fleet. You especially knew that from the moment you saw the giant tentacles flash their warning. You had no idea what their destination would be once they made the jump; that was one thing that never came through your connection to the king.

    Here you are, with no lightsaber, with no friends, surrounded by enemies, hurtling through hyperspace. Not just hurtling, either: hurtling like you’ve never hurtled before. You’ve been in hyperspace plenty of times by now, but it’s never felt like this. This time it feels like the whole fabric of the universe is lurching and convulsing around you, as if trying to regurgitate the troublesome Star Destroyer stuck in its craw. (Your stomach is doing its share of lurching and convulsing, too.)

    Also, on most hyperspace trips you’ve taken before, you’ve been able to feel at least a wispy Force-thread of the destination. (Kanan showed you how, once; it’s a kind of meditation.) But this time you can’t. Probably because your Force-bond with the purrgil king is taking up most of your concentration, but probably not just.

    But that’s all right, because you made your plan, and you will stick with it. For Lothal, for your family, for the Force. You will not loosen your hold until you get to that mysterious destination. No matter where it is, and no matter what old Thrawn does.

    The convulsions continue. The ship careers madly onward through the blue-white maelstrom. You are vaguely aware of His Grand Admiralship hissing something nasty and angry and Thrawnish in your general direction. You just stick your tongue out at him. And you don’t loosen your hold worth poodoo.

    On and on and on through the whirl— who knows where you are by now, who knows when it will stop—

    Just then everything jolts to a halt. In the same instant, everything goes dark. Like, totally pitch-black-velvoid dark. You hear confused murmurs from the crew and indeterminate noises of frustration from Thrawn. You’re pretty confused, yourself: what just happened? Where are you now? Is it where you were supposed to be going, or somewhere else?

    And then, as if in answer to those questions, you hear a voice. You’re not really sure if it’s an actual voice voice or just one of those Force things, but it’s deep and slow, like some holovid announcers. And it says:

    Welcome to da Unknown Regions, eh?

    Okay, Unknown Regions, you’ve heard of them… not that it helps much in pinpointing your location. Or anything useful like that.

    Meanwhile, Thrawn registers outrage. “What is the meaning of this?!” he hisses. “Googins! Get navigation back online this instant!

    Someone from the crew mumbles something about a console being locked up. This isn’t an acceptable answer for His Grand Admiralship, so he goes over to that person and argues with them a bit. So at least he’s out of your way for now, and you try your own luck.

    “Uh… hi.”

    The voice speaks, or at least manifests, once again: Hi dere. Ya ready to say yah to da U.R., eh?

    And before you can reply— before you can even parse what was just said to you— something warm, fragrant, and foil-wrapped materializes in your hands. Forgetting for a moment that you’re on the bridge of a Star Destroyer in a not-very-charted part of the Galaxy, you unwrap it and chow down, savoring the hearty flavor of seasoned meat and vegetable chunks inside a buttery pastry wrapper. You were hungrier than you thought.

    “Ffthanks,” you say through a mouthful. You glance over your shoulder; it’s still dark, but you can barely make out Thrawn still deep in discussion with the navigator at one of the side consoles. Which is fine with you.

    Yer welcome, the voice responds. Someone’s gotta treat ya to da real Yoorer hospitality, after all, since the ol’ Admiral here ain’t gonna.

    “Mhm.” You munch further.

    And now? All ya gotta do is relax. Enjoy. Spend all your credits. The mysterious speaker pauses meaningfully before continuing. Just don’t move here, eh?

    “Mhm,” again. Which is fine, because you weren’t planning to. Aurek, you still have no idea where “here” is, and besh, you’ve got a family back on the other side of the Galaxy anyway.

    But for now, as you take another succulent bite of pahss-tii (as you somehow know it’s called), you think you might just be able to say yah to any experience the Galaxy throws at you.

    fin

    By way of a brief explanation of the rather esoteric humor in this story: “The U.P.” is the nickname of the Upper Peninsula of Michigan (north central USA, surrounded by the Great Lakes and bordering Canada). The U.P. is known for its distinct culture, dialect, and sense of humor, and people from there call themselves “Yoopers” (hence “Yoorers” for the U.R.—yes, I know, not very original). Pasties are a local specialty, a heritage from Cornish miners who once settled in the area. The “Relax, spend all your credits, just don’t move here” gag comes from this sign, part of a notable U.P. tourist attraction known as Da Yoopers Tourist Trap.
     
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  10. Nehru_Amidala

    Nehru_Amidala Force Ghost star 7

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    Why does this remind of something from “Prairie Home Companion”? This was a funny read. :)
     
  11. earlybird-obi-wan

    earlybird-obi-wan Chosen One star 7

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    Fun to see him ending up with those purrgils and Thrawn and being alright with Thrawn not
     
  12. Gabri_Jade

    Gabri_Jade Fanfic Archive Editor Emeritus star 5 VIP

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    I'm sorry about your dad, Finds [:D]

    Oh, good use of the prompt, and feels like very authentic Wookiee philosophy, too [face_thinking]

    Excellent character voice; this section gives a very distinct feel to the character despite the limited page (word? :p ) time :cool:

    Some titles are like that, you just can't not use them. (As someone who's spent most of her life in the Southwest, I'm not going to get any of the jokes :p )

    I mean, fair. Wouldn't you?

    Gotta appreciate the thoughtfulness :p

    Oh, well, this was handy, thank you kindly :p
     
  13. Vek Talis

    Vek Talis Jedi Master star 3

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    :eek:
    O.M.G. We've landed in upper Michigan!?

    *dies*

    *is revived*

    That was a much needed humourous diversion, @Findswoman ! Thank you. Well done. =D=
     
  14. Thumper09

    Thumper09 Force Ghost star 4

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    Slowly catching up here. Great work on both entries!

    The Lasat's attitude of "What's the big deal, I was just doing my job," is very understandable and relatable, but I'm glad he went along with it anyway since this actions obviously meant something to the Wookiees. The Wookiee leader's speech about the leaves outlasting the cold was very poignant. I liked how the Lasat began to explore and revise his definition of courage as the speech went on, and it was obviously helped by a full belly at the banquet afterwards. :)

    Ah, my uncle was a Yooper, though not a native one-- he moved there in spite of the sign's command. :p Fun fact: there's a special type of rock found there called Yooperlite that glows under a blacklight. But anyway.

    I'm curious about the mysterious voice-- was that the Force with its regional accent or something else? [face_thinking] That was quite a ride for Ezra, and being stuck with Thrawn is no fun, though at least he got some good food out of the deal. And good on Ezra for being open to the experiences the galaxy might throw at him. Goodness knows that's something I could use some help doing. :cool: This was a fun little adventure to da U.R.

    Great job! =D=
     
  15. Mira_Jade

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    Once more, I am truly sorry for your loss. This is a beautiful dedication. [:D] [:D]

    I love how you were able to build a nameless EC from the ground up in this piece with just a few words. I could feel his weariness and the weight of his depression - that despondency that comes from loss and makes it difficult to see value and worthwhileness in living with that loss. =((

    I really liked the phrasing of these few lines!

    =(( =(( =((

    Oh, but this thought hurts. =((

    Another excellent detail!

    I know that this is a large pull, but I just love this from top to bottom! First, this is excellent worldbuilding. This a hundred percent feels like Wookiee philosophy, and the imagery you invoked in the speech is gorgeous! It's something we can all relate to, too - feeling like that leaf clinging to a life-giving tree in the snow and waiting for the cold to pass. It's all incredibly poignant, and of course it resonates with this Lasat fella, too!

    I love how he tied the Wookiees' philosophy with details from his own home. [face_love]

    More fantastic characterization, all! Now it's definitely time to eat up and be full. [face_love]

    YAAAAAAAAAAS, I LOVED EVERY WORD OF THIS MORE THAN I CAN SAY!!! And, as the U.P. really is Wisconsin's as much as it is Michigan's, that made this all the more special! [face_love] [:D]

    lololl!! I loved this imagery. It was very Ezra in its POV, and very fitting. :p

    [face_laugh] I loved the phrasing of this, too! Yep, very Ezra, and very Rebels!Thrawn. :p

    [face_rofl] [face_rofl] [face_rofl]

    I LITTERALY LAUGHED OUT LOUD HERE. OMIGOSH, YES TO ALL THE THINGS!!!!

    Mmm, patsies. =P~ And now I'm hungry. :p

    [face_rofl] [face_rofl] [face_rofl]

    *wheezes*

    Yah, indeed! [face_laugh] [face_love]


    Your Run is off to an excellent start, and I can't wait to read whatever you're inspired to write next! :D [face_love] =D=

    [:D]
     
  16. divapilot

    divapilot Force Ghost star 4

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    This is so cute! I can imagine Thrawn being, well, Thrawnish...and how intimidating that could be. Only to next encounter:
    Oh, come on, Thrawn. Like you don't know. That Unknown Regions (UR) accent you've struggled for so many years to hide is about ready to come screaming out.

    All I can think of is if they landed here they'd be wondering why there are so many people walking around with some strange concoction called "Dunkin' iced regulah" in the middle of the cold season.
     
  17. Raissa Baiard

    Raissa Baiard Chosen One star 4

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    These two entries are a great start to the challenge!
    Week One: This was a really interesting choice for the prompt. The first thing that struck me is the dichotomy between the way this Lasat mercenary sees himself as just doing what has to be done and not even particularly courageous with the way Kallus described him to Zeb as essentially a cold-blooded monster. Now given that "what needs to be done" is killing the ISB agents as efficiently as possible, one can see why Kallus might perceive him that way... (Though it in no way excuses his choice to exterminate the Lasat.) And I did rather enjoy the Lasat's description of Kallus as:
    #accurate :p
    But I think the Lasat sells himself short as far as courage; it definitely takes courage to protect one's home against the kind of overwhelming force that the Empire could bring to bear against the Lasat. Even if it was a job, and completely routine, he fought and that takes courage. The fact that he sees it it as nothing particularly special shows how innate that courage is to him. He's not seeking glory, he's just doing what he sees as the right thing. And the Wookiee chieftain is right that that sort of tenacity is how they will outlast the Empire. Their circumstances don't change who they are at heart. And it's good that the Lasat is able to see that, and to feel gratitude for the blessings he has: safety and the company of at least a few surviving Lasats...and good food. And he is able to find a measure of peace in these extraordinary times, and realize that he is indeed more courageous than he thought.

    Week two: So...this was not exactly what I expected when you said you were going to write about Ezra lost in the Unknown Regions! :D Not that that's a bad thing, because this is really a fun little story. It starts off as kind of an action adventure piece with Ezra hurtling into hyperspace aboard the Chimaera in the purrgil king's grasp. And Thrawn is being Thrawnish and Ezra is being Ezra-ish (You can take the boy off Lothal, but you can't take the Loth-rat out of the boy!) and then it takes a hard turn into...the Midwest in Spaaaace! Love it! (and it's kind of an extension of the Space Midwest from "The Jewels of WHAT?!?!?" in a way). I just love that the Force voice of the Unknown REgion has a Michigan accent and a distinctly Midwestern bent: cheerful and welcoming, and practical--of course the first thing it does is offer Ezra food! That's how you greet a new neighbor! And of course the food it manifests for him is something homey and easily carried (space foil wrapped to stay nice 'n' toasty, eh?) Thus fortified, Ezra is ready to say ya to anything--let's hope that everyone he encounters in da U.R is as welcoming as da U.R. spirit, eh?

    Great start, and looking forward to seeing what you have in store!
     
  18. Seldes_Katne

    Seldes_Katne Force Ghost star 3

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    I love the symbolism and sentiment here, about hanging on despite what looks like defeat or insurmountable odds. I think many of us have been experiencing a philosophical "bitter winter" over the last few years, and need the encouragement to keep working toward spring.


    For some reason, I have never been to the upper portion of Michigan. Really must do something about that.
    This could double for the Fantastical Fencing event at the Fanfic Summer Olympics. (I should talk -- I stuck a couple of Star Wars characters at Disney World once....] Well, why not? Who can tell what they'll find in the Unknown Regions? And from the sounds of things, the food's pretty good, at least.


    I wonder how many folks in other parts of the world/galaxy feel the same way. As in "I'm all for aliens moving to my planet, I just don't want to live next door to one." (Well, okay, I might want to live next door to one, but still.)

    The second piece was a humorous contrast to your first, and quite enjoyable. Looking forward to more.
     
  19. Chyntuck

    Chyntuck Force Ghost star 5

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    Before I read this story I had to go and check a map of Michigan, because I think I'd never heard of the Upper Peninsula of Michigan (or maybe I learned about its existence waaaaaay back in school? I doubt that, but maybe it's old age talking). Anyway, I expected I'd be a bit lost in this story...

    ... but I wasn't!

    Of course those endnotes were very useful, but I didn't need them to enjoy Ezra being Ezra and making snarky comments about His Grand Admiralness (hello Thrawn? the Unknown Regions are supposed to be where you're from), or talking to the Force voice of the Unknown Regions, or eating a Cornish pasty that somehow materialised in his hand – because of course the Unknown Regions would be hospitable that way!
    As if! anyone in their right mind would want to move to the UR (though from the pictures I saw online, moving to the UP of Michigan wouldn't be such a bad idea).

    Thank you for this very entertaining and highly educational read!
     
  20. UltramassiveUbersue

    UltramassiveUbersue Jedi Knight star 3

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    My condolences for the loss of your dad. [:D]


    Alright, catching up on my reading and commenting... and I love what you've written so far!

    Week #1
    I love this narrative voice and how you've established this character. First, we see the violence that he is capable of and how he downplays it as routine; he seems hardened and dangerous. However, not only does he spare the life of his enemy, he does not know why he does it, and has to come up with an explanation that corresponds with his self-concept.

    I like these little details that reveal his core empathy: the possibility that others in the crowd might be cold like him, and his sense that it would show respect to his rescuers to set aside his awkwardness for a while.

    Typical survivor's guilt for expecting himself to have done more than finish the job, as if he could know what would come of it. This character feels very authentic that way.

    I like this a lot. :) Beautiful imagery, and a lovely use of the prompt.

    I like how connections to nature and culture have a way of lifting people up and making them feel whole. Lasat can start to accept this honour, because in a way, he's accepting it on behalf of his people.

    I like how you end this by showing what his own self-acceptance looks like in action. Being able to enjoy the banquet, feeling grateful for what he was able to do, and giving himself credit where it is due. It's a lovely start to the challenge. :)

    Week #2

    I just have to say that I love this, because you've got this great, tense, visceral opener, and then... are those Space Canadians?
    Close! Michigan. [face_laugh]

    That was a very fun read. :) I'm looking forward to reading more!
     
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  21. Findswoman

    Findswoman Fanfic and Pancakes and Waffles Mod (in Pink) star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    Thank you all so much for the wonderful comments! :)

    Hah! My parents used to listen to that all the time! Yes, I guess it is basically that same kind of humor only GFFAified! Glad you enjoyed it; thanks so much!
    Thanks! Yeah, Thrawn will just have to deal, won’t he? :p
    Thanks, Gabri, I appreciate it. @};- This group of stories is the first writing I’ve done after he died, and it has been very therapeutic in its way.

    Thanks so much—I certainly tried! The fact that the image was from a tree immediately pointed me in the Wookiee direction.

    Thanks so much! Definitely one of the challenges of working within word count restrictions!
    Ah, what part of the Southwest are you in? My husband grew up in Tucson, and both his sisters now live in the Phoenix area, so I’ve visited and enjoyed both. :) I grew up in Chicago and now live in Madison, Wisconsin, so Michigan is my sister state of sorts. :D

    Oh, I certainly would! Though as my dentist could probably tell you, it takes a whole lot less than a Star Destroyer to make me gag! :p

    Someone has to think of poor, dear old Ezra in this predicament, I figure! :D

    You are so welcome! I hope it was helpful, and I really appreciate you coming by and checking this out! :)

    Yah, 'fraid so! :p

    You’re so welcome, and I’m so glad this could send a few laffs your way! :)

    Thanks so much! There’s a bit of a culture barrier between the Lasat and his Wookiee hosts, and naturally it would take him some time to make sense of their philosophy and apply it to himself, but his ultimate gratitude to them wins out and inspires him to take that plunge. And indeed, that kind of thing is much facilitated by a full belly! :D

    That’s really neat! I looked up that rock—pretty wacky, and feels like a very Yoop phenomenon for some reason! :D

    Ah, that voice is whatever you want it to be. :D Ezra is on the adventure of his life right now and needs all the encouragement he can get—and if it comes directly from the spirit of the place where he happens to be, that’s all the better! So glad you enjoyed this, and thanks again for coming by! :)
    Thanks so much, Mira. <3 This challenge is, again, the first fanfic writing I’ve embarked on since his death, and whether the stories are humorous or serious, they have so far been a very helpful thing for me as I come to terms with my grief.

    Thanks so much, and I am glad that came through! I’ve never exprienced anything as dire as this character has, so I very much wanted to do his feelings and experiences justice.

    Thanks! He’s torn between genuine gratitude to his hosts and impatience to get it all done with and get on to the feasting. Which one can’t entirely blame him for in a situation like this!

    Yes, exactly. People remember those little local characteristics, even when far away from home (or when home is gone).

    I agree, I agree. =((

    Thanks! I have done exactly the same thing myself in the past. Who knows what makes us suddenly listen when we were tuning out before!

    Thank you so much! I’m glad this came off so well to you and the others; again, with the tree image, my thoughts went straight to the Wookiees, who know exactly how life-giving trees can be, even in the cold. Maybe a Lasat leader giving a similar speech might have chosen other imagery, but this Lasat is able to connect the ideas to his experience nonetheless, and that right there is already a gesture of gratitude to his hosts.

    Thanks again! It’s kind of the moment when it clicks; see my response above. :)

    Oh yes, there is no better way to recruit the inner being and step up the ol’ inner courage! :D

    You’re right, it really is, isn’t it! I would love to visit sometime; from you and so many others I have heard it’s incredible. So glad I was able to make a born-and-raised Michigander happy with this! <3

    Thanks! As I said above, if I were a hyperspace channel, I’d want to regurgitate that troublesome Star Destroyer, too. Gag! :p

    Aren’t they just the absolutest, completest foils? :p

    Thanks again! I’m so glad I was able to make you LOL with this, and I knew you would get it immediately! :D

    Me too, me too. I love those things. I try to make them myself now and then, but they’re pretty involved, and it’s been a bit of a learning curve to get them just right! (Incidentally, they’re another thing Wisconsin and Michigan share—they’re a fairly big thing in parts of southern Wisconsin that used to be settled by the Cornish.)

    I’m sure you recognized the reference even without the notes! :p

    And eh, too! :D

    Thank you! So glad you are enjoying—always a delight to have you as a reader! :)

    Oh yes, Thrawnish is no fun to be around, probably not even for the people who are on Thrawn’s side!

    I totally would not put that exact variety of poseurship past him! :p

    Oh ho, perhaps that’s the next story of this 'verse! I’ll have to remember that! :D Thanks so much once again for reading and commenting, and just for being back! <3

    Thank you so much, my friend, I appreciate this very much! As you know, I’ve been interested in writing about this character for a while, and that very contrast between the “courageous” prompt and the character’s perception as this HORRIBLE COLDBLOODED KILLER (by the fandom, too) was indeed part of what drew me to him here. (And, of course, I am glad to take any opportunity to dunk on that bantha-chopped fellow. [face_devil] ) You make a good point about his courage: to someone who is naturally courageous, it would of course not necessary feel like anything special, and it wouldn’t need much in the way of external bolstering. (My mother once said, “You know the Scots must be tough when their battle marches have titles like ‘Blue Hills' and 'The Nut-Brown Maiden.'” :p )

    Hah! In a way, it wasn’t quite what I expected to write at very first, either! :D I’m glad the characterization of both Ez and Thrawn was able to please a diehard Rebels fan like yourself; again, they really are perfect foils. And you’re right, in a way, this U.R. really turned out to be an extension of the SpaceMidwest of the Kanson-Wiss sector and similar, kind of the way the U.P. is the wild side of the Earth Midwest. Just what our hero needs after a crazy hyperspace journey, and I share your hope that the U.R. spirit will be beside him on all his travels! :ezra:

    Thanks so much! You know I feel the same about your Kessel Run, too, which I’ve been enjoying immensely! :)

    Thanks so much! That’s very true, this last couple years has indeed felt like a long winter. But spring is coming, and we can’t forget that!

    So do I! I have heard it’s spectacular.
    Hah, you’re right, this would have fit that challenge to a tee, too, just like your zany Disney World piece—I remember that well! :D

    Well, yeah, that attitude is all too widespread in every universe, unfortunately. But given the hospitality that otherwise characterizes the U.P. of our world, I get the feeling that the sign that gag is based on isn’t quite meaning to go for the out-and-out xenophobic angle. More like, “this place is so quirky and isolated that you might want to think hard about what you’re getting into before you consider moving out here”! (Of course, @Thumper09 ’s uncle was one of the brave folks who did, with good results! :D)

    Thank you so much! One of the great things about this challenge is the way the variety of prompts prompt a variety of different kinds of writing—one can stretch a lot of writerly muscles that way! Always appreciate your coming by to read and comment. :)

    Good, good, I’m so glad! :D I know I was referencing a very specific local humor tradition here, one not even all of my US readers are likely to have familiarity with, so I am doubly glad that you were able to find it enjoyable, too!

    Thanks so much, and again, I am so glad you were able to enjoy this after all! Wherever our boy is, I hope he is able to find some kind of guidance and hospitality far away from home. Pasties would indeed be great too, but I am sure he will take what he can get! :)

    Oh yes, I have heard it is quite beautiful up there! (I believe you can see the Northern Lights regularly, for one thing!) The weather can be seriously rough, though, especially in the wintertime.

    You are so welcome, and thank you for reading, commenting and enjoying! :)

    Thanks so much, I appreciate that. <3 I am working through it as best I can, and this challenge has been very therapeutic in its way so far!

    Thank you so much, I really appreciate your checking it out! :)

    Thanks! I think there’s some hidden complexity to this nameless, “mentioned-only” character, and that’s part of why I have been curious to write about him for a while—to give him a chance to sort through some of that. And this was the chance, I guess!

    Thanks! I did want him to have a good side under there—that’s part of the above-mentioned hidden complexity, too. And he and his compatriots present at this celebration have every reason to be grateful to the Wookiees.

    Thanks—I figure that’s an understandable feeling for someone who’s had the kind of experiences this guy has had.

    Thanks so much! Again, that tree prompt really screamed “Wookiee” to me!

    Yep, exactly! Once he thinks about it a bit, he can apply this imagery from this other culture to himself and his people, and it will all make sense at last. :)

    Oh, thank you! I figured a feast would be a good way to sum it all up: there’s no better way to at once fortify the inner being and express gratitude. And of course self-knowledge is a much easier proposition with a full stomach!

    Hah! Yah, that’s about the size of it, eh! :D

    Thank you so much! Really appreciate your coming by to read and comment, and I hope you will enjoy what’s to come! :) (And more is around the corner shortly!)
     
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  22. Findswoman

    Findswoman Fanfic and Pancakes and Waffles Mod (in Pink) star 6 Staff Member Manager

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    3. The Silence of the Frogs

    Prompt: Write a story between 500 and 1,000 words in which you make up a new OC (original character). Your OC must interact with at least one EC (established character), and your story must include the following line of dialogue: “Something was bound to go right sometime today.”
    Characters: OC descendant of the Frog Lady, a grown-up Grogu, OCs
    Timeframe: Beyond, at some point
    Notes: Thanks once again to @Raissa Baiard for beta-reading. @};-


    It was time.

    Ool stretched out and stood. Her family members around her in the hydrochamber did the same. They were emerging from Reincubation: in the planet-cycle following a death, the descendants recreated the dormancy of egg-time as a foretaste of death. The next step was to prepare for the Sending: the returning of Grandmother to the Waters.

    Grandmother had been both a loving matriarch to her family and a heroine to her people. Long ago, when her kind had been near extinction, she had wandered the galaxy, hauling her last clutch of eggs with her, and had braved many dangers to travel to Trask. There she reunited with Grandfather, and they set up a home for their spawn. Others of their kind came there, too, and the species was able to revive.

    Now, after many happy years, old age had claimed her, and it was time for her to be gathered to the Waters. Ool lived by the Shore, so she was to host the Sending. She had loved Grandmother dearly and hoped everything would be perfect on her last day on Land.

    But she had no such luck. The moment Ool emerged from the hydrochamber she found herself about, datapad in hand, wrangling family members, guests, holy folk, cooks, and others. Things kept going wrong: blustery weather, late arrivals, last-minute changes to the ceremony (and to the menu), family members unable to come, and of course the arguments: who would get to stand where on the Shore, what to cook (and how much), and which females would lead which parts of the funerary chorusing (this argument caused one clutch-sister to storm out in high dudgeon). It didn’t help that Ool was expecting her first clutch of eggs and was already feeling laying pains. The Reincubation, it seemed, had expedited the process.

    Finally the hour came. Ool felt a surge of relief as she stood on her porch with her husband, Noff, looking toward the Shore. The clouds were lifting, and the golden worldshine of Kol Iben— Trask’s gas-giant companion— now colored the sky.

    “Thank the Waters,” Ool sighed, resting her head on Noff’s shoulder. “Something was bound to go right sometime today.”

    “There’s still time,” came Noff’s quiet reply— and then, seeing Ool’s quizzical look, added, “For things to go right, of course. Grandmother deserves it. As do you.”

    He held Ool closer, and she nestled closer, hoping he was right.

    *

    Everyone was gathered at the Shore now, in an arc around the boatlike wooden casket holding Grandmother’s remains. The sky was bright; only a few clouds wisped by, and the Waters were calm. The chorusing began, with the skilled females leading, and soon the plaintive sounds of keening, peeping, and chittering filled the warm afternoon sky. Ool joined in where she could, but the laying pains were coming more often now, and it was difficult to concentrate. She tried to take her mind off it by looking around at the crowd.

    Then she noticed the newcomer.

    It was no one she had seen before, nor a member of any species she knew: an anthropoid clad in plain brown robes, but less than a meter tall, and with leaf-green skin. Long, tapered ears protruded from either side of a round head, and round black eyes gazed intently forward. Ool watched closely; the being was causing no disturbance, but she wanted no chaos today.

    After the chorusing died away, the Great Silence began. The same afternoon air that had been filled with chittering voices was now empty of sound as those present meditated silently on the deceased. Again, Ool tried to, but it was difficult between the pains and keeping one eye on the newcomer.

    Just then the newcomer walked up and placed something atop the casket— a sparkling blue-white crystal. The green-skinned being stood beside the casket and the crystal for a few moments, with eyes closed, then rejoined the group. When the moment of Sending came and the casket was launched into the water, the bright object on top gleamed in the westering sun as it floated off horizonward. Everyone watched until it could no longer be seen.

    As the guests were leaving, Ool lingered a few moments looking over the Waters— then turned to see the green being approaching her. Looking down with her brightest hostess eyes, she said, “Welcome.”

    “Hello,” the being replied in a soft but high-pitched voice.

    “I’m Ool,” Ool offered, extending her hand. The newcomer took it in his tiny three-fingered one.

    “Grogu is my name. I’m sorry about your loss.”

    “Thank you.” Ool paused. “Did you— know my grandmother?”

    “Yes, long ago.”

    “That’s wonderful!”

    “Sometimes she looked after me when my father was away.”

    “Ah.”

    “But I— wasn’t always good to her.”

    “Oh?”

    “Yes. I— I stole some of her eggs and—” He stopped short, and Ool thought she could see a tinge of pink in his face. “I was very small then. But I felt bad about it later, when I learned your people were dying out. I was afraid I’d…” He trailed off and looked downward, still blushing.

    “Well, er—” Ool wasn’t sure what to say, as she still didn’t know what it was this being had done— and wasn’t sure she wished to. “When we’re small, we don’t— always—”

    “I know. That’s why I gave her my first kyber crystal. To make up for it.”

    “I see.” That was what he had set atop the casket, of course. Ool had heard of them; they were valuable. “That was… generous.”

    “Thank you. But also, just being here, seeing you all— that comforted me. I’m… glad you all made it after all.”

    Ool smiled. “Thank you, Grogu. So am I.”

    “Well, I should go. Thanks again, Ool. It was good to meet you.”

    “Likewise. Take care.”

    Grogu nodded and walked off. Ool lingered several moments by the worldlit Shore until the biggest laying pain of all twinged through her, and she turned homeward. It was time.

    fin

    https://starwars.fandom.com/wiki/Trask
    https://starwars.fandom.com/wiki/Kol_Iben

    Yoda, Grogu, and their species have been described as froglike too, of course.
     
  23. Kahara

    Kahara Chosen One star 4

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    Week 1:

    =D= I really enjoyed your version of the unnamed Lasat mercenary -- a character that I'd long forgotten existed since it's been ages since I've watched Rebels. (Someday I will see the finale. Really!) He is so much more than he gives himself credit for, and maybe that moment with the feast will help him realize that. Sometimes hearing a different side of things from someone else can really bring things into perspective. (And I know you've got enough projects but if you ever write more about this guy I'd really be interested to see where he goes from here! :))

    Week 2:


    The U.R. spirit is priceless from beginning to end and it cracks me up even more thinking that this is (sorta?) where Thrawn is from in Legends -- which to me hints that he might be all too familiar with said spirit. No wonder he's been telling everyone that part of space is full of terrible awful things. [face_rofl]

    Week 3:

    This is such wonderful worldbuilding and I like how it coincides with how frogs can hibernate through the winter (or the dry season in some places). But also with the very human feeling of drawing in that happens with a loss. @};-

    :p Just fantastic bits of down-to-earth otherworldly life here. I also thought the boat-coffin was really cool. :cool: And all the little details of how much care Ool and the others put into the ceremony for Grandmother; it makes sense that she's important given she helped bring their whole species back but beyond that you can also see how much love there was and is between her and her descendants. @};-

    Aww, a really sweet moment, and great use of the quote! :)

    Eeee, Baby Yoda's all grown up -- or older anyway! :D

    Lovely little moment, and I really liked the quiet beauty of it.

    Really stunning imagery here and another moment that feels very hushed and palpable in its weight.

    Yeah, I think I know the toddler-ish antics in question. :p I'm glad that Ool was able to overcome the super awkward moment, and that Grogu was so earnest and apologetic there. That does seem like that kind of nice young being he'd grow up to be -- definitely his Mando-Dad's son! ;) And it's really nice that they were able to connect for a moment, having the common thread of knowing Grandmother in common even though Grogu didn't know her very well or very long. @};- I imagine that kind of meeting with someone who knew a loved one in a very different phase of life can be a really comforting thing in such circumstances.
     
  24. earlybird-obi-wan

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    sentient frogs with a facinating life and death rite. I love how Ool interacts with Grogu
     
  25. Gabri_Jade

    Gabri_Jade Fanfic Archive Editor Emeritus star 5 VIP

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    Well, there's a coincidence - I was born in Rockford! My father was born and raised there, and he and my mother moved back there after they were married. My poor mother was born and raised in L.A., so you can imagine what a climate shock that was :p I grew up in Escondido, a half hour northeast of San Diego, and have been in Phoenix since I was 18. I wouldn't say I know Tucson well, but I've been there often enough to know it reasonably well for a non-resident. It's really pretty there. Although I haven't been to them specifically, I love looking at the Catalinas [face_love]

    Aaaahhhh I love Frog Lady

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    This, just like the original egg thievery, is hilarious and horrifying in equal measure :p

    Aw, Grogu's so sweet [face_love]

    Lovely descriptive writing throughout, I really liked it :D
     
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