Beyond - Legends Shine On You Crazy Diamond (K/J songfic) [Complete] 2004 WFFA Best Songfic

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  1. Smuggler_Shidakis

    Smuggler_Shidakis Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 26, 2004
    Disclaimer- I don't own Star Wars, I don't own Kyp (wish I did), I don't own the song.

    This is to the Pink Floyd song 'Shine On You Crazy Diamond,' which I don't own.

    Thanks to PunkRockRebelTKDjo for betaing.

    These are Kyp's memories.
    These are song lyrics.

    Shine On You Crazy Diamond

    Remember when you were young,
    You shone like the sun.
    Shine on you crazy diamond.

    "Kyppie!" a young, giggly voice exclaimed. A wide grin spread across Kyp's face as he turned to see an energetic three-year-old charging at him. Her dark hair flew from its tie as she ran on pudgy legs, brown eyes bright.

    "Jaya!" he greeted, with equal excitement. The little girl launched into his waiting arms. Laughing, Kyp spun her around in a big bear hug. Jaina shrieked gleefully, arms wrapped tightly around his neck.

    The little girl looked at him with an adoring face, and Kyp had to admit that the feeling was mutual. He was utterly bewitched by this beautiful little girl, full of life and energy. Who, inexplicably, was always overjoyed to see him. "Guess what!" she commanded him.

    "What?" Kyp asked. He smiled, and for once, his eyes no longer held that haunted, weary expression they had since his fall.

    "Today's my Lifeday!" Jaina crowed, chocolate-brown orbs dancing.

    "Really?" Kyp feigned surprise. "I didn't know that!"

    Jaina laughed, a light, breezy sound. "It is! It's Jasa's, too," she confided, voice low.

    "So it is. Twenty-five already, huh?" Kyp teased, just so he could see her bright, baby-tooth smile.

    "No!" she protested loudly, as if she'd caught a big mistake. "I'm three!" She looked up at his face. "You're silly!"

    "Silly!" he gasped in mock astonishment. "Who, me?"

    Jaina giggled. "Silly." she asserted. Smiling slyly, she inquired, "Do you have a present for me?"

    "Hmmm...." He considered, then returned her smile. "I might have a little something...."

    The little girl shone with delight.

    Now there's a look in your eyes,
    Like black holes in the sky.
    Shine on you crazy diamond.

    "Hi, Jaya," Kyp greeted quietly, slipping into Jaina's room. In one hand, he held a bunch of flowers; in the other, a wrapped present.

    The short, thin young woman looked at him with vacant brown eyes. "Do I know you?" she asked, in a dreamy sort of voice. When Kyp didn't answer, she cooed, "Ooh! Flowers!" She snatched them and buried her face in the blossoms. "So pretty."

    "They're your favorite type," Kyp told her.

    Jaina looked at him as if he was something very curious. "Are they?" She inhaled again. "Why are you here?"

    "It's your Lifeday." Kyp said, voice hitching. He remembered a time, so long ago, when this lost-looking woman was a whirlwind of energy and emotion. Pain welled in his chest to see her this way.

    "Is it?" Jaina asked distractedly. Humming tunelessly, she scattered flowers about the bed and the room. Turning empty, bottomless eyes to Kyp, she inquired, "Who are you?"

    You were caught on the crossfire
    Of childhood and stardom,
    Blown on the steel breeze.
    Come on you target for faraway laughter,
    Come on you stranger, you legend, you martyr, and shine!

    "Who's that, Mom?" the young boy asked, pointing at the face that filled the 'screen in the shop window. Kyp halted and listened to his mother's answer.

    "That's Jaina Solo, that's who that is," his plump, matronly mother answered matter-of-factly. "War hero, she was."

    "Really?!" he breathed, awe in his voice. Kyp knew what he was imagining. Images of X-Wings and coralskippers, lightsabers and blasters and amphistaffs were running through his mind. All of the over glorified pictures of battle impressed upon young children.

    "Oh, yes," his mother confirmed. "Poor thing. So young, you know. So bright. It's a shame, all right, a shame." She shook her head side to side with a tsk.

    Kyp's heart lurched, knowing what was coming next.

    "What's a shame?!" her boy demanded eagerly. "What?!" Curious as to this war hero, the brave warrior.

    "Why, she went crazy.
  2. CodeName_Targeter

    CodeName_Targeter Jedi Master star 5

    Nov 7, 2003
    :_| That's so sad Gina!!! *sniffs* And I'm normally a J/Jer too!!

    I lvoed it, absolutely loved it!

    *cries again*

  3. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Apr 7, 2002
    OH, my gosh! PLEASE tell me there's more to this!!!!

  4. Myri_Antilles

    Myri_Antilles Jedi Padawan star 4

    Aug 3, 2004
    Oy, MORE IS NEEDED HERE!!! ;) :p
  5. Amidala_Skywalker

    Amidala_Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Jul 4, 2001

    I like how you leave everything up to the reader?s imagination. Lovely vignette! :)

    Ams [face_love]
  6. Abby

    Abby Jedi Master star 4

    Jan 7, 2004
    You. Must. Write. More.

    Must must must.

    That was . . . wow. . .

    I wanna know what happens! Why did Jaina go mad? Was it about trying to find "balance" and going too far, or is it something else? And is Kyp going mad? What's up with the moon?

    For Force's sake, write more!!!!

    (um, in other words, I liked it)

  7. cleveland1000

    cleveland1000 Jedi Youngling star 2

    Mar 15, 2004
    *makes a rock on sign* just like pink floyd this story kicks major ass. more please.
  8. YodaKenobi

    YodaKenobi VIP star 6 VIP

    May 27, 2003
    "That's nice." With a thin hand, she pushed back her brown locks. "Who were you, again?"
    His throat went dry, and he didn't trust himself to answer.

    :_| This fic is so sad :(

    ?The monsters,? Jaina whispered. ?The monsters behind the bars. You've got to be quiet, or they'll hear you. They get mad when they hear you.?
    ?Jay, there aren't any monsters,? he whispered back.
    ?Yes, there are!? she asserted. ?They're right here, behind the bars with us.?


    Stalking down the hall, he saw, out of the corner of his eye, a tall, dark shape lingering in the shadows.


    I really enjoyed this song-fic. First off, nice to see someone pick a great song ;) But it was also very original. I loved the way you wrote Jaina and Kyp's sorrow over her losing her mind. Great little story :)
  9. flowerbee

    flowerbee Jedi Knight star 5

    Apr 29, 2004
    You can't leave off like that! Gina, I didn't know you could write like that, it was...incredible!
  10. Dantana Skywalker

    Dantana Skywalker Manager Emeritus star 5 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Apr 7, 2002
    I know I already commented on this, but you HAVE to continue!! You seriously can't leave it there, I forbid it! :p

  11. djcati

    djcati Jedi Master star 4

    Mar 20, 2004
    that's... so... sad... ;_;

    I love it, it's just really... good.

  12. Smuggler_Shidakis

    Smuggler_Shidakis Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 26, 2004
    *keels over in complete shock*
    Thank you all so much!

    Jenn: *offers Jenn tissue* From a J/Jer, too! Thanks!

    Dantana_Skywalker: *blinks* *dies* Dana likes it! Yippee! Thank you!

    Myri: I'll address that in a minute...

    Amidala_Skywalker: Thank you!

    Abby: Yes, I meant to imply that Kyp's going a bit nuts, too. I'm getting to the more part...

    cleveland: I [face_love] Pink Floyd. Thank you!

    YodaKenobi: *offers tissue* Thanks! My evil muse made me write them in pain and torment, blame him.
    As already stated, I absolutely love Pink Floyd.

    Sarah: [face_blush] Thanks.

    Djcati: *laughs* Incoherence is fun. Thank you.

    Now, the MORE issue... I intended to leave off there, but I think I'm going to keep going, at least another post or two. After all, Dana forbids me to stop here. :p

  13. Jaina_Solo_59

    Jaina_Solo_59 Jedi Master star 4

    Aug 30, 2004
    *Cries* That was so sad Gina!
  14. Lonewolf89

    Lonewolf89 Jedi Grand Master star 5

    Sep 26, 2001
    Wow, Shidakis, that was amazing! Heart-wrenching, sad, and excellently written. You captured the emotions beautifully. Poor Kyp!

    "What's a shame?!" her boy demanded eagerly. "What?!" Curious as to this war hero, the brave warrior.

    "Why, she went crazy. Raving mad, she is. " Her tone was still informative, still clipped and factual.

    That bit really got me. Great work!
  15. Darth_Floyd_

    Darth_Floyd_ Jedi Youngling star 1

    Aug 23, 2003
    Wow, I´ve never been on this board before, I just noticed this thread when I was using the "active topic" feature. It was just so great, and as others has said, please more of this kind. :)
  16. Darth_Suzi

    Darth_Suzi Jedi Youngling star 3

    Jun 23, 2004
    :_| :_| :_| :_| :_|

    Kyp... and Jaina... :_| Poor Jaina! :_|

    More soon?
  17. NYCitygurl

    NYCitygurl Manager Emeritus star 9 VIP - Former Mod/RSA

    Jul 20, 2002
    Oh my gosh, that was so beautiful!!!!! I usually hate K/J, but this . . . wow. Wow wow wow wow wow. Really wonderful!!!
  18. Smuggler_Shidakis

    Smuggler_Shidakis Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 26, 2004
    Kat: So I've been told... :p

    Loneworlf: Thank you. 'Poor Kyp' seems to be the general sentiment.

    Darth_Floyd: Another Floyd fan? Yay! Thank you!

    Suzi: *breaks out the Kleenex* Here you go!

    Nat: Another J/J who liked. Wow! Thank you!

    *gives cookies to all wonderful readers*

    I am utterly blandished!
  19. Darth-Floyd

    Darth-Floyd Jedi Grand Master star 4

    Apr 5, 2003
    Darth_Floyd: Another Floyd fan?

    Yeah, I can´t deny that :), and I really enjoyed your story.
  20. Solo_and_Fel

    Solo_and_Fel Jedi Master star 3

    Apr 19, 2004
    So the title drew me in.....

    ...and I was reading and when Jaina said pretty for the first time, I stopped. It seemed like such an un-Jaina thing to say. Then I decided to keep reading anyway. Then I thought she must be awfully jaded or apathetic to forget her lifeday. But I kept reading. Then, all of a sudden it made sense. She really isn't herself. This seems like such a fresh concept. I don't think I'd really like to see Jaina go crazy, but I'm intrigued by this story nonetheless. Additionally, the memories were integrated quite well. You were jumping all over but it didn't feel really choppy. The present day events held it in place.
    So, if you do decide to add more to this, you can count on one more reader.
  21. Amithyst_Blade

    Amithyst_Blade Jedi Padawan star 4

    Nov 14, 2001
    *hugs sumggler_shidakis*

    oh you must continue... reminds me a little of the notebook, but it's with kyp... everything is so nicely interwoven... it's beautiful!
  22. Smuggler_Shidakis

    Smuggler_Shidakis Jedi Padawan star 4

    Jul 26, 2004
    Wow. I just got back from a grueling night of babysitting, and noticed three more readers.

    I feel better now!
    Thank you!

    Darth_Floyd: Floyd rocks my socks. :D

    Solo_and_Fel: Thanks, especially since I was worried whether the skipping around messed it up.

    Amythist_Blade: Thank you so much! I am formulating another post.

    You all rock.
  23. Jaya_Skywalker

    Jaya_Skywalker Jedi Youngling star 1

    Nov 14, 2004
    Wow! That was so sad and tragic, but beautifully done :)
  24. Amithyst_Blade

    Amithyst_Blade Jedi Padawan star 4

    Nov 14, 2001
    yay so you're gonna continue it?? it's not a viggie?
  25. C3SoloP0

    C3SoloP0 Jedi Padawan star 4

    Dec 10, 2002
    whoa...that's insane.

    I really like it, it's not something that's been done before anyway, I hope you continue it. :)
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